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发表于 2010-1-28 20:51:14 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
本帖最后由 lilacxiao 于 2010-1-28 20:53 编辑

The telephone has a greater effect onpeople's lives than the television do.


Telephone and television, tworepresentative modern technologies, both play a significant role in people'slives, which makes it hard to simply
tell a more influential one.If a comparison is necessary, from my point of view, telephone's effect isgreater in the following aspects.


The chief reason that telephone is moreinfluential is that, people use telephone more often and regard it as a necessity
. To pick up atime for a business conversation, to communicate with relatives far away, or toexpress the daily emotions, the first thing people would think of is apparentlytelephone. Consequently, almost every person may use telephone several times ina single day. In the meanwhile, television is less frequentely used. Other alternatives such asInternet, MP4 are readily available for people with greater convenience andmore functions. As far as I know, relatively large groups like students andbusinessmen would spend a lot of time on these alternatives of television,while having no access to television in a long time.


Another reason for telephone's greatereffect is its benefits. Compared with television's entertainment purpose,telephone's functions of getting connection with others, communication and transferring
informationare more important. With the extraordinary convenience and benefits telephoneoffers, people nowadays just cannot imagine the world without telephone. Takingthe daily experience everyone may face as a paradigmatic example of this.Imagine that I want to watch the heated movie 'Avater' with my friends in a newestablished theatre. Without telephone, we may have trouble to fix the time; oreven we have fixed it in advance, we may have to spend time looking for eachother. In this sense, the benefits of the telephone outweigh the ones oftelevision.


Finally, with the remarkable progress oftechnology development, there is possibility that telephone would totally takethe role of television. It is remembered that ten years ago, only a small percentof families installed telephone, and far less percent of people who hold cellphone. However, nowadays, telephone is so popular that almost everyone obtainsone. What’s more, we can use our cell phones to get access to the internet tosearch information as well as to watch TV programs. Thus, it is reasonable toimagine that in the near future, everyone may use the telephone for functionsthe television provides now, leaving little space for television.

In conclusion, telephone renders a moreimportant effect on our lives as it is used more often, and its functions aremore crucial and versatile.




第一次参加小组作业,发现时间不够,30分钟内只完成了前三段和第四段的开头,语言和用词也没有时间斟酌,匆匆补上最后几句就厚脸皮地放上来了。求批...
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发表于 2010-1-29 11:18:02 |只看该作者
首先,一贴到Word上好多红色波浪啊..很多没空格开的词呢)
Telephone and television, two representative modern technologies, both play a significant role in people's lives, which makes it hard to simply tell a more influential one. If a comparison is necessary, from my point of view, telephone's effect is greater in the following aspects.
The chief reason that telephone is more influential is that, people use telephone more often and regard it as a necessity. To pick up a time for a business conversation, to communicate with relatives far away, or to express the daily emotions, the first thing people would think of is apparently telephone. Consequently, almost every person may use telephone several times in a single day. In the meanwhile, television is less frequentely(frequently) used. Other alternatives such as Internet, MP4 are readily available for people with greater convenience and more functions. As far as I know, relatively large groups like students and businessmen would spend a lot of time on these alternatives of television, while having no access to television in a long time.R' y
(基本没有问题,行文流畅,句式OK)
Another reason(“aspect” is better) for telephone's greater effect is its benefits. Compared with television's entertainment purpose, telephone's functions of getting connection with others, communication and transferring information(意思基本相同,类似的讲两次最多了,三次就罗嗦了) are more important. With the extraordinary convenience and benefits telephone offers, people nowadays just cannot imagine the world without telephone(碎碎念:有QQ,俺不怕). Taking the daily experience everyone may face as a paradigmatic(我拜倒于你海一样的词汇量) example of this. Imagine that I want to watch the heated movie 'Avater' with my friends in a new established theatre. Without telephone, we may have trouble to fix the time; or even we have fixed it in advance, we may have to spend time looking for each other. In this sense, the benefits of the telephone outweigh the ones of television.
Finally, with the remarkable progress of technology development, there is possibility that telephone would totally take the role of television. It is remembered that ten years ago, only a small percent of families installed telephone, and far less percent of people who hold cell phone. However, nowadays, telephone is so popular that almost everyone obtains one. What’s more, we can use our cell phones to get access to the internet to search information as well as to watch TV programs. Thus, it is reasonable to imagine that in the near future, everyone may use the telephone for functions the television provides now, leaving little space for television.
In conclusion, telephone renders a more important effect on our lives as it is used more often and its functions are more crucial and versatile.
写得很好,比我强多了,那词汇量,那句式,向你学习~
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发表于 2010-2-10 18:32:40 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 lilacxiao 于 2010-2-10 18:41 编辑

In the lecture, the speaker mainly argues that dinosaurs are not endotherm, challenging the main points made in the passage.

First of all, the lecturer points out that polar regions used to be much warmer than today and warm enough for animals that are not endotherm to live, which contradicts the reading that only endotherms can live in poplar areas. Furthermore,the lecturer claims that when the temperature began to decrease, the dinosaurs could possibly move to other warmer places or hibernate.

In addition, the lecturer continues to provide another explanation of dinosaurs' leg position, casting doubt on the second reason in the reading to prove that dinosaurs are endotherm. According to the lecturer, it is entirely possible that dinosaurs use the legs underneath the body to sustain their heavy weight, which is an advantage for them. This explanation solves the problem that, instead of having legs at the body's sideas crocodiles and lizards do, dinosaurs have the legs positioned underneath their body.

Finally, the lecturer questions the validity of the third reason in the reading passage by holding that dinosaurs grow periodically, which is a strong indicator that they are not endotherm. In contrast, the reading passage thinks that with the Haversian canals the dinosaurs are able to grow rapidly, implying they are endotherms. From the lecturer, rather than growing quickly regardless of theweather condition, the dinosaurs would grow slowly or stop growing when it is cold.

In conclusion, the above three reasons illustrate that the lecturer disagrees with the points mentioned in the reading passage.



一遍完成的,在规定时间完成的,红色部分是自己修改的。
自我感觉大部分都听懂了也写出来了,偶有一些小细节没听到或者听到了不确定是否正确,选择不写,不知good的话需要细节到什么程度。
字数超了,尽量控制下..

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发表于 2010-2-12 04:33:03 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 让我来做海盗 于 2010-2-12 04:34 编辑

TPO4 综合 句子 是没有什么问题。。 至少我看   听力很强大。    基本上 是 原文,转述啊。  但是 最好 做到全文 同义转述。  模板 套用的也很好。 总之, 不错的。。

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1059826&page=1&extra=#pid1773600318

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