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mvpzhuangUID：205051

使用时间长，用得多不一定代表CA一定要。没有直接的证据
1、c是新产品，所以使用时间短。不能说明没有ca好。科技进步，经验的积累。
2、ca被多数医院使用，不能证明更好。
（1）        两种药都是OTC, 使用的多少要看整体的销量而不只是医院的。
（2）        被医院使用的多，还可能是其他的商业问题。如，在c出来前就签订了长期的使用协议，或CA承诺给医院好处等等。
3、C的副作用可能比CA大，但是对于没有高血压的患者，C可能更有效。
According to the report, after competition between Coldex (C) and Cold-Away (CA), the author comes to the conclusion: Cold-Away is more effective. To support the conclusion, the author givens some details of competitions like CA is used longer and wilder in hospital than C. Careful scrutiny of these evidences, however, none of them is lend credible support to the conclusion.

First of all, the length of time that the medications used can not justify how effective they are. It is absolutely possible that after many years researching and improvement, the new medication-C-is superior to CA. Improvement in scientific technology, can make the Coldex more efficient than CA in curing cold. Therefore, the fact that CA is used longer than C is irrelevant to the efficiency.

Another problem is the more used by hospital dose not necessarily ensure that CA is more effective. Firstly, the two of them are both over-the-counter (OTC) cold medications. The total quantity used by the whole world is not equal the quantity used in the hospital, especially they are OTC. So there is no statistics substantiate that CA is used more than C. Secondly, there are many reasons that may cause hospitals using more CA, despite of the efficiency. Perhaps, before C came out, hospitals had contacted with CA Company for a long term corporation. Or perhaps, the CA Company promises to give some benefits to hospitals if they use their medicine. Or some other business secretes. Without ruling out these possibilities that may contribute to the larger quantity used in hospitals, the author cannot convince me on the basis of that CA is used more than C, let alone to convince me that CA is more effective than C.

The final problem is the side effects caused by the two medicines. Refer to the report,
Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. It is seems that the side effect of C is much more serious than CA's, which will reduce preference by consumers. But it is unwarranted to assert that C has less efficiency. The author simplified misleading side effect with efficiency. What's more, regarding patient without high blood pressure, C maybe can have better effect on curing cold. Without examination with same kind of patient, the author cannot give out that so arbitrary conclusion.

All in all, this report is lacking credible evidence to convince me to stand on the author's side. If the author wants to prove him right, he must show us some authoritative experiments that can bolster CA are more effective in curing cold. And ensure conditions in these experiments must be totally equal.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-24 at 16:09 ]

mvpzhuangUID：205051

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tangjihedeUID：2107695

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The basis 似乎没必要？ CA is used more than C, let alone to convince meus that CA is more effective than C.

The final problem is the side effects caused by the two medicines. Refer to the report,
Coldex is known to contribute to existinging? high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. It isdelete is seems that the side effect of C is much more serious than CA's, which will reduce preference by consumers. But it is unwarranted to assert that C has less efficiency. The author simplified misleading 谓语是那个？side effect with efficiency. What'spis 不要用缩写 more, regarding as to thosepatients without high blood pressure, C maybe canmight就行了 have better effect onin? curing cold. Without examinationing,用动词 with same kind of patient???没看懂, the author cannot give out that so arbitrary conclusion.give out such an …

All in all, this report is lackinglacks or is lacking of credible evidence to convince meus to stand on the author's side. If the author wants to prove him right, he must show us some authoritative experiments that can bolster CA areis more effective in curing cold. And改成逗号，and小写 ensure conditions in these experiments must be totally equal.为什么是equal?

理由驳的没有问题，以后建议用层层推进的方式，而不是一条条单列。另外我觉得文章的语法错误比较多，而且句与句之间的连接不够紧凑，建议看一些关于句子结构的总结，掌握更多的长句技巧。加油！

jamesprcUID：2119791

According to the report, after competition between Coldex (C) and Cold-Away (CA), the author comes to the conclusion: Cold-Away is more effective. To support the conclusion, the author givens some details of competitions like CA is used longer and wilder in hospital than C.[font color="red"](这些不是 details of competitions 吧)Careful scrutiny of these evidences, however, none of them is lend credible support to the conclusion

First of all, the length of time that the medications used can not justify how effective they are. It is absolutely possible that after many years researching and improvement, the new medication-C-is superior to CA. Improvement in scientific technology, can make the Coldex more efficient than CA in curing cold. Therefore, the fact that CA is used longer than C is irrelevant to the efficiency.

Another problem is the more used by hospital dose not necessarily ensure that CA is more effective. Firstly, the two of them are both over-the-counter (OTC) cold medications. The total quantity used by the whole world is not equal the quantity used in the hospital, especially they are OTC. So there is no statistics substantiate that CA is used more than C. Secondly, there are many reasons that may cause hospitals using more CA, despite of the efficiency. Perhaps, before C came out, hospitals had contacted with CA Company for a long term corporation. Or perhaps, the CA Company promises to give some benefits to hospitals if they use their medicine. Or some other business secretes. Without ruling out these possibilities that may contribute to the larger quantity used in hospitals, the author cannot convince me on the basis of that CA is used more than C, let alone to convince me that CA is more effective than C.

The final problem is the side effects caused by the two medicines. Refer to the report,
Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. It is seems that the side effect of C is much more serious than CA's, which will reduce preference by consumers. But it is unwarranted to assert that C has less efficiency. The author simplified misleading side effect with efficiency. What's more, regarding patient without high blood pressure, C maybe can have better effect on curing cold. Without examination with same kind of patient, the author cannot give out that so arbitrary conclusion.

All in all, this report is lacking credible evidence to convince me to stand on the author's side. If the author wants to prove him right, he must show us some authoritative experiments that can bolster CA are more effective in curing cold. And ensure conditions in these experiments must be totally equal.

论证没问题，说理够充分。但语法问题比较大，错误太多,楼上好像改得很细。加油吧。
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[ Last edited by jamesprc on 2005-7-24 at 22:25 ]

mvpzhuangUID：205051

真是谢谢两位阿！！
我就是基础比较差吧，特别是语法哦。不知道什么方法可以提高构句能力？