issue207同主题,第一次写偏了，想好几个例后又来一次，拍必回

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Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.
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Retrospect to the origination of rituals and ceremonies ,there is a conception that rituals and ceremonies is rather a reflection of a culture- they may derive from a reverence for a historical moment , a custom experienced from generations transmitted, a discipline accepted in a small region -All come from the different aspects of culture. From the relationships between rituals and ceremonies with the culture, I agree that rituals and ceremonies help us to understand the authentic meaning of a specific culture, nevertheless , when Overestimating the function of them is a conclusion that people may have a diminished sense of who they are , I hardly vote for this claim.


In the first place, definitely, involving oneself in a ritual or ceremony ,one may reach the profound meaning of a concrete culture easier. To further support my view ,there are two examples I may demonstrate. first ,a historical ceremony may help a historian further understand a foreign culture. A good case in point is that in a small village, Indian, existing a ritual between lovers. Falling in love with a local girl ,a man may call on the girl's house ,and a cup of coffee will decide your destiny . A trick masks in the coffee is that if the coffee added with sugar, which means “ I love you ,let us marry” ,comparably, tasting the bitter flavor of a coffee without sugar ,savoring the sorrow feeling around. At a first glance, a deduction that there may some romantic and humorous element in the local culture, may be made spontaneously.  Secondly, a ceremony performs in a small region, to some extent , may furtively make the people immerse in a special culture, and provide I feeling of belonging. As in a fiction "root", when Kunta reached an age of 18, there will be an adult ritual , every boy in the novel was delighted to be announced as a man from then on .It is a hallmark of individual's process, and it is the ritual helps define it. A ritual thus plays a role as leading you into a certain culture.

Moreover , if the rituals and ceremony are so essential in a culture, then a deprivation of it will lead a sense of lost or not ? The answer is negative . To completely understand why there is a declination of respects of the former rituals will help us reasoningly consider the controversy.  A declination may be owe to the over-increasing paces of modern life or a national-wide globalization, nevertheless a vague meaning of formal culture may not a disaster rather endows a new vision of one's culture. Through the fast pace of life we may easily build a culture on a public regulation , laws and moral standard .compared with the influence of globalization there might be a more tolerance acceptance of other nations' culture, this also presents a new notion of culture. All in all , through the building of new culture , we hardly lost in the complex society.

However, it is true that no matter what transformation of society has brought to a culture. A preservation of precious conventional ritual and ceremony , to some means ,is necessary.  History is always a necessary part in our daily life ,and a preservation of our rituals and ceremony is a means to retrospect our past and look forward to our future.

In sum , on the basis of positive acceptance of the ritual and ceremony's critical function  contributed to understand a culture , whereas with little overestimation of its influence ,as  diminishing one's sense of who he is. Leading a policy or a regulation of protecting prevent them from extinct . Only through these ways a combination of respect while hardly overemphasize its meaning may a intelligent way for us to understand a rituals or ceremonies.   
写了提纲，仍超时二分钟

ardorousUID：2115432

ardorousUID：2115432

一．        定义什么是仪式。 有那些形式，肯定它们在文化中的作用，否定人们的迷失
二．        肯定前半部，分两方面
1．        历史和习俗的体现，是一种文化的反映，通过它， 研究文化的人能更具体的接触文化2。它对于置身于其中的个体来说是一种文化的加强，潜移默化。
三．团体或群体的逐渐的迷失感来自于两个方面
1，        外来文化的进入
2，        社会的进步带来的对文化的冲击。
分别从这两方面看是否会带来迷失
四．让步，虽然它不定义文化，却起着重要作用，应该保护
五，结论

zjcq2002UID：2113577

Retrospect to the origination of rituals and ceremonies ,there is a conception that rituals and ceremonies is rather a reflection of a culture- they may derive from a reverence for a historical moment , a custom experienced from generations transmitted, a discipline accepted in a small region -All come from the different aspects of culture. From the relationships between rituals and ceremonies with the culture, I agree that rituals and ceremonies help us to understand the authentic meaning of a specific culture, nevertheless , when Overestimating the function of them is a conclusion [这句读起来好像有点问题]that people may have a diminished sense of who they are , I hardly vote for this claim.


In the first place, definitely, involving oneself in a ritual or ceremony ,one may reach the profound meaning of a concrete culture easier. To further support my view ,there are two examples I may demonstrate. first ,a historical ceremony may help a historian further understand a foreign culture. A good case in point is that in a small village, Indian, existing a ritual between lovers. Falling in love with a local girl ,a man may call on the girl's house ,and a cup of coffee will decide your destiny[your？]. A trick masks in the coffee is that if the coffee added with sugar, which means “ I love you ,let us marry” ,comparably, tasting the bitter flavor of a coffee without sugar ,savoring the sorrow feeling around. At a first glance, a deduction that there may some romantic and humorous element in the local culture, may be made spontaneously. [这个例子举得不好，也没有阐述may help a historian further understand a foreign culture] Secondly, a ceremony performs in a small region, to some extent , may furtively make the people immerse in a special culture, and provide I[them the] feeling of belonging. As in a fiction "root", when Kunta reached an age of 18, there will be[was] an adult ritual , every boy in the novel was delighted to be announced as a man from then on .It is a hallmark of individual's process, and it is the ritual helps define it. A ritual thus plays a role as leading you into a certain culture.

Moreover , if the rituals and ceremony are so essential in a culture, then a deprivation of it will lead a sense of lost or not ?[如果是问句，这句的语法好像不对，可不可以这样：will……lead ………if…….?] The answer is negative . To completely understand why there is a declination of respects of the former rituals will help us reasoningly consider the controversy.  A declination may be owe to the over-increasing paces of modern life or a national-wide globalization, nevertheless a vague meaning of formal culture may not [be] a disaster rather endows a new vision of one's culture. Through the fast pace of life we may easily build a culture on a public regulation , laws and moral standard .compared with the influence of globalization there might be a more tolerance acceptance of other nations' culture, this also presents a new notion of culture. All in all , through the building of new culture , we hardly lost in the complex society.

However, it is true that no matter what transformation of society has brought to a culture. A preservation of precious conventional ritual and ceremony , to some means ,is necessary.  History is always a necessary part in our daily life ,and a preservation of our rituals and ceremony is a means to retrospect our past and look forward to our future.

In sum , on the basis of positive acceptance of the ritual and ceremony's critical function  contributed to understand a culture , whereas with little overestimation of its influence ,as  diminishing one's sense of who he is. Leading a policy or a regulation of protecting prevent them from extinct . Only through these ways a combination of respect while hardly overemphasize its meaning may a intelligent way for us to understand a rituals or ceremonies.   [大大，整个文章的逻辑思路好清晰，赞！]

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Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.
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Retrospect to the origination of rituals and ceremonies ,there is a conception that rituals and ceremonies is rather a reflection of a culture- they may derive from a reverence for a historical moment , a custom experienced from generations transmitted, a discipline accepted in a small region -All come from the different aspects of culture.(这一句写得太好了啊~~很清楚地把rituals and ceremonies的本质提出来) From the relationships between rituals and ceremonies with the culture, I agree that rituals and ceremonies help us to understand the authentic meaning of a specific culture, nevertheless , when Overestimating the function of them is a conclusion that people may have a diminished sense of who they are , I hardly vote for this claim.观点也摆得很有逻辑性,好admire哦~

In the first place, definitely, involving oneself in a ritual or ceremony ,one may reach the profound meaning of a concrete culture easier. To further support my view ,there are two examples I may demonstrate. first ,a historical ceremony may help a historian further understand a foreign culture. A good case in point is that in a small village, Indian, existing a ritual between lovers. Falling in love with a local girl ,a man may call on the girl's house ,and a cup of coffee will decide your destiny . A trick masks in the coffee is that if the coffee added with sugar, which means “ I love you ,let us marry” ,comparably, tasting the bitter flavor of a coffee without sugar ,savoring the sorrow feeling around. At a first glance, a deduction that there may some romantic and humorous element in the local culture, may be made spontaneously.  Secondly, a ceremony performs in a small region, to some extent , may furtively make the people immerse in a special culture, and provide I feeling of belonging (这一句不是很明白,是不是说了解一种习俗可以使人有一种归属感?那I是不是改为a or the?这个例子是很不错,也能说明问题,但是没有呼应前面提到的"促进历史学家对外国文化的了解"或许可以把那一句换一个说法,不说历史学家,而说people). As in a fiction "root", when Kunta reached an age of 18, there will be an adult ritual , every boy in the novel was delighted to be announced as a man from then on .It is a hallmark of individual's process, and it is the ritual helps define it. A ritual thus plays a role as leading you into a certain culture. 两个例子对于整段的说明都很恰当,语句运用也很灵活

Moreover , if the rituals and ceremony (同样,复数) are so essential in a culture, then a deprivation of it will lead a sense of lost or not ? The answer is negative . To completely understand why there is a declination of respects of the former rituals will help us reasoningly consider the controversy.  A declination may be owe to the over-increasing paces of modern life or a national-wide globalization, nevertheless a vague meaning of formal culture may not (be) a disaster rather endows a new vision of one's culture. Through the fast pace of life we may easily build a culture on a public regulation , laws and moral standard .compared with the influence of globalization there might be a more tolerance acceptance of other nations' culture, this also presents a new notion of culture. All in all , through the building of new culture , we hardly lost in the complex society.

However, it is true that no matter what transformation of society has brought to a culture. A preservation of precious conventional ritual and ceremony , to some means ,is necessary.  History is always a necessary part in our daily life ,and a preservation of our rituals and ceremony is a means to retrospect our past and look forward to our future.

In sum , on the basis of positive acceptance of the ritual and ceremony's critical function  contributed to understand a culture , whereas with little overestimation of its influence ,as  diminishing one's sense of who he is. Leading a policy or a regulation of protecting prevent them from extinct . Only through these ways a combination of respect while hardly overemphasize its meaning may a intelligent way for us to understand (省略a) rituals or ceremonies.   

限时都能写出那么赞的文章真是强啊~~不论思路的连贯性or用词的恰到好处以及文句的多变换都好棒啊~~嗯,我要多学习啊~

linxiao1983UID：203095

结构清晰，各个方面都有考虑和论述，
具体的语言本来就没什么问题，何况已有xdjm们指出，不再赘述

快考了，没有什么时间上网了，没有细改，请见谅！先把题库看完吧我