COMEON作文小组——jiwasun 2008 10月27日作业

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你认为接下来20年汽车的使用会不会减少？

When it comes to the debate that whether the frequency of automobiles' utilization will decrease in twenty years, there is no consensus among people. Many people hold the opinion that usage will greatly decrease. However, from my perspective, the leading role played by the automobiles in the traffic and transportation will not change, the exploiting of automobiles will go on. And the reasons supporting my view are lists as follows.

The point of pinnacle value for my preference focus on the chase of a car. We live in a world where knowledge is accumulated by multiplying, people suffer from high pressure from numerous directions, such as economic pressure, self-induced pressure, and so forth. People who show grace under pressure are essential in the competitive society. So, tools are badly needed to release the pressure. Moreover, a private auto has been the first choice for long time. Then, people owning a automobile can drive it to everywhere they want at weekend. For instance, I usually drove outside the city to places where green land and blue sky are insight, such as a farm, park, and so on. I did take a short escape from the crow and seriously contaminated city. I breathe the fresh air, appreciated the wonderful outlook. How amazing it is? I hod the viewpoint that I can take a more complete rest there than merely staying at home watching TV or surf on the Internet. Everybody is dreaming about owning a car. Apparently, people will still take advantages of the automobile in a long period later.

With the first point stands the second point demonstrates that automobiles are required in the  transportation. With the rapid progress of economic, never a powerful transportation system won't be constructed. Widely accepted, automobiles, known as the most flexible ways of transportation, does provide us with comfort and convenience, one of the most essential elements to our country's economic growth. Automobiles, when compared with airplane, are much more lower in expenditure. And it is the automobiles that have a more faster transportation speed than the trains. In all, automobiles are indispensable.

Finally, though significant the role played by the automobiles, various negative impacts are raised at the same time such as dusty air pollution, bloody car accidents, serious traffic jams,  and so forth. In my view, these all can be solved soon. For example, new resources, instead of fossil petroleum, will be applied to autos. As a result, there will be no acid fumes such as sulfur dioxide exhausted into the atmosphere.

Therefore, from what have discussed above, we can reach the conclusion that exploiting of automobiles will never decrease in later twenty years. Additionally, enough attention should be paid to cope with such negative effects created by the autos.

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When it comes to the debate that whether the frequency of automobiles' utilization will decrease in (加个next吧) twenty years, there is no consensus among people (感觉这句没有联系，当人们讨论汽车在未来20年下降时，并没有展开调查。可是LZ的文章中也没有展开调查啊，干脆就改成When it comes to the debate that whether the frequency of automobiles' utilization will decrease in next twenty years, Many people hold the opinion that usage will greatly decrease. However，***). Many people hold the opinion that usage will greatly decrease. However, from my perspective, the leading role played by the automobiles in the traffic and transportation (traffic 和 transportation 是同一个意思，要一个就可以了) will not change, (and) the exploiting of automobiles will go on. And(这个and 就不要了) the reasons supporting my view are lists as follows.

The point of pinnacle (这个词够牛) value for my preference focus on the chase of a car (刚开始看这个topic sentence说句实话没弄明白是什么意思，LZ大概是想说买车能使人更轻松。那就直接说好了：The point of pinnacle value for my preference focus on its merit of releasing people’s pressure). We live in a world where knowledge is accumulated by multiplying, (从开一句Therefore) people suffer from high pressure from numerous directions, such as economic pressure, self-induced pressure, and so forth. People who show grace under pressure are essential in the competitive society(没明白这句话是什么意思，LZ是想说在巨大压力下表现优秀的人在这个充满竞争的社会是必要的吗？). So, tools are badly needed to release the pressure. Moreover, a private auto has been the first choice for long time. Then, people owning a(an) automobile can drive it (wherever they want at the weekend) to everywhere they want at weekend. For instance, I usually drove outside the city to places where green land and blue sky are insight, such as a farm, park, and so on. I did take a short escape from the crow and seriously contaminated city. I breathe the fresh air, appreciated the wonderful outlook. How amazing it is? I hod(hold) the viewpoint that I can take a more complete rest there than merely staying at home watching TV or surf(surfing) on the Internet. Everybody is dreaming about owning a car. Apparently, people will still take advantages of the automobile in a long period later.
(这个例子挺不错的)

the first point stands, the second point demonstrates that automobiles are required in the  transportation. With the rapid progress of economic (economy), never a powerful transportation system won't be constructed(这句子真复杂，而且never居首要倒装的). Widely accepted, automobiles, known as the most flexible ways of transportation, does provide us with comfort and convenience, one of the most essential elements to our country's economic growth(Convenience是我们国家经济增长的必要因素之一？). Automobiles, when(不要) compared with airplane, are much more lower in expenditure. And it is the automobiles that have a more(much) faster transportation(运输速度？就speed可以了) speed than the trains. In all, automobiles are indispensable.

Finally, though significant the role played by the automobiles, various negative impacts are raised at the same time such as dusty air pollution, bloody car accidents, serious traffic jams,  and so forth. In my view, these all can be solved soon. For example, new resources, instead of fossil petroleum, will be applied to autos. As a result, there will be no acid fumes such as sulfur dioxide exhausted into the atmosphere.


Therefore, from what have discussed above, we can reach the conclusion that exploiting of automobiles will never decrease in later twenty years. Additionally, enough attention should be paid to cope with such negative effects created by the autos.