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Describe the causes and consequences of corneal injuries and ulcers,and explain how these problems are treated.+ \0 B) E$ x2D


The lecture is mainly talking about causes and consequences of corneal injuries and ulcers. Thus, the lecture completely agrees with what are stated in the passage.

First of all, the speaker thinks that hitting the face will probably make your corneal get injured. Such as ball playing, fist, fly, and other kind of tissues could get close to your eye. Meanwhile the reading passage believes that an injury to the cornea can pose a long-term problem. So, the lecture is totally in favor of the view made in the reading.

Second, the speaker discusses we are possible to get hurt from the chemical and allergy. For instance, some kinds of chemicals which may exert negative impact on your eyes, even the dust can hurt your feeble corneal. Additionally, the speaker also points out that the virus and fungus can cause the illness of corneal for its nutrient deficiency, and overexposure to sunlight can result in the injury of corneal too. All of those are reinforcing what is stated in the reading.

Finally, the speaker raises the issue that the ways to cure corneal injury. For example, an eye doctor can examine our eyes to judge whether or not we have trouble in eyes. And we can use some drugs such as drops to cure our eyes under the permission of the doctor and wear some artificial glasses . This point agrees with the point that demonstrated in the reading.

In conclusion, the contents in the reading passage are totally supported by the lecture and the lecture states totally the same ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.
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猛然看去,,,还以为是自己写的。。。~~*先汗一下@@不过也有很多不同,我想我很多地方听得不好~~*加油
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1# wondersmiths2
The lecture is mainly talking about causes and consequences of corneal injuries and ulcers. Thus, the lecture completely agrees with what are stated in the passage.

First of all, the speaker thinks that hitting the face will probably make your corneal get injured. Such as ball playing, fist, fly, and other kind of tissues could get close to your eye. Meanwhile the reading passage believes that an injury to the cornea can pose a long-term problem. So, the lecture is totally in favor of the view made in the reading.

Second, the speaker discusses we are possible to get hurt from the chemical and allergy. For instance, some kinds of chemicals which may exert negative impact on your eyes, even the dust can hurt your feeble corneal. Additionally, the speaker also points out that the virus and fungus can cause the illness of corneal for its nutrient deficiency, and overexposure to sunlight can result in the injury of corneal too. All of those are reinforcing what is stated in the reading.

Finally, the speaker raises the issue that the ways to cure corneal injury. For example, an eye doctor can examine our eyes to judge whether or not we have trouble in eyes. And we can use some drugs such as drops to cure our eyes under the permission of the doctor and wear some artificial glasses. This point agrees with the point that demonstrated in the reading.

In conclusion, the contents in the reading passage are totally supported by the lecture and the lecture states totally the same ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.
写得确实很好,有很多值得学习的地方,文章的结构,和小作文的写作方式。只是没有介绍consequences。下次换成作文120,相信你这种写法更符合题意的~

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