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发表于 2008-12-20 17:42:39 |显示全部楼层

Since the invention of papermaking and printing has developed in ancient China, it brought many changes and progress in keeping documentaries and histories. Although there are advanced methods such as e-book and reading on internet to record culture and human civilization, the traditional way of printed book will not be replaced in the next two decades for the following reasons.

Firstly, the convenience of printed books will still play a key role in writhing and keeping notes for the young generation in the classes. Presently, the quality of paper is developing fast from sort of heavy to recycling ones. And the weight of printed books makes them more portable than before. Writing on paper, the traditional method of keeping notes and dairy are adopted by students, which is easy for them to write down the necessary points in the classes. Consider this, it happened that some colleges have lessons by screen, named e-class. But the students missed the opportunities to face to face with their professors and also cannot underline the parts they did not understand well. The new way of reading avoids people from carrying and opening books, while they also lost the enjoyment of writing something on their interests. That is the adequate the e-book cannot provide.

Secondly, the internet books have more space to keep more civilization and materials but those could be lost under the carelessness of humans. This is from my college teacher who kept his diaries and articles for 10 years on computer. However, he lost all he had within this 10 year in second due to his helper’s finger when fixed his computer. That is really distressful for anyone. People can say that it saves space and can keep every detail in order by reading and writing on computer. But the traditional way is always safe and convenient. If young people read a lot through internet, it will affect their eyes and also bring headache. Therefore, the printed book is healthier.

In conclusion, there several new styles of books are also convenient but the virtue of the traditional printed books cannot be supplanted for its own characters.

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发表于 2008-12-21 00:55:40 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2008-12-21 13:26:10 |显示全部楼层
Since the invention of papermaking and printing has developed in ancient China, it brought many changes and progress in keeping documentaries and histories.扯得有点远,太宏观了,干吗非得扯到古代中国去呢......另外这一句和后面那句的衔接不好,很突然地说)Although there are advanced methods such as e-book and reading on internet to record culture and human civilization,(其实可以不用那么啰嗦) the traditional way of printed book will not be replaced in the next two decades for the following reasons.

Firstly, the convenience of printed books will still play a key role in writhing and keeping notes for the young generation in the classes. Presently, the quality of paper is developing fast from sort of heavy to recycling ones. And the weight of printed books makes them more portable than before.(很中式。看看这样如何?It is more portable the printed books become, in terms of they being not so heavy as before)  Writing on paper, the traditional method of keeping notes and dairy are adopted by students, which is easy for them to write down the necessary points in the classes.(用电脑不可以记笔记么?这可不是印刷书的优越之处) Consider this, it happened that some colleges have lessons by screen, named e-class. But the students missed the opportunities to face to face with their professors (难道你在多媒体教室上课就不和老师面对面了么?不用印刷书不等于远程课堂)and also cannot underline the parts they did not understand well.(论证不够有力) The new way of reading avoids people from carrying and opening books, while they also lost the enjoyment of writing something on their interests. That is the adequate the e-book cannot provide.(这一段结尾还不错,有点题)

Secondly, the internet books have more space to keep more civilization and materials but those could be lost under the carelessness of humans. (这句话有点别扭,这样会不会好些?Compared to the printed books, the E-books  
unquestionably provide more space to carry information, on the premise that ...... )This is from my college teacher who kept his diaries and articles for 10 years on computer. However, he lost all he had within this 10 year in second due to his helper’s finger when fixed his computer. (英语这么表达的么?)That is really distressful for anyone. People can say that it saves space and can keep every detail in order by reading and writing on computer. But the traditional way is always safe and convenient. If young people read a lot through internet, it will affect their eyes and also bring headache. Therefore, the printed book is healthier.

In conclusion, there several new styles of books are also convenient but the virtue of the traditional printed books cannot be supplanted for its own characters.


总体感觉,论证不够充分,例子举得不太恰当哦。建议楼主举例子的时候自己想想能不能辩驳,如果漏洞太多还是不要用了。语言需要提高,太多中式英语了。多看些外国人写得文章,加油吧!!~~

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发表于 2008-12-21 14:08:10 |显示全部楼层

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Since the invention of papermaking and printing was developed in ancient China, it brought many changes and progress in keeping documentaries and histories. Although there are advanced methods such as e-book and reading on internet to record culture and human civilization, the traditional way of printed book will not be replaced in the next two decades for the following reasons.

Firstly, the convenience of printed books will still play a key role in writhing and keeping notes for the young generation in the classes. Presently, the quality of paper is developing fast from sort of heavy to recycling ones. And the less weight of printed books makes them more portable than before. Writing on paper, the traditional method of keeping notes and dairy are adopted by students, which is easy for them to write down the necessary points in the classes. Considering this, it happened that some colleges have lessons by screen, named e-class. ??这句想表达什么?But the students missed the opportunities to face to face with their professors and also cannot underline the parts they did not understand well.这里可以强调下,这些只是辅助工具,有作用,提高上课的效率,但只是辅助书本,如果丢了书本,就起了反作用再些下面这些 The new way of reading avoids people from carrying and opening books, while they also lost the enjoyment of writing something on their interests. That is the adequate?? 放在这里什么意思 the e-book cannot provide.

Secondly, the internet books have more space to keep more civilization and materials but those could be lost under the carelessness of humans. This is from my college teacher who kept his diaries and articles for 10 years on computer. However, he lost all he had within this 10 year in second due to his helper’s finger when fixed his computer. That is really distressful for anyone. People can say that it saves space and can keep every detail in order by reading and writing on computer. But the traditional way is always safe and convenient. If young people read a lot through internet, it will affect their eyes and also bring headache. Therefore, the printed book is more healthy ,

In conclusion, there several new styles of books are also convenient but the virtue of the traditional printed books cannot be supplanted for its own characters.


仅供参考:主要可以写一下,
1. 那些东西那么贵,20年内不是所有人都用得起的,因为那时应该还有人吃不到饭的
2. 书上的东西相对而言比较系统,全面,其它的都是辅助拉

加油哈!
         


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发表于 2008-12-21 19:41:26 |显示全部楼层
楼上都改的差不多啦...我列个提纲吧
Agree with the statement
虽然书本的历史很久远,但是有很多缺点,比如不方便查阅大量的资料,不方便携带
但是网络就可以,目前的技术已经趋于成熟,在不久的将来,基于无线通讯的网络时代
会到来,那个时候只要带一个笔记本之类的终端,就可以 随时随地查阅资料
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-903794-1-2.html这是“无音萧 ”的 本人觉得写得相当的好 值得学习啊

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