Issue7【0806G-永不言弃小组】第四次作业 by zhouding3000

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1, 数码照相机确实可以精确、令人信服地记录人们的生活，他排出的照片很直观地反映出一些事实，比如说新闻、体育赛况的报道。照片对空间和表象的把握性比执笔强，有时候很多笔墨描写的一幅画面可能还没有一张照片来得真实。比如说一些文学作品描写的一些景色，虽然已经很惟妙惟肖了，但还是没有一张照片给人更美的享受。
2, 但执笔的模式对事件实质的把握性强于数码照相机，就算我们看了一步细节很分明的电视，比如说二战纪录片，我们可能很难领悟并且记住到某些事情背后的故事，执笔的模式不仅能够记录下这些事实，并且能够更有力度的有深度的揭露时间本质。
In addition, 执笔的模式更加正式和权威，事实证明当我们要签署协议些合同的时候，执笔模式是非常必需的，他给人一种信服感，并且法律文书的书写也用记录。执笔纪录方便我们的再查阅，当被发行成书刊时。
照片容易让人造成误解，new orleans’ government’s grant that it is OKed to raze down a great many houses. The picture published denotes a riot that is being quelled by police.
也不可能每天带着照相机，而执笔式更加方便。

The speaker asserts that the style of video camera could render it more vivid to record a contemporary life than the written documention. I fundamentally agree that the former one do endue us with a lot of active pictures and bring convenience in knowing some events happening around us. Nevertheless, it can’t be a substitute for the written style. Accordingly, it is necessary to strike a balance between the two usages.

On one hand, the video camera do provide us with a great many active pictures and facilitates the understanding of an event. The picture could grasp the essential characters the event contains. To illustrate the point clearly, we can see that a detailed and mellifluous literary work, along with adquate mataphors and similes, which are incentives to burgeon your aesthetic appreciation, might not be completely sensed by a picture of it, especially considering the appreciation of a resort such as verdant mountains and limpid brooks. And chances are high that we may find it more authentic and comfortable to sense some news reports such as the sports realm’s illustration, the national affairs. In these cases, the written style deprive the truth of more activity and intuitionality. On balance, the video camera has a better control on the the spacial documention.

On the other hand, however, even the dominant power on spacial documention the video camera possesses, we could neglect the other facet that not all things could be documented by camera temporarily. So the style of camera limits the instantaneity of an event and could not interprete an event accurately and authoritatively. Here comes the advantages of written records over the video camera.

The capacity of written records grasp the substance of an event show aggressively overwhelming dominant power to the video camera records. A supreme authoritative work recorded by video camera might not catch up with the documentary film, in which a series of more detailed and authentic steps and procedures are expressed actively and intuitionally. Nonetheless, in this case alwalys comes the grasp of the essence of the subsequent events. The style of video camera pales in comparison with the written records in that the latter one could contemplate the affair on more sides without the necessity of keeping up with the quickness of the pictures showing. It bestows us  more profoundly and cogently with the substance of an affair, such as how and why this affair happens and what is the subsequent event during such a time, etc. In addition, it is more convenient for consultations if the written documention is compiled into publishing. Moreover, in most of the time, we might not tend to take a camera with ourselves rather than a pen. In this manner, some interesting or significant events happened around us could not be documented instantly. Also, the camera might lead to misunderstanding among the readers. For example, the recent affair that the government of New Orleans OKed the razing of a great many houses while the picture published denoted a riot quelled by police.

In sum, although the video camera provide us more convenience and intuitionality to understand a event actively, we might not extend it so far that the advantages of written documention should ne neglected. On balance, it is necessary to strike a balance between both the styles. Consequently, an affair or event could be documented more profoundly, accurately, actively and cogently.

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建议：
一：你的结构是，一是说明video camera的优点，二是written record的优点 建议补充一个第三点，两者的结合。这样会是更有说服力。
二：总体上有进步。
三：那个documentation单词 拼错无数次了哦
The speaker asserts that the style of video camera could render it more vivid to record a contemporary life than the written documention（documentation）. I fundamentally agree that the former one do endue us with a lot of active pictures and bring convenience in knowing some events happening around us. Nevertheless, it can’t be a substitute for the written style. Accordingly, it is necessary to strike a balance between the two usages.

On （the） one hand, the video camera do provide us with a great many active pictures and facilitates(这个和provide并列吧，应该用原形) the understanding of an event. The picture could grasp the essential characters the event contains. To illustrate the point clearly, we can see that a detailed and mellifluous literary work, along with adquate mataphors （adequate metaphors）and similes, which are incentives to burgeon your aesthetic appreciation, might not be completely sensed by a picture of it, especially considering the appreciation of a resort such as verdant mountains and limpid brooks. And chances are high that we may find it more authentic and comfortable to sense some news reports such as the sports realm’s illustration, the national affairs. In these cases, the written style deprive（s） the truth of more activity and intuitionality（intuition）. On balance, the video camera has a better control on the the spacial documention（documentation）.

On the other hand, however, even the dominant power on spacial documention the video camera possesses, we could （not）neglect the other facet （用the fact就可以了）that not all things could be documented by camera temporarily. So the style of camera limits the instantaneity of an event and could not interprete an event accurately and authoritatively. Here comes（advantages是复数，这里就不可以用comes） the advantages of written records over the video camera.

The capacity of written records （of grasping） grasp the substance of an event show aggressively overwhelming dominant power to the video camera records. A supreme authoritative work recorded by video camera might not catch up with the documentary film, in which a series of more detailed and authentic steps and procedures are expressed actively and intuitionally. Nonetheless, in this case （always ）comes the grasp of the essence of the subsequent events. The style of video camera pales in comparison with the written records in that the latter one could contemplate the affair on more sides without the necessity of keeping up with the quickness of the pictures showing. It bestows us  more profoundly and cogently with the substance of an affair（it bestow us the substance of an affair more profoundly and cogently） , such as how and why this affair happens and what is the subsequent event during such a time, etc. In addition, it is more convenient for consultations if the written documentation is compiled into publishing. Moreover, in(delete in) most of the time, we might not tend to take a camera with ourselves rather than a pen(rather than a camera, we might tend to take a pen). In this manner, some interesting or significant events happened around us could not be documented instantly. Also, the camera might lead to misunderstanding among the readers. For example, the recent affair that the government of New Orleans OKed the razing of a great many houses while the picture published denoted a riot quelled by police.这个例子很新颖，很好，具有说服力，指出了camera记录的欺骗性，和written form的深刻性形成鲜明对比。

In sum, although the video camera provide（s） us more convenience and intuitionality to understand a event actively, we might not extend it so far that the advantages of written documentation should neglected. On balance, it is necessary to strike a balance between both the styles（both the styles 这样的表达合理吗？是不是the two forms 更好些呢）. Consequently, an affair or event could be documented more profoundly, accurately, actively and cogently.