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发表于 2009-6-17 19:57:40 |显示全部楼层
65.The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of
cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of
both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five
best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses
from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World
magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its
subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory,
the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue
stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate
primarily on domestic cheeses."

很多年来我们的所有连锁店都储备了很多种类的国产奶酪和进口奶酪。然而去年,我们的最新店里五种销量最高
的奶酪都是威斯康星出产的cheddar奶酪。而且,最近一次由Cheese of the World杂志所举行的调查显示,其订阅
者对于国产奶酪的倾向性越来越高。由于我们公司可以通过限制库存来减少开支,在我们所有连锁店增加盈利的
最好方式就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪。



1。the only fact that 去年五种销量最高的奶酪都是威斯康星出产的cheddar奶酪 cannot substantiate  that国内的好
(1) 最新店的五种销量最高的奶酪不能代表全体店也是这种奶酪销量最好(2)仅仅凭domestic cheddar cheeses
from Wisconsin不能说明国产的就一定卖得好,因为Wisconsin仅是国产众多厂中的一个。W产品卖得好的原因可
能是由于其自己的某些特点,例如其产品的质量高,口感好,价格便宜,但没有信息说所有国产的产品都有能卖
得好的特点 ;(3)这一事实发生在去年,没有证据表明未来仍会这样。因此基于这一不完整信息来做出的结论
就不logical

2. 攻击survey: The increasing preference for domestic cheeses amoung the magzine's subscribers cannot indicate
that selling domestic cheeses can definitely make a profit.(1)仅仅一本杂志对其订阅者所做的调查 不能作为证据
: 首先 这本杂志是否权威 是否能客观的做这个调查。 有可能 它只是很不出名的 或 它是由某个国产厂家所发行
或赞助的 ; 其次 它仅仅是对其订阅者做的调查 但我们并不知道订阅者的范围和数量。如果其数量很少 范围很窄无
法代表大众的观点 那么这个调查就不能作为依据 (2)即使 这个杂志的这个调查能代表大众,但调查只是说明了
倾向性 只是人们的态度 而不能保证说人们就一定能够付出实际行动去买。另外 调查也只是说大众对国产的倾向
性高,但没有提到他们对进口的态度。很有可能大家对进口的态度也是increasing preference 甚至超过对国产的,
那么这个调查作为依据就不合理了。

3。即使国产奶酪确实比国外的受欢迎,但仅仅凭借可以通过限制库存来减少开支,也不能说最好方式就是。。。
首先,作者没有提供市场更详细的信息。很有可能进口奶酪还是有市场的,甚至减少进口产品库存节省的开支没

有销售进口产品赚的多,那么这个措施就合理了。其次,作者忽略了其他提高利润的因素,如提高产品的质量 口
感,搞一些促销活动,精简机构,


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发表于 2009-6-17 20:01:28 |显示全部楼层
word纠错功能仍然不好使 大家请忽视词语拼写错误吧 我会不断修正


In this argument, the arguer suggests that the best way to increase profits for the stores is to stop stocking improted cheeses and pay primary attention to domestic cheeses beacuse the expenses can be reduced by limiting inventory. To support this conclusion, the arguer claims that the five best-selling cheeses  at  the newest store  were produced from Wisconsin last year. Also, he draws the information about a recent survey by the magzine--Cheeses of the World. At first glance the argument seems to be somewhat logical and reasonable,
however, after a further consideration in details, I cannot aggre with it for the following reasons.

To begin with, the only fact that last year's five best-selling cheeses at the newest store were all domestic from W cannot substantiate that the domestic cheeses are more popular . First of all, this newest store cannot be representive of the whole stores in the country. Thus, this fact  does not indicate that such cheeses are also sold  well all over the
country. Secondly, W's cheeses were salable does not mean all kinds of domestic  the  cheeses  wouldbebestsellers, for W is a part of the nation and cannot show the country's whole situation. It is entirely possible it is the W's cheeses' specific characterics that make them popular, such as the high quality, good taste, low price , etc. Thirdly, the situation last year does not equal that the domestic cheddar cheeses will also be popular in the future. Consequently, it is fallacious to draw any conclution only based on such unsufficient information.

In addtion, The increasing preference for domestic cheeses amoung the magzine's subscribers cannot indicate that selling domestic cheeses can definitely make a profit. In the first place, we are not informed whether this magzine is authoratative and objective to make the survey. Perhaps it is not famous at all or it is under the auspices of certain
domestic companies. And if so, such survey would be lack credibility to be based on. On the other hand, the author does not show whether the sample can reflect the general attitude, for we are not informed the subscribers' range and amount. If the range is narrow and the amount is small, then the results could only respresent the particular customers
and the generalization would be not applicable to the public. Secondly, even if such survey can show the commom situation, just the increasing preference for domestic cheeses does not mean the public would like to buy these cheeses. In addition , we are not informed the subscribers' attitude to the imported ones. If they are more prefered to
the imported cheeses, then it is unreasonable to come to the conclution dependent on this survey.

Ever though domestic cheeses are seld better than imported ones, there is no scientific evidence to confirm that limiting inventory is the best way to decrease expenses. On one hand, the author does not offer details about the market of cheeses. It is highly possible that there is enough market share for imported cheeses and the expenses reduced are less than the amount earned by selling imported products. On the other hand the author fails to consider other alternations that help to inprove the profits, such as sales promotion, streamline the company.

As it stands, the arguer cannot warrant his or her claim on the basis of the scant evidence mentioned in the argument. To make it logically acceptable. the arguer must present more detail information about the survey.Moreover, i would suspend my judgment about the credibility of the recommendation until the arguer can provide concrete evidence that the domestic cheeses is definitely more popular than imported ones. Otherwise, the arguer is simply begging the question throughout the argument.
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发表于 2009-6-24 22:38:50 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 xwlove 于 2009-6-26 01:32 编辑


In this argument, the arguer suggests that the best way to increase profits for the stores is to stop stocking improted cheeses and pay primary attention to domestic cheeses beacuse the expenses can be reduced by limiting inventory. To support this conclusion, the arguer claims that the five best-selling cheeses  at  the newest store  were produced from Wisconsin last year. Also, he draws the information(查了一下,好像都用draw out) about a recent survey by the magzine--Cheeses of the World. At first glance the argument seems to be somewhat logical and reasonable, however, after a further consideration in details, I cannot aggre with it for the following reasons(偶最近argument入门阶段,终于搞懂这叫小宝式开头).

To begin with, the only fact that last year's five best-selling cheeses at the newest store were all domestic from W cannot substantiate that the domestic cheeses are more popular . First of all, this newest store cannot be representive of the whole stores in the country. Thus, this fact  does not indicate that such cheeses are also sold  well all over the country. Secondly, W's cheeses were salable does not mean all kinds of domestic  the  cheeses( 语序颠倒) wouldbebestsellers (你的造词好强大,不过我不确定你造的对不对), for W is a part of the nation and cannot show the country's whole situation. It is entirely possible it is the W's cheeses' specific characterics that make them popular, such as the high quality, good taste, low price , etc. Thirdly, the situation last year does not equal that the domestic cheddar cheeses will also be popular in the future. Consequently, it is fallacious to draw any conclution only based on such unsufficient information.

In addtion, The increasing preference for domestic cheeses amoung the magzine's subscribers cannot indicate that selling domestic cheeses can definitely make a profit. In the first place, we are not informed whether this magzine is authoratative and objective to make the survey. Perhaps it is not famous at all or it is under the auspices of certain domestic companies. And if so, such survey would be(be去掉) lack credibility to be based on. On the other hand, the author does not show whether the sample can reflect the general attitude, for we are not informed the subscribers' range and amount. If the range is narrow and the amount is small, then the results could only respresent the particular customers and the generalization would be not applicable to the public. Secondly, even if such survey can show the commom situation, just the increasing preference for domestic cheeses does not mean the public would like to buy these cheeses. In addition , we are not informed the subscribers' attitude to the imported ones. If they are more prefered to the imported cheeses, then it is unreasonable to come to the conclution dependent on this survey.

Ever though domestic cheeses are seld better than imported ones, there is no scientific evidence to confirm that limiting inventory is the best way to decrease expenses. On one hand, the author does not offer details about the market of cheeses. It is highly possible that there is enough market share for imported cheeses and the expenses reduced are less than the amount earned by selling imported products. On the other hand the author fails to consider other alternations that help to inprove the profits, such as sales promotion, streamline the company.

As it stands, the arguer cannot warrant his or her claim on the basis of the scant evidence mentioned in the argument. To make it logically acceptable. the arguer must present more detail information about the survey.Moreover, i would suspend my judgment about the credibility of the recommendation until the arguer can provide concrete evidence that the domestic cheeses is definitely more popular than imported ones. Otherwise, the arguer is simply begging the question(这个用法不错啊,学习了) throughout the argument.

作者已经达到出神入化的境界,作者的攻击一针见血,入门三分。

同时,合理地安排了攻击顺序

非常好的语言功底

离满分不远了

羡慕啊

恭喜

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