Issue177 写到不知道怎么办才好！

翦瞳UID: 184872

写到一半写不下去了，不知道写什么，开头更是离谱，现在的是写完后改的，每次都是开头写不好，跟下面联系不大，大虾们给支个招吧！
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The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.
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Considerable academic disciplines change the way we perceive the world, while many disciplines created new ways to sense the world and some others have little effect on the way we perceive the world.

We can draw a new explanation of the same world we can touch through studying academic discipline. Copernicus studied Aristotle's theory that the earth was the center of the universe, and then he found it was groundless then proposed a new theory: the sun was the center of the universe. He claimed the earth was involving the sun all the time. Though it was rejected and abandoned by the contemporary authority, we still had a chance to progress in the long and infinite road for exploring the essence of the universe. The world was still the some world we could see before, but our viewpoints about the world had changed a lot, even too greatly to accept. To this point, we can say we see a same world as before but by studying the present academic principle and revised the old theory we can perceive the world more correctly.

However, in some occasions, studying of an academic discipline help us to better understand the world without altering the way we perceive the world. Because the world is not the uniform world we can touch before. In other words, new academic principles or theories, opens a window to looking a new world. For example, we can not examinant bacteria and virus until the new essential skill and instrument were invented; we can not watch the remote stars until we have telescope, including electric telescope as the Hubble Telescope; we can not know the situation below hundreds of meters in deep sea until we have vehicles like sub-marine. Strictly speaking, the world is not the former world we ever touch. We have no idea about bacteria unless we can discover them with our eyes. To this point, some academic theories give us other new eyes on the world. Other weird and diverse worlds can be perceived by human being. Therefore, we can not insist the world is the same world as we perceived before, though the world is the same world.

To some extent, some abstruse academic disciplines are too abstract to be accepted by the public. They have little effect on their progress of perceiving of the world other than some experts in that field or scientists in that faculty. As a result, the way the whole human beings perceive the world has not been altered. I can say Einstein theory is stranger to most of people all over the world, though they may hear of it. While scientists have been inspired by the great theory, especially during the studying process, the public are independent with it. In this point, we exaggerate the effect of studying an academic discipline.

In conclusion, some process of studying academic disciplines can alter the way we perceive the world; some one can add to our present way we perceive the world; and some one can do little to the way we perceive the world.

yuchenUID: 2111079

Considerable academic disciplines change the way we perceive the world, while many disciplines created new ways to sense the world and some others have little effect on the way we perceive the world.
[开头很好呀，简洁明了吗！呵呵！如果你想加几句的华，可以说说从古到今技术对开扩我们的眼界多么有帮助，然后在转折。不过我觉得用不找，开门见山挺好。]
We can draw a new explanation of the same world we can touch through studying academic discipline. Copernicus studied Aristotle's theory that the earth was the center of the universe, and then he found it was groundless then proposed a new theory: the sun was the center of the universe. He claimed the earth was involving the sun all the time. Though it was rejected and abandoned by the contemporary authority, we still had a chance to progress in the long and infinite road for exploring the essence of the universe. The world was still the some world we could see before, but our viewpoints about the world had [been]changed a lot, even too greatly to accept[to be accepted]. To this point, we can say we see a same world as before but by studying the present academic principle and revised the old theory we can perceive the world more correctly.

However, in some occasions, studying of an academic discipline help[helps] us to better understand the world without altering the way we perceive the world. Because the world is not the uniform world we can touch before. In other words, new academic principles or theories, opens [open]a window to looking a new world. For example, we can not examinant bacteria and virus until the new essential skill and instrument were invented; we can not watch the remote stars until we have telescope, including electric telescope as the Hubble Telescope; we can not know the situation below hundreds of meters in deep sea until we have vehicles like sub-marine. Strictly speaking, the world is not the former world we ever touch. We have no idea about bacteria unless we can discover them with our eyes. To this point, some academic theories give us other new eyes on the world. Other weird and diverse worlds can be perceived by human being. Therefore, we can not insist the world is the same world as we perceived before, though the world is the same world.

To some extent, some abstruse academic disciplines are too abstract to be accepted by the public. They have little effect on their progress of perceiving of the world other than some experts in that field or scientists in that faculty. As a result, the way the whole human beings perceive the world has not been altered. I can say Einstein theory is stranger to most of people all over the world, though they may hear of it. While scientists have been inspired by the great theory, especially during the studying process, the public are independent with it. In this point, we exaggerate the effect of studying an academic discipline.

In conclusion, some process of studying academic disciplines can alter the way we perceive the world; some one can add to our present way we perceive the world; and some one can do little to the way we perceive the world.
总结：结构和语言都不错。就是B3我有不同意见：题目的意思是study以后我们会有不同的眼光，而并不是说一些专家的研究不能改变大多数人的看法。你的例子里大多数人并没有study呀？这题我理解的也不是很清楚，一家之言。
我的issue欢迎拍砖！谢谢！
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fircattyUID: 166248

刚好要想这一篇，帮你看看~
一会儿贴
to yuchen
又一个89战友~~呵呵

翦瞳UID: 184872

involve 应该是：revolve

to  this point 是 切题，中肯的意思，我想说的是："就这点来说"
那位大虾告诉我怎么表达？
therefore, thus, herewith, accordingly,可以吗？

below hundreds of meters in deep sea
几百米的深海底怎么表达？
hundreds of meters depth of sea
干脆说：at the bottom of deep sea

perceive 的同义词：observe, inspect, detect,sense, 写的时候一直卡壳，总用perceive

fircattyUID: 166248

------题目------
The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.
------正文------

Considerable academic disciplines change the way we perceive the world, while many disciplines created new ways to sense the world and some others have little effect on the way we perceive the world.

We can draw a new explanation of the same world we can touch through studying academic discipline. Copernicus studied Aristotle's theory that the earth was the center of the universe, and then he found it was groundless then proposed a new theory: the sun was the center of the universe. He claimed the earth was involving the sun all the time. Though it was rejected and abandoned by the contemporary authority, we still had a chance to progress in the long and infinite road for exploring the essence of the universe. The world was still the some world we could see before, but our viewpoints about the world had changed a lot, even too greatly to accept. To this point, we can say we see a same world as before but by studying the present academic principle and revised the old theory we can perceive the world more correctly.这个例子举得不是很好，到底是Copernicus通过学习改变了看法，还是我们学习改变了看法？又各自是学习了什么学科呢？

However, in some occasions, studying of an academic discipline help us to better understand the world without altering the way we perceive the world. Because the world is not the uniform world we can touch before. In other words, new academic principles or theories, opens a window to looking a new world胡乱断句了吧？. For example, we can not examinant examine bacteria and virus until the new essential skill and instrument were invented; we can not watch the remote stars until we have telescope, including electric telescope as the Hubble Telescope; we can not know the situation below hundreds of meters in deep sea until we have vehicles like sub-marine. Strictly speaking, the world is not the former world we ever touch. We have no idea about bacteria unless we can discover them with our eyes. To this point, some academic theories give us other new eyes on the world. Other weird and diverse worlds can be perceived by human being. Therefore, we can not insist the world is the same world as we perceived before, though the world is the same world.没有改变世界，但改变了对世界的认识，我怎么觉得好像B3和B2观点一样，没有however的感觉呢？另外，有个小小的提议，在例子中都没有提到学科，不如举例的时候加上通过对天文学的研究，对生物学的研究等等

To some extent, some abstruse academic disciplines are too abstract to be accepted by the public. They have little effect on their progress of perceiving of the world other than some experts in that field or scientists in that faculty. As a result, the way the whole human beings perceive the world has not been altered. I can say Einstein theory 应该是theory of relativity is strangerstrange to most of people all over the world, though they may hear of it. While scientists have been inspired by the great theory, especially during the studying process, the public are independent with it. In this point, we exaggerate the effect of studying an academic discipline.

In conclusion, some process of studying academic disciplines can alter the way we perceive the world; some one去掉 can add to our present way we perceive the world; and some one去掉 can do little to the way we perceive the world.

小改了几处，快考了，加油哦

fircattyUID: 166248

to 翦瞳
我刚刚写了一篇157，好像跟这篇有点相似

fircattyUID: 166248

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=307328
翦瞳有空的话就帮我看看吧

翦瞳UID: 184872

to fircatty
copernicus' example is to illustrate that by means of studying academic discipline (the Aristotle theory) copernicus found new theory which changed our way of perceiving the world.
"however" should be replaced by In addition/ moreover/furthermore/besides. I originally tend to demonstrate under some circumstance the world is not the same world after we have new skill or device to observe the world, but the expression is limited by time and slow reflection.