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发表于 2011-11-8 18:06:50 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
底子差,但是我会尽自己最大的努力!和大家一起进步!
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这是第一次写托福作文,没思路、没词可用,写了将近一个小时。求赐教,使劲拍砖吧~

11月8日 20101009NA 住城市还是农村更好的照顾家人?

At present,a huge amount of mid-age people work very hard.It is becoming a social problem that we are neglect to take care of our family.How can we take care of our family despite the tremendous social pressure?Living in rural area maybe is a good choice.

First,we may take care of our parents better in rural.It is a comman tendency,just like  every apple in the word falls down,that old people like living in rural area.For instance,my parents would like to live in rural when retired so that they can do what they love like plant flowers.And they really enjoy the rural life.If there is a choice,I will absolutely live in rural.

Secondly,rural is much more safer than city.It is extremely sad for me once I heard news about people who had been crushed by vehicles.Accordingly,urban sometimes means giant death hazard for us when we cross through streets,especially the aged and kids.In contrast,rural area is few of auto.obviously,it is much safer when kids play together outside.Likewise,the old need not always worry about when they go through streets.Living in rural,in other words,means protect familiy members.

Additionally,as we all know that inhabitants in rural get more nice relationship with neighbors than urban.The aged could chat with each other in the spare afternoon.Children always enjoy their games in the large countryside.Crucially,all the people in countryside take care of each other.That's why rural is more attractive to me to care my familiy.

All in all,I am convinced that living in rural area is much better for us to take care of our  
family.When we are in mid-age,maybe there are more and more people love to live in rural area for taking care of their family.

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发表于 2011-11-9 23:24:20 |只看该作者
11.9 独立作文 欢迎指教

1月9日 20101029NA 你同意或不同意,那些成功的人的 character,communication skill  是最重要的

With people in world connect more and more.It cannot believe more that communication skill is one of the most important skills for one want to achieve a goal.Everytime and everywhere communication is inevitablely happening.Just like this second.We may observe that even every success man or woman is an astute communication person.we may ask why communicating skill is so important?

Person who has good communication skill makes us comfortable and trustful.One specially
example of this is salesman.Since salesman sell there product mainly through chat with client.We can find even every great salesman is skilled in communication.Similarly,great lawer is also practised in communication.Further,a school need to communicate with students once want to announce a new regulation.Moreover,countries need to communicate with each other to solve problem.We can imagine that if two countries communicate comfortable and trustful,war may disappear from the global world.On the contrary,we can see a huge amount of people live in a desperate attitude because of lack of communication with others.Maybe there is only a tiny problem facing to them,but just lack of communication lead them feel depressed.Communication sometimes is just a skill,but sometimes is a crucial outlet through inner to outside.

However,communication skill is not the only thing which we should aspire.One have great skill of communication but not honest is a huge hazard to the society.That people may use their practiced communication skill to win our trust and cheat money.Bernard Madoff,the biggest economic crook of the United State,who cheated tremendous amount of money is also a skilled communication man but loss of honest.It provides us an opposed character.But these people is a little amount of us after all.

To summarize,communication is the most important skill of success that we cannot
deny.Crucially,we should use this gift in appropriate way.Thus can we succeeded.

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发表于 2011-11-10 14:48:26 |只看该作者
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改好了,加油哦~~
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发表于 2011-11-10 17:09:16 |只看该作者
改了一下,加油哦
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发表于 2011-11-10 17:34:40 |只看该作者
海风吹过 你的11.9我改好了:)
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发表于 2011-11-10 18:11:33 |只看该作者
由于没弄清楚规则 我尽快补上11.09的作业
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发表于 2011-11-10 22:50:25 |只看该作者
11.10 独立,原来字数不够,这次字数上去了,但也写得很纠结 花了我1个半小时,肯定还有不少错误  ,算了 现在阶段不管时间了
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11.12 独立
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发表于 2011-11-13 16:36:43 |只看该作者
改好了,有点晚,抱歉!
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发表于 2011-11-14 21:46:53 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 海风吹过 于 2011-11-14 22:07 编辑

11.14 独立作业。。。 啊!刚刚才看到!!!    一个组的同学,对不住了啊~ 我没看到楼主把题目都改过了,我写的还是老一套的题目,这样吧,我会帮你们改的,我的 作文就随意吧~~~
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发表于 2011-11-15 13:17:08 |只看该作者
12# henryguowencong   谢谢帮我修改哦!昨天写完了才发现题库更新了。。 我下午帮你们改,晚上发上来。

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发表于 2011-11-15 20:34:42 |只看该作者
不好意思 今天一直有课 加油~!:)
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本帖最后由 海风吹过 于 2011-11-16 21:42 编辑

11.16 独立 欢迎批改哈~
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