【ineffable】第7次作业-Issue50_by Karen

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ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

                                      Some Faculty Should Join Part-time Working Outside

Education is not only teaching students intellect but also helping them to become skillful before entering their careers. Requiring faculty to work outside would allow them to assimilate practical values into their teaching schemes.
While there is no such need for certain courses, such as history, liternature and pure arts.

Teachers bear the burden to mold students' soul, to tell ways of thinking, to foster ability to learning, and the more important is how to live a life. So how to know well about working, and get along well with others are essential for them.
Textbooks may show a lot of disciplines about the kancks, while they are dull to master and not flexible enough for the changing world. By contrast, practical examples and demonstration could solve this problem.

When i was in the university, a professor of urban ecology gave me deep impression in her class and almost every one of her student earned a lot from her. She usually paraphrased the complex definition with simple words, showed cases of her colleagues and bosses before, or compared with the programs she had participated in. Concerning the norm of "city ecology", a vivid sentence i remember is " the city we live in is just like a machine, and every one is the right nail addicting to it, with his own role and moving style.
When some of the nails contrast each other and move against others, the machine would be destroyed."
May be because of her rich experience and detailed demonstration that the disciplines become interesting and could be easily acquired.

Also, with part-time working in related areas, teachers could get well acquainted about the world outside so that could give students useful advice before they enter society. As teachers know what kinds of subjects will be well developed, what kinds of jobs will be welcome, some students may turn to these fields as early as possible.
As teachers know the difference of people' relationship between school and society, students could be taught about how to communicate with other workmates and leaders. What kinds of basic skills should be well mastered, what kind of liyi are needed, etc. All of which are necessary for a well-rounded person.

In addition, education is changing with time not fixed. Teachers with work knit of society may bring fresh air to the disciplines even make textbook improved. In universities especially, professors could find some theories outdated sometime.

However, it is no good for all kinds of faculties attending work, like literature and pure arts teachers. Different with science and social science, the aim of literature and arts is to give us truth, beauty, confidence and compassion as well as how to express our ideas in artistic ways. Practicality has nothing with them, though sometimes the publish of literature books indeed cause great benefits. But pure arts are not for money and fame.

Though combing with society is necessary for some faculties, balancing with teaching and working is more essetial, as teaching is the main role for a teacher. If not, work would influence the quality of education.

In a word, enrolled in society is good for some education except arts and literature. School might well encourage those teachers to take time working outside while keeping teaching priority.

小灵易碎UID: 2733622

Education is not only teaching students intellect but also helping them to become skillful before entering their careers. Requiring faculty to work outside would allow them to assimilate practical values into their teaching schemes.
While there is no such need for certain courses, such as history, liternature and pure arts.
教育的目的在于教学生知识同时教会他们工作技能，但是不是所有学科都适合外出工作

Teachers bear the burden to mold students' soul(建议改成build students' mind), to tell ways of thinking, to foster ability to learning, and the more important is how to live a life. So how to know well about working, and get along well with others are essential for them.（这句之前的主语是teachers，这句你是想表达对于学生来说知道怎么工作和与人相处很重要吗？them在这句里有点指代不清。而且逻辑我没看懂“因为教师承受着教学生……的责任，所以对于学生来说……很重要”？）
Textbooks may show a lot of disciplines about the kancks（knacks）, while they are dull to master and not flexible enough for the changing world（to change the world）. By contrast, practical examples and demonstration could solve this problem.
教师有责任教好学生，但是教科书上的东西无法改变世界，而实际例子可以（改变世界？）

When i was in the university, a professor of urban ecology gave me (a) deep impression in her class and almost every one of her student earned a lot from her. She usually paraphrased the complex definition with simple words, showed cases of her colleagues and bosses before, or compared with the programs she had participated in. Concerning (on) the norm of "city ecology", a vivid sentence i remember is " the city we live in is just like a machine, and every one is the right nail addicting to it, with his own role and moving style.
When some of the nails contrast each other and move against others, the machine would be destroyed."
May be because of her rich experience and detailed demonstration that the disciplines become interesting and could be easily acquired.
老师用她的亲身经验让课堂变得更有趣的例子

Also, with part-time working in related areas, teachers could get well acquainted about the world outside so that could give students useful advice before they enter society. As teachers know what kinds of subjects will be well developed, what kinds of jobs will be welcome, some students may turn to these fields as early as possible.
As teachers know the difference of people' relationship between school and society, students could be taught about how to communicate with other workmates and leaders. What kinds of basic skills should be well mastered, what kind of liyi(?) are needed, etc. All of which are necessary for a well-rounded person.
老师可以教授学生在今后工作当中用得到的知识

In addition, education is changing with time not fixed. Teachers with work knit of society may bring fresh air to the disciplines even make textbook improved. In universities especially, professors could find some theories outdated sometime.
在外工作可以使老师时刻处于学术信息的前沿

However, it is no(not) good for all kinds of faculties attending work, like literature and pure arts teachers. Different with science and social science, the aim of literature and arts is to give us truth, beauty, confidence and compassion as well as how to express our ideas in artistic ways. Practicality has nothing with them, though sometimes the publish of literature books indeed cause great benefits. But pure arts are not for money and fame.（最后这句话有点不知所云)
但是不是所有学科都适合在外工作

Though combing（combining） with society is necessary for some faculties, balancing with teaching and working is more essetial(essential), as teaching is the main role for a teacher. If not, work would influence the quality of education.
教学和工作二者都很重要

In a word, enrolled in society is good for some education except arts and literature. School might well encourage those teachers to take time working outside while keeping teaching priority


整体来看理由是有的，但是观点不是很明确，句子之间的连结也有点破碎，如果例子能更有力一点就更好了
词组的搭配和动词的选用上面有小瑕疵，要加油哦
我拍得狠点，请见谅

karen_06UID: 2728072

谢谢小灵易碎哦，欢迎意见欢迎意见，这样俺才知道不足，我下载了你的修改，有空好好研究研究呵呵:)

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ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

                                      Some Faculty Should Join Part-time Working Outside

Education is not only teaching students intellect but also helping them to become skillful before entering their careers（enter society 是不是好些？or set up their careers）. Requiring faculty to work outside would allow them to assimilate practical values into their teaching schemes. While there is no such need for certain courses, such as history, liternature and pure arts. （提出个人观点，总的来说是好的，但在一些学科中不必要）

Teachers bear the burden（responsibility还好些，你用这个burden我感觉教育人就成了负担一样） to mold students' soul, to tell ways of thinking, to foster ability to learning, and the more important is how to live a life. So how to know well about working(太蹩的慌了), and get along well with others are essential for them.（教师的重要性）
Textbooks may show a lot of disciplines about the kancks？？, while they are dull to master and not flexible enough for the changing world. By contrast, practical examples and demonstration could solve this problem. （书本和实践经验）

When i was in the university, a professor of urban ecology gave me deep impression in her class and almost every one of her student（students） earned a lot from her. She usually paraphrased the complex definition with simple words, showed cases of her colleagues and bosses before, or compared with the programs she had participated in. Concerning the norm of "city ecology", a vivid sentence i remember is " the city we live in is just like a machine, and every one is the right nail addicting to it, with his own role and moving style.When some of the nails contrast each other and move against others, the machine would be destroyed."May be because of her rich experience and detailed demonstration that the disciplines become interesting and could be easily acquired. （一个例子，我感觉像记叙文而非议论文，建议换个角度阐述）

Also, with part-time working in related areas, teachers could get well acquainted about the world outside so that could give students useful advice before they enter society. As teachers know what kinds of subjects will be well developed, what kinds of jobs will be welcome, some students may turn to these fields as early as possible.As teachers know the difference of people' relationship between school and society, students could be taught about how to communicate with other workmates and leaders. What kinds of basic skills should be well mastered, what kind of liyi are needed, etc. All of which are necessary for a well-rounded person. （教师搞课外工作的益处）

In addition, education is changing with time not fixed（instead of being fixed）. Teachers with work knit of society may bring fresh air to the disciplines even make textbook improved. In universities especially, professors could find some theories outdated sometime. （教师不搞课外工作的坏处）

However, it is no good for all kinds of faculties attending work, like literature and pure arts teachers. Different with science and social science, the aim of literature and arts is to give us truth, beauty, confidence and compassion as well as how to express our ideas in artistic ways. Practicality has nothing with them, though sometimes the publish of literature books indeed cause great benefits. But pure arts are not for money and fame.（有些学科不用）

Though combing with society is necessary for some faculties, balancing with teaching and working is more essetial（essential）, as teaching is the main role for a teacher. If not, work would influence the quality of education. （提建议，说二者要相结合）

In a word, enrolled in society is good for some education except arts and literature. School might well encourage those teachers to take time working outside while keeping teaching priority

总的来说，思路从上而下还是比较有条理的，但段分的太乱了，不好找中心，而且每段文字太少也没有阐述清楚作者想表达的意思。建议合理分段，每段有中心有总结，加强文章结构。

我写了一道不是作业的题，有时间帮我看看吧，快考了，谢谢啊
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1051545-1-1.html

xiaxiaobing919UID: 2606450

1# karen_06   

麻烦你有空的时候还是改一下我的作文吧，所谓礼尚往来呀，加组的目的不就是互相改吗？

karen_06UID: 2728072

6# xiaxiaobing919
呵呵不好意思啊，我欠的债都记着呢。偶在职考，底子不如大家，时间也有点散，希望你原谅哦。偶会尽力改的呵呵