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题目：ISSUE 154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."

字数：522          用时：1:19:19          日期：2007-6-9

Education is a system of training and instruction of children and young people to help them acquire knowledge and ability and the development of personality and mental power. In this education system, not only professional educators but also parents and communities must be taken part in. I will discuss it in turn.

The family places a crucial role in children’s education. When one borns to the word, at his/her first glance, who is the first person he/she can remember is their parents; what are first words he/she can speak are Mama. Therefore, children learn something first from their parents. Additionally, for one person's life, the time he/she spends on school is much shorter than in family. What things are the parents do? How do the parents do? Why do they do like that? These all influence on children and attribute to the children’s development of EQ. In our history, the reasons that many great peoples make great achievements to a large extent due to the impact of their family. For example, Mare Criue, Poland-born scientist, is a greatest woman who won Nobel Prize twice. Her elder daughter, Irene Joliot-Criue, was deeply influenced by her, who learned the scientific attitudes from Mary. And because of Mary's research, when Irene Joliot was young she could touch the scientific world. Due to the family’s scientific atmosphere, Irene Joliot was interested in science, finally achieved success and also won the Nobel Prize.

When children grow older, they study in school, and teachers who are a group of professional educators is very important for them to develop IQ. Teachers have the responsibility to help children acquire knowledge. That is the elementary purpose of education. After children learn some basic knowledge, teachers will train them learning methods-how to learn. Furthermore, the final purpose of education is to make the children grow to a real man who can survive in the world by their knowledge, and they can work on the world. Some of them finally become the heroes of our word, and make great attributions to the whole world.

Last but not least, communities also influence on people's development. Actually, any person is a member of our society. During our childhood, we communicate with our friends and influence by them and also influence them. Young people first work in our society may learn many things from society which cannot learn from school and family. At that time, without good example, young peoples still go to the bad end. Thus the communities such as colleagues and business partners must be involved in our educations. Moreover, one educational experts proposed a new concept of that society can develop young peoples' MQ- moral quotation.

To sum up, family, professional educators and society are all important factors to children and young peoples' education. Thus, I cannot agree with that, as the statement said, education only a group of professional educators' duty and we can leave it solely to them. Our society’s future and development depend on young people and children. How to educate them well is crucial for whole society. Therefore, parents, teachers and communities should take responsibility for education at once.

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ISSUE 154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
字数：522          用时：1:19:19          日期：2007-6-9
Education is a system of training and instruction of children and young people to help them acquire knowledge and ability and the development of personality and mental power. In this education system, not only professional educators but also parents and communities must be taken part in. I will discuss it in turn. 典型废话，以后一定不要类似的句子出现。
The family places a crucial role in children’s education. When one borns is born to the word删, at his/her first glance, who is 删 the first person he/she can remember is their parents; what are first words he/she can speak are Mama. 这两句太明显的语法错，自己改Therefore, children learn something first from their parents. Additionally, for one person's life, the time he/she spends on school is much shorter than in family. What things are the parents do? How do the parents do? Why do they do like that? These all influence on children and attribute to the children’s development of EQ.不要随便用缩写，起码第一次写全。 In our history, the reasons that many great peoples make great achievements to a large extent due to the impact of their family. For example, Mare Criue, Poland-born scientist, is a greatest woman who won Nobel Prize twice. Her elder daughter, Irene Joliot-Criue, was deeply influenced by her, who learned the scientific attitudes from Mary. And because of Mary's research, when Irene Joliot was young she could touch the scientific world. Due to the family’s scientific atmosphere, Irene Joliot was interested in science, finally achieved success and also won the Nobel Prize.
When children grow older, they study in school, and teachers who are a group of professional educators is very important for them to develop IQ. Teachers have the responsibility to help children acquire knowledge. That is the elementary purpose of education. After children learn some basic knowledge, teachers will train them learning methods-how to learn. Furthermore, the final purpose of education is to make the children grow to a real man who can survive in the world by their knowledge, and they can work on the world. Some of them finally become the heroes of our word, and make great attributions to the whole world.
Last but not least, communities also influence on people's development. Actually, any person is a member of our society. During our childhood, we communicate with our friends and influence by them and also influence them. Young people first work in our society may learn many things from society which cannot learn from school and family. At that time, without good example, young peoples still go to the bad end. Thus the communities such as colleagues and business partners must be involved in our educations. Moreover, one educational experts proposed a new concept of that society can develop young peoples' MQ- moral quotation.
To sum up, family, professional educators and society are all important factors to children and young peoples' education. Thus, I cannot agree with that, as the statement said, education only a group of professional educators' duty and we can leave it solely to them. Our society’s future and development depend on young people and children. How to educate them well is crucial for whole society. Therefore, parents, teachers and communities should take responsibility for education at once.

论证比较肤浅，每段TS句式没有复杂变化，思想深度缺乏，不够提纲挈领，给你看点TS应该怎么写

A.        parents hold the ultimately legal authority to make key decisions about what and how their own children learn—including choice of curriculum and text books, pace and schedule for learning, and the extent to which their child should learn alongside other children.
B. Only a parent can truly know the unique needs of a child—including what educational choices are best suited for the child.
C. Parents are more motivated—by pride and ego—than any other person to take whatever measures are needed to ensure their children receive the best possible education.
D. With the communities' participation, local schools wilt do better in instructing the children, especially in the respect of moral instruction. SX-h I disagree with the speaker's assertion. A compelling argument can be made that, except for major decisions such as choice of school, a child's education is best left to professional educators.
a) In a perfect world, parents would always make their children's education one of their highest priorities. Yet, in fact many parents do not.
b) Parents are not necessarily best equipped to know what is best for their children when it comes to education.
c) Parents are too subjective to always know what is truly best for their children. They may try to overcome their own shortcomings and failed self-expectations through their children's accomplishments and other decision detrimental to children's development.
d) too many parties become involved in making decision about day-to-day instruction, the school education would be interfered and intervened.
开头跟TS很重要，批卷子老师看什么？就看关键部分，然后其他部分很快的扫过，只要不出现太明显的错误就差不多，就这么几个关键点，不下功夫写的顺手是拿不到高分的
怎么写成这样的TS？多看多想，平时还要找些AW喜欢设计的话题类文章来背背，不要求背过，要求熟悉对英语的感觉
另外，有些基本问题，比如语法，前面错的太明显了哈，不认真阿，比如缩写，AW是正式文体，不可以随便出现缩写，即使出现，第一个也要写全，后面可以指代。

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