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95.The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner in Sophia
County.

"Census data indicate that the number of retired couples without children
who are moving into Sophia County is steadily rising; private schools in
our county report substantial increases in enrollment; and a statewide
survey of parents shows that over 10 percent now support the idea of home
schooling instead of public schooling funded by the county government.
Such demographic trends suggest that our county will not have to construct
new school buildings and that we can therefore decrease the budget for
county-funded public schools."

普查数据表明,搬到Sophia
County
的无子女退休夫妇的数量正在稳步增加;我们镇的私立学校上报的注册人数增加;对于家长的州际调查发现10%以上的人现在支持私人办学的想法而不是由镇政府出资设立公立学校。这些趋势说明我们镇不需要建立新的学校建筑,因而我们可以减少市镇出资的公立学校的预算。
1无子女退休夫妇的数量正在稳步增加没证据
2私立学校上报的注册人数增加没证据
3家长的州际调查发现10%以上的人现在支持私人办学的想法没证据

The conclusion that the arguer claim in this argument is that Sophia County will not have to construct new school buildings and that they can therefore decrease the budget for county-funded public schools. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out three evidences. At first glance, the arguer’s assumption seems to be accepted, while clearly exam the arguer’s assumption, we may find that it is unconvincing, vague, oversimplified, and unwarranted. The argument contains several facets that are questionable.  

In the first place, the arguer’s evidences are insufficient to support the conclusion. Obviously, arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of the census data. The arguer does not indicate who or which organization made this survey about the number of retired couples without children who are moving into Sophia County. Maybe these retired couples’ children just do not live with them because they are busy with their work. If it is like so, these young people always like their children live with their grandparents. So there are more children needing to learn knowledge from school in Sophia County. Thus, Sophia County has to increase the budget for education to construct new school buildings.  

In addition, even the number of retired couples without children who are moving into Sophia County is steadily rising, the arguer also give particular informant about enrollment of private schools. The reporter may be just these private schools in Sophia County so that the data is irreality. They want to increase the number of their students and made the feint that substantial increasing in enrollment. Therefore, the arguer should provide more information before make an assumption.


Finally, one major flaw that weakens the logic of this argument is that the arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of this statistics. The arguer does not indicate when and who makes the survey about over ten percent parents support the idea of home schooling instead of public schooling funded by the county government. In the meantime, the “over 10 percent” that demographic trends is also unconvincing. If the parents surveyed only stand for a tiny proportion of the whole groups, we should not be so sure about the conclusion. The number of the people who support the idea of public schooling funded by the county government is likely more than the discommender.

On all accounts, the conclusion reached in this argument is lacking of credibility so that it is not persuasive at it stands. Regardless of who the arguer is, he or she has overlooked or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the argument, we would need more informants about statistics collecting from the Sophia County. Additionally, the arguer should provide more evidence about the above-mentioned possibilities and to rule out other possible cause.

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95.The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner in Sophia
County.

"Census data indicate that the number of retired couples without children
who are moving into Sophia County is steadily rising; private schools in
our county report substantial increases in enrollment; and a statewide
survey of parents shows that over 10 percent now support the idea of home
schooling instead of public schooling funded by the county government.
Such demographic trends suggest that our county will not have to construct
new school buildings and that we can therefore decrease the budget for
county-funded public schools."

普查数据表明,搬到Sophia
County
的无子女退休夫妇的数量正在稳步增加;我们镇的私立学校上报的注册人数增加;对于家长的州际调查发现10%以上的人现在支持私人办学的想法而不是由镇政府出资设立公立学校。这些趋势说明我们镇不需要建立新的学校建筑,因而我们可以减少市镇出资的公立学校的预算。
1无子女退休夫妇的数量正在稳步增加没证据
2私立学校上报的注册人数增加没证据
3家长的州际调查发现10%以上的人现在支持私人办学的想法没证据

The conclusion that the arguer claims in this argument is that Sophia County will not have to construct new school buildings and that they can therefore decrease the budget for county-funded public schools. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out three evidences. At first glance, the arguer’s assumption seems to be accepted, while clearly exam the arguer’s assumption, we may find that it is unconvincing, vague, oversimplified, and unwarranted. The argument contains several facets that are questionable.  

In the first place, the arguer’s evidences are insufficient to support the conclusion. Obviously, arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of the census data. The arguer does not indicate who or which organization made this survey about the number of retired couples without children who are moving into Sophia County. Maybe these retired couples’ children just do not live with them because they are busy with their work. If it is like so, these young people always like their children live with their grandparents. So there are more children needing to learn knowledge from school in Sophia County. Thus, Sophia County has to increase the budget for education to construct new school buildings.  

In addition, even the number of retired couples without children who are moving into Sophia County is steadily rising, the arguer also give particular informant about enrollment of private schools. The reporter may be just these private schools in Sophia County so that the data is unreality (misleading). They want to increase the number of their students and made the feint that substantial increasing in enrollment. Therefore, the arguer should provide more information before make an assumption.


Finally, one major flaw that weakens the logic of this argument is that the arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of this statistics. The arguer does not indicate when and who makes the survey about over ten percent parents support the idea of home schooling instead of public schooling funded by the county government. In the meantime, the “over 10 percent” that demographic trends is also unconvincing. If the parents surveyed only stand for a tiny proportion of the whole groups, we should not be so sure about the conclusion. The number of the people who support the idea of public schooling funded by the county government is likely more than the discommender.

On all accounts, the conclusion reached in this argument is lacking of credibility so that it is not persuasive at it stands. Regardless of who the arguer is, he or she has overlooked or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the argument, we would need more informants about statistics collecting from the Sophia County. Additionally, the arguer should provide more evidence about the above-mentioned possibilities and to rule out other possible cause.

这个argument的批驳,你的重点在于对数字的分析(surveydata),个人觉得不够全面。我觉得,题目的假设在于:现有的公立学校建筑满足于现在学校里面的学生。原因有123.所以你要对学生现有的入学状况和未来的趋势(datasurvey等)以及建筑是否满足进行批驳。。。说得有点乱,其实我当时写的也有点乱。
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