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ISSUE 51

Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

44min    543 words

How to define an effective education? Does an effective education means the educatee well fitted into a job and can sustain his/her own material wants? Or does it mean the receiver of an adequate education will be more confident and happy in his/her later life? The answer to this question determines what an effective will be.

The speaker's opinion of a specifically designed education has the potential of satisfying the two criterions mentioned above. By studying each students innate ability and weakness, where does his/her interests lie, specialists on education is quite possible to come out with a dedicate plan about how to implement his/her education. As the education plan is unique for each educatee, it is highly flexible and can be altered to cater for each small change of the educatee's ability and interest. This means that when a potential Newton finds out that his true craving is for the philosophical and mathematical structure of the whole universe, he will not bog down in the law school and waste his youth time.

However, as we are facing millions of new students enrolled into school in U.S, let alone the world, it seems hard to find enough competent speciallists to design the education for each educatee.(You can not expect anyone to do this job because the complexity and importance for each individual and the whole society.) One must concede that if the specialist in charge of designing a child's education is not competent or too busy to interact with the child, the result will be out of control. The real potential of an educatee will be ignored, and most people may just want to go an easier way and cause an imbalanced knowledge structure of the whole society.

Another practical problem with the specific designed education is that it may cause waste of the resources. Admittedly, in spite of the difference of the educatees, there are some basic knowledge to be imparted, emotions to be cultivated, skills to be developed. Any citizen in a democratic society should be raised to cherish his/her freedom and feel the obligation to defend it when necessary. Basic mathematical skills are essential for nearly every modern citizen to become a useful element in the workforce. Trying to make a different education for each educatee instead of offering the basic education for a bigger group is economically unwise and more important, unnecessary. You can't make much difference to teach how to perform 3 times 5 or Washington is one of the founding fathers, after all. But we should not go too far in this practice, as the educations level goes up, more and more diversification becomes desirable. Different talents should be treated in corresponding ways. To make the education achieve its goal, the sacrifice of efficiency by making special designs for each educatee is justifiable.

In sum, it is true that a specifically designed education will be truly effective if it is carried out adequately. Yet the amount of work it will require seemly makes it unpractical and may even cause compromise in the quality of education. To ensure the efficiency of the education system, the basic education should be more or less the same for each educatee and the uniqueness should take part in later and higher educations.               



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发表于 2007-8-3 20:26:25 |只看该作者
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发表于 2007-8-7 07:54:28 |只看该作者
ISSUE 51
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

44min    543 words

How to define an effective education? Does an effective education means the educatee well fitted into a job and can sustain his/her own material wants? Or does it mean the receiver of an adequate education will be more confident and happy in his/her later life? The answer to this question determines what an effective will be.(很好的开头形式!)

The speaker's opinion of a specifically designed education has the potential of satisfying the two criterions mentioned above.(你同意作者的观点了?) By studying each student’s innate ability and weakness, where does his/her interests lie, specialists on education is quite possible to come out with a dedicate plan about how to implement his/her education. As the education plan is unique for each educatee, it is highly flexible and can be altered to cater for each small change of the educatee's ability and interest. This means that when a potential Newton finds out that his true craving is for the philosophical and mathematical structure of the whole universe, he will not bog down in the law school and waste his youth time.(说了这么多,还不知道你对作者所持的态度,态度不明确)

However, as we are facing millions of new students enrolled into school in U.S, let alone the world, it seems hard to find enough competent speciallists to design the education for each educatee.(问题中心句1)(You can not expect anyone to do this job because the complexity and importance for each individual and the whole society.) One must concede that if the specialist in charge of designing a child's education is not competent or too busy to interact with the child, the result will be out of control. The real potential of an educatee will be ignored, and most people may just want to go an easier way and cause an imbalanced knowledge structure of the whole society.

Another practical problem with the specific designed education is that it may cause waste of the resources.(问题中心句2) Admittedly, in spite of the difference of the educatees, there are some basic knowledge to be imparted, emotions to be cultivated, skills to be developed. (很好的排比句!)Any citizen in a democratic society should be raised to cherish his/her freedom and feel the obligation to defend it when necessary. (Nevertheless)Basic mathematical skills are essential for nearly every modern citizen to become a useful element in the workforce. Trying to make a different education for each educatee instead of offering the basic education for a bigger group is economically unwise and more important, unnecessary. You can't make much difference to teach how to perform 3 times 5 or Washington is one of the founding fathers, after all.(这个例子没看懂). But we should not go too far in this practice, as the education’s level goes up, more and more diversification becomes desirable. Different talents should be treated in corresponding ways. To make the education achieve its goal, the sacrifice of efficiency by making special designs for each educatee is justifiable. (这段话与该段的中心句有啥关系?能说明这种教育在实施中所遇到的困难吗?)


In sum, it is true that a specifically designed education will be truly effective if it is carried out adequately. Yet the amount of work it will require seemly makes it unpractical and may even cause compromise in the quality of education. To ensure the efficiency of the education system, the basic education should be more or less the same for each educatee and the uniqueness should take part in later and higher educations.

昨天发现改错文章了....sorry,,,不过误打误撞还是已经给你改过....呵呵,

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How to define an effective education? Does an effective education means the educatee well fitted into a job and can sustain his/her own material wants? Or does it mean the receiver of an adequate education will be more confident and happier in his/her later life? The answer to this question determines what effective edutation will be.

The speaker's opinion of a specifically designed education has the potential of satisfying the two criteria mentioned above. By studying each students innate ability and weakness, where does his/her interests lie, specialists on education is quite possible to come out with a dedicate plan about how to implement his/her education. As the education plan is unique for each educatee, it is highly flexible and can be altered to cater for each small change of the educatee's ability and interest. This means that when a potential Newton finds out that his true craving is for the philosophical and mathematical structure of the whole universe, he will not bog down in the law school and waste his youth time.

However, as we are facing millions of new students enrolled into school in U.S, let alone the world, it seems hard to find enough competent speciallists to design the education for each educatee.(You can not expect anyone to do this job because of the complexity and importance for each individual and the whole society.) One must concede that if the specialist in charge of designing a child's education is not competent or too busy to interact with the child, the result will be out of control. The real potential of an educatee will be ignored, and most people may just want to go an easier way and cause an imbalanced knowledge structure of the whole society.

Another practical problem with the specific designed education is that it may cause waste of the resources. Admittedly, in spite of the difference of the educatees, there are some basic knowledge to be imparted, emotions to be cultivated, skills to be developed. Any citizen in a democratic society should be raised to cherish his/her freedom and feel the obligation to defend it when necessary. Basic mathematical skills are essential for nearly every modern citizen to become a useful element in the workforce. Trying to make a different education for each educatee instead of offering the basic education for a bigger group is economically unwise and more important, unnecessary. You can't make much difference to teach how to perform 3 times 5 or Washington is one of the founding fathers, after all. But we should not go too far in this practice, as the educations level goes up, more and more diversification becomes desirable. Different talents should be treated in corresponding ways. To make the education achieve its goal, the sacrifice of efficiency by making special designs for each educatee is justifiable.

In sum, it is true that a specifically designed education will be truly effective if it is carried out adequately. Yet the amount of work it will require seemly makes it unpractical and may even cause compromise in the quality of education. To ensure the efficiency of the education system, the basic education should be more or less the same for each educatee and the uniqueness should take part in later and higher educations.              

文章脉络清晰,语句通顺(比我的好的多阿,汗!)

但举例可能不详细充分,第三、四段基本围绕教育资源来论证,是否显得过于狭隘了?另可以再说说special education and general education相结合的情况更好。

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