Issue244【0906G 文以载道三月四月作文小组】第一周第三作业 on curylynne

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Issue244
"Most societies do not take their greatest thinkers seriously, even when they claim to admire them." 很多社会并不重视思想家，即使社会宣称很景仰这些思想家。

Genius thinkers, who propose great ideas to promote the development of the society, play an important role. People always claim to admire the greatest thinkers and their achievement to the world, but, in action, they choose to ignore them. Many of citizens even do not know who the greatest thinkers are. Thus, we can't help to ponder why those greatest thinkers are always neglected since their achievements affect the society a lot.

（第一段如果有提出疑问的话最好简略的回答一下。而且我看不到作者的总观点。）

With more and more rapid life pace, most people are occupied everyday. They rush to get up, have meals, go to work, make a living and return home, like a spinning top. They are eager to support their family, raise children and purchase better houses and cars. However, the greatest thinker is totally different. No matter what society they are in, they all have high intelligence, wide-range of knowledge, predictive view to certain issue, durable hardworking and sometime even the eccentric temper. What they pursue is the dependent thinking and great achievement in study rather than money. This leads them to be isolated from the ordinary people.（可以在段首写中心句，这样可以更清楚这段的论点。）

Secondly, the idea of the greatest thinker always can not be accepted by most people, since it seems to be critical, special and violating the common moral. A proper example is about one of famous Chinese thinkers--Lu Xun who saw the people's numb to the traditional Chinese feudalism and revolution and(so as to) strongly expected to rescue them. He, thus, abandoned his study of medicine in Japanese(Japan) and turned to be an author to waken citizen in spirit by writing. His proposed lots of critical ideas but were not understood and accepted by common people in that society. The authority even tried to quell him.

(这里可以再写到当时社会政府对思想者思想的压制，比如先进的思想与政府的冲突等。)

Thirdly, with the changing of times and the variance of notions, some intellectuals who were respected in the ancient time are not admired by common people anymore. A case in this point is Confucius who is considered the greatest of the ancient Chinese sages. In the ancient time, many people prayed to be the apprentice of Confucius and to learn from him. His thoughts were scattered and became morality in the whole China. However, seldom people would mention Confucius and his thoughts nowadays, especially the young generation, although his ideas are still useful in the life.（作者的观点都是在说思想者的思想不被重视，比较绝对化，可以再写一个负向的观点。这样更严密一些。）

In sum, it’s a great tragedy that greatest thinkers are not taken seriously by most societies. They seem to be not understood properly by most people. The society should give them enough space to let their great thoughts glaring.

楼主语言运用能力十分流畅，基本功很扎实。运用例子也信手拈来，句子毛病我不太看得出，（真是不好意思哈！）只是在行为结构上根据新东方老师教我的一些东西供楼主参考一下。改得不好请见谅！PS：最好写一下提纲，呵呵。

[ 本帖最后由 curylynne 于 2009-1-19 01:16 编辑 ]