ISSUE83 超了两分钟，还改了一下~

mrealUID：201732

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Issue83
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Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people.
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Nowadays, the question that whether government is supposed to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas forces a fierce debate over it. As far as I am concern, I allege that it is the duty of the government to preserve wilderness areas, no matter how remote they locate. To support my point of view, I would like to analyze its importance from two aspects as follows.
On one hand, preservation is served to keep the original look of those wildness areas, including the specific kinds of animals and plants, and different kind of climate, as well as the particular landscape. If only we spare no efforts to resist its appearance it is used to be, not can we get to understand more about the interior world of such areas. Furthermore, some wilderness areas, for not intervened by humans very much, follow the rules built up solely by the nature itself which can date from ages ago. As for now, it carries its indispensable value to the study of nature. It is obvious that the wildness areas can be called the homeland for all the animals as well as the plants living in there, where their ancestors settle. In addition, study of the entire amazing creatures there can lead our human to a higher level of recognizing ourselves and the comprehension of the past of the world we live in now.
On another one, the preservation the government provides should avoid the human's intemperate behavior which may set great influence to the wildness areas. For no one can tell whether it will benefit the natural conditions there or not, we cannot stride such a big step to do whatever we think may be right to those areas without predication of the unforeseeable result. It is highly possible that once any imprudent measures taken to reconstruct the natural areas, the whole ecotype system, which is formed by the vicissitude of nature, can be ruined leaving only calamity. America, for instance, to keep such tragedy from happening, settle the acts about the protection of wildness areas restricting that people can only go sight-seeing, hiking, and scientific research there, which does great help to those areas maintaining its specific quality.
Even if some wildness areas locate on the remote edge of the state, they are the treasures the human-beings all over the world share. Definitely, government should take its accountability on shoulder to preservation and there is no way for us to abandon the rich resource and great value of those areas. However, what is worse, once some contemptible people find out any profit they may acquire from the natural treasure, the distance cannot be obstacle set on their road to gain the profit. New Zealand, taking as example, already constitutes related acts about it to restrain any human activities which may result in possible damages to the environment in the wildness areas. It is government that should take charge of it and be responsible to supervise.
From what has been discussed above, we can explicitly assert that government cannot escape its responsibility towards the preservation of the wildness areas, which is fulfilled with the precise gifts God offers. Admittedly, every human being also should do his or her best to support government to make the world a more harmonious one.

zehuaUID：199246

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zehuaUID：199246

Nowadays, the question that whether government is supposed to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas forces a fierce debate over it. As far as I am concern, I allege that it is the duty of the government to preserve wilderness areas, no matter how remote they locate. To support my point of view, I would like to analyze its importance from two aspects as follows.（废话太多。直接说中间那句就可以了。再把正文各TS贴过来）

On one hand, preservation is served to keep the original look of those wildness areas, including the specific kinds of animals and plants, and different kind of climate, as well as the particular landscape. If only we spare no efforts to resist its appearance it is used to be, not can we get to understand more about the interior world of such areas. （语法问题）Furthermore, some wilderness areas, for not intervened by humans very much, follow the rules built up solely by the nature itself which can date from ages ago.（语法问题）As for now, it carries its indispensable value to the study of nature. It is obvious that the wildness areas can be called the homeland for all the animals as well as the plants living in there, where their ancestors settle. In addition, study of the entire amazing creatures there can lead our human to a higher level of recognizing ourselves and the comprehension of the past of the world we live in now.（失败！题目问应不应该preservation。你这段TS说preservation的作用是保存XXX，这不是废话？应该说preservation的意义是什么）

On another one, the preservation the government provides should avoid the human's intemperate behavior which may set great influence to the wildness areas. For no one can tell whether it will benefit the natural conditions there or not, we cannot stride such a big step to do whatever we think may be right to those areas without predication of the unforeseeable result. It is highly possible that once any imprudent measures taken to reconstruct the natural areas, the whole ecotype system, which is formed by the vicissitude of nature, can be ruined leaving only calamity. America, for instance, to keep such tragedy from happening, settle the acts about the protection of wildness areas restricting that people can only go sight-seeing, hiking, and scientific research there, which does great help to those areas maintaining its specific quality.（这段说还没有提到意义。）

Even if some wildness areas locate on the remote edge of the state, they are the treasures the human-beings all over the world share. Definitely, government should take its accountability on shoulder to preservation and there is no way for us to abandon the rich resource and great value of those areas. However, what is worse, once some contemptible people find out any profit they may acquire from the natural treasure, the distance cannot be obstacle set on their road to gain the profit. New Zealand, taking as example, already constitutes related acts about it to restrain any human activities which may result in possible damages to the environment in the wildness areas. It is government that should take charge of it and be responsible to supervise.

From what has been discussed above, we can explicitly assert that government cannot escape its responsibility towards the preservation of the wildness areas, which is fulfilled with the precise gifts God offers. Admittedly, every human being also should do his or her best to support government to make the world a more harmonious one.

问题很严重。看完正文前2段我就知道跑题了。:O

kobestrongUID：2117374

------题目------
Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people.

------正文------
Nowadays, the question that whether government is supposed to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas forces a fierce debate over it. As far as I am 去掉?concern, I allege that it is the duty of the government to preserve wilderness areas, no matter how remote they locate. To support my point of view, I would like to analyze its importance from two aspects as follows.

On one hand, preservation is served to keep the original look of those wildness areas, including the specific kinds of animals and plants, and different kinds of climate, as well as the particular landscape. If only we spare no efforts to resist? preserve its appearance it is used to be, not can we get to understand more about the interior world of such areas. Furthermore, some wilderness areas, for not intervened by humans very much, follow the rules built up solely by the nature itself which can date from ages ago. As for now, it carries its indispensable value to the study of nature. It is obvious that the wildness areas can be called the homeland for all the animals as well as the plants living in there, where their ancestors settle. In addition, study of the entire amazing creatures there can lead our human to a higher level of recognizing ourselves and the comprehension of the past of the world we live in now这段不错!

On another one the other, the preservation the government provides should avoid the human's intemperate behavior which may set great influence to the wildness areas. For no one can tell whether it will benefit the natural conditions there or not, we cannot stride such a big step to do whatever we think may be right to those areas without predication of the unforeseeable result感觉这句好象自相矛盾,既然认为是对的,怎么会没有事先想过呢?就直接说不经分析就采取保护措施吧. It is highly possible that once any imprudent measures taken to reconstruct the natural areas, the whole ecotype system, which is formed by the vicissitude of nature, can would be ruined leaving only calamity.这里举个反面例子来说吧 America, for instance, to keep such tragedy from happening, settle the acts about the protection of wildness areas restricting that people can only go sight-seeing, hiking, and scientific research there, which does great help to those areas maintaining its specific quality.这个例子有点没说清楚,用这些措施怎么就保护了呢?

Even if some wildness areas locate on the remote edge of the state, they are the treasures the human-beings all over the world share. Definitely, government should take its accountability on shoulder to preservation and there is no way for us to abandon the rich resource and great value of those areas. However, what is worse, once some contemptible people find out any profit they may acquire from the natural treasure, the distance cannot be obstacle set on their road to gain the profit. New Zealand, taking as example, already constitutes related acts about it to restrain any human activities which may result in possible damages to the environment in the wildness areas. It is government that should take charge of it and be responsible to supervise.例子说具体点,会更有说服力

From what has been discussed above, we can explicitly assert that government cannot escape its responsibility towards the preservation of the wildness areas, which is fulfilled with the precise gifts God offers. AdmittedlyMeanwhile, every human being also should do his or her best to support government to make the world a more harmonious one.

文章结构很好,语言也不错,这么短时间写出来的,佩服!:p

mrealUID：201732

两个人的意见截然相反，困惑了~~~
是不是kobestrong对我太仁慈了……
我自个再琢磨一下好了，大家也再帮我提提啊，谢谢了！

GladysryUID：198609

大家思维果真不同。

不过我也要来打击mreal了。你写得很模糊，意义基本没有体现出来。所举例子都是事实的存在，而没有效果，怎么可能说清楚呢？就好像我把一项新法规摆在那里，又不去说他给社会带来的结果，你能说那个法规是有必要的么？但是对你的body1,我认为没那么严重，保护它的一个好处就是可以去研究未经破坏的范围，从而得出有价值的东西，但是这一段的开头有点拖沓。

我明天会把这篇文章啃掉，希望到时候和大家继续探讨一下！嗬嗬，特别是mreal, 因为同一个题目可以交流的东西会更多！

dr_greenUID：193584

我也觉的跑题了。。如果是证明政府应该保护 那么重点应该是说保护的必要性啦 为什么无论多偏僻都要保护啦之类的吧  你的body1上来ts说应该如何保护 body2说不应如何保护 似乎没有证明你的论点的说

xiaowenzi118UID：202887

把倒数第二段提到前面去,再补充一点

mrealUID：201732

一：政府应该保护，从两方面说：
1。政府对野生地区的preservation的目的及作用。主要就是说保护能够对野生地区带来的好处等等。
2。政府应该通过限制人类在野生地区的活动，来保护它们。因为不能预计人们活动对野生地区造成的毁灭性影响。。。——这段是想说政府应该通过怎样的方式来保护野生地区。
二：即使野生地区很偏远，政府也有责任保护。 其实是想呼应主题一下，坚定应该保护这一观点。
xiaowenzi的观点我想对坚持我的理解还是有些帮助的。对例子的引用确实没能建立它与论述道理之间的联系，来增强说服力，这也是我经常帮别人拍时说的，自己要检讨，呵呵~
感觉限时还是没办法很明确的把自己想要表达的让大家看明白，何况有时思路还在题目的十环靶外转悠，呵呵~还希望大家继续帮我提意见啦，谢谢喽！