issue51 [07-10G Superstar]第一次作业by Total

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As there was an old saying given by the greatest and sensible oracle of ancient China—Confucius, “To teach a person according to his quality and gift.” Undoubtedly, each student has his or her own character and interest, in which case, it is important to find a particular way and series of courses to provide for each student. I fundamentally agree with the speakers assertion that the most effective education is to provide individual-interested courses to different students on the condition that certain courses must be taken.

There is no doubt that every student no matter how clever or how adapted he is in some special area, it is necessary and compulsory for him to obtain some basic knowledge which is useful and important in one’s growth and development, including science of fundamental mathematics, algebra, language, biology, geography and so forth. A student without these common conscience will hardly get comprehensive development and actual success. Some experience of the genius showing astonishing gift in some area or subject lends supportive evidence on this. There are many very excellent and clever children who have the higher level of intellect and interest in some science such as math, physics and arts, enter a higher degree of education such as college and university at a young age. However, having the sufficient ability in the academic area, these children lacks adequate properties of emotion quality, the factor that we called EQ, and consequently can’t deal well with the personal affairs and often feel confused when they communicate with their classmates, which reflect a deficiency of the narrow education only cultivate students according to their interests and gifts.

If a student have received basic and elementary knowledge and education that one should take, it is a good choice to give him or her a student-centered education, for it proves more effective that teacher-center education to inspire the student’s interest to study and increase their ability.
No one can get progress and success if he has no interest about the knowledge he learns. As the number of students today are expansive and it is difficult for a teacher to know enough about every student’s interest and gift of the class, there are many disadvantages of the teacher-centered education. If a teacher misunderstand a student’s interest and thought, it might even cause a destruction to a talent. For example, the most famous inventor—Thomas Edison, who brought light to human beings, was regarded as a most foolish and awkward student when he went to school. The teacher couldn’t understand the numerous curiosities from this tiny boy, and asserted that he was too fool. Nevertheless, the sensible teacher, who also give Edison’s life, his mother, knew the real quality of his son and took him out of school cultivating him in a special way offering him sufficient room to conceive imagination and work out experiment, which led the most greatest inventor who resulted in many big progress of the human society later. Therefore, it is very important to educate students considering their qualities and desires.

In modern society, this theory plays an important role in education. As there are full of fierce competitions in the current society, the experts and special skilled talents are in dramatically demands. What’s more, there are so many methods that one can get success not only depending a common traditional way. A reform of education ways in my school when I was a junior middle school student proved to be success to cultivate students in different ways. The president suggested that all students should be developed and educated according to their gifts and qualities and only conforming the stable procedure to go to a senior high school and then a college or university. By this means, many of my classmates who were not good at study found the most proper way suitable themselves and achieve an success. Thus, the student-centered education can change one’s life and offer much more opportunities to success in various ways.

However, when giving the student-centered education, the teachers should keep a sensible oversee to avoid excessive such education, which would results unbalanced development or malformed character in students.

As I have mentioned above, the student-centered education is very important to offer more qualified talents to the society in the premise of carrying it in a proper way. Moreover, some indispensible courses and knowledge shouldn’t be neglected and cancelled at the same time.

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As there was an old saying given by the greatest and sensible oracle of ancient China—Confucius, “To teach[Teach] a person according to his[his/her] quality and gift.” [引用的话可能放在最前面更好些]Undoubtedly, each student has his or her own character and interest, in which case, [不要逗号或许更连贯些]it is important to find[get, find 作course的动词不合适] a particular way and series of courses to provide for each student. I fundamentally agree with the speakers assertion that the most effective education [句子好像有问题，most 不恰当，题目里说的是only]is to provide individual-interested courses to different students on the condition that certain[necessary] courses must[have been ] be taken.
[中间一句和最后一句缺少联系，应该有因果连词]
There is no doubt that every[one] student no matter how clever or how adapted[不知道adaptive 合不合适？] he is in some special area, it is necessary and compulsory[这个词不合适，不过也没想出合时的] for him to obtain some basic knowledge which is useful and important in[to] one’s growth and development, including science of fundamental mathematics, algebra, language, biology, geography and so forth.[这句结构有问题，including 有点唐突，不如改成这样 knowledge useful。。。 ，which including。。。] A student without these common conscience will hardly get comprehensive development and actual success. Some experience[examples] of the genius showing astonishing gift in some area[areas] or subject[subjects] lends[lend] supportive evidence on[to] this. There are many very excellent and clever children who have the[a] higher level of intellect and interest in some science such as math, physics and arts, enter a higher degree of education such as college and university at a young age. However, having the sufficient ability in the academic area, these children lacks adequate properties of emotion quality, the factor that we called EQ[ =Educational Quotient], and consequently[they] can’t deal well with the personal affairs and often feel confused when they communicate with their classmates, which reflect a deficiency of the narrow education [which]only cultivate students according to their interests and gifts.
      If a student have received basic and elementary knowledge and education that one should take, it is a good choice to give him or her a student-centered education, for it proves more effective that teacher-center education to inspire the student’s interest to study and increase their ability.[普遍的学习或针对的学习是在同一时间内进行的，怎么能分先后呢？]
No one can get progress and success if he has no interest about[in] the knowledge he learns. As the number of students today are expansive and it is difficult for a teacher to know enough about every student’s interest and gift of the class, [这个情况不是正好可以做为反对个性教学的原因吗？] there are many disadvantages of the teacher-centered education. If a teacher misunderstand a student’s interest and thought, it might even cause a destruction to a talent. [既然存在这种情况，那怎么保证按每个人的兴趣来教育会成功呢？]For example, the most famous inventor—Thomas Edison, who brought light to human beings, was regarded as a most foolish and awkward student when he went to school. The teacher couldn’t understand the numerous curiosities from this tiny boy, and asserted that he was too fool. Nevertheless, the sensible teacher, who also give Edison’s life, his mother, knew the real quality of his son and took him out of school cultivating him in a special way offering him sufficient room to conceive imagination and work out experiment, which led the most greatest inventor who resulted in many big progress of the human society later. Therefore, it is very important to educate students considering their qualities and desires.
In modern society, this theory [指代的不很清楚，容易误解]plays an important role in education. As there are full of fierce competitions in the current society, the experts and special skilled talents are in dramatically demands. [这句话没有例子来支持，和后面一句的联系也不合理，很孤立，我觉得如果和下面一句建立成因果联系会更好]What’s more, there are so many methods that one can get success not only depending a common traditional way. A reform of education ways in my school when I was a junior middle school student proved to be success to cultivate students in different ways. The president suggested that all students should be developed and educated [develop and be educated]according to their gifts and qualities and[but not ] only conforming the stable procedure to go to a [a 去掉]senior high school and then a college or university. By this means, many of my classmates who were not good at study found the most proper way suitable themselves and achieve an success. Thus, the student-centered education can change one’s life and offer much more opportunities to success in various ways.
[这两段的分析角度好像差不多，如果这样的话就有点缺乏说服力了]
However, when giving the student-centered education, the teachers should keep a sensible oversee to avoid excessive such education, which would results unbalanced development or malformed character in students.[这段的内容和第二段的重复了，不如把第二段放在这里]
As I have mentioned above, the student-centered education is very important to offer more qualified talents to the society in the premise of carrying it in a proper way. Moreover, some indispensible courses and knowledge shouldn’t be neglected and cancelled at the same time.
看的出来，你是大正小负的态度，既然这样的话，小负放在大正后面的话会好一些。对大正的论证似乎缺乏说服力，不过例子很合适。语法的错误多了一些，或许是写的太快的缘故，其实六百足以。加油！

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