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d596086UID: 2522476

电视应该是 educate还是entertain?

When we open up the television, what we most expect to watch? Some people who after a whole day hard work are willing to find some entertainments for relaxing; others especially students prefer to seeking educational programs for learning. Between the two, it is hard to absolutely say whose choice is better. In other words, are we necessary to distinguish the different between education and entertainment in television program, and ultimately find out which is more valuables?

Being one of the greatest invents from last century, the television play an unsubstitutable role in people's life, which bring numerous happiness to every family by the way of offering recreational programs. As a best way to relax oneself and reduce one’s pressure from daywork, people can comfortably sit on soft sofa watching television. Those interesting programs, such as music art, alive concert of superstars, or other amused channels, can bring one a lot of joys and funs. As for me, nothing allows me feeling better than watching the comedic film with my family after supper. We can laugh together for the whole night! It is the television that changed our life more colorful.

Similarly, the television, a virtual window to the outside world, not merely brings us enjoyments but also gives us precious knowledge. If you are an oldman or oldwoman whose vision is not in good condition, you need not to read the small words in newspapers, because the everyday news in TV will show you a number of popular events, national and international, coving the entire world. What's more? If you are a Chinese student who is an English lover, and find school's class can not fulfill your satisfaction; fortunately, there are a wide variety of excellent English-study channels there waiting for you. One famous study from the Science of China has shown that the knowledge people get from watching television is four times more than one get from school.

Obviously, as for television programs, anything that can interest people and make them learn is a good one. To some extent, there is no completely educational or sportful television program existing. Since the amusement and education do not contradict to each other, why not put the two factors together? Take the Travelogue, a very popular English program in CCTV9 of China, as an instance. Like other travel programs, it takes you to see different areas all of China. Through which you can see wonderful and amazing landscape, and sometimes you can even find nameless kind of sceneries, challenging your horizon of knowledge in Chinese land. In addition, as for me, a Chinese student, it is as well an effective way enhancing my English level. All in all, we can get knowledge in entertained programs; meanwhile, we can also get enjoyment from educational ones.

[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-17 21:13 编辑 ]

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

When we open up the television, what we most expect to watch? Some people who after a whole day hard work are willing to find some entertainments for relaxing; others especially students prefer to seeking educational programs for learning. Between the two, it is hard to absolutely say whose choice is better. In other words, are we necessary to distinguish the different between education and entertainment in television program, and ultimately find out which is more valuables?

Being one of the greatest invents from last century, the television play an unsubstitutable role in people’s life, which bring numerous happiness to every family by the way of可以去掉，感觉更流畅 offering recreational programs. As a best way to relax oneself and reduce one’s pressure from daywork, people can comfortably sit on -> recline/curl up on; sit比较正式，懒散的靠在沙发上用这个可能更贴切 soft sofa watching television. Those interesting programs, such as music art, alive concert of superstars, or other amused 被逗笑的 channels, can bring one a lot of joys and funs. As for me, nothing allows me feeling better than watching the comedic film with my family after supper. We can laugh together for the whole night! It is the television that changed,感觉用made可能好点 our life more colorful.

Similarly, the television, a virtual window to the outside world, not merely brings us enjoyments but also gives us precious knowledge. If you are an oldman or oldwoman whose vision is not in good condition, you need not to read the small words in newspapers, because the everyday news in TV will show you a number of popular events, national and international, coving the entire world. What’s more? If you are a Chinese student who is an English lover, and find school’s class can not fulfill your satisfaction; fortunately, there are a wide variety of excellent English-study channels there waiting for you. One famous study from the Science of China has shown that the knowledge people get from watching television is four times more than one get from school.这个例子对不知道是为了支持哪个观点的，有点突兀。

Obviously, as for television programs, anything that can interest people and make them learn is a good one. To some extent, there is no completely educational or sportful television program existing. Since the amusement and education do not contradict to each other, why not put the two factors together? Take the Travelogue, a very popular English program in CCTV9 of China, as an instance. Like other travel programs, it takes you to see different areas all of China. Through which you can see wonderful and amazing landscape, and sometimes you can even find nameless kind of sceneries, challenging your horizon of knowledge in Chinese land. In addition, as for me, a Chinese student, it is as well an effective way enhancing my English level. All in all, we can get knowledge in entertained programs; meanwhile, we can also get enjoyment from educational ones.

d596086UID: 2522476

不会吧，倒数第二段例子当然是在说电视节目的教育价值啊？ 我写得是平衡观点啊，开头就表明了，怎么会不知道支持哪个呢？
BODY第一段是娱乐意义，第二段是教育意义，最后一段是说2者不矛盾，可以结合在一起

除了个别词外，能不能：
请从文章结构，同一性，连贯性方面给我点评价好么？谢谢啦

[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-17 21:11 编辑 ]

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

额，楼主的结构啥的已经很好了啊，所以只能挑挑小错误完善完善了

第二段最后因为有个对比，和前面例子的列举方式不一样，所以有点点突兀……个人看法

d596086UID: 2522476

哦，呵呵，不过好像oldman那个例子反而不好
总之谢谢你了