[Big Fish]03月01日Issue153--By swolf54我没有写成一边倒的观点，不知行不行

swolf54UID: 2421931

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
这种写法不是一边倒的，对于这题有点没底，不知大家怎么看


Should the students be skeptical to whatever they study or learn? Some people claim so, while others hold the opposite attitude for the reason that excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which impedes students from learning more knowledge. As far as I'm concerned, though I concede that too much skepticism, sometimes, do cause negative effect to students' study; however, it is still recommended that students should hold a proper skeptical attitude in their studying and learning.
In the first place, I admit that, under some circumstances, excessive skepticism is not helpful but in fact harmful to the study. When a person became over skeptical towards everything, he may turn to be an agnostic, who perceives the truth of everything is unknowable. As long as the modern science is always based upon some self-demonstrating assumptions, agnostics will question the authenticity of these assumptions and refuse to accept them, let alone the theories deduced from them. Take Mathematics as a specific example, if one refuse to accept one and one is two, he will not accept the calculation of multiply or divide. Under such circumstances, excess skepticism do impedes students from advanced study.
However, what mentioned above is extreme case; in fact, proper skepticism plays vital role in our study and learns, and it has contributed a lot in the progress of human kinds.
First of all, skepticism promotes students' ability of query and critical thinking, which are often regarded as the most important learning skills. According to a famous scientist, scientific theories are conceived to be tested and falsified. Thus, if the students fail to master the ability to be skeptical and critical, they will not understand the truth of science and make progress in their studying fields. Take economics study more example, the prevailing neo-classical economics theories are based on the basic assumption that people are rational and self-interest. Nevertheless, in advanced studies, some economists found that in many cases, people's behavior are irrational and not self-interest but generous, they begin to question about the assumptions of neo-classical economics theories. After repeatedly observation and testify, they confirmed their initial conjecture and then corporate their new ideas into the previous theory to set up a newly branch of economics- behavior and experimental economics, which enjoys more and more in the academic field. This example enlightens us that, skepticism intricate people to surpass their predecessors and make significant progresses. As a result, it is naturally to encourage students to hold a skeptical attitude to what they learned.
Beside, taking a skeptical attitude also helps students be independent and tell fake from genuine. In case that we are living in an era of booming information, it is both important and necessary for the students to think independently, being not easily affected by the outside world. Also, it is required that they should distinguish the genuine of the information, absorbing the ones that are useful to them. Under such circumstances, skepticism comes to be emphasized in students’ education once again.
In conclusion, though excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which causes negative effect to students’ study, an appropriate skepticism is highly recommended to the students. After all, skepticism makes individual to be independent and creative, hence enables them to make brilliant progress.

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1# swolf54

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
这种写法不是一边倒的，对于这题有点没底，不知大家怎么看
As for me ,I 'd rather take one side and make my point clearly, what's more ,it is always easy for me to achive sth if I stay focus, even go to extreme.
but just my personal idea anyway.

Should the students be skeptical to whatever they study or learn? Some people claim so, while others hold the opposite attitude for the reason that excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which impedes students from learning more knowledge. As far as I'm concerned, though I concede that too much skepticism, sometimes, do cause negative effect to students' study; however, it is still recommended that students should hold a proper skeptical attitude in their studying and learning.
I highly doubt that "agnosticism" is appropriate usage here.

In the first place, I admit that, under some circumstances, excessive skepticism is not helpful but in fact harmful to the study. When a person became over skeptical towards everything, he may turn to be an agnostic, who perceives the truth of everything is unknowable. As long as the modern science is always based upon some self-demonstrating assumptions, agnostics will question the authenticity of these assumptions and refuse to accept them, let alone the theories deduced from them. Take Mathematics as a specific example, if one refuse to accept one and one is two, he will not accept the calculation of multiply or divide. Under such circumstances, excess skepticism do impedes students from advanced study.
beside this ficticious example ,can you illustrate your point with another specific example? I think that will be better
However, what mentioned above is extreme case; in fact, proper skepticism plays vital role in our study and learns, and it has contributed a lot in the progress of human kinds.

First of all, skepticism promotes students' ability of query and critical thinking, which are often regarded as the most important learning skills. According to a famous scientist, scientific theories are conceived to be tested and falsified. Thus, if the students fail to master the ability to be skeptical and critical, they will not understand the truth of science and make progress in their studying fields. Take economics study more example, the prevailing neo-classical economics theories are based on the basic assumption that people are rational and self-interest. Nevertheless, in advanced studies, some economists found that in many cases, people's behavior are irrational and not self-interest but generous, they begin to question about the assumptions of neo-classical economics theories. After repeatedly observation and testify, they confirmed their initial conjecture and then corporate their new ideas into the previous theory to set up a newly branch of economics- behavior and experimental economics, which enjoys more and more in the academic field. (if the judge no nothing about economics , it is probablely a little hard for he/she to understand ,why not choose an interesting and vivid example? )This example enlightens us that, skepticism intricate people to surpass their predecessors and make significant progresses. As a result, it is naturally to encourage students to hold a skeptical attitude to what they learned.
Beside, taking a skeptical attitude also helps students be independent and tell fake from genuine. In case that we are living in an era of booming information, it is both important and necessary for the students to think independently, being not easily affected by the outside world. Also, it is required that they should distinguish the genuine of the information, absorbing the ones that are useful to them. Under such circumstances, skepticism comes to be emphasized in students’ education once again.
(if you begin with the structure like "first of all", it is better to follow the procedure and give the reader"second",otherwise ,we will be a little disappointment , becasue we are waiting for that to come ,but you just rash to the end.)

In conclusion, though excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which causes negative effect to students’ study, an appropriate skepticism is highly recommended to the students. After all, skepticism makes individual to be independent and creative, hence enables them to make brilliant progress.
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so far so good ,but I  believe you can do better
the begining and ending are good ,but I still doubt about"agnosticism" is a wise choise here.
The whole structure of main body is not quite clear.
I do suggest to use some other example to make the contant more convincing.

That's all ,it is my pleasure to read your work~~~ carry on!!!

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Should the students be skeptical to whatever they study or learn? Some people claim so（此处的so指代不明。前文是一个疑问句而非陈述。不能想当然地认为用个so就是指代肯定结果）, while others hold the opposite attitude for the reason that excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which impedes students from learning more knowledge. As far as I'm concerned, though I concede that too much skepticism, sometimes, do cause negative effect to students' study; however（前半句有了though此处是否还适合用however?又有分号隔开，对这个用法不太清楚）, it is still recommended that students should hold a proper skeptical attitude in their studying and learning（T）.


In the first place, I admit that, （结构上不需要逗号就不要用）under some circumstances, excessive skepticism is not helpful but in fact harmful to the study. When a person became over skeptical towards everything, he may turn to be an agnostic, who perceives the truth of everything is unknowable. As long as （私以为此连接词不是很好。“只要科学总是建立在不言自明的假设上，不可知论者就会否定这些假设”？个人以为，“只要”从句后面所接的主语应该跟主句的对象一致。比如此处只要的主语是科学，那么主句的对象取科学就比取假设要好。这里的取法就好像说“只要苹果是长在邻居家的地里，我就不会踏进邻居家”。对比一下，说“只要苹果是长在邻居家地里，我就不会去摘”貌似更顺畅。以上为读文章时不知不觉生出的一点小怨念，个人观点，批判性接受。）the modern science is always based upon some self-demonstrating assumptions, agnostics will question the authenticity of these assumptions and refuse to accept them, let alone the theories deduced from them. Take Mathematics as a specific example, if one refuse to accept one and one is two, he will not accept the calculation of multiply or divide. Under such circumstances, excess skepticism do impedes students from advanced study. （同样对agnositic的用法存疑，此词似乎多指“无法确认上帝的存在”。）

However, what mentioned above is（+冠词） extreme case; in fact, proper skepticism plays （冠词）vital role in our study and learns, and it has contributed a lot in （搭配）the progress of human kinds.（过渡段）

First of all, skepticism promotes students' ability of query and critical thinking, which are often regarded as the most important learning skills. According to a famous scientist, scientific theories are conceived to be tested and falsified（此词意为“伪造”，确认合适？）. Thus, if the students fail to master the ability to be skeptical and critical, they will not（语气绝对了点吧） understand the truth of science and make progress in their studying fields.（为啥俺觉得这个thus看不顺眼捏，由科学家跳到普通学生，这个跨度可以么） Take economics study more example（何意？）, the prevailing neo-classical economics theories are based on the basic assumption that people are rational and self-interest（换形容词）. Nevertheless, in advanced studies, some economists found that in many cases, people's behavior are irrational and not self-interest but generous, they begin（过去时） to question about the assumptions of neo-classical economics theories. After repeatedly observation and testify, they confirmed their initial conjecture and then corporate（过去时） their new ideas into the previous theory to set up a newly（副词不修饰名词） branch of economics- behavior and experimental economics, which enjoys more and more in the academic field（费解。enjoy的宾语？）. This example enlightens us that, skepticism intricate（何意？请区分形容词与动词，并且注意主谓一致） people to surpass their predecessors and make significant progresses. As a result, it is naturally to encourage students to hold a skeptical attitude to what they learned.（例子OK。就是由于最后要转回学生，所以中间是否可以添加半句过渡如为了将来具备此种思辨和创新能力，需要从学生时代就培养怀疑精神云云，这样比直接来一个as a result要顺畅一些）

Beside, taking a skeptical attitude also helps students be independent and tell fake from genuine. In case（何意？）that we are living in an era of booming information, it is both important and necessary for the students to think independently, being not easily affected by the outside world. Also, it is required that they should distinguish the genuine of the information, absorbing the ones that are useful to them. Under such circumstances, skepticism comes to be emphasized in students’ education once again.


In conclusion, though excessive skepticism may lead to agnosticism, which causes negative effect to students’ study, an appropriate skepticism is highly recommended to the students. After all, skepticism makes individual to be independent and creative, hence enables them to make brilliant progress.
不知道作者所说的“一边倒”的观点是什么样，全盘否定或肯定么？那样子反而不好写呢。目前这偏算是比较常见的结构，有保留的肯定，所以是没有问题的。整体不错，就是一些细节和语言上的东西还要注意。另外，文章内容不够compelling，这个可能与论证方式不够有说服力有关。这个题目除了例证之外很好的一个论证方式就是对比啊！既然题目给出了skepticism和accepting it passively，就很可以抓住它来个对比，进一步强调怀疑的作用。


以上~个人意见，批判性接受。