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hzd515976083UID: 2487213

Admittedly, people have to work, not only for the goal of earning enough food or other necessaries to survive, which is the solitary one we pursue during the early days of the human being, but for some other goals as well, such as better life, self fulfillment and interest. Nonetheless, aspects of working, say length of working hours, working contents and people participate in working, have experienced intense changes. Length of working hours, for instance, has decreased from long-hour working to a worldwide standard of five days a week, eight hours per day. Some even argue that due to the advances of human society, people will work less still twenty years from now, which I take leave to doubt. What I believe is that it is ambiguous whether people enjoy more or less leisure time in the unforeseeable future.

Undoubtedly, people work much faster thanks to such inconceivable inventions as telephone, airplane, computer and internet. With telephone, we can talk to our co-workers whenever communication is in need. With airplane, business people can fly from the United States to China within 24 hours, much shorter than ever before. With computer, the speed of information collecting and processing has improved tremendously. And with internet, it is possible to handle working tasks far away and cooperate withour peer as long as we get access to website. A hundred years ago, it may take scientists months, even years to calculate statistics they demand. But today all they need to do may be just collect the statistics and put them intosoftware such as SPSS, and then the computer will give them answer. Things have been so easy that it is impossible for us nowadays to imagine how difficult itwas for the pioneers. Based on advancement of working efficiency, we have a strong reason to state that there will be more leisure time twenty years from now.

But, what an improved working efficiency brings to us is not merely working faster, but fewer jobs as well. After the ATM coming into existence, fewer employers are hired by commercial bank since a larger number of people choose to get services from machine. Thus, less job opportunities will definitely prevent us from having more leisure time since we ought to work harder and longer to make sure there is sufficient money to feed us and our family. One truth is that, the competition in the job market has been more intensely. A postgraduate student may have to do what an undergraduate student did ten years ago, yet get fewer paid and face a higher price level, which makes the circumstance even worse.

In conclusion, it is not so easy for us to go to a statement that we will work less, for both favourable and unfavourable conditions exist.

DaisyTwinsUID: 2797670

Admittedly, people have to work, not only for the goal of （earning一般指钱改成gaining比较好 ）enough food or other necessaries to survive, which is the solitary (one这个不需要和前一个词重复意思了） we pursue during the early days of the human being, but also for (some这和后面的OTHER重复） other goals as well, such as better life, self fulfillment and interest. Nonetheless, (aspects of working, say length of working hours, working contents and people participate in working,这边有点混乱。。。可以改成person's workload, length of work shift, and the conditions of workplace 我想楼主表达的是这个意思吧 have experienced intense changes. Length of working hours, for instance, has decreased from long-hour working to （a worldwide standard of这句不需要也不是国际标准的） five days a week, eight hours per day. Some even argue that due to the advances of human society, people will work less still twenty years from now, (which I take leave to doubt这种说法有点awkward). What I believe is that it is ambiguous whether people enjoy more or less leisure time in the unforeseeable in the future.. `! ^. G2 W, G# e6 U5 Z% M

% n! w/ ~% V1 Undoubtedly, people work much faster than in the past thanks to (such) these inconceivable inventions such as telephone, airplane, computer and internet.这句我不明白了 With telephone, we can talk to our co-workers whenever communication is in need. With airplane, business people can fly from the United States to China within 24 hours, much shorter than ever before. With computer, the speed of information collecting and processing has improved tremendously. And with internet, it is possible to handle working这个可以去掉和TASKS重复了 tasks far away from office and cooperate without peer as long as we get access to the website. A hundred years ago, it may takes scientists months, even years to calculate statistics they demand to. But today all they need to do may be just collect the statistics and put them into software such as SPSS, and then the computer will give them theanswer. Things have been so easy that it is impossible for us nowadays to imagine how difficult it was for the pioneers. Based on advancement of working efficiency, we have a strong reason to state that there will be more leisure time twenty years from now.1 X6 b7 f9 U9 ?% V
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But, what an improved working efficiency brings to us is not merely working faster, but fewer jobs as well. After the ATM coming into existence, fewer employers are hired by commercial bank since a larger number of people choose to get services from machine. Thus, less job opportunities will definitely prevent us from having more leisure time since we ought to work harder and longer to make sure there is sufficient money to feed建议换个词这词经常用来说喂养牲畜类的 us and our family. One truth is that, the competition in the job market has been more intensely. A postgraduate student may have to do what an undergraduate student did ten years ago, yet get fewer paid and face a higher price level, which makes the circumstance even worse.5 _. W* ], U/ u) u  o

5 j* w( Z' L, q8 t+ `6 v- t4 AIn conclusion, it is not so easy for us to go to a statement that we will work less, for both favourable and unfavourable conditions exist.

我觉得楼主的主题不是很鲜明，长一点的句子要注意下语法，其他没什么问题，有些词用的有些牵强了我能明白楼主的中文意思，只是英语中这么用不是很多见，不足之处还请指教

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

5.5  09.12.4北美
Do you think peole should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else.



In some parts of the world it has been reported recently of people who claim that only things made in their own country should be bought, even, may be in some sense, they are more expensive than importing goods. But, it seems to me that this argumentis really ridiculous.
As is knownto us all, the economy of our world is in a relationship that is tighter than any era of the human history. And the integrating trend of the international economy is, and will be going to a place where no one can make more than the widest guess at. From this regard, it should be argued that the behavior of those people who buy domestic produced goods merely is heading somewhere against the history. It's, to some degree, a form of trade protection. That behavior will harm the developing of the world economy.According to the theory of international trading, based on the welfare of people all around the world, each country has a compared advantage and it is optimal that each country produces goods which it is good at and then trade with each other. So theoretically, we should oppose to buy domestic goods only.
In addition,what we should realize is that buying things made in our own country at arelatively high price will spoil consumer's interest. Actually, an open economyensures us to make our consuming decision between productions both home and overseas. However, under thedetermination to discard foreign goods, we cut off half of our choice. Andwith a limited source of goods, our benefits would be eliminated sincesometimes we are forced to buy more expensive domestic products.
The final mistake made by those suburban people who hold a view of purchasing things merely from home is that their behavior may be somehow patriotic, but from the long-turn development of domestic industries, it is harmful indeed. It is correct that some infant industries, by which I mean those in their early stage of developing, should get support from both government and people in case of unjustifiable competition of foreign power. But most of the other industries ought to be exposed to fair competition with companies abroad. You can support factories from your own country by paying more at one time, but what thecircumstance would be if they go international, they would lose in he battle of who can offer better products with a lower price.
As discussed above, we should be more open and make it possible for consumers get their access to cheaper foreign goods yet with better quality.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Admittedly, people have to work, not only for the goal of earning enough food(money) or other necessaries to survive, which is the solitary one we pursue during the early days of the human being, but  some other goals as well, such as better life, self fulfillment and interest. Nonetheless,as aspects of working, say length of working hours, working contents and people participate in working, have experienced intense changes(建议并列结构 ).the Length of working hours, for instance, has decreased from long-hour working to a worldwide standard of five days a week, eight hours per day. Some even argue that due to the advances of human society, people will work less still twenty years from now, which I take leave to doubt(这个表示冒昧去做). What I believe is that it is ambiguous whether people enjoy more or less leisure time in the unforeseeable future.
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Undoubtedly, people work much faster thanks to such inconceivable inventions as telephone, airplane, computer and internet. With telephone, we can talk to our co-workers whenever communication is in need. With airplane, business people can fly from the United States to China within 24 hours, much shorter than ever before. With computer, the speed of information collecting and processing has improved tremendously. And with internet, it is possible to handle working tasks far away(from the worker) and cooperate withour peer as long as they get access to website. A hundred years ago, it may take scientists months, even years to calculate statistics they demand. But today all they need to do may be just collect the statistics and put them intosoftware such as SPSS, and then the computer will give them answer. Things have been so easy that it is impossible for us nowadays to imagine how difficult itwas for the pioneers. Based on advancement of working efficiency, we have a strong reason to state that there will be more leisure time twenty years from now.
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0 v: ~* b0 w% A+ kBut, what an improved working efficiency brings to us is not merely working faster, but fewer jobs as well. After the ATM coming into existence, fewer employers are hired by commercial bank since a larger number of people choose to get services from machine. Thus, less job opportunities will definitely prevent us from having more leisure time since we ought to work harder and longer to make sure there is sufficient money to feed us and our family. One truth is that, the competition in the job market has been more intensely. A postgraduate student may have to do what an undergraduate student did ten years ago, yet get fewer paid and face a higher price level, which makes the circumstance even worse.+ i) q5 b  f4 Y
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In conclusion, it is not so easy for us to go to a statement that we will work less, for both favourable and unfavourable conditions exist.

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

Parents are always busily engaged in seeking the answer to one question--how to raise a healthy child. Some determine the future for their offspring for the reason that they want to give their children the best things,while others choose to let children make their own choices. And I would definitely support the latter type.
It is crucial for our human beings to have our own thoughts. And allowing children to make their own choice really contributes to theability of thinking independently. In order to make a decision, one has to find the alternatives first, then dose the cost-benefit analysis for each of them,and finally choose one of them according to his own preference. So it is aprocess in which other persons' suggestions are secondary. If a child is allowed to make his own decision, he will go through the above procedure himself. And indisputably he will think independently.
Decision making also helps to develop the sense of responsibility, which is of significant importance. A child who chooses things by himself would, obviously, take every consequence into consideration beforehand.Actually, whether or not be responsible is a vital difference between someonewho is mature and someone who is not. If it is always parents, not children themselves, who determine the future, then children lose the opportunity tolearn how to be responsible.
Besides the benefits of self decision making discussed above,what should be realized at the mean time is that the reason held by suchparents as to decide to make choices for their children is irrational. Most of them prevent children from making choices due to the possible mistakes whichwould emerge if the wrong option is chosen. But being wrong is a way to learn,and one can learn more from being wrong. For one thing, when children realize what is not correct, they would be much clear about what is right. More importantly, the attitude of how to face failure will be trained the moment they are wrong.
Since decision making not only helps children to thinkindependently, but to develop the sense of responsibility as well, besides, making mistakes is a form of learning, I am confirmed supporting to let children make their own choice.

bruce520UID: 2634940

In some partsof the world it has been reported recently of people who claim that only thingsmade in their own country should be bought, even, may be in some sense, they are more expensive than importing goods. But, it seems to me that this argumentis【空格键没用啊】 really ridiculous.7 |0
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As is known to us all, the economy of our world is in a relationship that is tighter than any era of the human history. And the integrating trend of the international economy is, and will be going to a place[貌似这句话没有主语] where no one can make more than the widest guess at. From this regard, it should be argued that the behavior of those people who buy domestic produced goods merely is heading somewhere against the history. It's, to some degree, a form of tradeprotection. That behavior will harm the developing of the world economy.According to the theory of international trading, based on the welfare ofpeople all around the world, each country has a compared advantage and it isoptimal that each country produces goods which it is good at and then tradewith each other. So theoretically, we should oppose to buy domestic goods only.

In addition,what we should realize is that buying things made in our own country at arelatively high price【这个也不见得啊】 will spoil consumer's interest. Actually, an open economyensures us to make our consuming decision between productions both home andoverseas. However, under thedetermination to discard foreign goods, we cut off half of our choice. Andwith a limited source of goods, our benefits would be eliminated sincesometimes we are forced to buy more expensive domestic products.

The finalmistake made by those suburban people who hold a view of purchasing thingsmerely from home is that their behavior may be somehow patriotic, but from thelong-turn development of domestic industries, it is harmful indeed. 【这个可以看作是和第一个论点关联的】It iscorrect that some infant industries, by which I mean those in their early stageof developing, should get support from both government and people in case ofunjustifiable competition of foreign power. But most of the other industriesought to be exposed to fair competition with companies abroad. You can supportfactories from your own country by paying more at one time, but what thecircumstance would be if they go international, they would lose in he battle ofwho can offer better products with a lower price.、

As discussedabove, we should be more open and make it possible for consumers get theiraccess to cheaper foreign goods yet with better quality.

楼主不习惯用空格键啊，造成别人阅读很大的障碍

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

6# bruce520 我其实用了空格键，可是每次从电脑上拷到这里就发现好多空格没有了，下次我会注意的

canoe03UID: 2786666

In some parts of the world it has been reported recently of people who claim that only things made in their own country should be bought, even, may be in some sense, they are more expensive than importing goods. But, it seems to me that this argument is really ridiculous.(简洁开头直奔主题)

As is known to us all, (后面讲的是比历史上任何一个时代，那么这里加一个nowadays之类的词比较合适)the economy of our world is in a relationship that is tighter than any era of the human history. And the integrating trend of the international economy is, and will be going to a place where no one can make more than the widest guess at. From this regard, it should be argued that the behavior of those people who buy domestic produced goods merely is heading somewhere against the history. It's, to some degree, a form of trade protection. That behavior will harm the developing of the world economy. According to the theory of international trading, based on the welfare of people all around the world, each country has a compared advantage and it is optimal that each country produces goods which it is good at and then trade with each other(LZ是学经济的吗，理论都摆出来了，我写来写去弄了半天也表达不好这个意思。Brilliant！). So theoretically, we should oppose to buy domestic goods only.

In addition, what we should realize is that buying things made in our own country at are latively high price will spoil consumer's interest. Actually, an open economy ensures us to make our consuming decision between productions both home and overseas. However, under the determination to discard foreign goods, we cut off half of our choice. And with a limited source of goods, our benefits would be eliminated since sometimes we are forced to buy more expensive domestic products.

The final mistake made by those suburban people who hold a view of purchasing things merely from home is that their behavior may be somehow patriotic, but from the long-turn development of domestic industries, it is harmful indeed. It is correct that some infant industries, by which I mean those in their early stage of developing, should get support from both government and people in case of unjustifiable competition of foreign power. But most of the other industries ought to be exposed to fair competition with companies abroad. You can support factories from your own country by paying more at one time, but what the circumstance would be if they go international(internationally), they would lose in he battle of who can offer better products with a lower price.

As discussed above, we should be more open and make it possible for consumers get their access to cheaper foreign goods yet with better quality.
(先膜拜一下楼主，Orz…，文章的结构、论证、语法都很好，只有微小的错误但是瑕不掩瑜。但愿楼主考个110+。。。先祝福了。。。)

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

5-07Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform.


Education is a social topic which receives maybe the most concerns from people with different background. And with the purpose to improve education, enormous endeavor has been made to find a paramount way to judge the performance of a teacher. It has been reported recently of people who take the perspective of paying teacher according to the students’ performance.Nevertheless, I can hardly show my support to them.
According to those people, the payment to teacher has a positive relationship with how well their students perform. And let's assume they are right initially. Then the fundamental premise of the feasibility of their method is the proper judgment of how students perform. Indeed, you can tell a good student from a bad one simply according to their test mark. But is that the entire what we should know about a child? Absolutely, no. What a teacher gives to students doesn't merely limit in knowledge, but things like social skills, manner, learning habit and virtue system as well. Such things as they are are usually implicit, which cannot be reflected on a simply piece oftest paper. But they may be of greater significance compared with those how many 1+1 is. So theoretically, this method brings a narrow definition of students' performance.
More importantly, even if we accept the presumption that test score is proper measurement of students' performance, we cannot expect that judging system to be rational. Indisputably, teacher plays an imperative role in children's studying process, as to it is from no other people but teacher students receive knowledge directly. However, it's unfair to say that teacher hold the whole responsibility to the outcome of test. The differences between students cannot attribute to teacher performance only, but due to such imperative factors as children's effort, family environment, friends and even students' talent.
Finally, if such improper measurement is implemented, it will cause education to be somehow utilitarian. Teacher will focus on teaching students what is said on textbook, or more accurately how to get high marks in test. They will no longer care about childrens’ development in other essential aspects, not to mention psychology health. How dangerous it will be.
The purpose of our education is to give children formative effect on mind, character, and physical ability, not just train some machines to give answer to endless testing questions. Thus paying teacher according to how well students perform is unacceptable.

bruce520UID: 2634940

5.6
Parents are always busily engaged in seeking the answer to one question--how to raise a healthy child. Some determine the future for their offspring for the reason that they want to give their children the best things,while others choose to let children make their own choices. And I would definitely support the latter type.It is crucial for our human beings to have our own thoughts. And allowing children to make their own choice really contributes to theability of thinking independently. In order to make a decision, one has to find the alternatives first, then dose the cost-benefit analysis for each of them,and finally choose one of them according to his own preference. So it is aprocess in which other persons' suggestions are secondary.【没看懂这句话】 If a child is allowed to make his own decision, he will go through the above procedure himself. And indisputably he will think independently.Decision making also helps to develop the sense of responsibility, which is of significant importance. A child who chooses things by himself would, obviously, take every consequence into consideration before hand.Actually, whether or not be responsible is a vital difference between someonewho【无谓语的吧】 is mature and someone who is not. If it is always parents, not children themselves, who determine the future, then children lose the opportunity tolearn how to be responsible.Besides the benefits of self decision making discussed above,what should be realized at the mean time is that the reason held by suchparents as to decide to make choices【这里decide和choice可以重合】 for their children is irrational. Most of them prevent children from making choices due to the possible mistakes whichwould emerge if the wrong option is chosen. But being wrong is a way to learn,and one can learn more from being wrong. For one thing, when children realize what is not correct, they would be much clear about what is right. More importantly, the attitude of how to face failure will be trained the moment they are wrong.2 k6 A/ f" v+ u8 }  @Since decision making not only helps children to thinkindependently, but to develop the sense of responsibility as well, besides, making mistakes is a form of learning, I am confirmed supporting to let children make their own choice
论证结构很清晰哈

DaisyTwinsUID: 2797670

改晚了。。

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

I am always amazed when I hear people saying that the best way to improve the quality of the education in a country is to raise teacher's salaries.With no doubt, I hardly agree with this statement. Since raising the teacher's paid is far from enough if you want to improve education quality, the paramount way to achieve better education is to increase the whole input to the education industry.
Admittedly, with a higher salary, teacher will be a more attractive job for many college graduates. Thus, this entails the employers,the schools I mean, to choose teachers they desire from a larger range. It will be more competitive if you select teacher as your career. As a result, we can expect better teachers with more knowledge and more excellent teaching skills. Indisputably, our education quality will be enhanced. But this may be only the first step on our way to a better education. Other factors which also matter are the hardware and software of education, which should be improved as well.
When you enter a school, your first impression about this school must be the environment. A school with concrete buildings, large library and beautiful dorms will definitely make you believe that it is, at least in some sense, a better school. And you would feel even better if there are classrooms which equipped with TV and computer, and dining room with different dishes every day. Why, because these things are the basic factors in judging the quality of education. You can never expect a man who struggles to get enough food to pay his attention on studying. Therefore, enhancing the schools'hardware is premise of our commitment to a better education.
And what comes up next is the software of our education,including but not limited to how many students there are in one classroom, the quality of the textbook, and how much effort we put to the continuous education of our teachers. For instance, even we get better teacher, but if the teacheris put into a class with 100 students and given a textbook which is out oftime, we cannot ensure students get desirable education as well. To some degree, these soft powers are of greater importance to our goal.
As discussed above, paying more to teachers is only a tiny fraction of our plan to get education improved. The best way to a higher quality of education is to do our utmost to enhance both the hardware and software of education.

annkeUID: 2605122

Education is a social topic which receives [maybe the most][直接most] concerns from people with different background. And with the purpose to improve education, enormous endeavor has been made to find a paramount way to judge the performance of a teacher. It has been reported recently of[by] people who take the perspective of paying teacher according to the students’ performance. Nevertheless, I can hardly show my support to them[I can hardly support them/this idea].
According to those people, the payment to[of] [a]teacher has a positive relationship with how well their students perform. And let's assume they are right initially. Then the fundamental premise of the feasibility of their method is the proper judgment of how students perform. Indeed, you can tell a good student from a bad one simply according to their test mark. But is that the entire what we should know about a child? Absolutely, no. What a teacher gives [to去掉] students doesn't merely limit in knowledge, but things like social skills, manner, learning habit and virtue system as well[和and 二选一]. Such things as they are [are] usually implicit, which cannot be reflected on a simply piece oftest[?] paper. But they may be of greater significance compared with those how many 1+1 is. So theoretically, this method brings a narrow definition of students' performance.
More importantly, even if we accept the presumption that test score is proper measurement of students' performance, we cannot expect that judging system to be rational. Indisputably, teacher plays an imperative role in children's studying process, as to it is from no other people but teacher students receive knowledge directly. However, it's unfair to say that teacher hold the whole responsibility to the outcome of test. The differences between students cannot attribute to teacher performance only, but due to such imperative factors as children's effort, family environment, friends and even students' talent.[让步式批判，楼主上过韦晓亮的课？]
Finally, if such improper measurement is implemented, it will cause education to be somehow utilitarian. Teacher will focus on teaching students what is said on textbook, or more accurately how to get high marks in test. They will no longer care about childrens’[children’s] development in other essential aspects, not to mention psychology health. How dangerous it will be[!感叹句].
The purpose of our education is to give children formative effect on mind, character, and physical ability, not just train some machines to give answer to endless testing questions. Thus paying teacher according to how well students perform is unacceptable.
[我觉得文章最大的问题就在于太空泛了。其他的结构语言都问题不大。]

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

Governments all over the world spend money raised fromtaxpayers on infrastructure construction with the purpose to stimulate economicdevelopment. However, as the financial resource for government is very limited,people are divergent on how to distribute the disposable money and use it moreefficiently. Some assert more money should be spent on internet construction,while others insist to develop public transportation first. According to myperspective, internet is more important and thus we should pay more attentionto build high quality internet.
An apparent fact is that our daily life is involving in atighter link with internet, and this trend keeps going. Internet has been themajor information channel for an increasing fraction of people. This can beeasily deduced from some concrete examples. One is that newspaper andtelevision programs are facing more combative competition from internet sincemore people use internet to acquire news. They search internet to keep in touchwith outside world, read political, economic and sports events, and look upinformation concerning with food, weather and airline schedule.
If we stand at a higher level, we may be more decided aboutthe choice to use more money to build internet. Remind what happened in theUnited States during the last 10 years of the twentieth century. The Bill Clintongovernment carried out a plan called "National Information Infrastructure"to construct more and higher-speed internet. The significant thing behind theinternet construction is that internet has been a key factor in economicgrowth, just like express way several years ago. Nearly all of the governmentsnowadays, according to recent reports, are putting tremendous resource todevelop internet. And the competition in IT technology is so fierce thateveryone is afraid to be a follower. And if we have internet that is fast and stableenough, it is possible that we just complete our work at home. Consequently,the transportation pressure will extensively decrease.
For the reasons discussed above, I believe that it is a wisedecision to spend more money on internet instead of public transportation.

annkeUID: 2605122

I am always amazed when I hear people saying that the best way to improve the quality of the education in a country is to raise teacher's salaries.With no doubt, I hardly agree with this statement. Since raising the teacher's paid is你想用payment吧 far from enough if you want to improve education quality, the paramount way to achieve better education is to increase the whole input toof the education industry.& {1 w2 A9 e$ @* N3 W, i* H. X9 ^
Admittedly, with a higher salary, teacher后面是job 这里应该用teaching will be a more attractive job for many college graduates. Thus, this entails the employers,the schools什么意思？ I mean, to choose teachers they desire from a larger range. It will be more competitive if you select teacher as your career. As a result, we can expect better teachers with more knowledge and more excellent teaching skills. Indisputably学习, our education quality will be enhanced. But this may be only颠倒 the first step on our way to a better education. Other factors which also matter are the hardware and software of education, which should be improved as well.
When you enter a school, your first impression about this school must be the environment. A school with concrete buildings, large library and beautiful dormitories will definitely make you believe that it is, at least in somea sense固定搭配, a better school. And you would feel even better if there are classrooms which equipped with TV and computer, and dining room with different dishes every dayeveryday. Why要表现设问，后面应该用问号, because these things are the basic factors in judging the quality of education. You can never expect a man who struggles to get enough food to pay his attention on studying前后并没有联系，环境好就说明人们不用为温饱挣扎了吗？. Therefore, enhancing the schools'hardware is premise这个前提是预设，这里用prerequisite吧 of our commitment to a better education.
And what comes up next is别扭~ the software of our education,including but not limited to how many students there are in one classroom, the quality of the textbook, and how much efforts we put to the continuous education of our teachers. For instance, even we get better teacher, but if the teacheristeachers put into a class with 100 students and given a textbook which is out oftime?, we cannot ensure students get desirable education as well. To some degree, these soft powers are of greater importance to our goal.+ M7 ^  R; ^2 D$ T/ Y
As discussed above, paying more to teachers is only a tiny fraction of our plan to get education improved. The best way to a higher quality of education is to do our utmost to enhance both the hardware and software of education.

文章的问题还是在表达上，语法错误比较多，句意不够通顺。建议多读多模仿~