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giserUID：2844945

一楼给寄托家园!

giserUID：2844945

Topic:
In order to solve the problems of the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.

My writing:

It is a common sense that most people nowadays pay more attention to complete a simple task, and they are cautious, so cautious that they even take the past into account. Admittedly, when it comes to the question concerning whether it is necessary to understand the past to solve the temporary or coming questions, people's perspectives diverge considerably. As for me, I am inclined to the view that the past is not a prerequisite to solve problems of the present and future.

First and foremost, not all experience is right. It is undoubted that some items we can get from the past is incorrect. To illustrate this, we need look no further than the well-known experiment of Galileo. As we all know, another noted scientist named Aristotle ever made a prediction: a heavier ball would contact the ground first, when compared with a light ball falling from the same point above the sea level, regardless of the same time they are allowed to slide from hands. Over hundreds of thousands of years, little people had ever denied the reliability of the application before Galileo cast doubt on it. Therefore, it comes as no surprise that the past, directly or indirectly, might mislead us to another or even opposite direction.

On top of that, it is not effective and efficient for us to solve our problems in terms of the past. It is self-evident that reviewing the past consuming our precious time to finish our work. Hillary, The secretary of United States, said after his failure in presidential campaign, as quoted here, “Every moment wasted looking back prevents us from moving forward”. Great minds think alike! With the time spent understanding the past, we could achieve more if we focus on the present and future. Furthermore, we live in a brand new century, and creation is the spirit and priority of our society. The role it plays in our daily life is irreplaceable, without which our nation can not go as far as it is today. However, the past restrict our ability of creation, which can be demonstrated by numerous cases in the scientific field.

Undeniably, the past can give us some advices and mirror the fact of history. Nevertheless, it also sometimes can pose a great risk and permanent effect on the problems of the present and future. Thus, I cling to the belief that we should be engaged in the works at hand instead of the past when the reliability of the past and the efficiency of the present are taken into consideration.

感觉这篇不是很好写，写的有些强词夺理

闪闪硕硕UID：2825715

不好意思哈，你的作文我明天才能传上来:hug:

闪闪硕硕UID：2825715

不好意思，刚刚改好

giserUID：2844945

Better late than never~
4# 闪闪硕硕

zak_chemistryUID：2612236

Topic:
In order to solve the problems of the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.

writing:
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It is a common sense that most people nowadays pay more attention to complete a simple task, and they are cautious, so cautious that they even take the past into account.（我不太明白这句话的意思。） Admittedly, when it comes to the question concerning whether it is necessary to understand the past to solve the temporary or coming questions, people's perspectives diverge considerably. As for me, I am inclined to the view that the past is not a prerequisite to solve problems of the present and future.2 W! \/ t$ j% o" @0                                                                                    


}First and foremost, not all experience is right. It is undoubted that some items we can get from the past is incorrect. To illustrate this, we need look no further than the well-known experiment of Galileo. As we all know, another noted scientist named Aristotle ever made a prediction: a heavier ball would contact the ground first, when compared with a light ball falling from the same point above the sea level, regardless of the same time they are allowed to slide from hands. Over hundreds of thousands of years, little people had ever denied the reliability of the application before Galileo cast doubt on it. Therefore, it comes as no surprise that the past, directly or indirectly, might mislead us to another or even opposite direction.+ P+ i. d- Y（$ }4 P（我觉得这一段作者因该注意题目说的是“understand the past”，而这一概念不等于“learn everything of the past”。所以，作者是不是应该换一种口吻。比如，把这层“不应该learn everything of the past”的意思放到让步中去说。具体讲就是：“我们应该重视过去，但不应该把过去的一切奉为真理。”不知作者怎么想。）
On top of that, it is not effective and efficient for us to solve our problems in terms of the past. It is self-evident that reviewing the past consuming our precious time to finish our work. Hillary, The secretary of United States, said after his failure in presidential campaign, as quoted here, “Every moment wasted looking back prevents us from moving forward”. Great minds think alike! With the time spent understanding the past, we could achieve more if we focus on the present and future. Furthermore, we live in a brand new century, and creation is the spirit and priority of our society. The role it plays in our daily life is irreplaceable, without which our nation can not go as far as it is today.（个人觉得这个分隔定语从句应该不能这么用吧。如果这个结构成立，那么先行词应该在主句宾语的位置。） However, the past restrict our ability of creation, which can be demonstrated by numerous cases in the scientific field. (我觉得作者是否应该强调一点：“过去的情况与现在是不同的”即过去的经验理论不能应用于现在。然后，正是因为这，所以“spending time on understanding the past is wasting time.”,所以，“past restrict our ability of creation”。个人觉得这样段内才更顺理成章，显得更有理有据。不显得那么强词夺理的感觉。当然，作者的条理比较清晰。首先说，过去对现今没有作用，只是浪费时间；其次，强调过去还会限制解决现在和将来的问题。这点值得学习。)

Undeniably, the past can give us some advices and mirror the fact of history. Nevertheless, it also sometimes can pose a great risk and permanent effect on the problems of the present and future. Thus, I cling to the belief that we should be engaged in the works at hand instead of the past when the reliability of the past and the efficiency of the present are taken into consideration.

总结：
1.
我觉得作者的遣词造句很好，词用的准确，句子写得好。
2.
个人觉得，作者注意题目中所阐述的概念。题目不是“过去对解决现今和将来问题的影响”，而是“理解过去对于解决现今和将来问题的影响”。两者本质上有差别。第二段，可以保留。但是，对于第一段，作者应该修改下。

zak_chemistryUID：2612236

说的不到位之处，多包涵哈！呵呵。。。

giserUID：2844945

太谢谢了，感激涕零！:handshake
7# zak_chemistry

giserUID：2844945

7月6号

It is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.

layla1989UID：2832481

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It is more important to reserve lands for human beings than for endangered animals.

We are now living in a highly developing society, and something by our hand（这个短语用的不是很合适，有些歧义） may change remarkably in a twinkling of an eye. It is not exaggerate to say that the growth of population is beyond the imagination of human beings. How could we anticipate that the amount of people nowadays is as several times as that a century ago? （这句用意不明）The conflict between human and the nature is increasingly severe. Despite the fact （最好加that）the destiny（是density么？如果是命运貌似不是很合适）
of population is continuously rising, I am still inclined to hold more lands for endangered animals(用了比较级最好点明比较关系).

Endangered animals are in great need of lands. As a matter of fact, several（语气不够强烈） species have been extinct from our planet, and some are in danger now. If they could not get enough space to inhabit, they might follow the footprints of the disappeared ones. The reduction of the area of forests has lead to the decreasing numbers（应该是单数吧，是想表示鸟类的种类数） of bird species, as we can see from the scene（which scene？）
that the number of migration birds by the lake in their migrating path is going down year by year.
（第二个分论点缺少连词）More lands provided for endangered animals also means better proliferation, for the reason that they have more opportunities to find food. Having sufficient eating supplements, the probability of competition between （用法只有between…and…必须有2个事物）the same species decreases considerably, and it （指代不明，如果是指having…，那么这个having是第一句的条件状语还是作第二句的主语）benefits the growth of endangered animals.

The role that
reserving more land for endangered animals plays（可以play么？） can not be ignored in keeping the balance of ecosystem. With（是要写without么？） little animals in the planet, we could live only with plants to eat or even there would not be plants for us to eat（给人一种animal就是用来吃的错觉）. At that time, the destiny of the endangered animals would be the consequence of human beings too（与前文哪里对应？还有什么是人类造成的？）. Actually, the number of human beings has surpassed the ability of nature to nourish its creatures. We should not have occupied the inhabitations of animals. Every man is created equal, as well as animal.（animal不等于man,最好说creature） We share the same resources on earth and we are neighbors. God has not equipped us the right to dominate the life （复数）of other creatures.

Admittedly, human beings also need more land to live on. Nevertheless, we can not sacrifice the living rights of animals. As I said above, it would also lead to the extinction of humans as a result of little（providing/reserving Little这样更生动些）
lands for endangered animals. In addition, we have other ways to create more space for ourselves, such as constructing high buildings, creating lands inshore and the like. （这个观点不错，可以展开来写成一段~）Therefore, I don’t agree with the opinion that it’s more important to reserve more lands for human beings.

canoe03UID：2786666

We are now living in a highly developing society, and something by our hand may change remarkably in a twinkling of an eye. It is not exaggerate(这是动词，用在这里不恰当) to say that the growth of population is beyond the imagination of human beings. How could we anticipate that the amount of people nowadays is as several times as that a century ago? The conflict between human and the nature is increasingly severe. Despite the fact the destiny of population is continuously rising, I am still inclined to hold more land for endangered animals.

Endangered animals are in great need of land. As a matter of fact, several species have been extinct from our planet, and some are in danger now. If they could not get enough space to inhabit, they might follow the footprints of the disappeared ones. The reduction of the area of forests has lead to the decreasing numbers of bird species, as we can see from the scene that the number of migration birds by the lake in their migrating path is going down year by year. More land provided for endangered animals also means better proliferation, for the reason(我想这两个词有点多余) that they have more opportunities to find food. Having sufficient eating supplements（前面已经提到食物了，我想这里如果用一个连词之类的会使句子显得简单些）, the probability of competition between the same species decreases considerably, and it benefits the growth of endangered animals.

The role that reserving more land for endangered animals plays can not be(?) ignored in keeping the balance of ecosystem. With little animals in the planet, we could live only with plants to eat(前面用live on这里就可以不用to eat了) or even there would not be plants for us to eat(这个可以删掉). At that time, the destiny of the endangered animals would be the consequence of human beings too. Actually, the number of human beings has surpassed the ability of nature to nourish its creatures. We should not have occupied the inhabitations of animals. Every man is created equal, as well as animal(不认可这句话的观点). We share the same resources on earth and we are neighbors. God has not equipped us the right to dominate the life of other creatures.(圣经第一章可不是这样说的，’GOD says; …have dominion over the fish and sea…’)

Admittedly, human beings also need more land to live on. Nevertheless, we can not sacrifice the living rights of animals. As I said above, it would also lead to the extinction of humans as a result of little land for endangered animals. In addition, we have other ways to create more space for ourselves, such as constructing high buildings, creating land inshore and the like. Therefore, I don’t agree with the opinion that it’s more important to reserve more land for human beings.


太佩服楼主了，居然能写这么多字！作文有点小错误，出现在句式这里。作文的结构很好，但是在第三段出现了一些观点之类的错误，所以我想我们在论证的时候千万小心才是。加油！

giserUID：2844945

7.8 Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

It is a fact that students nowadays have much heavier burden than that of the last generation, for the reason that the competition among students is becoming increasingly fierce. As we all know, the number of people stepping in scientific area is on the rise and the nation is attaching a remarkable emphasis on the education. In order to attain great achievements in schools, a lot of approaches have been adopted, among which is expanding the study time in school. But there is still not a consensus concerning whether 11 months of a year in school can lead to a better and effective education.

First and foremost, more time spent in school does not mean a better education. We can simply reach to a conclusion that students would become unhappy, depressed, annoyed and irritated if they are forced to study for such a long time in a year. Little people will not come to this state if they repeat the same boring things for a long time. The attitude would adversely affect the efficiency of study. Moreover, lacking enough time for recreation and relaxation, it also poses a great risk and permanent effect on the health of students, which is not favorable for them to study at their best level. Besides, it comes as no surprise that the teachers in the school can not withstand the high pressure of continuous working for 11 months. The quality of the class has a definite link with and plays a decisive role in the efficiency of education.

In addition, a good education can not only be obtained in class. There is no doubt that we can accumulate broad knowledge and gain precious experience outside the school. The celebrated scientist Newton was once driven away from class at a very early age on account of his stupidity. However, his influence in the physical world is far-reaching and his admirers are around the world now. Undeniable, parents nowadays are more professional and they pay more attention to the education of their offspring than ever before. The cases that the talent taught at home without having any classes in schools are not rare. It is not incorrect to say that the school is not the exclusive place to study. The richest man in the world, Bill Gates, dropped school at his second year in university, but what he learned at the society could equal or even surpass that in school. Therefore, the amount of time in school is not a dominant factor to a better education.

Admittedly, spending more time in school sometimes benefits students. But it is not a perfect solution, since the efficiency might not be as good as that we imagine and school is not the unique place to study. Thus, I firmly believe that 11 months in school is not a good way to a better and effective education.

FFFMZJBUID：2479141

楼上的童鞋，你的文章我已经修改了，这次我们是同一组，希望你对我的文章提出意见和建议，谢谢。

nunulongUID：2172898

楼主，你好，作文已改，请查收。

giserUID：2844945

今天写的有点逊，两位将就着看吧

Nowadays students have to attend more classes than ever before. They have little weekends and short holidays. However, this is not the end of the case, for the reason that teachers are now giving them increasing amount of assignments. Over the last decades, this has been a debated issue and there is not a consensus till now. From my point of view, there is no necessity for students to do daily homework.

First and foremost, the efficiency of more homework is not noticeable. There is no doubt that the purpose of assigning homework is to improve the performance of students in academic study. But it is also the case that students with talent can do a good work without homework. Just as we can see from Newton, he even didn’t have a lot of classes in school and dropped out from school at a very early age, but his physical theory is universally acknowledged by the global and his admirers are around the whole world now. Also, those students who are not interested in study may become even more annoyed and irritated when facing more homework. They don’t consider normal mid-term and final examinations as something important, not to say homework. Hence, it is of no use and no value for both excellent and poor students.

Thinking from the other side of the issue, it is also not a smart option for teachers. It comes as no surprise that teacher have to spend more time on assigning and reviewing student’s homework. For one thing, it takes teachers’ precious time to do this. In stead of this, not only can teachers use their limited energy to care more about poor students, but also they can put this time on the improvement of their class quality. For another, there are some probabilities that overwork can lead to potential health problems. A teacher of mine in primary school was passed away as a consequence of too much teaching burden. Thus, the benefits can not just be enjoyed by students, but teachers can get relief from non-daily homework.

Admittedly, sometimes teachers can give some tasks for students to do, especially those difficult for them to understand in class. It is not a surprise that teachers at times can not clarify a term perfectly within a short time, and on this condition can teachers assign some homework for students to assimilate what have been taught in class. But daily homework is not a good thought, as I talked above, for both students and teachers.