ISSUE144 艺术家 VS 评论家， 求互拍！

G10T5UID: 2101393

144, ‘It is the artist, not the critic,’ who gives society something of  lasting value. A person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

1。不应该忽视评论家的贡献
2。艺术家创造的作品是持久的，并且是延续价值的主要方式
3。现在作品太多，评论家帮助我们进行分类选择
4。评论家帮助我们理解作品
5。总结，正是艺术家和评论家的合作才创造，保持，传播价值

The artist creates art like novels, films, music, paintings and so force, and the critic evaluates them. Whose contributions are more significant? The speaker claims that the artist's contributions are greater and it is them who give society something of lasting value. I fundamentally agree insofar as the artist serves as the creator of works of art. Nonetheless, the role of the critic is also indispensable and his contributions should not be simply neglected.

When we discuss who give society something of lasting value, we should firstly propose a clear definition about the lasting value. Does the lasting value mean the value which can be inherited and will spread from one generation to another? If the answer is positive, it is definitely the artist who should be honored as the creator of the lasting value, just because novels, films, music and paintings are all created by them and these works seem to be perpetual and the main way to impart and inherit our value. Just imagine that you are reading a novel about a hero. What can you learn from the novel? Whether the novel has changed some of your belief and ideal? From the hero, the nature and the signification of life are revealed which tell us that the ultimate goal of a human being lived in the world is not to pursue comfortable and material living but to make the world more beautiful. The ambition to change the world, the braveness to challenge evil and the preparation to sacrifice are all characters of a hero described in the novel, and these characters have been categorized into lasting value. Through reading this novel, we are acquainted with some parts of lasting value. In fact, this process is the very way to preserve and spread lasting value.

However, the critic has his own contributions especially in nowadays information exploding era. Though values are preserved and spread by works of art, its function would fail when too much information is available. To avoid be immersed by that huge information, we cannot afford to read all works and so judging which one deserves our precious time and energy is important. Unfortunately, this task has been beyond common people's ability; moreover, leaving this task to every individual is also inefficient. A more efficient and practical way is to depend on our critic who will evaluates works for us. The critic scans a lot of works and put them into corresponding categories. Take films for instance. The critic divides all of them into separate kinds, such as comedy, action, horror, family, science fiction and so on. Different kinds of films reflect different parts of lasting value. Then we can refer to comedy films when we want to relax and enjoy humor, action films meet our needs if the appreciation of heroism is our aim, horror films can provide us adventure, family films will reveals the nature of love, and science fiction films stimulate our curiosity and honor the exploration of unknown area. Thanks to the critic, we are released from the puzzlement of choosing when we face too many films.

Moreover, except for the work of categorizing, by publishing their judgments and perspectives the critic also assists us to better understand the values lying behind the works of art. From their professional standpoints, they point out the motivation of the works, provide some background knowledge, clarify the values presented in the works, and even commend some further materials. Indeed, a lot of works relate to particular cultures or experiences which are essential to our comprehensive and profound understanding. For example, without knowing the faithful love between Liang Shanbo and Zhu yingtai, you cannot really appreciate the plangent rhythm of Hua Die, a famous Chinese traditional music, and the aspiration for free love; without knowing the miserable and unbending life of Beethoven, you cannot really appreciate the heroic style of his Symphony No. 5 in C Minor and the struggle spirit to fate.

In sum, while the artist creates art, the critic helps us to choose and understand art. So it is hasty to claim that it is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. Indeed, it is the cooperation between the artist and the critic that gives, maintains and spreads lasting value.

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The speaker claims that the artist's contributions are greater and it is they who give society something of lasting value. I fundamentally agree insofar as the artist serves as the creator of artworks. Nonetheless, the role of the critic is also indispensable and his contributions should not be simply neglected.

Undoubtedly, it is the artist who should be honored as the creator of the lasting value, just because novels, films, music and paintings are all created by them and these works seem to be perpetual and the main way to impart and inherit our value. The Declaration of Independence, drafted by Jefferson Thomas, handed down the aspiration of equality and democracy from one generation to another; Forrest Gump, a famous film directed by Robert Zemeckis, highly honored personal struggle; The March of Brave Volunteers, Chinese national anthem composed by Tian Han, inspired numerous Chinese people to revolt against aggressor; and it is just Picasso's Guernica that continuously reminded people with the agonies and atrocities of war and preciousness of peace. All these examples illustrate the point that the artist creates artworks and artworks in turn create lasting value.

However, especially in these days, when numerous artworks are continuously created, the critic is necessary in order to allow common people to efficiently and properly assimilate mass of information available to us. Though values are preserved and spread by artworks, its function would fail when too much information is available. To avoid being immersed, we cannot afford to read all works. But at times, common people lack ability to choose appropriate artworks they really need; moreover, leaving this task to individual is also inefficient. A more practical and efficient way is to depend on our critic. On the one hand, the critic scans a lot of works and put them into corresponding categories. As a result, our choice has been narrowed to a certain category which is easier. On the other hand, the critic evaluates and sensors artworks as a filter. Just like excellent artworks benefit lasting value, artworks full of violence or religious craze are definitely damaging to it. So under the critic’s effort, true lasting value is protected.

Moreover, the critic also assists us to better understand the values lying behind the artworks. From their professional standpoints, they point out the motivation of the works, provide some background knowledge and clarify the values presented in the works. Indeed, a comprehensive and profound understanding calls for knowledge about particular cultures or experiences involved in works. For example, without knowing the faithful love between Romeo and Juliet, one cannot really appreciate the plangent rhythm of the tragedy of Shakespeare and the aspiration for free love; without knowing the miserable and unbending life of Beethoven, one cannot really appreciate the heroic style of Hero Symphony and the struggle spirit to fate.

In sum, without the artist, lasting value lacks carrier and then cannot be presented and disseminated. Without the critic, common people trend to lose in the ocean of artworks and cannot efficiently and properly learn lasting value. Thus, while we need the artist to create lasting value, the critic is equally important.

[ Last edited by G10T5 on 2005-7-14 at 21:50 ]

leo1001UID: 185894

144, ‘It is the artist, not the critic,’ who gives society something of  lasting value. A person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

1。不应该忽视评论家的贡献
2。艺术家创造的作品是持久的，并且是延续价值的主要方式
3。现在作品太多，评论家帮助我们进行分类选择
4。评论家帮助我们理解作品
5。总结，正是艺术家和评论家的合作才创造，保持，传播价值
The artist creates art like novels, films, music, paintings and so force, and the critic evaluates them. Whose contributions are more significant? The speaker claims that the artist's contributions are greater and it is them (they,强调的是主语) who give society something of lasting value. I fundamentally agree insofar as the artist serves as the creator of works of art. Nonetheless, the role of the critic is also indispensable and his contributions should not be simply neglected.

When we discuss who give society something of lasting value, we should firstly propose a clear definition about the lasting value. Does the lasting value mean the value which can be inherited and will spread from one generation to another? If the answer is positive, it is definitely the artist who should be honored as the creator of the lasting value, just because novels, films, music and paintings are all created by them and these works seem to be perpetual and the main way to impart and inherit our value. Just imagine that you are reading a novel about a hero. What can you learn from the novel?( What can you learn from the novel when reading a novel? 有点罗嗦 )Whether the novel has changed some of your belief and ideal? (应该用复数吧)From the hero, the nature and the signification of life are revealed which tell us that the ultimate goal of a human being(好象很少用单数) lived in the world is not to pursue comfortable and material living but to make the world more beautiful.(我觉得用better更好一些, 虽然简单) The ambition to change the world, the braveness to challenge evil and the preparation to sacrifice are all characters of a hero described in the novel, and these characters have been categorized into lasting value. Through reading this novel, we are acquainted with some parts of lasting value. In fact, this process is the very way to preserve and spread lasting value.

However, the critic has his own contributions especially in nowadays information exploding era. Though values are preserved and spread by works of art, its function would fail when too much information is available. To avoid be(being) immersed by that huge information, we cannot afford to read all works and so judging(judge) which one deserves our precious time and energy is important.(是宾语从句吧,我没读懂啊) Unfortunately, this task has been beyond common people's ability; moreover, leaving this task to every individual is also inefficient. A more efficient and practical way is to depend on our critic who will evaluates(evaluate)works for us. The critic scans a lot of works and put them into corresponding categories. Take films for instance.(逗号, 后边的小写) The critic divides all of them into separate kinds, such as comedy, action, horror, family, science fiction and so on. Different kinds of films reflect different parts of lasting value. Then we can refer to comedy films when we want to relax and enjoy humor, action films meet our needs if the appreciation of heroism is our aim, horror films can provide us adventure, family films will reveals the nature of love, and science fiction films stimulate our curiosity and honor the exploration of unknown area.(这句话用独立主格更简洁) Thanks to the critic, we are released from the puzzlement of choosing when we face too many films. (facing too many films)

Moreover, except for the work of categorizing, by publishing their judgments and perspectives the critic also assists us to better understand the values lying behind the works of art. From their professional standpoints, they point out the motivation of the works, provide some background knowledge, clarify the values presented in the works, and even commend some further materials. Indeed, a lot of works relate to(很少这样用吧, 用there be …relation…更好一些吧)particular cultures or experiences which are essential to our comprehensive and profound understanding. For example, without knowing the faithful love between Liang Shanbo and Zhu yingtai,(用 Romeo and Juliet,外国人更能接受一些) you cannot really appreciate the plangent rhythm of Hua Die, a famous Chinese traditional music, and the aspiration for free love; without knowing the miserable and unbending life of Beethoven, you cannot really appreciate the heroic style of his Symphony No. 5 in C Minor and the struggle spirit to fate.

In sum, while the artist creates art, the critic helps us to choose and understand art. So it is hasty to claim that it is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. Indeed, it is the cooperation between the artist and the critic that gives, maintains and spreads lasting value.
我觉得你的文章最大的优点就是层次分明,但语言还应简洁,例子最好让老外容易接受点吧,加油!

G10T5UID: 2101393

谢谢。

1. and so judging(judge) which one deserves our precious time and energy is important.(是宾语从句吧,我没读懂啊)
judging which one deserves our precious time and energy 做主语
判断那个文学作品值得我们花费宝贵的时间和精力是很重要的

2. Take films for instance.(逗号, 后边的小写)
这是一个完整的句子

3. 我也觉得梁祝的例子很ft哪，但苦于没有想到替代品。谢谢

cssUID: 173612

ISSUE144 艺术家 VS 评论家， 求互拍！

144, ‘It is the artist, not the critic,’ who gives society something of  lasting value. A person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

1。不应该忽视评论家的贡献
2。艺术家创造的作品是持久的，并且是延续价值的主要方式
3。现在作品太多，评论家帮助我们进行分类选择
4。评论家帮助我们理解作品
5。总结，正是艺术家和评论家的合作才创造，保持，传播价值

The artist creates art like novels, films, music, paintings and so force,好像应该写so forth and the critic evaluates them 这句话好像有点流水账. Whose contributions are more significant? The speaker claims that the artist's contributions are greater and it is them who give society something of lasting value. I fundamentally agree insofar as the artist serves as the creator of works of art 写成art works. Nonetheless, the role of the critic is also indispensable and his contributions should not be simply neglected. 很啰嗦的开头，虽然占字数，可我觉得你写了这么多，就一个意思，艺术家重要，评论家也不可少，两句就能搞定了，铺开来没什么内容

When we discuss who give society something of lasting value, we should firstly propose 嗯？建议？我会用put forward,提出a clear definition about the lasting value. Does the lasting value mean the value which can be inherited and will spread from one generation to another 这不就是inherit的意思? If the answer is positive, it is definitely the artist who should be honored as the creator of the lasting value, just because novels, films, music and paintings are all created by them and these works seem to be perpetual and the main way to impart and inherit our value. Just imagine that you are reading a novel about a hero. What can you learn from the novel? 啰嗦的用语，建议想说什么直接说好了 Whether the novel has changed some of your belief and ideal? From the hero, the nature and the signification of life are revealed which tell us that the ultimate goal of a human being lived livingin the world is not to pursue comfortable and material living but to make the world more beautiful 阿？为什么追求物质生活世界就不美好了，与物质相对应该讲精神.The ambition to change the world, the braveness to challenge evil and the preparation to sacrifice are all characters of a hero described in the novel, and these characters have been categorized into lasting value. 讲半天还是一件事，你从小说中汲取精神力量，不用写这么详细阿，换个角度讲音乐也行啊Through reading this novel, we are acquainted with some parts of lasting value. In fact, this process is the very way to preserve and spread lasting value.

However, the critic has his own contributions especially in nowadays information exploding era. Though values are preserved and spread by works of art, its function would fail when too much information is available. To avoid be immersed by that huge information, we cannot afford to read all works and so judging which one deserves our precious time and energy is important. Unfortunately, this task has been beyond common people's ability; moreover, leaving this task to every individual 不用强调个体，上一分句意思已经很明显is also inefficient. A more efficient and practical way is to depend on our critic who will evaluates works for us. The critic scans a lot of works and put them into corresponding categories. Take films for instance. The critic divides all of them into separate kinds, such as comedy, action, horror, family, science fiction and so on. Different kinds of films reflect different parts of lasting value. Then we can refer to comedy films when we want to relax and enjoy humor, action films meet our needs if the appreciation of heroism is our aim, horror films can provide us adventure, family films will reveals the nature of love, and science fiction films stimulate our curiosity and honor the exploration of unknown area. 注意扣题，起码的讲讲批评家帮我们分了类吧Thanks to the critic, we are released from the puzzlement of choosing when we face too many films. 立意很新颖，但我不知这算不算跑题，因为题目是在讨论批评家有没有创造价值的问题

Moreover, except for the work of categorizing, by publishing their judgments and perspectives the critic also assists us to better understand the values lying behind the works of art. From their professional standpoints, they point out the motivation of the works, provide some background knowledge, clarify the values presented in the works, and even commend some further materials. Indeed, a lot of works relate to particular cultures or experiences which are essential to our comprehensive and profound understanding. 这段论证比上两段充分多了For example, without knowing the faithful love between Liang Shanbo and Zhu yingtai, you cannot really appreciate the plangent rhythm of Hua Die, a famous Chinese traditional music, and the aspiration for free love; without knowing the miserable and unbending life of Beethoven, you cannot really appreciate the heroic style of his Symphony No. 5 in C Minor 写这么详细干嘛？你说英雄大家都明白了阿 and the struggle spirit to fate. 论证有条理也充分多了

In sum, while the artist creates art, the critic helps us to choose and understand art. So it is hasty to claim that it is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. Indeed, it is the cooperation between the artist and the critic that gives, maintains and spreads lasting value.

敢问楼主，写了多少个字啊？
我觉得字数足够，不用为了字数一句话分两句写了
不然，实在不够……简练
加油哦！

[ Last edited by css on 2005-7-14 at 14:57 ]

conquer0824UID: 2102638

144, ‘It is the artist, not the critic,’ who gives society something of  lasting value. A person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

1。不应该忽视评论家的贡献
2。艺术家创造的作品是持久的，并且是延续价值的主要方式
3。现在作品太多，评论家帮助我们进行分类选择
4。评论家帮助我们理解作品
5。总结，正是艺术家和评论家的合作才创造，保持，传播价值

The artist creates art like novels, films, music, paintings and so forth, and the critic evaluates them. Whose contributions are more significant? The speaker claims that the artist's contributions are greater and it is them who give society something of lasting value. I fundamentally agree insofar as the artist serves as the creator of works of art. Nonetheless, the role of the critic is also indispensable and his contributions should not be simply neglected.

When we discuss who give society something of lasting value, we should firstly propose a clear definition about the lasting value. Does the lasting value mean the value which can be inherited and will spread from one generation to another? If the answer is positive, it is definitely the artist who should be honored as the creator of the lasting value, just because novels, films, music and paintings are all created by them and these works seem to be perpetual and the main way to impart and inherit our value. Just imagine that you are reading a novel about a hero. What can you learn from the novel? Whether the novel has changed some of your belief and ideal? From the hero, the nature and the signification of life are revealed which tell us that the ultimate goal of a human being lived in the world is not to pursue comfortable and material living but to make the world more beautiful. The ambition to change the world, the braveness to challenge evil and the preparation to sacrifice are all characters of a hero described in the novel, and these characters have been categorized into lasting value. Through reading this novel, we are acquainted with some parts of lasting value. In fact, this process is the very way to preserve and spread lasting value.

However, the critic has his own contributions especially in nowadays information exploding era. Though values are preserved and spread by works of art, its function would fail when too much information is available. To avoid being immersed by that huge information, we cannot afford to read all works and so judge which one deserves our precious time and energy is important.(这句话的句子关系好像有问题，to 表目的，没有目的关系啊，两句话之间？前面直接用分词吧？immersed in the huge information） Unfortunately, this task has been beyond common people's ability; moreover, leaving this task to every individual is also inefficient. A more efficient and practical way is to depend on our critic who will evaluate works for us. The critic scans a lot of works and put them into corresponding categories. Take films for instance. The critic divides all of them into separate kinds, such as comedy, action, horror, family, science fiction and so on. Different kinds of films reflect different parts of lasting value. Then we can refer to comedy films when we want to relax and enjoy humor, action films meet our needs if the appreciation of heroism is our aim, horror films can provide us adventure, family films will reveals the nature of love, and science fiction films stimulate our curiosity and honor the exploration of unknown area. Thanks to the critic, we are released from the puzzlement of choosing when we face too many films. (电影分类好像不是评论家的工作吧？评论家只是评论影片的艺术价值，关于电影是哪一类的，影片介绍就应该指出了，评论家怎么会去做如此没有技术含量的工作呢？:lol
Moreover, except for the work of categorizing, by publishing their judgments and perspectives the critic also assists us to better understand the values lying behind the works of art. From their professional standpoints, they point out the motivation of the works, provide some background knowledge, clarify the values presented in the works, and even commend some further materials. Indeed, a lot of works relate to particular cultures or experiences which are essential to our comprehensive and profound understanding. For example, without knowing the faithful love between Liang Shanbo and Zhu yingtai, you cannot really appreciate the plangent rhythm of Hua Die（butterfly,用化蝶老外不一定懂，butterfly人人皆知）, a famous Chinese traditional music, and the aspiration for free love; without knowing the miserable and unbending life of Beethoven, you cannot really appreciate the heroic style of his Symphony No. 5 in C Minor and the struggle spirit to fate.

In sum, while the artist creates art, the critic helps us to choose and understand art. So it is hasty to claim that it is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. Indeed, it is the cooperation between the artist and the critic that gives, maintains and spreads lasting value.

leo1001UID: 185894

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