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little_catyUID：3014175

8月2日


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Recently, there is a topic discussed by many people about whether parents should control children what they will do in the future or allow them to determine by themselves. Some people assert that parents have the ability and responsibility to help decide children’s future for the reason that they have more social experience and they can get to know their children well. While, as to me, parents should give children more space to decide their future because of following several reasons.

First of all, children can become more confident and interested in things which are chosen by themselves. The measure of encouraging children to do what they have interest in can stimulate their confidence and interest. As we know, interest is the best teacher, which can lead to success someday with amount of effort. In other words, interest is the key heading success. For instance, almost everyone in the society has heard of or is taking advantage of Microsoft, a company providing convenient and useful software for almost 90% costumers all over the world, whose CEO, Bill Gates, is the riches person in the world. But unexpected, Bill Gates would have to be a lawyer as his parents expected when he was a child, and if so, a talented scientist would disappear and people have to enjoy the service after a couple of years. And there are also many successful people like Bill Gates choosing their own way against their parents, but later they all gain sweet fruit from different aspects.

Secondly, children have the tendency to behavior oppositely to their parents especially when they face pressure. Easily to be understood, this phenomenon comes from a sense of resistance and self-cognition of children, which shows strong desire to become independent by breaking parents’ tight yoke. In this way, children may disagree with every advise brought out by parents no matter whether the advise is advanced or not, unfortunately leading to large numbers of extra mistakes. To solve this problem, parents should give children the right to choose what they really want to make them feel respect and confident, so that, the number of mistakes can be reduced.

In sums, parents should protect and encourage children’s interest and make them feel respected in order to make more concentrate on what they want to achieve and make more efforts. If children have enough space to show their talent, they will cherish each chance to make progress and become a valuable person to the society.

happinessviviUID：2837177

搞定！

little_catyUID：3014175

2# happinessvivi
happy,我写了开头段啊，是不是没看到啊~~

little_catyUID：3014175

希望大家能多提些意见~在此感谢了~

草莓刨冰UID：3141036

Recently, there is a topic discussed by many people about whether parents should control children what they will do in the future or allow them to determine by themselves. Some people assert that parents have the ability and responsibility to help decide children’s future for the reason that they have more social experience and they can get to know their children well. While, as to me, parents should give children more space to decide their future because of following several reasons.

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First of all, children can become more confident and interested in things which are chosen by themselves. The measure of encouraging children to do what they have interest in (are interested in更好吧，或者把in放在前面) can stimulate their confidence and interest. As we know, interest is the best teacher, which can lead to success someday with amount of effort. In other words, interest is the key heading success(啥意思？). For instance, almost everyone in the society has heard of or is taking advantage of Microsoft, a company providing convenient and useful software for almost 90% costumers all over the world, whose CEO, Bill Gates, is the riches (richest) person in the world. (这句话的从句套太多了，前面还在修饰Microsoft,后面就修饰Bill Gates了.建议把这个句子拆一下。)But unexpected, Bill Gates would have to be a lawyer as his parents expected when he was a child, and if so, a talented scientist would disappear and people have to enjoy the service after a couple of years. And there are also many successful people like Bill Gates choosing their own way against their parents, but later they all gain sweet fruit from different aspects.

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Secondly, children have the tendency to behavior oppositely to their parents especially when they face pressure. Easily to be understood, this phenomenon comes from a sense of resistance and self-cognition of children, which shows strong desire to become independent by breaking parents’ tight yoke. In this way, children may disagree with every advise brought out by parents no matter whether the advise is advanced or not, unfortunately leading to large numbers of extra mistakes. To solve this problem, parents should give children the right to choose what they really want to make them feel respect and confident, so that, the number of mistakes can be reduced.% n- s" o& (感觉最后两句语法有点问题，但是不知道哪儿有问题)

In sums, parents should protect and encourage children’s interest and make them feel respected in order to make more concentrate on what they want to achieve and make more efforts. If children have enough space to show their talent, they will cherish each chance to make progress and become a valuable person to the society.

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

不好意思，修改晚了。
我的在91楼
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1279272-10-1.html

little_catyUID：3014175

8月3日独立作文
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should manage their own money at a young age.


Financial responsibility is a considerable critical ability for a person during his whole lifetime. For this reason, people argue that whether parents should allow children manage their money all alone. From my perspective, parents have better limit children’s expenditure other than give them right to purchase all by themselves.

At first, children have little sense of rationality and self-control in face of tempt. As children have just stepped into the society for just a few years, they don’t have enough time to get to know how to behavior appropriately. So, people can usually catch a scene that a child strongly demand more sugar regardless his bad teeth, or cry loudly to buy new toys no matter how many similar ones he has owned. These are common phenomena appearing in our daily life which warn us not to allow children manage their own money. What’s worse, if a person developed a habit of sumptuousness in childhood, he can hardly get over the extravagant financial mode in latter life, and this pattern will lead to a bad financial situation when he earn money himself.

Additionally, the condition that children get what they desire too easily can result in bad effects.
For example, many people born in a rich family spend their whole time in playing, smoking or even drugs rather than working to seek happiness and excitement, while opposite, they can only feel more boring and upset but not happiness. And, these problems mostly attribute to their parents’ connivance about money when they are children. So seldom valuable things have they done that they cannot gain true happiness and satisfaction for work with great efforts. In this vicious cycle, their corporeal and spiritual energy is to decline day after day.

All in all, financial issues are quite essential problems that parents should develop children’s expensing habits at early time. In this way, children will learn more about self-control and make a solid base of their rationally financial investment and purchasing, and thus, they can own a stable and harmonious life

欢迎大家多提意见啊，谢谢了~

Fruit~UID：2559265

CEO, BILL GATES这句话在WHOSE前就可以断开了.  用很长的句子的两大坏处: 1. 容易让人分神; 2. 不是不鼓礼用长句.  老中(排除那些多年只看英文JOURNAL, 用英文写PAPER的老中), 长句一用多必犯语法错.

Fruit~UID：2559265

第2段的第2句感觉在重复第1句话

Fruit~UID：2559265

Unexpectedly, Bill Gates would have been a lawyer if he followed the path designed by his parents in his youth.

I would suggest the above expression.

Fruit~UID：2559265

有些语法错, 和单复数的问题.

最后还是建医不要老用长句.

lisq9989UID：2110509

改好了，有不同意见Q我，单独交流也可以

julijoneUID：2843727

写得不错 加油

little_catyUID：3014175

10# Fruit~ 感谢fruit的中肯意见，我在英语写作方面确实有挺多欠缺，得到大家的指点后受益良多，会继续努力的~

愤怒公爵UID：2929648

改好了，楼主要多练习一些~