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.9.11NA  agree or disagree it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life


Although it is a pleasure to watch some movies which set in imagenery world, only films that tell us something about real life worth watching.

Francis Bacon once said" we learn from history that we never learn from history."The movie "Jack Welch" is a fitting example. Jack Welch is the greatest CEO in 20th century. He tried to eradicate perceived inefficiency by trimming inventories and eliminating the bureacracy problem that had almost led him to leave GE in past. " It is unfair to slowly dismantle  a bureaucratic structure as it would be for a surgeon to open up a patient once a year and remove 10% of cancerous tumor." He shut down factories, reduced payrolls, and oust lackluster old-line units. Welch's public philosophy was that a company should be either number 1 or number 2 in a particular industry, or else leave it completely. He would fire the bottom 10 percent of his managers and reward those in the top 20% with bonuses and stock options. Welch adopted Motorala's Six Sigma quality program in late 1995. Having taken GE with a market capitalization of about $12 billion, Jack Welch turned it into one of the largest and most admired company in the world, with a market value of $500 billion, when he stepped down as its CEO 20 years later, in 2000. Although Jack Welch is the "celerated leader " of a global manufacturer often noted for its technological prowess. Having respected for the individual as a pivotal force in organizational change, Welch detroyed the former nine layer management hierachy that injected a fresh, healthy blood to GE and created a model of exceptional performance every corporate leader can learn from. From his story we learnt how to be a excellent entrepreneur.

Similarly from the movie "Eistein" we grasp the truism that science has often challenged and upset conventional wisdom pr accepted practices, and that contributed to the progress of humanbeings. In 1905, Eisteins' name became synonymous with "genius" when his special theory of Relativity chanllenged old concepts in physics. More than 300 years ago, Issac Newton showed that the force that makes apples fall is the same as the gravity that holds planets in their orbits.  Newton's mathematics was good enough for us to fly rockets into space  and steer probes around planets--but some scientists questioned that at a very high speeds, or in very strong gravity, his theories didn's quite work. So , along came Eistein, whose theory of Relativity offered deeper insights into the nature of gravity, space and time.

Therefore, movies about real life can help us to learn from history, thus worth watching.



麻烦狠批哦~                    先谢谢了~
我是用SAT的方法写的这文,不知道可不可以啊........   

lizhengjiangUID: 2619543

有风格，不过不像考场作文了。

哎，自愧不如。英语没学几年，碰到你这样讲英文故事的人，胆寒万分。


  however，从考试作文的角度上讲，这样写不好。层次感没有，段落处理的不适当，开头、结尾都没有凸显的地方。




哈哈， 您， 大牛，，阅历浅，其他方面不方便修改了


你考场上还能这样写，真佩服你了





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2009.9.19 NA  Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.

Pablo Picasso once said "the purpose of art is washing the dust of daily life off our souls." Art is the aesthetic that balances our intellect, the beauty, the provocateur, the teacher, the stress reducer. Art is the higher purpose of our endeavor. Art museums are meant to educate and enlighten the general public. The transmission and maintenance of the cultural
past and its develpment into present and near future has asserted us a core goal. However, when the importance of Art museums compared with that of the recreational facilities, pales.

The need for art and the need for recreational facilities are on the different level.  Abraham Maslow's Hierachy of nees demonstrate this. Maslow's Hierachy of needs often portrayed in the shape of pyramid. Needs at the bottom are the basic physical requirement including the need for food, wate, sleep and warmth. Once these lower-level needs have been met, people can move on to the next level of needs, which are for safty ,security and health. As people progress up the pyramid, needs become increasingly psychological and social. Soon, the need for love, art, friendship and intimacy bacome important. Further up the pyramid, the need for social esteem and feelings of accomplishment take priority. Once a person moved through feeling and believing that he or she is deficient, he or she naturally seek to grow into who he/she is. That is considered a part of humanistic approach to personality. The humanistic approach focuses on motivated people  and tries to determine how he/she define himself/herself while maximazing their potential.

Now it's clear, the need for art is on the higher level of needs and the need for sports, the healthy is on the basic level of needs. Therefore, we need the opportunity to play sports  through recreational facilities, which could further helping us to stay healthy.

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Although it is a pleasure to watch some movies which set in imagenery(imaginery) world, only films that tell us something about real life worth watching.
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& ^* Y) c# o: z( {0 gSimilarly from the movie "Eistein", we grasp the truism that science has often challenged and upset conventional wisdom pr accepted practices, and that contributed to the progress of humanbeings(humanbeing 用在这说明什么？). In 1905, Eisteins' name became synonymous with "genius" when his special theory of Relativity chanllenged old concepts in physics. More than 300 years ago, Issac Newton showed that the force that makes apples fall is the same as the gravity that holds planets in their orbits.  Newton's mathematics was good enough for us to fly rockets into space  and steer probes around planets--but some scientists questioned that at a very high speeds, or in very strong gravity, his theories didn's quite work. So, along came Eistein, whose theory of Relativity offered deeper insights into the nature of gravity, space and time. （it is the movie that truly reflects the truism of the development to science and the endeavor of scientists.）
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Therefore, movies about real life can help us to learn from history, thus (is) worth watching.

这是一篇应用广泛的文章，我也学到很多。但是，就文章架构而言，还是不大符合托福的作文。可以再多练习一下结构。

樾悦UID: 2689181

文章改好了  有点纠结 不会传Word~   晚点给你传上来~

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改好了，注意拼写

樾悦UID: 2689181

结构加强~

ing315UID: 2870197

9.14  2009.9 25NA do you agree or disagree: having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost.- U4

Although it's awesome to have a secure job with low paying salary, l would choose a unstable but high-pay job. Because highpay job provides more prospects for advancement and high living quality, and it is always most competitive which means even if one lost his/her high-pay job, he/she will be capable to do other jobs.

A fitting example is Steve Jobs. Steve Jobs, the founder of the Apple Computer, revolutionized the computer industry and made him a multimillionare befre he was 30 years old. But then he was fired by his own company. He was forced out of the company in 1985 and started the NeXT Corporation, and returned to his old company in 1996 when Apple bought NeXT. Jobs soon became Apple's Chief Executive Officer and sparked a resurgence in the company with  products like the colorful iMac computer and the iPod music player. Jobs is also the CEO of Pixar, the animation company responsible for movies like Toy Story and Monsters, Inc. Pixar was purchased by Walt Disney Company in 2006 for $7.4 billion in stock, the deal made Jobs the largest individual shareholder of Disney stock.

Similarly, Micharl Bloomberg, the current Mayor of New York City, the 8th richest people in the United States, and the founder of  Bloomberg L.P. which is the world's leading financial news and information company, was also fired by his company in Wall street and started his own business. After graduatin from Harvard Business School, Bloomberg became a general partner at Salmon Brothers and he quickly rose through th ranks ar Salmon, where he eventually oversaw the trading firm's information systems. In 1981, he was fired from Salmon Brothers and was given a $10 million severance package. Using this money, and with a vision of an information company that would use emerging technology to bring transparency and efficiency to the buyers and sellers of  financial securities, he began a small startup company named Bloomberg L.P. Today, Bloomberg L.P. has over 285,000 subscribes to its financial news and information service in over 160 countries around the globe. Headquartered in New York city, the company has more than 11,000 employees worldwide.

The example of Steve Jobs and Michael Bloomberg demonstrate that people with high-pay but unstable jobs are usually highly developed individuals, thus they could turn the risk of losing the job into a gargantune fortune. And they are always ready to face the challenge.
On the contrary low-wage worker was desperately cope with steep increases in the costs of supportin a family-housing, medical care, child care, and transportation consume an ever increasing portion of the family budget. Thus l hold an unshakeable belief that it's better to have a high-pay unstable job over a secure but lowpay job.

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改完了

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