【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】---ammyana12.7作业

ammyanaUID: 2529083

Overall,I disagree with the statement expressed.

Money is definitely a part of stimulus spurs people to work,but what work can provides us with much more than what the money we earn.As far as I am concerned,we can discover a wealth of reasons responsible for people's rejection to go to work,in stead of focusing on the money matters.

On one hand,the purpose that people go to work is not only for money,but for something of spiritual significance as well.First,work provides us the chance to get to know others.I never maintain suspecious about the fact that human beings are social animals in spite of people’s indipendent trend,hence enjoying the experience of getting into a certain working team can still shed light on people’s wotking motivation.Someone even interprets the word "team" to be "together everyone achieves more".There is no doubt that the get-together experience based on working places.As a result,people's emotion can be affected by the working environment.In addition,work is a way to pursue one's sense of achievement.Living in a relatively competetive environment,the comparison with others who earns more will be an impetus driving a person to go to work and overcome your fear of being weaker than others.

On the other hand,the reason taht some people do not go to work may be the current fierce competetion,nature to be lazy ,or working pressure,rather than the intention to escape from being bothered by the misfortune brought by money.Modern society is truely an intensive environment,which lead people to work day and night to earn themselves a promising future and a  more comfortable material enjoyment.Thus the desire to drop out of the surrival stress maybe an overriding factor account for people's reluctance to work..

To sum up,someone may remind me the old saying"all sins originate from the disire to money".But in a more general sense,nobody would deny the affluent life with a lot of money,hence I insist that money does not account for the rejection to work,for job provides us not only money but self-esteem and sense of satisfaction.To be more realistic we need more persuasive reasons to explain such a comlex social issue.

闹闹喵UID: 2500331

Overall,I disagree with the statement expressed.(呃……从后文来看作者似乎是认同题目观点的吧？题目想表达的是因为有钱就不工作的人是不会快乐的)

Money is definitely a part of stimulus that spurs people to work,but what work can provides us with much more than what the money we earn.As far as I am concerned,we can discover a wealth of reasons responsible for people's rejection to go to work,in stead of focusing on the money matters.

On one hand,the purpose that people go to work is not only for money,but for something of spiritual significance as well.First,work provides us the chance to get to know others.I never maintain suspecious about the fact that human beings are social animals in spite of people’s indipendent trend,hence enjoying the experience of getting into a certain working team can still shed light on people’s wotking motivation.Someone even interprets the word "team" to be "together everyone achieves more".There is no doubt that the get-together experience based on working places.As a result,people's emotion can be affected by the working environment.(前面的论述有很大的漏洞，LZ给人的意思是只有通过working 人们才能get together to share something, 但是实际上还有很多俱乐部、沙龙、聚会什么的，通过那些人们一样能够share, 这里的分析并没有点到work的实质上。)In addition,work is a way to pursue one's sense of achievement.Living in a relatively competetive environment,the comparison with others who earns more will be an impetus driving a person to go to work and overcome your fear of being weaker than others

On the other hand,the reason taht（that） some people do not go to work may be the current fierce competetion,nature to be lazy ,or working pressure,rather than the intention to escape from being bothered by the misfortune brought by money.Modern society is truely an intensive environment,which lead people to work day and night to earn themselves a promising future and a  more comfortable material enjoyment.Thus the desire to drop out of the surrival stress maybe an overriding factor account for people's reluctance to work.

To sum up,someone may remind me the old saying"all sins originate from the disire to money".But in a more general sense,nobody would deny the affluent life with a lot of money,hence I insist that money does not account for the rejection to work,for job provides us not only money but self-esteem and sense of satisfaction.To be more realistic we need more persuasive reasons to explain such a comlex social issue.

感觉这篇文章有点偏题了，题目是要讨论有钱而不工作的人是否快了，而作者更多的是在讨论有钱了是否就不需要工作了。 当然只是在下一点拙见

泡面UID: 2513568

Overall,  (一上来就这句，难免有点太唐突了) I disagree with the statement expressed.

Money is definitely a part of stimulus spurs people to work, but what work can provides us with much more than what （that,这句有点别扭，有点不大明白） the money we earn. As far as I am concerned, we can discover a wealth of  （a wealth of 用于形容不可数名词） reasons responsible for people's rejection to go to work, in stead of focusing on the money matters.(不太明白要表达的意思)（这一整段似乎不太切题）
On one hand, the purpose that people go to work is not only for money, but for something of spiritual significance as well. First, work provides us the chance to get to know others. I never maintain suspicious about the fact that human beings are social animals in spite of people’s independent trend,  hence enjoying  （enjoy）the experience of getting into a certain working team can still shed light on people’s working motivation. Someone even interprets the word "team" to be "together everyone achieves more". There is no doubt that the get-together experience based on working places. As a result, people's emotion can be affected by the working environment. In addition, work is a way to pursue one's sense of achievement. Living in a relatively competitive environment, the comparison with others who earns more will be an impetus driving a person to go to work and overcome your fear of being weaker than others.|留学|签证Z)

On the other hand, the reason taht  (that) some people do not go to work may be the current fierce competition, nature to be lazy ,or working pressure, rather than the intention to escape from being bothered by the misfortune brought by money. Modern society is truely  (truly) an intensive environment, which lead (leads) people to work day and night to earn themselves a promising future and a  more comfortable material enjoyment. Thus the desire to drop out of the surrival  (survival) stress maybe an overriding factor account for people's reluctance to work..
To sum up, someone may remind me the old saying"all sins originate from the desire  (desire) to money". But in a more general sense ,nobody would deny the affluent life with a lot of money, hence I insist that money does not account for the rejection to work, for job provides us not only money but self-esteem and sense of satisfaction. To be more realistic we need more persuasive reasons to explain such a comlex (complex) social issue.

1,开头写的不够，应该再充实一下
2，第二段似乎没什么关系
3，缺少例证，虽然字数足矣，但是最好举些例子
4，下次请楼主贴作文的时候先用word把最基本的标点和单词拼写更正了

xiaojing1115UID: 2578357

麻烦帮我批作业，7号的，已经过时了哦