Argument51<challenge yourself >第5次作业by Tracycxt

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
WORDS: 448          TIME: 00:37:46          DATE: 2008-7-31 22:27:19

In this argument, the author concludes that doctor should prescribe the patients antibiotics, because it could substantiate that secondary infections could serve as an obstacle to prevent patients from healing at tremendous speed. To support the argument, the author also cites the result of research about two group people who suffer from muscle injuries. At the first glance, the argument is somewhat reasonable,however a careful scrutiny reveals that none of them could hold up the argument.

To begin with, one problem with the argument is that no evidence has been offered to present the detailed information of these two group patients, so that the author cannot conclude that the reason why patients is antibiotics. It is entirely possible that group taking sugar pills undergo such a loss of vigorous that they cannot be healed as fast as patients taking antibiotics. It is also possible that the first group also suffer from other disease, such as stomachache, easily fracturing, which could largely affect the speed of healing. Other possibilities also could bring the same result, such as gender, age, character, and so on. Without ruling out these possibilities, it is too hastily to conclude that taking antibiotics would be viewed as sole reason to cause different speed.

Next, the author fails to indicate that the significance of antibiotics are the result of high healing speed, since these two group patients receive treatment from different doctors. The author overlooks the important factor, or even greatest one which also influence the result of treatment. Common sense informs that doctor who specializeds are familiar with the muscle injuries, while doctor who is good at lacking practical experience in dealing with the matter of muscle injuries. Unless the author could exclude this factor, the different response which is attributable to the effect of antibiotics remains ambiguous.

Finally, although the average recuperation time of the second group nearly remains the same as the first group, it does not suffice to consider that are attributable to antibiotics. Perhaps sugar pill could play a strictly utilitarian role in curing the disease. As known by all, antibiotics, as a medicine to help curing disease, also could bring us the side-effect, just as other medicines. It might be turned out that the advantages of taking antibiotics are outweigh the disadvantage which may cause the any other disease with destructive effect.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands, since the evidence cited in the argument is not reliable. Before the conclusion that are reached, however, more detailed and complete information about the significance of sugar pills ,the quality of doctors are needed, the equality of doctor are needed. After all, a false confidence in the effect of antibiotics is as dangerous as no treatment.

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In this argument, the author concludes that doctor should prescribe the patients antibiotics, because it could substantiate that secondary infections could serve as an obstacle to prevent patients from healing at tremendous speed. To support the argument, the author also cites the result of research about two group people who suffer from muscle injuries. At the first glance, the argument is somewhat reasonable,however a careful scrutiny reveals that none of them could hold up the argument.

To begin with, one problem with the argument is that no evidence has been offered to present the detailed information of these two group patients, so that the author cannot conclude that the reason why patients is antibiotics.（？？什么意思？这句没写全吧） It is entirely possible that group taking sugar pills undergo such a loss of vigorous that they cannot be healed as fast as patients taking antibiotics. It is also possible that the first group also suffer from other disease, such as stomachache（这个……有点牵强）, easily fracturing, which could largely affect the speed of healing. Other possibilities also could bring the same result, such as gender, age, character, and so on. Without ruling out these possibilities, it is too hastily（应用形容词hasty） to conclude that taking antibiotics would be viewed as sole reason to cause different speed.

Next, the author fails to indicate that the significance of antibiotics are the result（应该是reason吧） of high healing speed, since these two group patients receive treatment from different doctors. The author overlooks the important factor, or even greatest one which also influence the result of treatment. Common sense informs that doctor who specializeds are familiar with the muscle injuries, while doctor who is good at lacking practical experience in dealing with the matter of muscle injuries.（又是语法错误） Unless the author could exclude this factor, the different response which is attributable to the effect of antibiotics remains ambiguous.

Finally, although the average recuperation time of the second group nearly remains the same as the first group, it does not suffice to consider that （从句的主语呢？）are attributable to antibiotics. Perhaps sugar pill could play a strictly utilitarian role in curing the disease. As known by all, antibiotics, as a medicine to help curing disease, also could bring us the side-effect, just as other medicines. It might be turned out that the advantages of taking antibiotics are outweigh the disadvantage which may cause the any other disease with destructive effect.（一段如果要说两个方面，就分成两段，就算不分开，也要有逻辑连词，这段中间突然转到另一方面，缺乏逻辑性。）

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands, since the evidence cited in the argument is not reliable. Before the conclusion that are reached, however, more detailed and complete information about the significance of sugar pills ,the quality of doctors are needed, the equality of doctor are needed. After all, a false confidence in the effect of antibiotics is as dangerous as no treatment.


总的来说这篇文章论点和结构都很好，但是作者的语法错误太多，以至于影响到了阅读，这就不好了（当然，我阅读水平低也是一个原因哈）。另外，作者需要注意论证的严谨性。