Issue13 @@A DREAM @@小组第1次作业 by wswjwj（江江）

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那个那个 素材啊 米准备啊 等我准备准备补上好不^^

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13. Many of the world’s lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

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濒危语种现状：面临灭绝，好多国家面临的问题
政府要保护：1.语言的重要性：交流的工具，文化的载体，思维方式的缩影，民族存在的根本条件
                           2.保存下来的好处：对人类的现代意义（文化意义，历史意义）与将来意义（思维多样性促进创新，子孙的珍贵文化遗产）

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        Languages are the foundation of our communication. We need languages to say, to write, to listen, and to live. However, do you know there are many of world’s lesser-known languages being lost just because fewer and fewer people speak them? It will be a catastrophe if the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken stay the attitude of ignoring. Our governments must take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

        It is hard to believe, there are more than one hundred languages which are just spoken by less than one hundred people. What’s more incredible, it’s possible that one man’s dead can announce that a language is extinct. There is a report said, only 4 percentages of modern languages are used by more than 97 percentages of contemporary human. What’s the meaning? On another way of saying is that only 3 percentages of our people must say the 96 percentages of languages in our world! Moreover, it’s not a problem for some developed countries. The country which has the biggest number of languages in danger, more than 190, is India. Faced to this circumstance, governments should not say nothing to this amorphous treasure.

        But a contradiction seems hard to resolve. As only few people say them, these lesser-known languages maybe have lost the significance to exist. On one hand, it’s obviously to say that governments may be burdened with no responsibility about the lost languages. On the other hand, however, I must tell this view is fully wrong.
At first, we must understand what we are losing. It is the language. Languages are the basic tools to communicate with human. What’s more, languages are not only the vehicles of our communication, but also the support of cultures. As a culture exist, its language came at the start, then write down all about the culture. But at the end, when a culture went to end, but even the language is still alive, the culture must shine itself just like still existed. What will happen when the language missed? It must be a calamity to this culture, it will put the end. As a language, it concludes too many knowledge and concept about a kind of thinking. That we lose a language even means we lose a way of thinking.
               
          As followed, there are a great deal reasons what let us to save languages. The language tell us what a beautiful culture we have, tell us what a wealthy history we have, tell us what a wonderful future we have. At present time, the cultural invasion become more and more severe and the hegemonic countries don’t only intrude the domain, but also invade the culture. To local government, it must be valued as the most important mission to resist the invasion and to save own culture. And also, for our next generation, we must preserve our languages as treasures. History may be only mothballed in the language. Moreover, languages save the ways of thinking. The multiplicity of our thinking can make more great innovation. The future is also tell us we government can’t give up saving our every language.

        As the situation shows, we can’t let our lesser-known language become extinct. For the past, languages saved the history; for the present, languages tell us the culture; for the future, languages will lead the way. Government must play the most important role to save languages. We can’t let any language disappear.

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Languages are the foundation of our communication. We need languages to say, to write, to listen, and to live. However, do you know there are many of world’s lesser-known languages being lost just because fewer and fewer people speak them? It will be a catastrophe if the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken stay the attitude of ignoring. Our （是不是你也是这些国家的人？）governments must take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

        It is hard to believe, there are more than one hundred languages which are just spoken by less than one hundred people. What’s more incredible, it’s possible that one man’s dead can announce that a language is extinct. There is a report said, only 4 percentages of modern languages are used by more than 97 percentages of contemporary human. What’s the meaning? On another way of saying is that only 3 percentages of our people must say the 96 percentages of languages in our world! Moreover, it’s not a problem for some developed countries. The country which has the biggest number of languages in danger, more than 190, is India（没看懂举这个例子什么意思，是说明印度征服应该保护吗？）. Faced to this circumstance, governments should not say nothing to this amorphous treasure.

        But a contradiction seems hard to resolve. As only few people say them, these lesser-known languages maybe have lost the significance to exist. On one hand, it’s obviously to say that governments may be burdened with no responsibility about the lost languages. On the other hand, however, I must tell this view is fully wrong.
At first, we must understand what we are losing. It is the language. Languages are the basic tools to communicate with human. What’s more, languages are not only the vehicles of our communication, but also the support of cultures. As a culture exist, its language came at the start, then write down all about the culture. But at the end, when a culture went to end, but even the language is still alive, the culture must shine itself just like still existed. What will happen when the language missed? It must be a calamity to this culture, it will put the end. As a language, it concludes too many knowledge and concept about a kind of thinking. That we lose a language even means we lose a way of thinking.
               
          As followed, there are a great deal reasons what let us to save languages. The language tell us what a beautiful culture we have, tell us what a wealthy history we have, tell us what a wonderful future we have. At present time, the cultural invasion become more and more severe and the hegemonic countries don’t only intrude the domain, but also invade the culture. To local government, it must be valued as the most important mission to resist the invasion and to save own culture. And also, for our next generation, we must preserve our languages as treasures. History may be only mothballed in the language. Moreover, languages save the ways of thinking. The multiplicity of our thinking can make more great innovation. The future is also tell us we government can’t give up saving our every language.

        As the situation shows, we can’t let our lesser-known language become extinct. For the past, languages saved the history; for the present, languages tell us the culture; for the future, languages will lead the way. Government must play the most important role to save languages. We can’t let any language disappear.

我觉得是不是应该把第四段改为写 建议政府应该怎么做，个人观点（有待探讨）
我AW太菜，修改比较简单~

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濒危语种现状：面临灭绝，好多国家面临的问题
政府要保护：1.语言的重要性：交流的工具，文化的载体，思维方式的缩影，民族存在的根本条件（这种说法我觉得不太恰当，比如说，某民族的一种语言消失了被另一种通用语言代替后，这个民族难道就消失了？如我们国家的一些少数民族同胞们也正面临着这样一种危机）
                  2.保存下来的好处：对人类的现代意义（文化意义，历史意义）与将来意义（思维多样性促进创新，子孙的珍贵文化遗产）


Languages are the foundation of our communication. We need languages to say, to write, to listen, and to live. However, do you know there are many of world’s lesser-known languages being lost just because fewer and fewer people speak them? It will be a catastrophe if the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken stay the attitude of ignoring. Our governments must take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.（开头写得相当不错，望尘莫及，哈哈）

It is hard to believe, there are more than one hundred languages which are just spoken by less than one hundred people. What’s more incredible, it’s possible that one man’s dead can announce that a language is extinct. There is a report said, only 4 percentages of modern languages are used by more than 97 percentages of contemporary human. What’s the meaning? On another way of saying is that only 3 percentages of our people must say the 96 percentages of languages in our world! Moreover, it’s not a problem for some developed countries. The country which has the biggest number of languages in danger, more than 190, is India. Faced to this circumstance, governments should not say nothing to this amorphous treasure.

But a contradiction seems hard to resolve. As only few people say them, these lesser-known languages maybe have lost the significance to exist. On one hand, it’s obviously to say that governments may be burdened with no responsibility about the lost languages. On the other hand, however, I must tell this view is fully wrong.

At first, we must understand what we are losing. It is the language. Languages are the basic tools to communicate with human. What’s more, languages are not only the vehicles of our communication, but also the support of cultures. As a culture exist, its language came at the start, then write down all about the culture（in my opinion, the sentence lacks the accuracy: because as far as I known, some peoples pass down their culture through oral language and they do not have the written languages at all. ）. But at the end, when a culture went to end, but even the language is still alive, the culture must shine itself just like still existed. What will happen when the language missed? It must be a calamity to this culture, it will put the end. As a language, it concludes (this word used here, in my eye, it is not proper) too many knowledge and concept about a kind of thinking. That we lose a language even means we lose a way of thinking.

As followed, there are a great deal reasons what let us to save languages. ( the transition sounds well, but the sentence sounds like the Chinese English.)The language tell us what a beautiful culture we have, tell us what a wealthy history we have, tell us what a wonderful future we have. At present time, the cultural invasion become more and more severe and the hegemonic countries don’t only intrude the domain, but also invade the culture. (the using of the word ‘invade’is not proper enough, it is especially used in material object)To local government, it must be valued as the most important mission to resist the invasion and to save own culture. And also, for our next generation, we must preserve our languages as treasures. History may be only mothballed in the language. Moreover, languages save (the word used too frequent) the ways of thinking. The multiplicity of our thinking can make more great innovation. The future is also tell us we government can’t give up saving our every language.(typical Chinese English )
As the situation shows, we can’t let our lesser-known language become extinct. For the past, languages saved the history; for the present, languages tell us the culture; for the future, languages will lead the way. Government must play the most important role to save languages. We can’t let any language disappear.

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Languages are the foundation of our communication. We need languages to say, to write, to listen, and to live. However, do you know there are many of world’s lesser-known languages being lost just because fewer and fewer people speak them? It will be a catastrophe if the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken stay the attitude of ignoring. Our governments must take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.开头写的不错，值得学习。

        It is hard to believe,标点符号用错，觉得应该改为it is hard to believe that there are more than one hundred languages which are just spoken by less than one hundred people. What’s more incredible, it’s possible that one man’s dead应该改为death can announce that a language is extinct. There is a report said, only 4 percentages of modern languages are used by more than 97 percentages of contemporary human. What’s the meaning? On another way of saying is that only 3 percentages of our people must say the 96 percentages of languages in our world! Moreover, it’s not a problem for some developed countries. The country which has the biggest number of languages in danger, more than 190, is India. Faced to应该给为facing this circumstance, governments should not say nothing to this amorphous treasure.

        But a contradiction seems hard to resolve. As only few people say them, these lesser-known languages maybe have lost the significance to exist. On one hand, it’s obviously应该用形容词 to say that governments may be burdened with no responsibility about the lost languages. On the other hand, however觉的二者有重复嫌疑, I must tell this view is fully wrong.
At first, we must understand what we are losing. It is the language. Languages are the basic tools to communicate with human. What’s more, languages are not only the vehicles of our communication, but also the support of cultures. As a culture exist, its language came at the start, then write down all about the culture. But at the end, when a culture went to end, but even the language is still alive, the culture must shine itself just like still existed. What will happen when the language missed? It must be a calamity to this culture, it will put the end. As a language, it concludes too many knowledge and concept about a kind of thinking. That we lose a language even means we lose a way of thinking.
               
          As followed, there are a great deal reasons what let us to save languages. The language tell us what a beautiful culture we have, tell us what a wealthy history we have, tell us what a wonderful future we have. At present time, the cultural invasion become more and more severe and the hegemonic countries don’t only intrude the domain什么domain, but also invade the culture. To local government, it must be valued as the most important mission to resist the invasion and to save own culture. And also, for our next generation, we must preserve our languages as treasures. History may be only mothballed in the language. Moreover, languages save the ways of thinking. The multiplicity of our thinking can make more great innovation. The future is also tell us we government can’t give up saving our every language.

        As the situation shows, we can’t let our lesser-known language become extinct. For the past, languages saved the history; for the present, languages tell us the culture; for the future, languages will lead the way. Government must play the most important role to save languages. We can’t let any language disappear.

总体感觉：文章的思想还是很好的，不过语法错误有点多，除此之外，个人觉的楼主的语言功底需要加强，看看能不能用复杂一些的句子，不要全篇都是简单句。不过楼主的用词还是不错的。加油啊！

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Languages are the foundation of our communication. We need languages to say, to write, to listen, and to live. However, do you know there are many of world’s lesser-known languages being lost just because fewer and fewer people speak them? It will be a catastrophe if the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken stay the attitude of ignoring. Our governments must take measures to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.(觉得must用的也些太绝对，提出个人观点时最好别用，譬如可以说i assume that the government should。。。个人观点，嘻嘻)

        It is hard to believe, there are more than one hundred languages which are just spoken by less than one hundred people. What’s more incredible, it’s possible that one man’s dead can announce that a language is extinct. There is a report said, only 4 percentages of modern languages are used by more than 97 percentages of contemporary human. What’s the meaning? On another way of saying is that only 3 percentages of our people must say the 96 percentages of languages in our world! Moreover, it’s not a problem for some developed countries. The country which has the biggest number of languages in danger, more than 190, is India. Faced to this circumstance, governments should not say nothing to this amorphous treasure.（这段主要论述很多语言确实要灭绝了，就整篇文章逻辑来说非常恰当，当是最好在开头加上一句本段中心局“很多语言正在消失”；设问出现的频率有些太高了；段中逻辑的推理以并列和递进为主，而且大多为事实，缺少论证，不太深刻）

        But a contradiction seems hard to resolve. As only few people say them, these lesser-known languages maybe have lost the significance to exist. On one hand, it’s obviously to say that governments may be burdened with no responsibility about the lost languages. On the other hand, however, I must tell this view is fully wrong. （刚看开头吓一跳，以为你要拆自己的桥呢，最好把最后一句，即观点放到段首，there is a fully wrong view that。。。。。）
        At first, we must understand what we are losing. It is the language. Languages are the basic tools to communicate with human. What’s more, languages are not only the vehicles of our communication, but also the support of cultures. As a culture existed, its language came at the start, then write down（主语是language？） all about the culture. But at the end, when a culture went to end, but even the language is still alive, the culture must shine itself just like still existed（貌似有逻辑错误）. What will happen when the language missed? It must be a calamity to this culture, it will put the end（?）. As a language, it concludes too many knowledge and concept（复数乎） about a kind of thinking. That we lose a language even means we lose a way of thinking.（最后两句话有些突兀，而且这一段可以和上一段放一起吧）
               
          As followed, there are a great deal reasons what let us to （let后面不用to，仔细。。。）save languages. The language tell us what a beautiful culture we have, tell us what a wealthy history we have, tell us what a wonderful future we have. At present time, the cultural invasion become more and more severe and the hegemonic countries don’t only intrude the domain, but also invade the culture. To local government, it must be valued as the most important mission to resist the invasion and to save own culture. And also, for our next generation, we must preserve our languages as treasures. History may be only mothballed in the language. Moreover, languages save the ways of thinking. The multiplicity of our thinking can make more great innovation. The future is also tell us we government can’t give up saving our every language.（混乱+混乱，句和句之间，内容和中心句之间关系不紧密）

        As the situation shows, we can’t let our lesser-known language become extinct. For the past, languages saved the history; for the present, languages tell us the culture; for the future, languages will lead the way. Government must play the most important role to save languages. We can’t let any language disappear.（这个，写到后来是不是困了。。。）

总体框架没问题，注意逻辑的深入，还有语言的丰富
那个，都是我个人观点，有些可能不恰当，是不是有打我的冲动- -