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In this issue, the speaker complains that the study of history places too much emphasis on individuals, and he contends that the most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. In my observation, this issue has some merit when considering the focus of history - the famous few. However, the author does not realize the study of history indeed pays attention to groups of people and he ignores the relationship between the famous few and the groups of people as well.（开头的感觉有点像argument）

I admit it is factual that the study of history emphasizes on individuals. When I was in high school, as I observed and was taught, most events were related to some special person(s). For example, when the issue of the Independence of America comes to my mind, the name G. Washington appears（alternatives：flashes in my mind / strikes me / comes to my mind） immediately. And when we talk about the progress of physics made in the 20th century, it is hard to miss A. Einstein.

However, the speaker forgets what behind the "famous few" are the majority, the events, and the trends. This might sound paradoxical, but there is no reason to deny that without the events and trends, we could get no "famous" individual. I find three compelling points to illustrate this paradox.

First, consider the origin of the famous few, we easily find out that these few, without exception, came from their own groups. Any of the famous few, in fact, was not single and alone. They almost always had their co-operators（可以这样说吗？）. Again let us come to the case of Washington, and I could never accept the notion that Washington built up the USA without any help from others who（定语从句的中心词是人的时候，只能用who/whom/that引导从句哈） were not paid attention to by the study of history. When Washington comes to my mind, Jefferson immediately follows, and I recognize the trend, the desire for an independent country from UK, which is no doubt recorded in the history books. In short, the assertion is groundless that history ignores that the famous few were from the trends of their time, and were pushed by the trends to the top of the wave of their times.

Second, the link between the famous few and groups lies in not only the fact that the few came from the groups, but also the truth that the few representing the groups. And this is why I contend that the few were pushed to the tip of the wave of times. To think deeper, we get the notion that people, even in the same group, which no matter how was defined（这句话总觉得有问题，however defined应该就可以了）, differentiate from each other. And this provides premise for the fact that someone represents for（去掉） the group while someone is represented. To admit that the so-called forgotten groups created the history has nothing to do with conceding the historical individuals pale in importance. With the same rationale and our common sense there is no difficulty to accept that Washington was a distinctive figure, whose qualification deserves the choice of history.

Third, it will be useful to realize the fact that the traits of the famous few were the traits demanded by the groups, as well as the identities. In the times of peace, the group would prefer to choose some peaceful（这词可以形容人吗？） persons to represent them; vise versa. Thus the identities of the famous few should be considered as the identities of the groups, at least to some extent. And in this sense, the identities of the groups were never forgotten.

In the final analysis, I agree that this issue has some merit when considering the emphasis on the famous few. But the author did not realize the study of history indeed pays attention to groups of people. Additionally, he ignores the links between the famous few and the groups of people as well. In my opinion, the famous few and the groups represented by the few should be discuss together.

虽然你明天就要考了，但我还是要说：
1.整篇充斥着argument的气息，我不知这是好是坏；
2.按理，似乎应该先写你支持的观点再写反对的，而不是倒转过来，莫非想取得什么奇效？
3.表达的语言质量下降很多，非常Chinglish的感觉；

还有一句：明天加油！！！