COMEON作文小组10.8作业－hans0612

hans0612UID: 2462190

COMEON作文小组10.8作业－hans0612
Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize. （2007.7.21,技术进步与成功类）

In this busy society, our time is very valuable to us. It is important that we take some time to relax and renew our energy in order to face the challenges ahead of us. Different people like to spend their time in different ways. Some like to plan their activities so that they can make the most of time available while others prefer not to plan anything. Both thoughts have their advantages.

When people carefully plan their time, they will not waste any time on decision making or last-minute preparations. This saves their time and, therefore, makes them feel that they have more free time to enjoy. Planning ahead also allows people to take advantage of their opportunity to participate certain restricted activities. For example, by planning ahead, they can buy tickets for a concert or play that may later be sold out. Furthermore, being better prepared for an activity not noly saves time but can make the outing more fun and more meaningful. It is not much fun to make a spontaneous trip to the beach only to find you have left your swimsuit at home.

However, unplanned time also has its advantages. With no commitment to take part in a certain activity or meet a friend at a certain hour, the non-planner can take advantage of last-minute changes and opportunities. Furthermore, he will not be disappointed should his plans fall through, because he has made none. On the other hand, if someone has looked forward to a baseball game all week, it is very disappointing if it is cancelled due to rain. Last but not least, unplanned leisure time can be more relaxing. During the work week, we must all punctual and face deadlines. Some people prefer to make their free time as different from that as possible.

Although both planned the unplanned time have their benefits, I still prefer to plan my time. My time is limited, and so I want to make the best use of it. By planning ahead, i can take part in the activities that I want and spend time with the people I want to see. And in case my plans should be changed by unforeseen circumstances, I can always go to the alternative plan.

April'sUID: 2555679

In this busy society, our time is very valuable to us. It is important that we take some time to relax and renew our energy in order to face the challenges ahead of us. Different people like to spend their time in different ways. Some(one) like to plan their activities so that they can make the most of time available while others （prefer not to plan anything)累赘了 改成do not即可. Both thoughts have their advantages. 我建议第一段还是申明一下你是agree还是disagree这个statement比较好，这样对后面有个结构暗示。

When people carefully plan their time, they will not waste any time on decision making or last-minute preparations. This saves their time and, therefore, makes them feel that they have more free time to enjoy. Planning ahead also allows people to take advantage of their opportunity to participate certain restricted activities. For example, by planning ahead, they can buy tickets for a concert or play that may later be sold out.（ Furthermore, being better prepared for an activity not noly saves time but can make the outing more fun and more meaningful. It is not much fun to make a spontaneous trip to the beach only to find you have left your swimsuit at home.好例子！）

However（这里用however不太确切 一般谈论一个较弱的观点时用让步副词admittedly，因为毕竟这一段不是你的主要观点，你还是主张计划时间的）, unplanned time also has its advantages. With no commitment to take part in a certain activity or meet a friend at a certain hour, the non-planner can take advantage of last-minute changes and opportunities. Furthermore, he will not be disappointed should his plans fall through, because he has made none这句话怪怪的……. On the other hand, if someone has looked forward to a baseball game all week, it is very disappointing if it is cancelled due to rain. Last but not least, unplanned leisure time can be more relaxing（flexible）. During the work week, we must all punctual and face deadlines你不觉得这句话是在暗示计划时间很重要么 和这段观点不一致啊……. Some people prefer to make their free time as different from that as possible.

寄托家园FB n`8?
寄托家园%v}E!\X/Y
Although both planned the unplanned time have their benefits, I still prefer to plan my time. My time is limited, and so I want to make the best use of it. By planning ahead, i can take part in the activities that I want and spend time with the people I want to see（visit）. And in case my plans should be changed by unforeseen circumstances, I can always go to the alternative plan.

对不起啊 昨天一直没回来 今天赶紧来改
恩 总的来说你这篇语言l流畅 但是有个明显的问题 就是不那么扣题 题目中的young people这个问题你一直没有面对 要是考官觉得这题主要想考的是围绕培养小孩子的计划能力 你就…… 吼吼 你觉得呢？