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daisy8936UID: 2999019

3月14日
先是综合
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The speaker thinks that working four days a week won't benefit either the company or the employees, which is contrary to the reading section.
Firstly, the company won't profit. However, the cost will rise instead of remaining the same as the reading section suggests. Although the speaker agrees with the passage that the wages will keep the same since a four-day worker only get 80% of the income, there will be other extra costs. For examples, the training and medical costs will be more because each individual need those no matter he/she works four or five days a week. And so does the office and the computer costs. That will make the company spend more than before.
The rate of unemployment will not reduce either. For hiring new staff is so expensive that the company would rather have the old staff to work overtime. They will expect the employees to finish the same amount of work ignoring how many hours they work for a week. So there won't be additional jobs. What's worse, the work load is getting heavier.
At last, the speaker considers that more free time is not good for individual worker. There will be a risk of reducing work diligence. And less work time may prevent the employee from advancing or getting promoting. That might be a first step of unemployment during economic downturn. And the company prefers a worker who works five days a week to be the manager for he/she has more time to supervise the whole company.

daisy8936UID: 2999019

2011年3月14日
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独立作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? do you think people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else？1 `$ N4 g1 Y$
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We buy things from all over the world in our daily life. There is radio from Japan, Clothes from China, and computer made in American. Mostly we buy what we like, for example, things with high quality or good looking. However, sometimes we consider more. Some suggest that we should by things made in our own country. I agree with that in some extent.
In certain circumstance, we have the responsibility to buy things from local factory. There was time when the country’s industry was in its infancy and need assistance. At that moment, most government would encourage citizens to buy things made in their own country even though the product might not as good or cheap as imports. In that way, local industry would develop better and eventually able to compete with foreign companies. As well, people are supposed to buy local products when the country or city is run into some kind of trouble. For instance, we all know that Sichuan had a terrible earthquake last year which destroyed the industry. After that, the national travelling bureau printed a lot of tour tickets for places of interest of that province and encouraged people to visit Sichuan instead of travelling abroad.
However, I have to admit that the local industry should not be over protected either. After a period of development or recover, the factory should face up to the fierce competition of the international market. Only in that way can the company be forced to make progress. If the government still deprive the right for choice of the consumers, neither the industry nor the customers will benefit. The company will lose the dynamic to update the product since they can sell up whether the goods are of high quality. And the customers will not be pleased for they have to buy things more expensive than same things made somewhere else.
To sum it up, the country can encourage people to buy local things when the industry is brand new or needs special assistance. But when the situation gets better, the consumer are free to buy whatever they like, and the local companies shouldn’t be sheltered any more.

zhennuptUID: 2748934

We buy things from all over the world inour daily life. There isare radios(当表收音机时, 可数) from Japan, Clothes from China, and computersmade in American. Mostly we buy what we like, for example, things with highquality or good looking. However, sometimes we consider more. Some suggest thatwe should buy things made in our own country. Iagree with thatin to some extent(一般是to some extent, 好像么听说过in some extent).
In Under certaincircumstance, we have the responsibility to buy things from local factories. There was time when the country’s industrywas in its infancy and needs assistance(是想表达虚拟语气吗? 不过一个完整的句子的虚拟用过去时好吗, 或许用if加过去时接后面作完整句子). At that moment, mostgovernment would encourage citizens to buy things made in their own countryeven though the product might not be as good orcheap as imports. In that way, local industry would develop better andeventually be able to compete with foreigncompanies. As well, people are supposed to buy local products when the countryor city is run into some kind of trouble. For instance, we all know thatSichuan had a terrible earthquake last year which destroyed the industry. Afterthat, the national travelling bureau printed a lot of tour tickets for placesof interest of that province and encouraged people to visit Sichuan instead oftravelling abroad.
However, I have to admitpoint out(admit 一般多见于转折前, 用在转折后是不是语气有点弱也不太合适呢) that the localindustry should not be over protected either. After a period of development orrecover, the factory should face up to the fierce competition of theinternational market. Only in that way can the company be forced to makeprogress. If the government still deprive the rightfor choice of the consumers of the right forchoices, neither the industry nor the customers will benefit. Thecompany will lose the dynamicliveliness to update the product since they can sell up(sell up 是指为还债而变卖) whether the goods are ofhigh quality. And the customers will not be pleased for they have to buy thingsmore expensive than same things made somewhere else.
To sum it up, the country can encouragepeople to buy local things when the industry is underdevelopedbrandnew (brand new可能指商品时崭新的更恰当吧) or needs special assistance. But when the situation gets better, theconsumers are free to buy whatever they like,and the local companies shouldn’t be sheltered any more.


下划线表删除的.

写的很好. 二段主要举例论证, 三段推理也比较流畅. 句式表达丰富, 字数也非常多啊.
加油.

...
好像我不是你们组了...

daisy8936UID: 2999019

3# zhennupt

谢谢！我觉得underdeveloped这个词改的特别好！
你是我们组的呀，呵呵，我尽快去改你的~

corrine97UID: 2868974

We buy things from all over the world in our daily life. There is （are）radio（radios） from Japan, Clothes from China, and computer made in American. Mostly we buy what we like, for example, things with high quality or good looking. However, sometimes we consider more. Some suggest that we should by things made in our own country. I agree with that in some extent.' |) Z' w6 c% D3 Z2 \
In certain circumstance, we have the responsibility to buy things from local factory.(factories) There was time when the country’s industry was in its infancy and need assistance. At that moment, most government would encourage citizens to buy things made in their own country even though the product might not as good or cheap as imports. In that way, local industry would develop better and eventually able to compete with foreign companies. As well, people are supposed to buy local products when the country or city is run into some kind of trouble. For instance, we all know that Sichuan had a terrible earthquake last year which destroyed the industry. After that, the national travelling bureau printed a lot of tour tickets for places of interest of that province and encouraged people to visit Sichuan instead of travelling abroad.
; p# ]  d6 I- O  Z  P/ j' K* A* rHowever, I have to admit that the local industry should not be over protected either. After a period of development or recover, the factory should face up to the fierce competition of the international market. Only in that way can the company be forced to make progress. If the government still deprive the right for choice of the consumers, neither the industry nor the customers will benefit. The company will lose the dynamic to update the product since they can sell up whether the goods are of high quality. And the customers will not be pleased for they have to buy things more expensive than same things made somewhere else.; P9 ^7 X- ?5 V" C! @3 X& A. u
To sum it up, the country can encourage people to buy local things when the industry is brand new or needs special assistance. But when the situation gets better, the consumer are free to buy whatever they like, and the local companies shouldn’t be sheltered any more.
语言流畅，论证清晰，注意一些小细节就行了!加油！！

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.14 综合改
The speaker thinks that working four days a week won't benefit either the company or the employees, which is contrary to the reading section.

Firstly, the company won't profit.（这句表达得太chinglish了！！读中文明白你的意思是公司不会获得利润。但是profit是一个名词或者动词，不是形容词，所以应该说 will not get profit） However,(此处和上句没有体现出转折的关系吧) the cost will rise instead of remaining the same as the reading section suggests. Although the speaker agrees with the passage that the wages will keep the same since a four-day worker only get 80% of the income, there will be other extra costs.（花费一样的好像不是income吧。是那个medical care） For examples, the training and medical costs will be more because each individual need those no matter he/she works four or five days a week. And so does the office（应该是space） and the computer costs. That will make the company spend more than before.' F: T' ]& N  H6 d, t2 C$ f

The rate of unemployment will not reduce either. For hiring new staff is so expensive that the company would rather have the old（old表述不准确吧，old是指年纪老的员工，你想表达得应该是previous staff） staff to work overtime. They will expect the employees to finish the same amount of work （by） ignoring how many hours they work for a week. So there won't be additional jobs. What's worse, the work load is getting heavier.& P$ u5 U# ~4 r5 ^

At last, the speaker considers that more free time is not good for individual worker.（不是说more free time is not good for individual worker.，而是说工作四天会对员工造成。。。方面的影响，如果按你的说法的话，那一个星期工作7天就最好了） There will be a risk of reducing work diligence. And less work time may prevent the employee from advancing or getting promoting. That might be a first step of unemployment during economic downturn（原文没有说economic downturn）. And the company prefers a worker who works five days a week to be the manager for he/she has more time to supervise the whole company.


缺点我都标注了，注意听到的点要和原文相符，不要附加自己的想法和意见！注意句子语言的表达，有些读起来就知道不符合英文的逻辑。加油

daisy8936UID: 2999019

请各位大牛帮修改，感觉这一次的独立作文很难展开，论点比较不易选择，因此写了两次才写好。多谢！

另外，关于综合写作，我拿不准对于听力中的观点是应该用一般现在式还是一般过去式，请高人指点~

ChwyUID: 3027653

LZ的作文下载下来打开是错误的 不知道有没有传好? 才13KB?

sEven_zhUID: 3007258

3.16独立改好了

daisy8936UID: 2999019

8# Chwy

我看了，是没有问题的呀，请你帮忙改下，谢谢！

daisy8936UID: 2999019

9# sEven_zh

谢谢你，我刚看了TPO，才发现独立作文最少得300字，幸亏被你指出来，多谢提醒了！

daisy8936UID: 2999019

3月18日独立+综合，谢谢修改！

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.18 综合改
The speaker argues that none of the three hypotheses in the passage is convincing. He states the reasons one by one as follows.
First, he casts doubt on the theory that Chaco structures were purely residential. If the great houses are apartment buildings, there must have some fireworks for cooking. However, the amount of fireworks excavated in the relics can only afford to cook for (原文是around)10 families. Since there should have been more than 100 families in the building, the structure should not be residential.
Second, there are not enough evidences proving that the Chaco structures were used to store grain maize. Through excavation, people found that there aren't any traces of grain or containers in the building. If the building has stored crops as the passage says, there must have some spilled grains or left containers. However, none of them have been found.
Finally, the speaker disagrees with the third theory in the passaging proposing that houses were used as ceremonial centers. The archaeologists in the passage consider the structure as ceremonial center because they have found broken pots in an enormous mound. But the speaker says that in that mound there are also many other unexpected old materials, such as building materials like sand or stones. So he believes that the structure might have been a construction work where a few constructors lived. （pots没有论证啊！）
That is how the lecture opposes the specific theories discussed in the reading passage.

austen06UID: 2841836

3.18 修改

daisy8936UID: 2999019

综合作文刚写完就不见了，气得我...所以这次只有独立作文，求批改！