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3月31日作业
Advertisements make products seem better than they are.

Everyday, a lot of advertisements are shown around us including on TV, in newspapers and on radio. This information has a strong influence on persuading costumers to buy them. There is no doubt that using advertisements can help producers promote goods. The advertisements can make goods seems better than they really are.

First, the products in advertisement always look more beautiful and shining, which can attract people to buy them. For example, once I saw an advertisement of fast food on TV. The hamburger is big and consists of diverse vegetables and tender beef. However, when I went to store and bought it, I felt the big difference. The hamburger was smaller than I saw on TV and also not so delicious as I thought before. Thus it is true that the goods are shown in advertisement look better than they actually are.

Also, the products in the advertisements work better than they do in fact, especially the medicine and tools. For example, my mom wanted to loose weight and she tried many ways but they all worked slowly. Then she saw a product in newspaper called light tea that can help people loose weight in seven days. At the same time, some data were shown to explain how it works so fast. Seeing it, my mom believed it. However, after she bought it and had drunk it for seven days, she found herself just lost little pounds. The tea did not work so efficiently as the advertisement said.

What's more, products in advertisement look popular and almost everyone own them. It seems to tell people that those who do not buy them are out of date. According to a survey of psychology, people are intend to think that popular things are good and have an intense to own them. In this way, the advertisements achieve the goals of making goods look better.

In conclusion, the products in advertisements looks better and worked better than they really are. Also them goods seem popular and make costumers think that they are good. The producers use the advertisement to attract more costumers and surly make the goods in advertisement seems better.

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4.1 （09.3.7）
It better to use own knowledge and experience to solve queation, or ask other people for advice.


When facing problems, people always do not want to ask for help from others because they think there is no need to disturb others to solve them that are easy to handle. However, is it really that personal knowledge and experience can be helpful all the time? It is absolutely not. Because it is apparently that personal knowledge maybe misconceptions and experience is limited. Furthermore, it is faster to solve problems by asking for advice.
Thus I think it is better to ask others for advice than using knowledge and experience when people solve problems.

Although people learn plenty of knowledge and gain lot of experience every second, it is still limited. When we face a new problem that we never meet before, it would be so hard to figure it out by just using our personal knowledge and experience. For example, I got an opportunity to have an interview for the summer internship in an international school last month. However I have never had an interview like this before. I had no idea about it and I did not even know what I should wear that day. Then I tried to search on the internet to learn custom about having an interview and asked my friends who had experience about this kind of interview before for some advice. After I had this advice, I fully prepared for it and finally, I got this internship.

Also, it is faster to solve problems by asking advice from other people. Different people have different professional fields that they are good at.  When we face a problem that we are not familiar with, it will take a long time for us to know it and then solve it. It is not efficient for the
For example, I am not a expert at computer and if I want to solve a software problem of it, I have two chooses. The first one is I do it by myself and I have to spend a long time on referring books and I may not solve it in the end. The second one is I can ask a friend who is a computer engineer for advice and he will tell me the method to solve it in 5 minuets. Obviously, the second way is more efficiently.

In conclusion, asking other people for advice can not only break the limitation of personal knowledge and experience but also make things done more efficient. It is better than just using own knowledge and experience.

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不好意思，昨天学校停电了， 一直没改你的文章
我的在 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1075143&extra=&page=2 17楼
加油！！

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Everyday, a lot of advertisements are shown around us （including ）on TV, in newspapers and on radio. This(these) information（shown on TV） has a strong influence on persuading costumers to buy them(them指代的是？要把对象写出来). There is no doubt that using advertisements can help producers promote goods. (这里应该点出观点，加上I think/from my perspective吧)The advertisements can make goods seems better than they really are.（开头段最好点出下面三段的三个TS的内容，直接阐明你的三个理由。。比如The advertisements can make goods seems better than they really are by making them look more beautiful, more reliable and more popular among customers）

First, the products in advertisement always look more beautiful and shining, which can attract people to buy them. For example, once I saw an advertisement of fast food on TV. The hamburger is big and consists of diverse vegetables and tender beef. However, when I went to store and bought it, I felt the big difference. The hamburger was smaller than I saw on TV and also not so delicious as I thought before. Thus it is true that the goods are shown in advertisement look better than they actually are.

Also, the products in the advertisements work better than they do in fact, especially the medicine and tools. For example, my mom wanted to loose weight and she tried many ways but they all worked slowly. Then she saw a product in newspaper called light tea that can help people loose weight in seven days. At the same time, some data were shown to explain how it works so fast. Seeing it, my mom believed it（my mon believed it the minute she saw it）. However, after she bought it and had drunk it for seven days, she found herself just lost little pounds. The tea did not work so efficiently as the advertisement said.(这里最好有一句总结句，这个例子告诉了我们什么什么。。)
What's more, products in advertisement look popular and almost everyone own them. It seems to tell people that those who do not buy them are out of date. According to a survey of psychology, people are intend to think that popular things are good and have an intense to own them. In this way, the advertisements achieve the goals of making goods look better.（这句话和本段中心思想有偏差啊，应该是achieve the goal of making more profit by making the products looking prevailing. ）
In conclusion, the products in advertisements looks better and worked better than they really are. Also them goods seem popular and make costumers think that they are good. The producers use the advertisement to attract more costumers and surly make the goods in advertisement seems better.(这句话和前一句有点重复了，适当点名一下make product look better 的目的吧---attract more costumers and make profit….)

总的来说语言组织和用词都没有问题，我的感觉是写的有点停留在表面，可以深入探讨一下advertisement make products seem better的原因,例子举得不错，不过关于例子分析可以更多一些
其他都不错，总之加油吧~~

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4.2 （08.12.5）
Playing sports teaches people lessons about life.


People play sports everyday and most of them hope to keep health or fit by doing it. From my perspective, playing sports does not only benefit our health and figure, it also teach us lessons about life. We can learn the importance of teamwork, the value of perseverance, the attitude of keeping claim from it.

To begin with, people can learn how to work with others from playing sports. Many sports are done by more than one person or even a group. Those who want to win the games should work with other team members harmoniously. For example, when playing basketball, everyone has his or her responsibility. Someone need to attack while someone need to defend. Not everyone can be the hero to shoot and get goals. People should learn how to adapt themselves and make the best use of their own team. Thus people can realize the importance of corporation and maximum their values in teamwork in their life.

In addition, playing sports can also help people learn the value of perseverance. Keeping doing sports everyday is a tough job because sometimes people feel tied of work or study and they need a rest by giving
up playing sports. The bad weather, also, can be a excuse for quit doing sports. For instance, people prefer to sit in the sofa and watch TV in a warm house in the winter than running outside. Under this condition, playing sport needs the spirit of perseverance. People should try to overcome the inertia and persevere with the sports. That is why I think playing sports can make people become more persistent.

What's more, people can help people face competitions with a better attitude. Many sport, such as tennis, football, basketball, are competitive. Win or lose is a common result for most people who play sports and they are claim when facing competitions. As an illustration, once our collage held a debate and many students watched it. I felt so nervous as a debater that I kept sweating while my partner just took it easy. Then I asked her why she remained so claim. She told me that she always took part in tennis matches and she had already used to face any competition with a claim mind whether she wins or loses. Consequently, people can have a better attitude when handle a competition if they play sports.

In conclusion, playing sports is more than a way of doing exercise. It can teach people how to work with others, how to persevere and how to have a better attitude when facing competitions.

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It better to use own knowledge and experience to solve queation, or ask other people for advice.

When facing problems, people always do not want to ask for help from others because they think there is no need to disturb others to solve them that are easy to handle. However, is it really that personal knowledge and experience can be helpful all the time? It is absolutely not. Because it is apparently that personal knowledge maybe misconceptions(名词形式) and experience is limited. Furthermore, it is faster to solve problems by asking for advice.（建议不要连用it is）
Thus I think it is better to ask others for advice than using knowledge and experience when people solve problems.

Although people learn plenty of knowledge and gain lot of experience every second, it is still limited. When we face a new problem that we never meet before, it would be so hard to figure it out by just using our personal knowledge and experience. For example, I got an opportunity to have an interview for the summer internship in an international school last month. However I have never had an interview like this before. I had no idea about it and I did not even know what I should wear（in） that day. Then I tried to search on the internet to learn custom about having an interview and asked my friends who had experience about this kind of interview before for some advice.(我觉得这样更舒服Hence I tried to search on the internet to learn custom about having an interview and asked advice for my friendss who had experience about this kind of interview before.) After I had this advice, I fully prepared for it and finally, I got this internship.' Q+ C% ]$ D7 W9 a. ^3 ~

Also, it is faster to solve problems by asking advice from other people. Different people have different professional fields that they are good at.  When we face a problem that we are not familiar with, it will take a long time for us to know it and then solve it. It is not efficient for the For example, I am not a expert at computer and if I want to solve a software problem of it(去掉), I have two chooses. The first one is I do it by myself and I have to spend a long time on referring books and I may not solve it in the end. The second one is I can ask a friend who is a computer engineer（who is expert in computer 或者直接ask a computer engineer friend 因为已经出现很多次定语从句了） for advice and he will tell me the method to solve it in 5 minuets. Obviously, the second way is more efficiently.

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In conclusion, asking other people for advice can not only break the limitation of personal knowledge and experience but also make things done more efficient. It is better than just using own knowledge and experience
逻辑挺清晰的 但我感觉虽然意思我可以明白 但是表达有点单一 反复出现to....to..... 定语从句 have to 这些可以想办法替换 这样会感觉更好

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4.3 （08.5.17）
It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.

Nowadays, watching movies has become a important part of people's entertainment life. In this condition, I think it is better for people to watch movies that can make them amused. These kinds of movies can help people relax themselves and release the pressure. Although serious movies can make people get deeper think, those with entertainment do also have this effect in other ways.

To begin with, people can get relax when watch movies that entertain them. Watching these movies is a period of release pressure. Modern people have heavy pressure when facing the challenges and competitions. Even the students also have pressure from every perspective. For example, I am a senior student in collage. In order to apply graduate school, I have to prepare for my TOEFL test and GRE test. What's more, I have to do internship which translate scripts for movies and accomplish my senior year essay which request at least seven thousand words. I feel so tired about them and really want to release my pressure. Under this circumstance, I find a way for me to relax which is watching American dramas that can amuse me. I watch Friends the moment I feel tired. Then I will be amused by the stories and get relax.

In addition, people can also get deep think from the amused movies. These movies are more than a simple story to make people laugh. They can also teach people the ways of facing life. I can cite a example of a famous movie called Liar Liar. The father in this movie always tells lies while his son make a wish that his father will not tell a lie anymore. Finally the son's dream come true and the father can only tell the truth, which lead to a series of funny stories. From this movie, after laughing at the joyful stories, people learn the theory that do not tell lies to the family and spare more time from busy work to company them.

In conclusion, it is better for people to watch movies that can amuse or entertain them to get relax. At the same time, they can also have a deep think from the laughing of funny story.

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People play sports everyday and most of them hope to keep health or fit by doing it. From my perspective, playing sports does not only benefit our health and figure, it（not only but also） also teach us lessons about life. We can learn the importance of teamwork, the value of perseverance,(and) the attitude of keeping claim from it.: I& J# Y9 S$ t) n7 A  f( r
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To begin with, people can learn how to work with others from playing sports. Many sports are done by more than one person or even a group. Those（people） who want to win the games should work with other team members harmoniously. For example, when playing basketball, everyone has his or her responsibility. Someone need to attack while someone（others） need to defend. Not everyone can(has opportunities to) be the hero to shoot and(or) get goals. People should learn how to adapt themselves and make the best use of their own team. Thus people can realize the importance of corporation and maximum their values in teamwork in their life.5 y; d$ O

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In addition, playing sports can also help people learn the value of perseverance. Keeping doing sports everyday is a tough job because sometimes people feel tied (get tired)of work or study and they need a rest by giving/ o/ up playing sports. The bad weather, also, can be a excuse for quit doing sports. For instance, people prefer to sit in the sofa and watch TV in a warm house in the winter than running outside. Under this condition, playing sport needs the spirit of perseverance. People should try to overcome the inertia and persevere with the sports. That is why I think playing sports can make people become more persistent(learn the value of perseverance)
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What's(what is 考试的时候尽量避免缩写 省略 数字等表达) more, people can help people face competitions with a better attitude. Many sports, such as tennis, football, basketball, are competitive. Win or lose is a common result for most people who play sports and they are claim(calm) when facing competitions. As an illustration, once our collage held a debate and many students watched it. I felt so nervous as a debater that I kept sweating while my partner just took it easy. Then I asked her why she remained so claim. She told me that she always took part in tennis matches and she had already used to face（handle） any competition with a claim(calm) mind whether she wins or loses. Consequently, people can have a better attitude when handle a competition if they play sports.
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In conclusion, playing sports is more than a way of doing exercise. It can teach people how to work with others, how to persevere and how to have a better attitude when facing competitions.
还是觉得内容没问题 但语言有点生涩 就是中文思维很明显

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4.3 修改

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不好意思，前两天没在家，今天才来改4.2的哦……

People play sports everyday and most of them hope to keep health or fit by doing it. From my perspective, playing sports does not only benefit our health and figure, it（but，前面是not only，后面用but also好点吧~） also teaches us lessons about life. We can learn the importance of teamwork, the value of perseverance, the attitude of keeping claim from it.5 W6 L' k$ v; X* x6 ]
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To begin with, people can learn how to work with others from playing sports. Many sports are done by more than one person or even a group. Those who want to win the games should work with other team members harmoniously. For example, when playing basketball, everyone has his or her responsibility. Someone need to attack while someone need to defend. Not everyone can be the hero to shoot and get goals（倒装用的漂亮~~）. People should learn how to adapt themselves（？这个用法觉得怪怪的~） and make the best use of their own team. Thus people can realize the importance of corporation and maximum their values in teamwork in their life.5 u9 R! I, g  J# p+ z$ C
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In addition, playing sports can also help people learn the value of perseverance. Keeping doing sports everyday is a tough job because sometimes people feel tied of work or study and they need a rest by giving up playing sports. The bad weather, also, can be an excuse for quit doing sports. For instance, people prefer to sit in（on） the sofa and watch TV in a warm house in the winter than running outside. Under this condition, playing sport needs the spirit of perseverance. People should try to overcome the inertia and persevere with the sports. That is why I think playing sports can make people become more persistent.9 S6 m4 K8 Q) z  D- W, e

What's more, people can help people face（笔误？） competitions with a better attitude. Many sport, such as tennis, football, basketball, are competitive. Win or lose is a common result for most people who play sports and they are claim when facing competitions. As an illustration, once our collage held a debate and many students watched it. I felt so nervous as a debater that I kept sweating while my partner just took it easy. Then I asked her why she remained so claim. She told me that she always took part in tennis matches and she had already used to face any competition with a claim mind whether she wins or loses. Consequently, people can have a better attitude when handle a competition if they play sports.

In conclusion, playing sports is more than a way of doing exercise. It can teach people how to work with others, how to persevere and how to have a better attitude when facing competitions.

结构很完整~~

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4.4
Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?

Every day, a lot of discoveries are found by scientists. Due to this, our life becomes more and more convenient. However, every coin has two sides. At the same time, more and more negatives of these discoveries are emerged. Some people think that it is also the mistakes of scientists who invent them. While from my perspective, the scientists should not be responsible for these negative impacts. Otherwise, it will slow down the speed of invention. Also, the negative impacts are mostly caused by the abuse use of normal people.

To begin with, if the scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries, their passion of improving people's living condition would be affected and few of them are willing for the research any more. It would surly slow down the speed of invention. For example, in the process which young children try to discover the world, they will surly make mistakes. If the parents blame their mistakes, the children would afraid to do anything in case of making mistakes again. It is also same for the scientists. Only without the pressure of being responsible for the negative impacts of, they can try their best to do the research for discoveries.

What's more, I think the normal people who use these new inventions should be responsible for the negative impacts. Most of these bad results are caused by the abuse of discoveries. I can cite an instance of plastic bag. People always say that plastic bag is one of the worst inventions of twenty century. However, I do not think so. The purpose of scientist invent it is to make life more convenient. While people use plastic bags every where and consume a mount of them every day. Under this condition, this kind of white pollution becomes a huge threat for our environment. Thus I think the people who abuse the discoveries should be responsible for these negative impacts.

In conclusion, the scientists make their best to improve the life quality of our normal people. It is not their mistake when the negative impacts of their discoveries emerge. On contact, ordinary people who make use of the discoveries in a wrong way should be responsible for the bad results. Blame the scientists for the negative results can only lead to the slow speed of invention.

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4.3 （08.5.17） It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you. Nowadays, watching movies has become a important part of people's entertainment life. In this condition, I think it is better for people to watch movies that can make them amused. These kinds of movies can help people relax themselves and release the pressure. Although serious movies can make people get deeper think, those with entertainment do also have this effect in other ways. # n, s- F( n$ O+ d9 v' ? To begin with, people can get relax when watch movies that entertain them. Watching these movies is a period of release pressure. Modern people have heavy pressure when facing the challenges and competitions. Even the students also have pressure from every perspective. For example, I am a senior student in collage. In order to apply graduate school, I have to prepare for my TOEFL test and GRE test. What's more, I have to do internship which translate scripts for movies and accomplish my senior year essay which request at least seven thousand words. I feel so tired about them and really want to release my pressure. Under this circumstance, I find a way for me to relax which is watching American dramas（sitcoms） that can amuse me. I watch“ Friends” the moment I feel tired. Then I will be amused by the stories . 我建议把翻译电影部分去掉 然后最后改成你从看电影里获得放松 因为美剧不等于电影 这样跑题了, T吧 u In addition, people can also get deep think from the amused movies. These movies are more than a simple story to make people laugh. They can also teach people the ways of facing life. I can cite a example of a famous movie called Liar Liar. The father in this movie always tells lies while his son make a wish that his father will not tell a lie anymore. Finally the son's dream come true and the father can only tell the truth, which lead to a series of funny stories. From this movie, after laughing at the joyful stories, people learn the theory that do not tell lies to the family and spare more time from busy work to company them., w9 }6 j4 Z+ r : ]% L9 i2 c2 m- t! ~! r  K In conclusion, it is better for people to watch movies that can amuse or entertain them to get relax. At the same time, they can also have a deep think from the laughing of funny story.

In conclusion, it is better for people to watch movies that can amuse or entertain them to get relax. At the same time, they can also have a deep think from the laughing of funny story.(Because you can get amusement and deeper think at same time when you watching this kind of movies )

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改好了

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4.5 (08.1.13)
Students at university or in college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades (marks) in them.

Students are free to choose the courses that they are interested in when they are in university or in collage. Some people thus think that they should choose the most difficult classes, which are the challenge for them, no matter if they can get top grades. However, from my point of view, there is no need for collage students to learn such hard course. Furthermore, it is not only waste their precious time but also may decrease their confident.

To begin with, most difficult classed have nothing to do with most students' future except those who want to be the scientists. By the way of illustration I will refer to the courses which I study now. I am a collage student majoring in teaching Chinese as a foreign language. The courses I have chosen are mostly about Chinese culture, English and education and they are not so hard for me. Besides I can also choose the courses about advanced mathematics or chemistry which are the most difficult for me. Although those courses offer me a new horizon to look at our world, they can help me little about my career plan that I want to be a Chinese teacher. Therefore, there is no need to learn the most difficult course for the students in university or collage.

In addition, learning the most difficult courses which the students are not good at is wasting their precious time. Studying is not the only key for students, as they should also spend a lot of time on doing internship or communicating with others. For example, if a student chooses a most difficult course then he has little time on social activities which are helpful for him to learn the society. It would be a huge lost for the students. Instead of spending a lot of time on studying the most difficult courses, the students should be involved more in social activities.

What is more, learning the most difficult courses may decrease students' confident as they probability can not get top grades or even face failure. Facing these tough situations, the students are easy to think that they have low ability on learning and they are unlikely to achieve success in the future. It would surly hurt the students even destroy their self-esteem. Considering these possibilities, the students should not learn the most difficult courses.

In conclusion, the students should not learn the most difficult course which makes no sense for their future. Also, it is a waste of time. The students should spend time on more meaningful activities. Otherwise, it will hurt the students' self-esteem if they can not get top grades.