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westlife007_huUID: 2270665

47 "Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."

Dose not society place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker asserts? I concede that society, to some degree, indeed dose not pay much attention to cultivating intellect which contains the abilities of reasoning, cognition, and creation and comprehension. However, people nowadays have commenced to conduct a series of innovations so as to transform the status quo.

The chief reason of my agreement on the speaker’s claim involves the current educational mechanism. On one hand, tests are none the less the principle criterion to assess the ability of a student, resulting in a negative effect that neither will the students and teachers place stress on fostering the reasoning, cognitive, creative and other skills. Instead, they are apt to leave no stone unturned in their efforts upon how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams. Furthermore, in the test system lies another hidden harm particularly in some Asian countries that getting a high grade merely calls for putting a host of hours in constantly repeating to rote a spate of knowledge by the means of mnemonics, which are apt to decrease the ability of cognition and reasoning. On the other hand, in this era of information explode, as a student, we have to learn multiple courses covering the knowledge from diversities of fields so that no time and energy are left for us to commit to analyzing, grasping，probing knowledge in depth and thus build a comprehensive structure of knowledge by fully utilizing the capacity of intellect. As a result, we are deprived of opportunities to develop the intellect. Chronically, there is a tendency that the intellect of students is rendered inactive and even obtuse.

2

The second reason why I generally assent to this statement has to do with the development of technology. Along with the quickening advancement of technology, we reduce assembly-line into reality in the realm of manufacture, which not only boost the efficiency of productivity but also might be tempting to restrain the progress of intellectual capacity of human beings. In this sense, automation render us slaves to machines that a large proportion of workers merely focus on the operative skills whereas seldom ponder questions like how those machines work and why they work in this way, which are conducive to improve the abilities of reasoning and comprehension, let alone delve into ameliorating the machines and creating more effective ones. Moreover, varied professional training schools also underestimate the significance of reasoning and creation more or less but simply lay much value on the proficiency of operating machines, which never goes a long way to gain in the intellect. Consequently, it makes possible ossification and even regression of the intellect.

3

Nervertheless,what really relieves us a bit is that more and more people have begun to realize the ponderance of the intellect, neglecting which obviously puts sands in the wheels of the evolution of society. Recent efforts to reform public and professional education in a number of countries say, European-American and Asian countries have been characterized by an unprecedented endeavor to increase the consciousness of educating intellectual ability. For example, a teaching approach that connects/integrate knowledge and theories with social practice has been waged and received accolades in many schools. In the process of this way of learning, students no longer purely memorize or smatter knowledge, to the contrary they make the best use of their reasoning skills and other skills to discover practical problems in daily life and apply what they have learned to cope with them, in which way the intellect of them can be sharpen gradually. There are parallels in advanced education that universities and colleges encourage and afford students funds to carry out scientific researches in order to nurture talents with creative ability and rigorous reasoning intellect. Besides, in the United States, the promulgation of No Child Left Behind Act enacted by Bush government reinforces the education of basic subjects especially accentuates the importance of learning mathematic, through which, you possibly find your reasoning and logic intellect soar.

To sum up, while society, as a matter of fact, have not attached great magnitude to the intellect, on balance, people have already been aware of the serious consequence of the present  educational mechanism and are striving to attempt to embark upon a wide range of reforms to overcome its disadvantages and deter the situation from deteriorating.

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-6-26 02:28 编辑 ]

ostrich1986UID: 2238177

我下个月再给你改可以么?我最近要考试了 特别赶 不好意思啊 一定补上
I follow the reasoning that……  我的理由是……
（用法）在论证中，用于中心论证，即论点给出后的紧接着的具体理由或论据的阐述。

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

没关系的啦,谁没有忙的时候啊,下个月我也有两门要考,说不定也没时间帮你们改
呵呵,考试加油!

ostrich1986UID: 2238177

Dose not society place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker asserts? I concede that society, to some degree, indeed dose not pay much attention to cultivating intellect which contains the abilities of reasoning, cognition, and creation and comprehension. However, people nowadays have commenced to conduct a series of innovations so as to transform the status quo.

The chief reason of my agreement on the speaker’s claim involves the current educational mechanism. On（the我很确定修锐很确定的讲过正确的用法要有the在这） one hand, tests are none the less the principle criterion to assess the ability of a student, resulting in a negative effect that neither will the students and teachers place stress on fostering the reasoning, cognitive, creative and other skills.（好漂亮的句子）Instead, they are apt to leave no stone unturned in their efforts（请指教？不遗余力？你sure么？） upon how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams.（能说说这句话的结构么？） Furthermore, in the test system lies another hidden harm particularly in some Asian countries that getting a high grade merely calls for putting a host of hours in constantly repeating to rote a spate of knowledge by the means of mnemonics, which are apt to decrease the ability of cognition and reasoning. On the other hand, in this era of information explode(exploding?), as a student, we have to learn multiple courses covering the knowledge from diversities of fields so that no time and energy are left for us to commit to analyzing, grasping，probing knowledge in depth and thus(in order to?) build a comprehensive structure of knowledge by fully utilizing the capacity of intellect. As a result, we are deprived of opportunities to develop the intellect. Chronically, there is a tendency that the intellect of students is rendered inactive and even obtuse.

2

The second reason why I generally assent to this statement has to do with the development of technology. Along with the quickening advancement of technology, we reduce（应该是增加吧？） assembly-line into reality in the realm of manufacture, which not only boost the efficiency of productivity but also might be tempting to restrain the progress of intellectual capacity of human beings. In this sense, automation render us slaves to machines that a large proportion of workers merely focus on the operative skills whereas seldom ponder questions like how those machines work and why they work in this way, which are conducive to improve the abilities of reasoning and comprehension, let alone delve into ameliorating the machines and creating more effective ones. Moreover, varied professional training schools also underestimate the significance of reasoning and creation more or less but simply lay much value on（可以这样搭配么？积累了啊） the proficiency of operating machines, which never goes a long way to gain in the intellect. Consequently, it makes possible ossification and even regression of the intellect.

3

Nervertheless（拼错）, what really relieves us a bit is that more and more people have begun to realize the ponderance（这个词在collins和韦氏里面没有 word也不认识建议换一个） of the intellect, neglecting which obviously puts sands in the wheels of the evolution of society（忽视无疑是对社会改革的阻碍？是这么理解这个美句么？）. Recent efforts to reform public and professional education in a number of countries say, European-American and Asian countries have been characterized by an unprecedented endeavor to increase the consciousness of educating intellectual ability. For example, a teaching approach that connects/integrate knowledge and theories with social practice has been waged and received accolades in many schools. In the process of this way of learning, students no longer purely memorize or smatter knowledge, to the contrary they make the best use of their reasoning skills and other skills to discover practical problems in daily life and apply what they have learned to cope with them, in which way the intellect of them can be sharpen gradually. There are parallels in advanced education that universities and colleges(顺序反了先学院再大学好一点小问题了) encourage and afford students funds to carry out scientific researches in order to nurture talents with creative ability and rigorous reasoning intellect. Besides, in the United States, the promulgation of No Child Left Behind Act enacted by Bush government reinforces the education of basic subjects especially accentuates the importance of learning mathematic, through which, you（他们告诉我别用第2人称） possibly find your reasoning and logic intellect soar.

To sum up, while society, as a matter of fact, have not attached great magnitude to the intellect, on balance（这个怎么说呢？我觉得这个平衡是两个事物做比较这里的逻辑关系我觉得是问题和补救）, people have already been aware of the serious consequence of the present  educational mechanism and are striving to attempt to embark upon a wide range of reforms to overcome its disadvantages and deter the situation from deteriorating.

我告诉过你我很仰慕你么？

[ 本帖最后由 ostrich1986 于 2006-12-26 18:19 编辑 ]

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

leave no stone unturned
是想方设法,千方百计的意思,我sure,理解成不遗余力也应该可以

how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams.
意思是他们在如何顺利通过考试方面想尽办法,包括投机取巧甚至考试作弊,不知道能不能用embracing,我就是想用他替换including和containing

lay value on=lay emphasis on

ponderance 我本来想用importance或significance,后来觉得老用这几个词不爽,结果一查诺亚洲,出来个ponderance,但是在字典查不到这个单词,可能是没有这个词

neglecting which obviously puts sands in the wheels of the evolution of society
忽视无疑是对社会改革的阻碍,对,是这个意思,不知道我的定语从句有没有写错,总感觉好象不妥

还有那个on balance怎么改啊?改什么词?

[ 本帖最后由 westlife007_hu 于 2006-12-26 21:24 编辑 ]

ostrich1986UID: 2238177

fortunately或者for rectification?
那个流水线的是不是我改错了?

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

reduce into
好象有把什么变为什么的意思
这里我是想表达把流水线生产变为现实即实现流水线生产
不知道对不对

hyt0303UID: 2254178

Dose not society place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker asserts? I concede that society, to some degree, indeed dose not pay much attention to cultivating intellect which contains the abilities of reasoning, cognition, and creation and comprehension. However, people nowadays have commenced to conduct a series of innovations so as to transform the status quo.

The chief reason of my agreement on the speaker’s claim involves the current educational mechanism. On (the) one hand, tests are none the less the principle criterion to assess the ability of a student, resulting in a negative effect that neither will the students and teachers （neither the students nor the teachers will） place stress on fostering the reasoning, cognitive, creative and other skills. Instead, they are apt to leave no stone unturned in their efforts upon how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams. Furthermore, in the test system lies another hidden harm particularly in some Asian countries that getting a high grade merely calls for putting a host of hours in constantly repeating to rote a spate of knowledge by the means of mnemonics, which are apt to（两处重复了） decrease the ability of cognition and reasoning. On the other hand, in this era of information explode （explosion）, as a student, we have to learn multiple courses covering the knowledge from diversities of (various不要轻易用名词，读着太难受了) fields so that no time and energy are left for us to commit to analyzing, grasping，probing knowledge in depth and thus build a comprehensive structure of knowledge by fully utilizing the capacity of intellect. As a result, we are deprived of opportunities to develop the intellect. Chronically, there is a tendency that the intellect of students is rendered inactive and even obtuse.

2

The second reason why I generally assent to this statement has （something）to do with the development of technology. Along with the quickening advancement of technology, we reduce assembly-line into reality in the realm of manufacture, which not only boost the efficiency of productivity but also might be tempting to restrain the progress of intellectual capacity of human beings. In this sense, automation render us slaves to machines that a large proportion of workers merely focus on the operative skills whereas seldom ponder questions like how those machines work and why they work in this way, which are conducive to improve the abilities of reasoning and comprehension, let alone delve into ameliorating the machines and creating more effective ones. Moreover, varied professional training schools also underestimate the significance of reasoning and creation more or less but simply lay much value on the proficiency of operating machines, which never goes a long way to gain in the intellect. Consequently, it makes possible ossification and even regression of the intellect.

没改完，先贴一部分

christainUID: 2200210

Dose not society place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker asserts?怎么读起来很别扭阿I concede that society, to some degree, indeed dose not pay much attention to cultivating intellect which contains the abilities of reasoning, cognition, and creation and comprehension. However, people nowadays have commenced to conduct a series of innovations so as to transform这个次我觉得用的不好，应该主要是变形的意思 the status quo.

The chief reason of my agreement on the speaker’s claim involves the current educational mechanism. On注意这里要加个the one hand, tests are none the less the principle criterion to assess the ability of a student, resulting in a negative effect that neither will the students and teachers place stress on fostering the reasoning, cognitive, creative and other skills. Instead, they are apt to leave no stone unturned in their efforts upon用的很好啊！ how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams. Furthermore, in the test system lies 好！another hidden harm particularly in some Asian countries that getting a high grade merely calls for putting a host of hours in constantly repeating to rote a spate of knowledge by the means of mnemonics, which are apt to decrease the ability of cognition and reasoning. On the other hand, in this era of information explode, as a student, we have to learn multiple courses covering the knowledge from diversities of fields so that no time and energy are left for us to commit to analyzing, grasping，probing knowledge in depth and thus build a comprehensive structure of knowledge by fully utilizing the capacity of intellect. As a result, we are deprived of opportunities to develop the intellect. Chronically, there is a tendency that the intellect of students is rendered inactive and even obtuse.

The second reason why I generally assent to this statement has to do with the development of technology. Along with the quickening？？ advancement of technology, we reduce assembly-line into reality in the realm of manufacture, which not only boost the efficiency of productivity but also might be tempting to restrain the progress of intellectual capacity of human beings. In this sense, automation render us slaves to这里用of还是to machines that a large proportion of workers merely focus on the operative skills whereas seldom ponder questions like how those machines work and why they work in this way, which are conducive to improve the abilities of reasoning and comprehension, let alone delve into ameliorating the machines and creating more effective ones. Moreover, varied professional training schools also underestimate the significance of reasoning and creation more or less but simply lay much value on the proficiency of operating machines, which never goes a long way to gain这个短语用的好，但用错了，正确的用法是go a long way towards doing sth in the intellect. Consequently, it makes possible ossification and even regression好！of the intellect.

3

Nevertheless, what really relieves us a bit is that more and more people have begun to realize the ponderance of the intellect, neglecting which obviously puts sands in the wheels of the evolution of society. Recent efforts to reform public and professional education in a number of countries say, European-American and Asian countries have been characterized by an unprecedented endeavor to increase the consciousness of educating intellectual ability. For example, a teaching approach that connects/integrate knowledge and theories with social practice has been waged and received accolades in many schools. In the process of this way of learning, students no longer purely memorize or smatter knowledge, to the contrary they make the best use of their reasoning skills and other skills to discover practical problems in daily life and apply what they have learned to cope with them, in which way the intellect of them can be sharpen gradually. There are parallels in advanced education that universities and colleges encourage and afford students funds to carry out scientific researches in order to nurture talents with creative ability and rigorous reasoning intellect. Besides, in the United States, the promulgation of No Child Left Behind Act enacted by Bush government reinforces the education of basic subjects especially accentuates the importance of learning mathematic, through which, you possibly find your reasoning and logic intellect soar.

To sum up, while society, as a matter of fact, have not attached great magnitude to the intellect, on balance, people have already been aware of the serious consequence of the present  educational mechanism and are striving to attempt to embark upon a wide range of reforms to overcome its disadvantages and deter the situation from deteriorating.

ostrich:on balance（这个怎么说呢？我觉得这个平衡是两个事物做比较这里的逻辑关系我觉得是问题和补救）有balance就是平衡吗？汗！

westlife: 还有那个on balance怎么改啊?改什么词? 这个更汗！你用了这个短语还不知道啥意思？这个是用来总结的，可译为：总而言之

建议你们装个金山词霸和朗文电子词典！下面是朗文的解释：

on balance 英意：if you think something on balance, you think it after considering all the facts 例句：I think on balance I prefer the old system.

总的来说，本文词汇丰富，句式多变，很值得学习

另外还是请求把提纲贴出来，本文还是挺难写的

我没有思路，想来看看你们的，希望可以贴出来啦

christainUID: 2200210

晕，我在word里改的，用了不同颜色，怎么贴在这里就什么都没有了
汗，论坛太不稳定了阿

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

谢谢你的批改
简短提纲:
position:同意社会确实没有重视intellect,但是现在人们已经意识到了这一点,所以正在尝试各种改革来改变现状
1.同意作者观点的原因一:教育体制的问题
2.同意作者观点的原因二:与高度发达的technology有关
3.人们已经意识到了社会没有足够重视智力,目前正在进行一系列的改革以阻止情况恶化
render us slaves to
确定是to,范文上学来的

[ 本帖最后由 westlife007_hu 于 2006-12-28 13:38 编辑 ]

christainUID: 2200210

西城，觉不觉得这样写只停留在表面而没有深入阿
我觉得这个题目有2层意思：
1、推理和认识能力很重要，
2、但社会没有给推理和认知能力足够的重视，因此现在应该给他们重视。
因此我想这样论证：
1、推理和认识能力的重要性
2、当代社会对他们不够重视。具体表现在：后面是例子
3、

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

你的意思是不光要说社会没有足够重视还要论述其重要性?
我觉得还是应该首先回答社会到底有没有重视,然后再谈他的重要性,这样过度更自然一些
难不成我再加一段论述推理能力的重要性?

[ 本帖最后由 westlife007_hu 于 2006-12-28 19:06 编辑 ]

sky2007UID: 2206968

Dose not society place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker asserts? I concede that society, to some degree, indeed dose not pay much attention to cultivating intellect which contains the abilities of reasoning, cognition, and creation and comprehension. However, people nowadays have commenced to conduct a series of innovations so as to transform the status quo.

The chief reason of my agreement on the speaker’s claim involves the current educational mechanism. On theone hand, testsscores are none the less the principle criterion to assess the ability of a student, resulting in a negative effect that neither will the students and teachers place stress on fostering the reasoning, cognitive, creative and other skills. Instead, they are apt to leave no stone unturned in their efforts upon how to pass those examinations smoothly embracing speculation or even cheat in exams. Furthermore, in the test system lies another hidden harm particularly in some Asian countries that getting a high grade merely calls for putting a host of hours in constantly repeating to rote a spate of knowledge by the means of mnemonics, which are apt to decrease the ability of cognition and reasoning. On the other hand, in this era of information explosion, as a student, we have to learn so many courses covering the knowledge from diversities of fields that no time and energy are left for us to commit to analyzing, grasping，probing knowledge in depth and thus build a comprehensive structure of knowledge by fully utilizing the capacity of intellect. As a result, we are deprived of the opportunities to develop the intellect. Chronicallygradually, there is a tendency that the intellect of students is rendered inactive and even obtuse.
2
The second reason why I generally assent to this statement has something to do with the development of technology. Along with the quickening advancement of technology, we reduce assembly-line into reality in the realm of manufacture, which not only boost the efficiency of productivity but also might be tempting to restrain the progress of intellectual capacity of human beings. In this sense, automation render us slaves to machines that a large proportion of workers merely focus on the operative skills whereas seldom ponder questions like how those machines work and why they work in this way, which are conducive to improve the abilities of reasoning and comprehension, let alone delve into ameliorating the machines and creating more effective ones. Moreover, varied professional training schools also underestimate the significance of reasoning and creation more or less but simply lay much value on the proficiency of operating machines, which never goes a long way to gain in the intellect. Consequently, it makes possible ossification and even regression of the intellect.
3
Nervertheless,what really relieves us a bit is that more and more people have begun to realize the ponderance of the intellect, neglecting which obviously puts sands in the wheels of the evolution of society. Recent efforts to reform public and professional education in a number of countries say, European-American and Asian countries have been characterized by an unprecedented endeavor to increase the consciousness of educating intellectual ability. For example, a teaching approach that connects/integrate knowledge and theories with social practice has been waged and received accolades in many schools. In the process of this way of learning, students no longer purelysimply memorize or smatter knowledge, to the contrary they make the best use of their reasoning skills and other skills to discover practical problems in daily life and apply what they have learned to cope with them, in which way the intellect of them can be sharpen gradually. There are parallels in advanced education that universities and colleges encourage and afford students funds to carry out scientific researches in order to nurture talents with creative ability and rigorous reasoning intellect. Besides, in the United States, the promulgation of No Child Left Behind Act enacted by Bush government reinforces the education of basic subjects especially accentuates the importance of learning mathematic, through which, you possibly find your reasoning and logic intellect soar.

To sum up, while society, as a matter of fact, have not attached great magnitude to the intellect, on balance, people have already been aware of the serious consequence of the present  educational mechanism and are striving to attempt to embark upon a wide range of reforms to overcome its disadvantages and deter the situation from deteriorating.
楼主文章的词汇量很大，复杂句子很多，不过我个人觉得例子稍显单薄了些

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

谢谢,那你觉得用什么例子好呢?我就想到这两个例子,不知道还有什么其他的好例子呢?