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发表于 2006-11-21 20:48:00 |显示全部楼层

issue88 "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."

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1 随着时间的推移,在社会传统方面,科技确实具有重大影响。

2 社会风俗和民族习惯的变化是受多种因素综合影响的。不单只有技术影响了它们。

3 在是非的观念面前科技受到严峻的考验。

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As the modern society today, it seems that technologies not only influence but also actually determine the social customs and ethics. Although scientific discoveries and technological advances have produced tremendous improvements in the quality of human life, they have often accepted serious test while facing to the different social customs and ethics as well.

The obvious importance of technology to social customs and ethics has led some sociologists to view technology as basic principle of social change. The classic statement of this view is that of William George Austin. Austin hypothesized that inventions affect the size of populations, which in turn influences the course of history. As the people did not familiar with some nature affects in the past, and even did not know how to explain such fluencies or earthquake facts. For example, overpopulation often leads to wars and migrations which result in some fatal illnesses during the process of extensive movements; because they consider that only escape from the place they live before can approach to the overpopulation problems and fatal illnesses. Technologies bring some medical methods to change people's thinking of these factors, and improvements in medical treatment equipments and medical treatment technique may help human beings acknowledge the real influence in long-term periods. Depending on technology to meet a wide and growing range of human beings.

Various changes of social customs and ethics not only effected by technologies but also limited by diversities comprehensive factors. Especially in some national cultures and environments around us. For instance, the Mid-Autumn Day has already remained an impression on people's mind in China. The purpose of this festival is that the whole family must get together to celebrate for family reunion. Even quick development of technologies has really change the way we live and work, every year of this time-- Mid-Autumn Day we should also eat moon-cake with families no matter how technologies influence our daily life. May be moon-cake as the food to eat when people hunger in the past time, but in the recently, moon-cake as our   

festival special features.

The right and wrong idea faces a rigorous test in front of technologies, social customs and ethics are hardly changed under the influence of technologies.  Right and wrong idea is the foundation of people's relationship, peoples existence in the world and the stability of the society. Such as engineering can be used to make many aspects of human life better, including saving lives. However, the idea of human cloning has fueled debates not just in the United States, but also with countries all over the world. I believe that it is not morally and ethically right to clone humans. Even though technology is constantly advancing, it is not reasonable to believe that human cloning is morally and ethnically correct, due to the killing of human embryos, the unsafe process of cloning, and the resulting consequences of having deformed clones.

The place of technology in modern societies is a subject of continuing controversy. Key issues include not only the impact of technology on daily life but also the need to control the development and uses of technological innovations so that they benefit all sectors of society including social customs and ethics.



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发表于 2006-11-22 09:37:24 |显示全部楼层
OTL,发完颜色都没了
我把DOC传附件了,ANGELA下载了看吧

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发表于 2006-11-22 12:54:44 |显示全部楼层

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好的~谢谢啦~!:)

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发表于 2006-11-22 20:01:37 |显示全部楼层

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As the modern society today, it seems that technologies not only influence but also actually determine the social customs and ethics. Although scientific discoveries and technological advances have produced tremendous improvements in the quality of human life, they have often accepted serious test(考验是吗,你说challenge咋样?) while facing to the different social customs and ethics as well.

The obvious importance of technology to social customs and ethics has led some sociologists to view technology as basic principle of social change. The classic statement of this view is that of William George Austin. Austin hypothesized that inventions affect the size of populations, which in turn influences the course of history(长了见识!). As the people did not familiar with some nature affects in the past, and even did not know how to explain such fluencies or earthquake facts(这句话的主句在哪里?). For example, overpopulation often leads to wars and migrations which result in some fatal illnesses during the process of extensive movements; because they consider that only escape from the place they live before can approach(做何解?) to the overpopulation problems and fatal illnesses. Technologies bring some medical methods to change people's thinking of these factors(为什么?), and improvements in medical treatment equipments and medical treatment technique may help human beings acknowledge the real influence in long-term periods(这句话我看着不是很顺,觉得有点绕口。大概明白你要表达的意思,建议最好再举例说明一下). Depending on technology to meet a wide and growing range of human beings.(这句只有从句吗,我怎么找不到主句?)

Various changes of social customs and ethics not only effected by technologies but also limited by diversities comprehensive factors. Especially in some national cultures and environments around us(怎么又是单独的一句?). For instance, the Mid-Autumn Day has already remained an impression on people's mind in China. The purpose of this festival is that the whole family must get together to celebrate for family reunion. Even quickrapid development of technologies has really changed the way we live and work, every year of this time-- Mid-Autumn Day we should also eat moon-cake with families no matter how technologies influence our daily life. May be moon-cake as the food to eat when people hunger in the past time, but in the recently, moon-cake as our festival special features.(这一段要说明的是,社会风俗和道德不仅收到技术的影响,同时也受到多种综合因素的制约。可是你的例子我没有看出来中秋节受到了哪些因素的制约?)

The right and wrong idea什么idea?具体指什么? faces a rigorous test in front of technologies, social customs and ethics are hardly changed under the influence of technologies.  Right and wrong idea is the foundation of people's relationship, people’s existence in the world and the stability of the society(为什么?). Such as engineering can be used to make many aspects of human life better, including saving lives(没明白). However, the idea of human cloning has fueled debates not just in the United States, but also with countries all over the world. I believe that it is not morally and ethically right to clone humans. Even though technology is constantly advancing, it is not reasonable to believe that human cloning is morally and ethnically correct, due to the killing of human embryos, the unsafe process of cloning, and the resulting consequences of having deformed clones.感觉这句的因果关系要好好的整理一下。特别是句子之间的连接词。读起来感觉不顺。

The place of technology in modern societies is a subject of continuing controversy. Key issues include not only the impact of technology on daily life but also the need to control the development and uses of technological innovations so that they benefit all sectors of society including social customs and ethics.(一般结尾段更多的是对全文的总结,我好像没有看出你对整篇文章的总结,说要让技术更好的为人类服务。可是标题是说技术不但决定而且影响社会风俗和道德。所以,感觉结尾有点弱。)

评价:
结构: 感觉还是很清晰,特别是第三点“在是非的观念面前科技受到严峻的考验。”值得我学习。我就没有想到这一点。

论证:总体感觉有点弱(对不起呀,说不对的请原谅,我自己水平有限),特别是第二段。

语言:也是我的弱点。我觉得你有点句子写得不太完整,有些地方读起来不顺。

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发表于 2006-11-23 22:31:24 |显示全部楼层
恩 谢谢修改~我会再仔细琢磨的:)

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