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8月28日交

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（09.02.27NA）Do you agree or disagree with thefollowing statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is betterthan a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

Writing作业：

Personally speaking, I agree with thestatement that a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than ajob with a high salary but less vacation time.

Along with the economics growth, thestandard of people’s lives has been improved. People have more choices betweenwork and vacation. The information I have collected over the recent years leadsme to hold that there is a growing tendency for people to choose a job withmore vacation time but a low salary.

Happiness that people desire is one of themost important reasons. These days, people in increasing number are beginningto complain that work is more stressful and less leisurely than in past. Forpeople who want to adopt a healthy and meaningful life style, it is importantto find time to exercise and study instead of work only. Besides, more vacationlead people to spend more time with their family and friends, which will makethem obtain more happiness and contentment that they can not get from work.

More vacation will not only make peoplelive better, but also make people work better. With the progress of modernsociety, the competition in job market isincreasingly stiff. Doing a job with morevacation, people can spend more time and energy on studying new skills andtechnology so that they can keep a favorable position in job market. Forinstance, for those who work in the office, the skills of using computer andother machines, will make their work more comfortable and efficient.


From what have discussed above, I maysafely draw the conclusion that a job with more vacation time but a low salaryhave more advantages than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

snowdjUID: 163707

不知道怎么上附件。word的版本，没有传。第一次写，大量采用135句的句型。

lizhengjiangUID: 2619543

呵呵，，8.28 修改。。

       不很认真，但是值得看看啦。。哈哈


  祝复习顺利，考试成功

snowdjUID: 163707

呵呵，，8.28 修改。。

       不很认真，但是值得看看啦。。哈哈


  祝复习顺利，考试成功
lizhengjiang 发表于 2010-8-30 13:15

谢谢，改得不错，我继续努力。

snowdjUID: 163707

写不下去了，很多句子都说不出来，看了好几篇范文，抄袭了不少，但是还是不满意。造句能力，太差了。

8月31日交
09.05.30NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

Art and music are advanced products of our civilizations. They have developed thousands years accompanying the science and technology. They have become indispensable parts of our lives. I totally agree the statement that younger school children should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language. The education of art and music would broad the children’s horizon and enrich their life.

First of all, our world is not only a material world, but also a spiritual world. Studying art and music open a door to the spiritual world for younger school children. Art and music could enrich children’s soul and mold their personalities. With the study of art and music, the children could have a better understanding about the world and a better experience of feelings like happy, sorrow and calm. The children would learn to get along well with their family, friends and classmates; they would learn to appreciate the beauty and mysteriousness of nature.

In addition, studying art and music will help children to study math, science, history and language. A proper education of art and music will not occupy children’s too much time. In fact, they   maybe feel bored when they to spend all of time on math, etc. Art and music will make their study life more colorful and interesting. For instance, after hard working on a math question, listening to a piece of beautiful music could help them relax and cheer them up. So they can go ahead to next phase of study. Besides, children could motivate their creative thinking by learning art and music. They can get inspiration from art and music to achieve in other fields.

Last but not least, the love for art and music will become a good hobby for a person who has this kind of education when he/she is a child. Appreciating art and music is a great hobby that will make children’s life meaningful and let them not to feel bored during their spare time.

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改好了

snowdjUID: 163707

勉强写完，参考了很多资料，不算独立作文，目的是增加对句式的运用，增强语感。其中，很多自己的写法，不符合规范，请狠批，以利于改正。谢谢。


9月2日交
09.06.12NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.

There is general debate on the campus today over the university students’ taking part-time jobs. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree the statement that students should take part-time jobs while they are studying in university. Because whether in the academic studies or in the personal lives, students will benefit from part-time jobs a lot.
First at all, students could get more passion for study by taking major-related part-time jobs. A proper part-time job does not occupy students’ too much time. In fact, it is unhealthy for them to spend all the time on their study. After study continuously for long time, doing manual labour in the part-time job may relieve the students’ mental stress. Also, a part-time job related their major gives students an exciting chance to apply the theories they have learned in class. It could make students realize how important the theories that they have studied is. And then they might return to studies in school with renewed vigor.

In addition, taking part-time jobs will help students to get a really jobs. By doing part-time jobs, students could develop the Leadership and communicational skills that normally would not be learned          in a classroom and campus setting. Besides, the relationship that the students established with the company that they work for, will help them to secure permanent employment with that company once they graduated.

Last but not least, taking part-time jobs, students could develop their independence. Although the people’s lives have been dramatically changed over the last decades, it must be admitted that, the shortage of funds is still the one of the biggest questions that students nowadays have to face because the tuition fee and the price of books are soaring by the day. Consequently, the extra money by doing part-time job will reduce dependence on their parents and strongly support them to continue their study life.
From what have been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that students will benefit from part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.

FannieHsuUID: 2861996

改好了

snowdjUID: 163707

熬，也把它熬出来，理由不是很好区分，说来说去都是一个道理，用例子来撑了。基本是自己写，语法句式错误少不了。

9月4日交
09.08.01NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life# z5

Many people believe that if you do not make sure people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life. As for me, I definitely hold a positive view to this statement. Nowadays, in the modern society, one who want to succeed must supported by others and cooperate with others, therefore, he/she need other people know about his/her strengths and accomplishments.

One of the important reasons is one can not succeed all by his/her own. Whether the business success or the academic success, people who want to achieve them all need education, train and practice. However, in our education system, one who plans to attend an excellent school must have good grades. In the other words, he/she need a method to demonstrate his/her abilities and achievements to other people. As a result, people will believe that he/she deserve to gain the opportunity to enter good school or university.

Even one has received good education, he/she also need a good working environment to accomplish his/her goal. In that case, he/she must acquire other people especially influential people or his/her employers to trust and support them. For instance, in the company, he/she could get a more important position that make him/her could using his/her talent. Or, in the university, he/she could have a big laboratory that have enough good facilities and give him/her chance to do some significant experiments. All of this need he/she show his/her strengths and accomplishments to other people especially influential people or his/her employers.

In conclusion, it is necessary for people who want to live a successful  life to make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about their strengths and accomplishments.

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改好了
FannieHsu 发表于 2010-9-4 13:46

改得真好，谢谢。以后会学着用例子。

Ivan1989UID: 2602144

不好意思啊，批作文批的有点晚！不过这俩天没有时间上网，所以真的不好意思啊,敬请原谅！

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09.08.01NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) k ...
hyq533 发表于 2010-9-5 22:24

改得真好，水平是高。继续努力，向你学习。

snowdjUID: 163707

继续焦灼，造句困难，生造句子，不知道是否通顺，请多指教。

9月7日交





2009.8.7 NA  是否同意 parents help determined the future of their children or children allow to make their own choices.
$Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
　　Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.

As children will grow up and live their own lives, it is impossible that their parents always accompany them and help them to make their decisions. As far as I am concerned, I agree the statement that parents should allow children to make their own choice rather than determine their children’s future for them.

In the first place, it is unfair that children will take the consequences once parents make wrong decision about their children’s future. Nowadays, since   society and technology develop rapidly, it is possible that the experience and knowledge of parents maybe not enough to make right decisions. Even through parents have a good choice for their children, for instance, a good school or good job, children may be unsatisfied and unhappy if they do not like the school or job. Future is not definitely, the best choice is that parents help their children to be prepared for the future rather than determine everything for children. At last, children’s future should be determined by themselves.

In the second place, allowing children to make their own choice as early as possible is a good way for children to get ready for their future. Though children are immature and have not enough experience to determine the optimal choice, they could gain confidence and learn important lessons from this process. For example, a child might ignore his/her parents’ advice and pick a part-time job that sounds interesting initially, but which he/she comes to loathe almost immediately. This experience will require children learn to be responsible and persevering to their duty. It will lead children more independent that will be invaluable when the child grows up and has to find a real job.  

On the other hand, parents still play a significant roll in the children’s choice. In order to be able to make sound decision, children need the parents’ instruction and guidance. Parents could tell their children which is important and right, and then let children to choose the answer by themselves.

In conclusion, children should be allowed to make their own choice for their future, parents could lent a hand to their children in stead of determining everything for them.

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请问我的你什么时候改呢？

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