十月金秋第六次作业

mantnkhUID: 2303879

作文  Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


   
   Actually, since in high school, we all have learned the fact that the cardinal difference between human and animals is the ability of using tools. Nowadays, there are still some people argue that doing work by hand has more advantage than using machines, oppositely, I do believe the fact work with machines is the right direction of human being. My arguments of this point are listed as follows.

    The undeniable deficiency in this remark of some people is that it negligent of the bare fact that many work today are not able to be deal by hands. We can take seabed exploration for example. You would find all kinds of machines working busily but not workers there in the sea if you really be. It is machines which not only those new work emerged with the new technology needed, but also those traditional ones. Such work as building, fishing and so on that we can't do if we don't those machines related to them.
   
Moreover, working by using machines is the certification of high productivity. Imagining to   calculating the complex expressions of astronomy, you will say that is impossible to figure them out without these machines- computers, monitors, etc. Then we shift our topic on our daily life, the rice you eat, the car you drive, the glasses you wear, are all produced by machines- farmers use tractors to harvest, workers use machine tool to assemble cars, in glasses shop the seller use special machines to examine you eye sight, so that they can give fit glasses to you.
   
Thereby, whatever the research of our planet or the commodity we use all need machines .In conclusion, we can not live without machines, as the most intelligent life-form on the earth, machine must be the right choice of our work.

[ 本帖最后由 mantnkh 于 2007-8-14 20:22 编辑 ]

innocentUID: 202623

怎么感觉跟看阅读理解一样！强

ensueUID: 2196590

Actually, since in high school, we all have learned the fact that the cardinal difference between human and animals is the ability of using tools. Nowadays, there are still some people argue that doing work by hand has more advantage than using machines, oppositely, I do believe the fact working with machines is the right direction of human being. My arguments of this point are listed as follows.

    The undeniable deficiency in this remark of some people is its negligent of the bare fact that many work today are not able to be dealt with by hands. We can take seabed exploration for example. You would find all kinds of machines working busily but not workers there in the sea if you really be. It is machines which not only those new work emerged with the new technology needed, but also those traditional ones. Such work as building, fishing and so on that we can't do if we don't use those machines related to them. (本段内容很好。但是起始句不理想。作者想把他人的观点当靶子，采取驳论法，但是这个观点不是提干中有的，有点牵强。所以我个人觉得直接说你的观点就可以了。)
   
Moreover, working by （using-〉“删除”） machines is the certification of high productivity. Imagining to   calculating the complex expressions of astronomy, you will say that is impossible to figure them out without these machines- computers, monitors, etc. Then we shift our topic on our daily life, the rice you eat, the car you drive, the glasses you wear, are all produced by machines- farmers use tractors to harvest, workers use machine tool to assemble cars, in glasses shop the seller use special machines to examine your eye sight, so that they can give fit glasses to you. (感觉作者思路很宽，非常值得学习)
   
Thereby, whatever the research of our planet or the commodity we use all need machines （读起来拗口）.In conclusion, we can not live without machines, as the most intelligent life-form on the earth, machine must be the right choice of our work.

[ 本帖最后由 ensue 于 2007-8-15 16:42 编辑 ]

mantnkhUID: 2303879

(本段内容很好。但是起始句不理想。作者想把他人的观点当靶子，采取驳论法，但是这个观点不是提干中有的，有点牵强。所以我个人觉得直接说你的观点就可以了。)

谢谢,我明白你的意思了,这里是有些不合适,呵呵

mantnkhUID: 2303879

(本段内容很好。但是起始句不理想。作者想把他人的观点当靶子，采取驳论法，但是这个观点不是提干中有的，有点牵强。所以我个人觉得直接说你的观点就可以了。)

谢谢,我明白你的意思了,这里是有些不合适,呵呵