欢迎拍文修改小组7.19作业argu 209

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT209 - The following recommendation was made by the Human Resources Manager to the board of directors of the Fancy Toy Company.

"In the last three quarters of this year, under the leadership of our president, Pat Salvo, our profits have fallen considerably. Thus, we should ask for her resignation in return for a generous severance package. In Pat's place, we should appoint Rosa Winnings. Rosa is currently president of Starlight Jewelry, a company whose profits have increased dramatically over the past several years. Although we will have to pay Rosa twice the salary that Pat has been receiving, it will be well worth it because we can soon expect our profits to increase considerably."
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TIME: 00:32:00
DATE: 2010/7/19 20:51:13

In the recommendation, the author claims that they should appoint Rosa Winnings to be their president. To support his claim, the author points out their profit have fallen this year under the leadership of Pat Salvo. What's more, he cites the facts that Starlight Jewelry has their profit increasing over the past several years, and he also predicts that their company wil earn a increasing profit. Supportive at first glance, a closer look at these evidence, I suppose the claim suffers several logical fallacies.

First of all, the author hastily generalizes that the falling profits are respond solely to the leadership of Pat Salvo. Without more information offered, we cannot confirm that casual relationship and there may be other explanation responds to that situation. One obvious example is the exterior economic circumstances. If the whole commercial realm is suffering the financial crisis, and the average profit in the society sharply decreased during that time, it is possible that while it is totally a miracle to keep the company away from bankruptcy, the leadership of Pat Salvo is considered success under that circumstance. In addition, it is also possible that this three quarters of this year is an aberration that for the most time of recent years, the company actually shares a increasing profit. Lacking more information to exclude these possibilities, the author cannot draw his conclusion pursuable.

Secondly, the author assumes that all the situations are the same in those two companies according to the allegation that they will have an increase profit. However, common sense tells us that they are unlikely all the same, and differences between may bring absolutely opposite result. For example, Rosa's success is based on the seniority of market that they have accumulate enough trust on consumers, while it is not existed on Fancy Toy Company or the majority consumption of jewery is domestic while it is through export that toy companies could survive. Not taking into consideration these differences, the author cannot conclude that the new president will make the same success.

Thirdly, the conclusion suffers from" either-or" reasoning that Rosa and Pat Salvo are not mutual excluded. It is possible that there is other president or other implements that better than either one of them. Even if Rosa will be better than Pat Salvo, perhaps changes of measures, such as renewing the manage system, further practice employers' skills and sharp criteria of prizing and punishing, will required the same or even better result. Not pointing out that there is no better choice, we cannot admit that Rosa should be selected.

In sum, the author claims that they should elected Rosa as their next president, but he commits several logical fallacies. To strengthen his claim, the author should offer more information about reasons why they suffer a decreasing profit. To better evaluate the claim, the author should take into account more options and compare two companies to make a reasonable prediction.

alickenUID: 2845947

In the recommendation, the author claims that they should appoint Rosa Winnings to be their president. To support his claim, the author points out their profit(profits) have fallen this year under the leadership of Pat Salvo. What's more, he cites the facts that Starlight Jewelry has their profit increasing over the past several years, and he also predicts that their company wil(will) earn a increasing profit. Supportive at first glance, a closer look at these evidence(evidences), I suppose the claim suffers several logical fallacies.

First of all, the author hastily generalizes that the falling profits are respond solely to the leadership of Pat Salvo. Without more information offered, we cannot confirm that casual relationship and there may be other explanation responds to that situation. One obvious example is the exterior economic circumstances. If the whole commercial realm is suffering the financial crisis, and the average profit in the society sharply decreased during that time, it is possible that while(while在这里什么意思呢？) it is totally a miracle to keep the company away from bankruptcy, the leadership of Pat Salvo is considered success under that circumstance. (这句没有说清楚，为什么经济危机下Pat就是成功的呢？你是不是应该再阐述一下，比如：虽然在Pat的带领下我们公司利润下降了，但是可能别的玩具公司利润下降更厉害) In addition, it is also possible that this three quarters of this year is an aberration that for the most time of recent years, the company actually shares a increasing profit. Lacking more information to exclude these possibilities, the author cannot draw his conclusion pursuable.

Secondly, the author assumes that all the situations are the same in those two companies according to the allegation that they will have an increase profit. However, common sense tells us that they are unlikely all the same, and differences between may bring absolutely opposite result. For example, Rosa's success is based on the seniority of market that they have accumulate enough trust on consumers, while it(this condition) is not existed on Fancy Toy Company (这里稍微说一下为什么这种客户关系在FTC不存在)or the majority consumption of jewery (jewelry) is domestic while it is through export that toy companies could survive.(这句是不是说珠宝主要销往国内，而玩具要出口，没有说清楚。 再有既然是另外一点了就应该分句了吧) Not taking into consideration these differences, the author cannot conclude that the new president will make the same success.

Thirdly, the conclusion suffers from" either-or" reasoning that Rosa and Pat Salvo are not mutual excluded. It is possible that there is other president or other implements that better than either one of them. Even if Rosa will be better than Pat Salvo, perhaps changes of measures, such as renewing the manage system, further practice employers' skills and sharp criteria of prizing and punishing, will required the same or even better result. Not pointing out that there is no better choice, we cannot admit that Rosa should be selected.
(这段是攻击还有其他人选，我建议采用让步的方式，并且在反驳中攻击Rosa薪水高: 就算Pat的表现不好,我们也不一定非要用Rosa，可能有更合适的人选。。。再说，Rosa要求的薪水太高了。。。)

In sum, the author claims that they should elected Rosa as their next president, but he commits several logical fallacies. To strengthen his claim, the author should offer more information about reasons why they suffer a decreasing profit. To better evaluate the claim, the author should take into account more options and compare two companies to make a reasonable prediction.

最后说一下就是每段后面的那个总结语句太死板了