Argument45 [April作文互助小组]第一周作业

rita_moyoUID: 2274069

45 The followingappeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.

"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They searchfor food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year.Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on whichthey feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover thesea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately,according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining.Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have causedthe sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deerpopulations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-oldmigration patterns across the frozen sea."

In this editorial, the arguer's view seems to be sound and convincing at first glance that the reasons of （去掉）decrease on artic deer population, indicated from the local hunters' reports, has to do with that melt of the sea ice caused by the global warming trends stops their migration across the frozen sea, which is the way they search for food. I'm afraid that this argument can hardly bear further consideration since the argument suffers several fallacies and relies on some unwarranted evidence.

First, the arguer concluded that the deer populations are declining according to the reports from local hunters. Although, to some extent, such reports do reflect the change of the deer population subjectively, it seems unscientific when appears in the journal for The reports are only carried out among hunters, a specific group of people who might only care deers （deer 单复同形）in vicinity, or their total quantity of varied preys rather than the quantity of one kind of animal. If the arguer can present with more scientific reports from scientists with some data, then the reports can be regarded as cogent evidence.

Another point worth close scrutiny is that the arguer attributed the occurrence of decline in arctic deer to the global warming trends only for it happens at the same time with the reports and it causes the sea ice to melt. First, it is widely belief that it is not necessary to have a causality between two events happen together even when one of them might impact the other one. For instance, some person is found dead with bruises all around the body. While, the cause of death is more likely beyond these bruises even when we calculate the bruises coincide with death. Also, just as we can't attribute the cause of death to superficial bruises, （举例不恰当）the global warming trends is not  definitely the reason of decrease in deer population. After all, there exist many other causes which could probably lead to decrease of deer, such as contamination in air, water, food, on which Arctic deer live,  increase in the deers' quantity as hunters’ or other animals’ preys and so forth. The conclusion is convincing only when the arguer excludes other factors those could be the main reasons to threaten the exist of Arctic deer.

In sum, it is not reasonable to assert the deer population are declining only depended on the report form hunters and ascribe it to the global warming. To strengthen the argument, the arguer should provide more scientific evidence and data to support the conclusion about the Arctic deer presented in the editorial.


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[ 本帖最后由 rita_moyo 于 2008-3-21 22:36 编辑 ]

laiy115UID: 2421161

1. the arguer's view 的同位语从句的主语用 the reasons 好象不恰当， 用 the decreasing of the number of arctic deer 好象好些
2.melt of the sea ice 中的melt 只有动词用法吧。
3.relieson 不懂什么意思。。。
4.the arguer concludes that  应该是过去时吧
5. the deer populations 不要复数
6.their total quantity of varied preys ？         care total quantity of
7. only care deers in vicinity 中deer 单复同形
8.the occurrence of declinein  是declineing

9.The conclude  词性？

不知道用的dead与bruises的例子是否合适，可以讨论下

看的很吃力， 稍微注意下格式

[ 本帖最后由 laiy115 于 2008-3-21 22:31 编辑 ]

rita_moyoUID: 2274069

不好意思，我本来是改过格式的，不知怎么又这样了。。。

常见的单复同形的名词有：　　a. 某些动物的名称：
　　bison(野牛) 、deer 、grouse(松鸡)、cod(鳕鱼)、 fish 、goldfish、halibut(大比目鱼) 、mullet(胭脂鱼)、 salmon(鲑鱼)、moose(麋) reindeer(驯鹿) 、sheep(绵羊)、shellfish(贝壳动物)、trout(鳟鱼) 、whitebait(银鱼)
　　b.craft及由craft构成的词：
　　aircraft craft(船) hovercraft(气垫船) spacecraft(宇宙飞船)
　　c.表示某国人的名词：
　　I’m proud I am a Chinese.我骄傲我是中国人。
　　The Chinese eat with chopsticks.中国人用筷子吃饭。
　　His wife is a Vietnamese.他妻子是越南人。
　　The Vietnamese are noted for their cookery.越南人因其烹调而出名。
　　It was invented by a Swiss.这是一位瑞士人发明的。
　　The Swiss did not take their fate lying down.瑞士人并不甘心接受被征服的命运。
　　Tips: 不能说an English，要说an English man。有些词则要加-s，如Scot(s)。
　　d.还有一些其他单、复同形的名词(斜体部分)：
　　This rare bird has become an endangered species.这种珍禽已成为濒临灭绝的物种。
　　There are over 200 species of fish.有二百多个品种的鱼。
　　…
　　*有某些词有特殊情况：
　　fruit：通常作总称或集体名词，没有复数形式：
　　I like fruit and vegetables.我喜欢水果和蔬菜。
　　This pudding has two pounds of fresh fruit in it.这个布丁里有两磅鲜果。
　　在表示某种水果时可有复数形式：
　　The potato is a vegetable, not a fruit.马铃薯是一种蔬菜，不是一种水果。
　　The country exports tropical fruits.该国出口热带水果。
　　用于抽象或比喻义时也可有复数形式：
　　They enjoy the fruits of their hard labor.他们享受自己辛勤努力的成果。
　　hair：通常作单数，是头发或动物毛发的总称：
　　She was slender and had long dark hair.她身材苗条，有一头长长的黑发。
　　My hair has grown very long.我的头发长得很长了。
　　但表示一根头发或毛时可有复数，用作可数名词：
　　There are a few hairs in the book.书里有几根头发。
　　He had a few grey hairs.他有几根灰白色的头发。
　　*有一些名词有两种复数形式，如：
　　The herring(s) usually live in large shoals. 鲱鱼通常生活在大的浅水区。
　　Zebra(s)are a more difficult prey.斑马是一种比较难捕获的猎物。
　　另有一些带-s词尾的词，通常用作单数(斜体部分)：
　　The accident took place at a crossroads.事故就发生在一个十字路口。
　　The business cycle is a series of peaks and troughs.商业周期就是淡旺期交替。

[ 本帖最后由 rita_moyo 于 2008-3-21 22:46 编辑 ]