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发表于 2006-8-23 00:11:09
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Laws, body of official rules and regulation, found in legislation, constitution and jurisdiction are used to govern a society and control the member’s behavior.定义式开头,这个定义很牛 Obeying just law undoubtedly is the responsibility of every citizen, however, I deem that, just as the speaker says, disobeying and resist unjust laws is more important, which may facilitate the development of society. //这句话表明了你的论点,可是你只谈到了论文题目的后半部分,前半部分呢,我觉得应该提一句,简单的分法律为just and unjust是不对的.毕竟后面你会写到这个问题.
First of all, whether a law is just or unjust is determined by people’s personal interest and judging standard.//分论点 Different people may have their individual values which are influenced by their culture, faith, circumstance and so forth. Among all illustrations of this truth which might be cited, the abortion furnishes a cogent example. As we know, abortion is widely accepted in western countries such as American, England, and France etc as a common phenomenon of people’s daily life.//就我所知,abortion在美国也不是完全合法的,你可以去搜搜看 美国 堕胎,在不了解美国国情的情况下举例,不知道ETS的评分老师会怎么看待 Nevertheless, when comes to Arab countries which are mainly dominated by Islam, abortion may seem extremely illegal and evil in that they believe the mothers do not have the right to deprive the infants’ life according to their sacred religious faith. At the same time, more conflicts and crashes concerning value system may exist.//例子还是不错,但是如何写需要考虑
Although, different culture or value system may lead to different perspectives on just and unjust laws, the point that laws are the precondition of a stable and orderly society is undisputable.//法律的作用 Law serves a variety of functions. Law against crime, for example, help to maintain a peaceful, orderly, relatively stable society. Property and contract laws facilitate business activities and private planning. Laws limiting powers of government help to provide some degree of freedom that would not be possible.//表达上再考虑一下? In case there is no limitation of various laws, our circumstance and society will be in a chaos. The case of transportation law adds great weigh to this reasoning. Can you imagine what will be on the road and highways, if there is no law or regulation about speeding and driving direction? It is entirely possible that a car which is as high as 200 km/h crashes with a truck with 150 km/h in the same lane. Then the whole highway will be lost of control. //没有法律会如何 Therefore, every individual should comply with the laws so as to keep the society stable and harmony.//论证obey just laws
However, as Jefferson, former American president, said (and I paraphrase) “no society can make perpetual constitution, or even a perpetual law.” //这个引用我收了,嗯嗯 Many laws and rules are biased and fallacious, which predestined to be overturned. These laws to some extent will impede and inhibit the development of the society. Thus disobedience and resistance of the law is necessary and worthy.//分论点 Martin Luther king, the civil leader, He described himself as a “extremist” for American black’s fair, right and reverence. To break through the segregation, his endeavor greatly challenged the conventional law system in American and forced the authority to revise the laws which grant them the same civil rights consequently. Needless to say, the Afro-American would still have to sit in the back of the bus even today, if it were not for the endeavors against the unjust laws. Simply put, by the resisting the unjust laws, advocating the authorities to revise them, and finally granting all the people with just laws, people could live a more fair life than ever before.
In generation, since obeying laws not matter just or unjust precondition the stable and orderly society, disobeying and resisting the unjust laws to some extent is more vital for our society, facing unfair and oppression, for it will prompt and facilitate the development of our time. //结尾没3句话,构不成一段....
总结:
文章结构清晰,例证也比较丰满,没大问题
另外 我个人觉得适当做出让步 比如说抵制unjust laws的时候应该注意方式
这样或许更好. |
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