Issue150【Jet小组】第五次作业

x6xUID: 2180130

ISSUE150 - "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

WORDS:565   DATE:11/2/2008

A recent survey developed by US News indicates that tourism websites has ranked 5th among the Top 20 websites web users in North American browse everyday. As a result, I agree with the author's opinion that people can now become familiar with a large quantities of places through TV and Internet, however, at the same time, it is totally wrong to affirm that tourism will soon become obsolete. Therefore, my attitude toward this topic is that though broadening people's sights, information or knowledge absorbed from television or computer cannot replace the exciting experience from tourism.

To begin with, notwithstanding that the highly developed devices will help us broaden our ken or horizon, we can better learn the culture and nature details with our own experience. Travelling programs in TV supply audiences nothing more than pictures or videos, through which generalizations and abstractions transfer to people who  watch them. However, It is easily to ignore details, which are more likely to attract traveller. There is a well-known idiom that a man without going to the Great Wall loses the right to be called a man. In fact, as thousands of people have saw it many times, whether in TV or on the computer,  they have shaped the impressions of Great Wall - a rather long wall standing on the mountain top. Nonetheless, if we let satisfaction prevent us to have a look at the real wall by ourselves, a lot of amazing details behind the general image will be neglected - why it should be built on the peak? Was it as long as what we see today at the beginning?  How wide was it? Regardless of defence, what is its symbolic meaning? Rather than switch the television channel or  click the mouse, people prefer tourism to attain more details.

Moreover, the devices may ignite our interests for viewing the famous places through tourism. To illustrate, I would like to take the National Geography as an example. There are countless beautiful and interesting pictures on both the journals and the official website, which even offer free video watching and downloading. Once on the website, I viewed a video of Tibet, in which the white ice mountain, the brimless grassland and the clean blue sky attract me. Whereas, not as the author of this topic imagined, I not only refused to give up the idea of travelling to Tibet one day, but also accelerated the idea to come true. Hence, those devices actually ignite our interests to have real travells.   

What's more, since more and more work require all day's sedentary working, the need for outgoing is more crucial for people. Comparing watching TV or browsing web pages with tourism, we can easily find many advantages of tourism - getting a comprehensive release, touching the nature, doing additional research, and so on. Maybe one of the few merits of staying home watching TV or computers is that it seems to save money in short views.

Admittedly, however, people are using to watch television programs or searching through Google to guide their travelling plans. For introductions and suggestions supplied by those devices usually help tourists, we never dare to underestimate the functions of them.

In sum, judging from the reasons mentioned above, we can safely concluded that tourism will never become obsolete, although people can now become aware of  a large quantities of places through TV and Internet.



[ 本帖最后由 x6x 于 2008-2-14 12:54 编辑 ]

Silvan_luanUID: 2374352

A recent survey developed by US News indicates that tourism websites has ranked 5th among the Top 20 websites web(the) users in North American browse everyday. As a result, I agree with the author's opinion that people can now become familiar with a large quantities of places through TV and Internet, however, at the same time, it is totally wrong to affirm that tourism will soon become obsolete. Therefore, my attitude toward this topic is that though broadening people's sights, information or knowledge absorbed from television or computer cannot replace the exciting experience from tourism.（建议不要先AGREE，再HOWEVER，主旨段似乎不需要转折过多）

To begin with, notwithstanding that the highly developed devices will help us broaden our ken or horizon（这个句子是从句？什么从句？还是改成独立主格结构安全些）, we can better learn the culture and nature details with our own experience（可以复数？）. Travelling programs in TV supply（这个词后面接“观众”做宾语？） audiences nothing more than pictures or videos（改成supplu nothing more than ....to aud-), through which generalizations and abstractions transfer to people who  watch them. However, It is easily to ignore details, which are more likely to attract traveller. There is a well-known idiom that a man without going to the Great Wall loses the right to be called a man. In fact, as thousands of people have saw it many times, whether in TV or on the computer,  they have shaped the impressions of Great Wall - a rather long wall standing on the mountain top. Nonetheless, if we let satisfaction prevent us to have a look at the real wall by ourselves, a lot of amazing details behind the general image will be neglected - why it should be built on the peak? Was it as long as what we see today at the beginning?  How wide was it? Regardless of defence, what is its symbolic meaning? Rather than switch the television channel or  click the mouse, people prefer tourism to attain more details(我会写to attain more to answer the questions above,因为这种设问似乎需要收一下).

Moreover, the devices may ignite our interests for viewing the famous places through tourism. To illustrate, I would like to take the National Geography as an example. There are countless beautiful and interesting pictures on both the journals and the official website, which even offer free video watching and downloading. Once on the website, I viewed a video of Tibet, in which the white ice mountain, the brimless grassland and the clean blue sky attract me. Whereas, not as the author of this topic imagined, I not only refused to give up the idea of travelling to Tibet one day, but also accelerated the idea to come true. Hence, those devices actually ignite our interests to have real travells.   

What's more, since more and more work require all day's sedentary working, the need for outgoing is more crucial for people. Comparing watching TV or browsing web pages with tourism, we can easily find many advantages of tourism - getting a comprehensive release, touching the nature, doing additional research, and so on. Maybe one of the few merits of staying home watching TV or computers is that it seems to save money in short views.

Admittedly, however, people are using to watch television programs or searching through Google to guide their travelling plans. For introductions and suggestions supplied by those devices usually help tourists, we never dare to underestimate the functions of them.

In sum, judging from the reasons mentioned above, we can safely concluded that tourism will never become obsolete, although people can now become aware of  a large quantities of places through TV and Internet.

论证还是很喜欢的，典型的新东方方式，连接词也比较够

txjlionUID: 2445370

A recent survey developed by US News indicates that tourism websites has ranked 5th among the Top 20 websites web users in North American browse（后置定语，改为browsed） everyday. As a result, I agree with the author's opinion that people can now become familiar with a large quantities of places through TV and Internet, however, at the same time, it is totally wrong to affirm that tourism will soon become obsolete. Therefore, my attitude toward this topic is that though broadening people's sights, information or knowledge absorbed from television or computer cannot replace the exciting experience from tourism.

To begin with, notwithstanding that the highly developed devices will help us broaden our ken or horizon, we can better learn the culture and nature details with our own experience. Travelling programs in TV supply audiences nothing more than pictures or videos, through which generalizations and abstractions transfer to people who  watch them. However, It is easily（easy） to ignore details, which are more likely to attract traveller. There is a well-known idiom that a man without going to the Great Wall loses the right to be called a man（尽管长城在中国家喻户晓，但是老美不见的知道，个人认为这么翻译他们很难理解“不到长城非好汉”的精髓，所以不建议用如此中国的例子）. In fact, as thousands of people have saw it many times, whether in TV or on the computer,  they have shaped the impressions of Great Wall - a rather long wall standing on the mountain top. Nonetheless, if we let satisfaction prevent us to have a look at the real wall by ourselves, a lot of amazing details behind the general image will be neglected - why it should be built on the peak? Was it as long as what we see today at the beginning?  How wide was it? Regardless of defence, what is its symbolic meaning? Rather than switch the television channel or  click the mouse, people prefer tourism to attain more details.

Moreover, the devices may ignite our interests for viewing the famous places through tourism. To illustrate, I would like to take the National Geography as an example. There are countless beautiful and interesting pictures on both the journals and the official website, which even offer free video watching and downloading. Once on the website, I viewed a video of Tibet, in which the white ice mountain, the brimless grassland and the clean blue sky attract me. Whereas, not as the author of this topic imagined, I not only refused to give up the idea of travelling to Tibet one day, but also accelerated the idea to come true. Hence, those devices actually ignite our interests to have real travells.   

What's more, since more and more work require all day's sedentary working, the need for outgoing is more crucial for people. Comparing watching TV or browsing web pages with tourism, we can easily find many advantages of tourism - getting a comprehensive release, touching the nature, doing additional research, and so on. Maybe one of the few merits of staying home watching TV or computers is that it seems to save money in short views.

Admittedly, however, people are using to watch（“使用看”，这个结构不对） television programs or searching through Google to guide their travelling plans. For introductions and suggestions supplied by those devices usually help tourists, we never dare to underestimate the functions of them.

In sum, judging from the reasons mentioned above, we can safely concluded that tourism will never become obsolete, although people can now become aware of  a large quantities of places through TV and Internet.结尾段有点单薄，最好丰满一点


字数方面做的好，据新东方老师说，高分作文一定要多字数。
提一点意见：长段子的后面，最好有一句总结。

加油~