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Artists do creat initial value to their works. However permanent value of great artwork is usually beyond the works’ basic value. The critic, who appraise art works, will dig out deep valuable easthetics, far away from their initial worth.

Artist is the author to give aesthitic object to consumers, the behavior of who is the basic factor to the works’ lasting society value. The greatest Chinese educationist Confucius created the Analects, Leonardo de Venci made Mona Lisa, Kant had The Critique of Pure Reason and Shakespeare created his Hamlet. It could not be imagined that if there were no artist what situation would the persons have to face, as well as the worker ants working in the twelve-hour day time and sleeping in the other twelve-hour night time, without music, paiting and literature. Fortunately, it is an assumption. Via varieties of works artists transmit their thought to our world stimulating people in pursue of beauty, truth and mercy. In this aspect the artist give society something of lasting value.

Whereas it should be admitted that creation only means that there are many manufactories in the economic action, rather than perchase that consumers can buy what they want and desire without advertisement and prodution information, and what persons can do, if they want to buy, is to show around every manufactory, which is unpratically.

It is critic who promote the people’s comprehension of varieties of the artistic works. Abundance of information in the artists’ produtions is abstruse and profound beyond the readers’ appreciative ability. As is a case in the point: when the “Ippression, Sunrise” of the Monet was created innitially, few contempary appreciate its blue sunlight and was regarded as a faulty expression. Until many critic found out the soul of the works did the “Sunrise” eventually earn its reputation.Therefore, the critic is another contribution to the artistic works’ society lasting value, besides the artists. From the experts who study Vinci’s Mona Lisa, populace acknowledge the reason of Mona Lisa arresting smile, and are encouraged to fight for the liberature, fairness, democracy and others. From the mavin marstering the old Chinese languadge, the education theory on the Confucius’ Analects is dug out and used by the people living far 2000 years later from the time Confucius lived. What is more, the apinion of the critic benefit the artists’ creation. Many Chinese movies aborb the pracitical experience from the critic, and more and more films are praised in the American and Europion movie festival. Thus there is no doubt that critic is significant for the artistic works living for ever.

In the summarization, we can come to the conclusion that without artist there would exist no aesthistic works, which would also happen if there were only the artist. The critic is indispensive to the every marsterpiece of our time.

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原帖由 expire7 于 2006-7-13 00:24 发表
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怎么说?不太明白

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同题144

Artists do creat [create] initial value to their works. However permanent value of great artwork is usually beyond the works’ basic value. The critic, who appraise [appraises] art works, will dig out deep valuable easthetics [aesthetics], far away from their initial worth.

Artist [如果不用复数就得加冠词，什么都没有的用法是没有的吧，你到Google上搜一下，都是有冠词的] is the author to give aesthitic [aesthetic] object [objects] to consumers, the behavior of who [whose] is the basic factor to the works’ lasting society value. The greatest Chinese educationist Confucius created the Analects, Leonardo de Venci [Vinci大师的名字不能拼错啊] made Mona Lisa, Kant had The Critique of Pure Reason and Shakespeare created his Hamlet. It could not be imagined that if there were no artist [artists] what situation would the persons have to face, as well as the worker ants working in the twelve-hour day time and sleeping in the other twelve-hour night time, without music, paiting[painting] and literature. Fortunately, it is an assumption. Via varieties of [a variety of] works artists transmit their thought to our world stimulating people in pursue [pursuing] of beauty, truth and mercy. In this aspect the artist give society something of lasting value.

Whereas it should be admitted that creation only means that there are many manufactories in the economic action, rather than perchase [purchase?] that consumers can buy what they want and desire without advertisement and prodution [production] information, and what persons can do, if they want to buy, is to show around every manufactory, which is unpratically [unpractical?].[这段要说什么呢？没有很明确的主题句啊，我也不是很懂]

It is critic[critics] who promote the people’s comprehension of varieties of the artistic works[art works 就行了]. Abundance [A great many] of information in the artists’ produtions[productions] is abstruse and profound beyond the readers’ appreciative ability. As is a case in the point: when the “Ippression [Impression], Sunrise” of the Monet was created innitially [initially], few contempary [contemporaries] appreciate its blue sunlight and was regarded as a faulty expression. Until many critic [critics] found out the soul of the works did the “Sunrise” eventually earn [earning] its reputation. Therefore, the critic is another contribution to the artistic works’ society lasting value, besides the artists. From the experts who study Vinci’s [还是写全名好] Mona Lisa, populace acknowledge the reason of Mona Lisa arresting smile, and are encouraged to fight for the liberature [??], fairness, democracy and others. From the mavin marstering[mastering??] the old Chinese languadge [language], the education theory on the Confucius’ Analects is dug out and used by the people living far 2000 years later from the time Confucius lived. What is more, the apinion [opinion?] of the critic benefit the artists’ creation. Many Chinese movies aborb [absorb] the pracitical [practical] experience from the critic, and more and more films are praised in the American and Europion [European] movie festival. Thus there is no doubt that critic is significant for the artistic works living for ever.[关于中国的例子不是很受用，尤其是后一个]

In the summarization, we can come to the conclusion that without artist there would exist no aesthistic [aesthetic] works, which would also happen if there were only the artist. The critic is indispensive [indispensable] to the every marster [master] piece of our time.


说一说啊：
写完的文章没有放到word里看吧？有好几处拼写错误...
除了第二个论点外，例子和论证都比较充实，第二个论点我没弄太明白...
语言还有待进步，加油吧：）

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原帖由 winnie_nn 于 2006-7-13 16:39 发表
同题144

Artists do creat  initial value to their works. However permanent value of great artwork is usually beyond the works’ basic value. The critic, who appraise  art works, will dig out deep ...

谢谢你的修改.特别是词的拼写错了很多.中间你说不太理解的那一段,我本来是想做过渡,从艺术家重要,过渡到说写批评词很重要.但是没写好.