进军美利坚作文10.16

shirley072UID：2712200

10.16 years from now, people will have more leisure time



    According to theleaped progression made in science and technology, productivity is lifted tosuch a high extent, which releases considerable labour force or converts themfrom the traditional handcraft industry to high-tech concentrated fields. Sincewe could accomplish the task efficiently with advanced work environments ordevices, not mention to the possible exceeding achievements beyond thatexpected, we deserve more leisure time for relax.

However, with accelerated worldwide development, increasing competition between companies act as a major impulsefactor, steering entrepreneurs to put up with various projects and measurescontaining more tasks, in order to help the companies stay in the proceedingrank. For most employees, more work contents are related to pressure. Here goesa saying, temperate pressure will give you a motivity. What if the pressuregoes so far? Have you ever seen that someone cannot bear the pressure any more?Let's take a look at the electrical filed, some people in HuaWei company choseto suicide by jumping from the high building, that is because they haveconstantly exposed to an intense settings with anxieties, pressure andwhatsoever upset emotions for a long time, which easily leaded to some terriblepsychiatric problems. So people should get more leisure time, with which theycould adjust themselves, deal with the emerging mental problems, enjoywonderful times without pressure. In addition, get a release from time to timewill keep your brain clearly, and be able to help you promote the workefficiency.

Lastly, I want to emphasis, somequarrels may break out between family members because of less leisure timespent together. You know that less time means less communication, which apt toresult to decreasing concern about each other, eventually, marriages slip todanger and divorces may happen. More leisure time is indeed needed!

fish1044UID：2190500

    According to the leaped progression made in science and technology, productivity is lifted to such a high extent, which releases considerable labour force or converts themfrom the traditional handcraft industry to high-tech concentrated fields. Sincewe could accomplish the task efficiently with advanced work environments ordevices, not to mention to the possible exceeding achievements beyond that expected, we deserve more leisure time for relax. （开场很精彩,但是有跑题嫌疑）
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    However, with accelerated worldwide development, increasing competition between companies act as a major impulsefactor, steering entrepreneurs to put up with various projects and measurescontaining more tasks, in order to help the companies stay in the proceedingrank. For most employees, more work contents are related to pressure. Here goesa saying, temperate pressure will give you a motivity. What if the pressure goes so far（有点歧义，so far 有到目前为止的意思）? Have you ever seen that someone cannot bear the pressure any more?Let's take a look at the electrical filed, some people in HuaWei company choseto suicide by jumping from the high building, that is because they haveconstantly exposed to an intense settings with anxieties, pressure andwhatsoever upset emotions for a long time, which easily leaded to some terriblepsychiatric problems. So people should get more leisure time, with which theycould adjust themselves, deal with the emerging mental problems, enjoywonderful times without pressure. In addition, get a release from time to timewill keep your brain clearly, and be able to help you promote the workefficiency.' s) v; V8 u. F' c1 N/ P/ n. \


Lastly, I want to emphasis, somequarrels may break out between family members because of less leisure timespent together. You know that less time means less communication, which apt toresult to decreasing concern about each other, eventually, marriages slip todanger and divorces may happen. More leisure time is indeed needed!

    这篇文章本身是个好文章，但是不太适合作为托福作文。
    首先文章跑题了，题目问的是你觉得几年后人们是不是有跟多的空闲时间，而本文却阐述人们需要更多空闲时间。
    另外，文章结构也不适合托福考试。文章写法太过自由，层次不鲜明，文章体安排在一段，感觉不足与阐述清楚自己的观点。

    但是，从本来可以看出，楼主的英语写作功底应该是比较深的，多习惯一下托福作文应该能取得好成绩。

hmnsunUID：2653457

According to the leaped progression made in science and technology, productivity is lifted to such a high extent, which releases considerable labour force or converts them from the traditional handcraft industry to high-tech concentrated fields. Since we could accomplish the task efficiently with advanced work environments or devices, not mention to the possible exceeding achievements beyond that expected, we deserve more leisure time for relax.  s1 l9 H+ y% A9 |/ K2 C& c
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However, with accelerated worldwide development, increasing competition between companies act as a major impulse factor, steering entrepreneurs to put up with various projects and measures containing more tasks, in order to help the companies stay in the proceeding rank. For most employees, more work contents are related to pressure. Here goes a saying, temperate pressure will give you a motivity. What if the pressure goes so far? Have you ever seen that someone cannot bear the pressure any more?Let's take a look at the electrical filed, some people in HuaWei company chose to suicide by jumping from the high building, that is because they have constantly exposed to an intense settings with anxieties, pressure and whatsoever upset emotions for a long time, which easily leaded to some terrible psychiatric problems. So people should get more leisure time, with which they could adjust themselves, deal with the emerging mental problems, enjoy wonderful times without pressure. In addition, get a release from time to time will keep your brain clearly, and be able to help you promote the work efficiency.（这句话说我们应该放轻松点儿，跟主题没有太大关系。我们要阐述的是“越来越忙还是越来越闲”，不需要讨论我们“应该如何”）
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+ F& h  m- {# _# D% mLastly, I want to emphasis, some quarrels may break out between family members because of less leisure time spent together. You know that less time means less communication, which apt to result to decreasing concern about each other, eventually, marriages slip to danger and divorces may happen. More leisure time is indeed needed!

语言很好，虽然有些词汇我看不懂，但是能看出语言很好。但是我不得不说，这篇作文整体上不太好。从倒数第二段的最后部分开始，已经离题了。可以看下我在上边写的那句建议。

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shirley072UID：2712200

10.17 Topic: To truly understand worldevent, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enoughinformation.
Since we are exposed to sucha huge society filled with explosive information, what is a best way tounderstand world event actually? I will consider reading newspaper instead of watching TV as my first choice. Here come my reasons.

First of all, newspaper contains a large number of informs with that television cannot compare. Takeour News Report program on television as an example. Every day we may receivethe general news of important events happened the same day in different areas, accompanyingwith the presentative pictures and interpretation of journalists. However, we cannot judge the whole thing just from several words in these fleeting seconds.More background knowledge are needed, and that will be provided by newspapersin detail. So you can skim whatever parts as long as you feel it is useful to assist you understanding the true event.

Some people may argue that television also have commentary programs concentrating on one concerning issueat one time. It's true, but do you ever compare its contents with newspapers'?For example, when the topic of Nobel Prize in Physics is discussed comprehensivelyin a TV show on Monday morning, we may about to read the completed details of NobelPrize in Physics, Chemistry, and even in peace in newspapers. Why is that?Because TV shows have their strict time limits that hosts should take control to conveying informs. In contrary, newspapers are not required to accomplish astory in a limited time, even the words as long as the event is important enough. Thus, newspapers prevail televisions in the access for us to get full appreciation of the event.

Lastly, newspaper is always divided to a majority part of news and 1-2 pages of ads, contrarily, televisionis occupied by a huge number of entertainment programs, dizzy ads, and a few part of news reports which can not satisfied our basic informs request. We candraw a conclusion that we should get our news from newspaper to truly understand world event.

paddyhyUID：202095

Since we are exposed to such a huge society filled with explosive information, what is a best way to understand world event actually? I will consider reading newspaper instead of watching TV as my first choice. Here come my reasons.开头不错很简洁我喜欢

First of all, newspaper contains a large number of informs that television cannot match with that television cannot compare. Take our News Report program on television as an example. Every day we may receive the general news of important events happened the same day in different areas, accompanying with the presentative pictures and interpretation of journalists. However, we cannot judge the whole thing just from several words in these fleeting seconds. More background knowledge are needed, and that will be provided by newspapers in detail. So you can skim whatever parts as long as you feel it is useful to assist you understanding the true event. - w1 I, U: j. h8 E

Some people may argue that television also have commentary programs concentrating on one concerning issue at one time. It's true, but do you ever compare its contents with newspapers. For example, when the topic of Nobel Prize in Physics is discussed comprehensively in a TV show on Monday morning, we may about to read the completed details of Nobel Prize in Physics, Chemistry, and even in peace in newspapers. Why is that? Because TV shows have their strict time limits that hosts should take control to conveying informs. In contrary, newspapers are not required to accomplish astory in a limited time, even the words as long as the event这里就说events就可以了吧 is important enough. Thus, newspapers prevail televisions in the access for us to get full appreciation of the event.: Z2 P: M7 H  a+ y2 W

Lastly, newspaper is always divided to a majority part of news and 1-2 pages of ads, contrarily, televisionis occupied by a huge number of entertainment programs, dizzy ads, and a few part of news reports which can not satisfied our basic informs request. We candraw a conclusion that we should get our news from newspaper to truly understand world event.
作者思维很好。。就是组织上在好一点就可以啦。。向你学习。。

skysunny2008UID：2632579

10.17 Topic: To truly understand worldevent, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information. 5 ]2 h$ q3 x; i. @' T- D6 H# [- ^
Since we are exposed to such a huge society filled with explosive information, what is a best way to understand world event actually? I will consider reading newspaper instead of watching TV as my first choice. Here come my reasons.. F+ e+ k0 C% S# \2 T( [

/ Z( [5 @; \' S+ O4 R! W# LFirst of all, newspaper contains a large number of informs with that (应该改成which)television cannot compare. Take our News Report program on television as an example. Every day we may receive the(the 应该去掉) general news of important events（加that） happened the (改成on) same day in different areas, accompanying with the presentative pictures and interpretation of journalists. However, we cannot judge the whole thing just from several words in these fleeting (这词用的特别好！)seconds. More background knowledge are needed, and that will be provided by newspapers in detail. So you can skim whatever parts as long as you feel it is useful to assist you （ to understand ）understanding the true event. 1 U4 \( s, D1 M9 q% p9 _
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Some people may argue that television also have commentary programs concentrating on one concerning（concerned） issue at one time. It's true, but do you ever compare its contents with newspapers'(在哪方面比较呢，这样说会比较模糊，个人认为应该说清楚)?For example, when the topic of Nobel Prize in Physics is discussed comprehensivelyin a TV show on Monday morning, we may about to read the completed details of NobelPrize in Physics, Chemistry, and even in peace in newspapers. Why is that? Because TV shows have their strict time limits that hosts should take control to conveying informs. In contrary,（ on the contrary） newspapers are not required to accomplish a story in a limited time, even the words as long as the event is important enough(even words are not so long as it is supposed to be). Thus, newspapers prevail televisions in the access for us to get full appreciation of the event.( a% ]6 g9 Z* C! L/ Q' ?
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Lastly, newspaper is always divided to ( always consists of )a majority part (去掉part)of news and( merely) 1-2 pages of ads, contrarily, televisionis occupied by a huge number of entertainment programs, dizzy ads, and a few part of news reports which can not satisfied our basic informs request. We candraw a conclusion that we should get our news from newspaper to truly understand world event中间两段论点不够清晰，但是那个诺贝尔奖的例子很好。我觉得中间两端可以合成一段写电视时间有限，所以不能说细节信息，例如背景知识。。。举诺贝尔的例子，然后下一段写电视机有太多广高，使报道变短， 不详细～个人建议，仅供参考哦}

scutgongUID：2564275

Since we are exposed to such a huge society filled with explosive information, what is a（the可能会好点） best way to understand world event actually? I will consider reading newspaper instead of watching TV as my first choice. Here come my reasons.

First of all, newspaper contains a large number of informs（information） with that television cannot compare（可以用“compared with television”来替代）. Take our News Report program on television as an example. Every day we may receive the general news of important events happened the same day in different areas, accompanying with the presentative pictures and interpretation of journalists. However, we cannot judge the whole thing just from several words in these fleeting seconds. More background knowledge are needed, and that will be provided by newspapers in detail. So you can skim whatever parts as long as you feel it is useful to assist you understanding the true event.

Some people may argue that television also have commentary programs concentrating on one concerning issue at one time. It's true, but do （have）you ever compared its contents with newspapers'? For example, when the topic of Nobel Prize in Physics is discussed comprehensively in a TV show on Monday morning, we may about to read the completed details of Nobel Prize in Physics, Chemistry, and even in peace in newspapers. Why is that? Because TV shows have their strict time limits that hosts should take control to conveying informs. In contrary, newspapers are not required to accomplish astory in a limited time, even the words as long as the event is important enough. Thus, newspapers prevail televisions in the access for us to get full appreciation of the event.

Lastly, newspaper is always divided to a majority part （delete）of news and 1-2 pages of ads, contrarily, television is occupied by a huge number of entertainment programs, dizzy ads, and a few part of news reports which can not satisfied our basic informs request. We can draw a conclusion that we should get our news from newspaper to truly understand world event.

作者写的不错，也使用了一些很好的例子。总体的感觉就是内容还不够丰富，作者这篇文章始终围绕的就是电视机得到的信息很小。不过已经很能说明问题了，继续努力！！！

shirley072UID：2712200

    With rapid development of the modern society, explosive information and knowledge wait for usto command. Then, the problem emerges, shall we concentrate on learningconcepts and ideas or just focus on facts? As to me, learning concepts becomesmy very preferential choice to understand the world. Here come my reasons.

First of all, understanding the concept of thematter will help you realize the whole thing quickly. Since we are exposed to aexpanded world filled the advent of spectacular progress in various aspects,the most important measure we should take is to learn the news as soon aspossible in case being leave behind. How can we absorb such a number of informsin limited time? Learning concepts and ideas is a better choice, becauseconcepts are always the elites or short interpretations of the whole things, aswell as the ideas that seem to be extracted from long detailed facts and servedas the representative of the articles or whatever. Command these basic crucialelements will assist you to exaggerate your knowledge faster comparing to that oflearning facts.

Secondly, for the concepts and ideas constitutethe soul of the matter, we should pay more attention on that. For example, weare usually examined by some tests requiring you to write down the authors'ideas or the concrete concepts of the terms by attaching several passages. Onthe contrary, we are merely asked to depict the facts one by one. Because mostpeople hold that once you get the concepts and ideas, you get the full appreciation.

In conclusion,concepts and ideas reflect predominate trait of the matters, we can understandthe entire things by investigate them in a shorter time with efficiency. So weshould focus on concept and ideas instead of facts.

doubledianUID：2661760

With （这个。。。不需要加the？加上吧）rapid development of the modern society, explosive information and knowledge wait for usto（？？这是啥意思） command. Then, the problem emerges，shall we concentrate on learning concepts and ideas or just focus on facts? As to me, learning concepts becomesmy very preferential choice to understand the world.（这句话太汉语了，建议修改一下） Here come（s） my reasons.

First of all, understanding the concept of the matter will help you realize the whole thing quickly. Since we are exposed to a （an）expanded world filled the advent of spectacular progress in various aspects, the most important measure we should take is to learn the news as soon as possible in case being leave behind. How can we absorb such a number of informs in limited time? Learning concepts and ideas is a better choice, because concepts are always the elites or short interpretations of the whole things, as well as the ideas that seem to be extracted from long detailed facts and served as the representative of the articles or whatever. Command these basic crucial elements will assist you to exaggerate your knowledge faster comparing to that of learning facts.

Secondly, for the concepts and ideas constitute the soul of the matter, we should pay more attention on that. For example, weare（？） usually examined by some tests requiring you to write down the authors' ideas or the concrete concepts of the terms by attaching several passages. On the contrary, we are merely asked to depict the facts one by one. Because most people hold that once you get the concepts and ideas, you get the full appreciation.

In conclusion, concepts and ideas reflect predominate trait of the matters, we can understand the entire things by investigate them in a shorter time with efficiency. So we should focus on concept and ideas instead of facts.
说一下整体感觉啊，思路还算清晰，但是论证不足，存在个别单词拼写错误，有些意思表述的不清楚，不知道作者想说什么，建议在上交之前放在word上自动检查一下，总体还是可以的，我个人水平很菜，所以也不能给你提出什么建设性的意见，或者把你的错误全找出来，请谅解！继续加油！

skysunny2008UID：2632579

With rapid development of the modern society, explosive information and knowledge wait for usto command. Then, the problem emerges, shall we concentrate on learningconcepts and ideas or just focus on facts? As to me, learning concepts becomesmy very preferential choice to understand the world. Here come my reasons.0 T; ^7 z5 Z+ w  ]. z

First of all, understanding the concept of thematter will help you realize the whole thing quickly. Since we are exposed to a expanded world filled the advent of spectacular progress in various aspects, （这句太罗嗦了。。since we are expose to a world full of spectacular progress in various field,）the most important measure we should take is to learn the news as soon as possible in case being leave behind.(这句问题很严重。。但是不知道怎么改。。抱歉) How can we absorb such a number（a number of 修饰可数名词，information 是不可数的，所以得换个词，比如enormous information） of informs in limited time? Learning concepts and ideas is a better choice, because concepts are always the elites or short interpretations of the whole things, as well as the ideas that seem to be extracted from long detailed facts and served as the representative of the articles or whatever(or whatever 去掉比较好). Command these basic crucial elements will assist you to exaggerate（这个是贬义词，改为expand比较好） your knowledge faster comparing to that of learning facts.

Secondly, for the concepts and ideas constitute the soul of the matter, we should pay more attention on that（them）. For example, we are usually examined by some tests （这里定语从句比较好吧 which ask）requiring you to write down the authors' ideas or the concrete concepts of the terms by attaching several passages. On the contrary, we are merely asked to depict the facts one by one. Because most people hold that once you get the concepts and ideas, you get the full appreciation.(这段的理由有点牵强哦)% W' L6 B: K0 ]* l  W, V1 o& ]. ?
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In conclusion,concepts and ideas reflect predominate trait of the matters, we can understandthe entire things by investigate (改成exploring) them in a shorter time with efficiency(with去掉，efficiently改成 efficiently). So weshould focus on concept and ideas instead of facts.

本文的缺点是语言有点罗嗦了，观点和理由有点牵强，再接再厉哦！

scutgongUID：2564275

With （the）rapid development of the modern society, explosive information and knowledge wait for us to command. Then, the problem emerges, shall we concentrate on learning concepts and ideas or just focus on facts? As to me, learning concepts（这里可以一起加上ideas吧，并且最后一段可以呼应） becomes my very preferential（用词过于繁琐） choice to understand the world. Here comes my reasons.-

First of all, understanding the concept of the matter will help you realize the whole thing quickly. Since we are exposed to an expanded world filled the advent of spectacular progress in various aspects, the most important measure we should take is to learn the（可以删除） news as soon as possible in case being leave behind. How can we absorb such a number of informs in limited time? Learning concepts and ideas is a better choice, because concepts are always the elites or short interpretations of the whole things, as well as the ideas that seem to be extracted from long detailed facts and served as the representative of the articles or whatever. Command these basic crucial elements will assist you to exaggerate your knowledge faster comparing to that of learning facts.

Secondly, for（since更好点吧） the concepts and ideas constitute the soul of the matter, we should pay more attention on that. For example, we are usually examined by some tests requiring you to write down the authors' ideas or the concrete concepts of the terms by attaching several passages. On the contrary, we are merely asked to depict the facts one by one. Because most people hold that once you get the concepts and ideas, you get the full appreciation.

In conclusion, concepts and ideas reflect predominate trait of the matters, we can understand the entire things by investigating them in a shorter time with efficiency. So we should focus on concept and ideas instead of facts.

个人感觉作者列出自己的理由，正确表达了观点。不足指出是英语用词不够灵活。
例子也不够鲜明。
好好努力下！

shirley072UID：2712200

The world keeps progressing every day, and we shall keep learning all the way to adjust to the challenging environment. It seems that allocating ourlimited time reasonably becomes a crucial question. Imaging that 20 years later, how do we arrange our life expended on works, dinners and leisure hours?As far as I concerned, less time will be wasted in cooking and preparing food.Here come my reasons.


First and foremost, accompanying with the development of science and technology, the innovations will be made everywhere, which means we should spend more time and study harder to get a quick command of them, especially that related to ourwork fields. Subsequently, the time for preparing food may be spared to learn some new terms. And, do not undermine the length of time in preparing food.Let's take a detail perception of how to make a dinner. First, you should think about the recipes, then get the materials from the supermarkets, after washing them carefully or slice them in shapes, you could embark on the most important step to make them eatable. Have you ever counted the time through the whole process? According to my experience, that will cost you more than one hour, one eighth of your normal work time. You have a better choice to use this hour studying new things.


Secondly, 20 years later, the promoted life quality provides us with even more forms of entertainment.Everyone will have fun on his interests such as going to movies, doing sports,taking a trip and so on. Just as I mentioned, movies has their start times you should obey or you will miss the beginning or some parts, then you have no chance to make a meal to cater the appropriate timing; sports have their fixed place you should go for, thus you can't prepare a meal outside; and the trip,you should never imagine making a dinner during your wonderful journey. If you insist on cooking, you will lose the time enjoying the life.


Lastly but not the least,more instant foods with delicious tastes will be expected 20 years later, I believe most of us apt to choose this convenient and easier way to fill ourselves in stead of making a dinner by our own. The surplus time for the original food preparing could be adopted to studying, relaxing, and anything you want. In conclusion, I hold that people will spend less time in cooking 20 years later.

lupiscesUID：2231942

  With rapid development of the modern society, explosive information and knowledge wait for usto command. Then, the problem emerges, shall we concentrate on learningconcepts and ideas or just focus on facts? As to me, learning concepts becomesmy very preferential choice to understand the world. Here come my reasons.开头很好" } 开头. H# d* N, v. V: v- s

First of all, understanding the concept of the matter will help you realize the whole thing quickly. Since we are exposed to a expanded world filled（with） the advent of spectacular progress in various aspects,the most important measure we should take is to learn the news as soon aspossible in case being leave（left） behind. How can we absorb such a number of informsin in limited time? Learning concepts and ideas is a better choice, becauseconcepts are always the elites or short interpretations of the whole things, aswell as the ideas that seem to be extracted from long detailed facts and servedas the representative of the articles or whatever. Command these basic crucial elements will assist you to exaggerate your knowledge faster comparing to that oflearning facts.
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Secondly, for the concepts and ideas constitutethe soul of the matter, we should pay more attention on that. For example, weare usually examined by some tests requiring you to write down the authors'ideas or the concrete concepts of the terms by attaching several passages. Onthe contrary, we are merely asked to depict the facts one by one. Because mostpeople hold that once you get the concepts and ideas, you get the full appreciation.

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In conclusion,concepts and ideas reflect predominate trait of the matters, we can understandthe entire things by investigate（ing） them in a shorter time with efficiency. So weshould focus on concept and ideas instead of facts.

写的不错，观点都很明确了
语法错误也很少，语言也不错
感觉不足的是，学concept比较好这一点说的比较多，其实可以多花点篇幅举例子，说的具体些~

不好意思我白天要工作，所以评晚了

scutgongUID：2564275

The world keeps progressing every day, and we shall keep learning all the way to adjust to the challenging environment. It seems that allocating our limited time reasonably becomes a crucial question. Imaging that 20 years later, how do we arrange our life expended（spent？） on works, dinners and leisure hours? As far as I am concerned, less time will be wasted（感觉用waste有点不恰当） in cooking and preparing food. Here come my reasons.


First and foremost, accompanying with the development of science and technology, the innovations will be made everywhere, which means that we should spend more time and study harder to get a quick command of them, especially that related to our work fields. Subsequently, the time for preparing food may be spared to learn some new terms. And, do not undermine the length of time in preparing food. Let's take a detail perception of how to make a dinner. First, you should think about the recipes, then get the materials from the（这里的the要慎重使用） supermarkets, after washing them carefully or slice them in shapes, you could embark on the most important step to make them eatable. Have you ever counted the time through the whole process? According to my experience, that will cost you more than one hour, and that is one eighth of your normal work time. You have a better choice to use this hour studying new things.

Secondly, 20 years later, the promoted life quality provides us with even more forms of entertainment. Everyone will have fun on his interests such as going to movies, doing sports, taking a trip and so on. Just as I mentioned（have you mentioned？）, movies has their start times you should obey or you will miss the beginning or some parts, then you have no chance to make a meal to cater the appropriate timing; sports have their fixed place you should go for, thus you can't prepare a meal outside; and the trip, you should never imagine making a dinner during your wonderful journey. If you insist on cooking, you will lose the time enjoying the life.

Last but not the least, more instant foods with delicious tastes will be expected 20 years later, I believe most of us apt to choose this convenient and easier way to fill ourselves instead of making a dinner by our own. The surplus time for the original food preparing could be adopted to studying, relaxing, and anything you want. In conclusion, I hold that people will spend less time in cooking 20 years later.

作者写的很不错，仅有少量的错误。以上为个位的评论，不周到处请关照。

shirley072UID：2712200

With the abundant materials provided by the modern society, most people hold that we need to explore our psychiatric world by getting sense of success.So, what is a definition of success? The answers vary. As far as I am concerned,earning money via industrious work contributes to success. Thus, some people may induce that those millionaires without work must have pessimistic feelings for not gaining success. However, I prefer that people with plenty of money will get happy indeed.


There are two types of the rich man, one with the money inherited by their parents and the other earned by themselves. First, let's take a look at the previous one. It is unnecessary for they to work outside because they have no economic problems to solve. Without considering the survival question, they could choose anything they like to satisfy themselves. On a material level, the simplest choice is shopping, buying various things alluring to them. However, if they pursue the happiness on the level of psychiatry, for example, they could get a course related to their interests such as music and they have a choice to play with the instruments all lifetime just because of enjoying them. In contrary, many people abandon their interests for their responsibilities to raise families,they may be the unhappier ones.


The other type of people, who earn enough money already, will not pay attention to the work stuff any more. As the successful men, they experience a hard striving time,they may feel like to relax, take some trips all over the world to enjoy life.Once adequate money are gained, most of they quit their jobs, exchanging for the more time to accomplish some things they are longing for during work periods. No working, but happier.


In conclusion, people with a huge fortune always feel happy, because they have no burden in raising themselves or their families, that is to say,they have no need to work, instead, they can spend much time with entertainments.