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butterfly1987UID: 2721250

Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground
With the development of human society, people nowadays are pursuing the requirements of a higher hierarchy,such as their desires for the appreciation of art. Therefore,it seems to be fantastically good idea that the government support more art museum and music performance than recreational facilities,such as swimming pool or play ground. However, the way I see it, investing recreational facilities is more beneficial for both the development of the city and the local people. I would like to explain my position as follows.

First of all, it is apparently that recreational facilities can contribute greatly to the improvement of the health of citizens mentally and physically, since tpeople can both have fun and do sports there.With a great recreational facility readily available, citizens will not come across the predicament that when they want to work themselves out or release their pressure with their friends or family members, but could not find a decent place. Whoever he or she is, both the young and the old, can drop by at a swimming pool or a play ground anytime to have a good time and do some exercise simultaneously. As it is well known, doing exercise from time to time benefits human body a lot. Hence, as a citizen,I really hope the government could spend more money on the foundation of recreational facilities rather than some art museum.

In addition, it can not be denied that supporting more recreational facilities can bring more benefits to the development of thecity as well, for the reason that a famous and well established recreational facility, say a fabulous play ground or an amusement park is likely to attract more people to visit the city and accordingly boom the tourism and bring a great fortune and plenty of opportunities to the city as a result.For example, one of our neighbour cities, has a very attractive amusement park, and every year thousands of people all around the country, especially those young couples pour into the city to have fun. The city become a amazingly modernized city within a few years owing to the money brought by the amusement park. Therefore, considering the benefits that could be brought by recreational facilities, it would be a wise decision to invest more of them.

Admittedly, people can gain a great deal of knowledge and happiness from an art museum or a music performance as well, since it is said that the appreciation of art is an effective way to release pressure and obtain the peace of people's inner world. However, for my part, more often than not,this kind of enjoyment could be easily obtained at home without the assistance of the government. Thus, putting more money on recreational facilities is more practical.

To sum up, both art museum, music performance and recreational facilities are significant, since all of them are able to improve the level of people's lives. However, were I to choose, I would like to support more recreational facilities, given they can do a lot to the citizens and the development of the city.

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

起晚了。。闹表怎么就是不好用呢。。先听听力120，批作文，文勇阅读！today's task~

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butterfly1987UID: 2721250

一上午的实验。。。做听抄，晚上听力特训，阅读，别忘了和毛毛口语~~下午上课作文修改。




3# xiaotuff

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

do you agree or disagree: having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost.

With the development of human society, people are starting to attach great significance to the achievement of their career, which is likely to give them a certain identity.Therefore,for my part, more often than not, it is better to have a high salary job even though it comes with a high risk of losing it. There are tremendous reasons to support my position, I would like to list couple of the most obvious ones in the following lines.

To begin with, higher salary,as a token for superiority, can bring people the sense of accomplishment the most directly,. As it is well-known, in most companies, the better employees earn more, so if one receives more money he is the better one, which is a very vital and enjoyable feeling. For instance, when two employees come to apartments of the same kind but different companies simultaneously, if one earns the twice as much as the other one, even though they have done almost the same amount of work,.it is apparent that the one who has a higher salary is likely to be more satisfactory since he received more reward and he will feel his value has been well recognized. Therefore, since more money can give a person the sense that he is more qualified and his ability is better recognized, it is advisable to have a higher paid job.

In addition, the risk of losing a job means challenge and stimuli,which is certainly a fantastic way for people to pursue self-transcendence especially for those young graduates who are not sure about their potentials. I remember when my cousin Jack first graduated, he was a little short of confidence in himself since he was so young, inexperienced and had just joined in a large international company. The competition in that firm is really stiff, if someone is unable to stand out in a three-month training, he was sure to be dismissed. Thus, he tried really hard for the job even pushing himself to an extreme point. Eventually he became so outrageously outstanding that we all marveled at his progress and of course he obtained the job opportunity. Hence,since a high risk of losing job provides us the challenge to discover our potentials and become a better person, hardly would anyone like to turn down the chance.

Admittedly, nor does the job of lower pay but more secure lack the moment of beauty. People who has this kind of job can appreciate more of a life with ease and in a slower pace. However, as a passionate young graduate, I enjoy more a exciting and challenging life which can gives me more identity and sense of realization.

To sum up, either a job with a lower pay but more security or a job coming with a more handsome pay but higher risk of losing it has its own benefits. However, as far as I am concerned, it is better to have the latter one since it provides people more recognization and the opportunity to improve oneself.

xiaotuffUID: 2685811

我才把11号的作文改了 看到你14号的作文昨天就写好了。。。你用词句式还是不错的，我要向你学学，只是有些句子和形容词显得有点重复，可以精简些。

With the development of human society, people nowadays are pursuing the requirements of a higher hierarchy, such as their desires for the appreciation of art. Therefore, it seems to be a fantastically good idea that the government supports more art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground. However, the way I see it, investing recreational facilities is more beneficial for the development of both移动位置 the city and the local people. I would like to explain my position as follows.

First of all, it is apparently that recreational facilities can contribute greatly to citizens’ mental and physical health, since people can both have fun and do sports there. With a great recreational facility readily available, citizens will not come across the predicament 删去that when they want to work themselves out or release their pressure with their friends or family members, but could not find a decent place. Whoever young or old你先前的有点累赘, can drop by at a swimming pool or a play ground anytime to have a good time and do some exercise simultaneously. As it is well known, doing exercise from time to time benefits human body a lot. Hence, as a citizen, I really hope the government could spend more money on the foundation of recreational facilities rather than some art museum.

In addition, it can not be denied that supporting more recreational facilities can bring more benefits to the development of thecity？ as well, for the reason that a famous and well established recreational facility, say a fabulous play ground or an amusement park is likely to attract more people to visit the city and accordingly boom the tourism，which may bring a great fortune and plenty of opportunities to the city as a result .For example, one of our neighbor cities has a very attractive amusement park, and every year thousands of people all around the country, especially those young couples pour into the city to have fun. The city becomes an amazingly modernized city within a few years partly owing to the money brought by the amusement park. Therefore, considering the benefits that could be brought by recreational facilities, it would be a wise decision to invest more of them.

Admittedly, people can gain a great deal of knowledge and happiness from an art museum or a music performance as well, since it is said that the appreciation of art is an effective way to release pressure and obtain the peace of people's inner world. However, for my part, more often than not, this kind of enjoyment could be easily obtained at home without the assistance of the government. Thus, putting more money on recreational facilities is more practical.

To sum up, both art museum, music performance and recreational facilities are significant, since all of them are able to improve the level of people's lives. However, were I to choose, I would like to support more recreational facilities, given they can do a lot to the citizens and the development of the city.

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5# butterfly1987 With the development of human society, people are startingto attach great significance to the achievement of their career, which islikely to give them a certain identity. Therefore, formy part, more often than not, it is better to have a high salary job eventhough it comes with a high risk of losing it. There are tremendous reasons tosupport my position., I would like tolist couple of the most obvious ones in the following lines./ d9 O# m8 Y4L" [# b4 C( a& X1 K& k

To begin with, higher salary, as a token for superiority, can bringpeople the sense of accomplishment the most directly,. As it iswell-known, in most companies, the better employees earn more.,Ssoif one receives more money he is the better one, which will bring himisa very vital and enjoyable feeling. For instance, when two employees come to the same apartmentsof thesame kind at the same position but differentcompanies simultaneously, if one earns the twice as much as the other one, eventhough they have done almost the same amount quantities ofwork, .iItis apparent that the one who has a higher salary is likely to be moresatisfactory since he received more rewards and he willfeel his value has been well recognized. Therefore, since more money can give aperson the sense that he is more qualified and his ability is betterrecognized, it is advisable to have a higher paid job."


In addition, the risk of losing a job means challenge and stimuli, whichis certainly a fantastic way for people to pursue self-transcendence especiallyfor those young graduates who are not sure about their potentials. I rememberwhen my cousin Jack first graduated., Hhewas a little short of confidence in himself since he was so young,inexperienced and had just joined in a large international company. Thecompetition in that firm is really stiff/intense, ifsomeone is unable to stand out in a three-month training, he was sure to bedismissed. Thus, he tried really hard for the job even pushing himself to anextreme point. Eventually he became so outrageously outstanding that we allmarveled at his progress and of course he obtained the job opportunity. Hence, sincea high risk of losing job provides us the challenge to discover our potentialsand become a better person, hardly would anyone like to turn down the chance.

Admittedly, nor does the job of lower pay but more secure lack the moment ofbeauty. Peoplewho hasPeople who have this kind of job canappreciate a life with more ofa lifewith ease and in a slower pace.However, as a passionate young graduate, I enjoy more an exciting andchallenging life which can gives me more identity and sense of realization.

To sum up, either a job with a lower pay but more security or a job coming witha more handsome pay but higher risk of losing it has its own benefits. However,as far as I am concerned, it is better to have the latter one since it providespeople more recognitionzation and theopportunity to improve oneself.
这个是我改的，我觉得你的语言挺不错的，词汇量也大，向你多学习下，再接再励哦。

nishuowosheiUID: 2843451

望回改~

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

大家写得都好棒啊，这几天太忙了，明晚之前一定把作文都改好写好！加油！

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

It is desiring that if we could live in a fairy tale where the good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished. However, in the reality, things might not turn out to be as equally and ideally as we have imagined.Thus, for my part, movies and televisions should not show audience this kind of illusion either, since the unrealistic happy endings might bring doubts and frustrations to the audiences' lives. I would like to explain my position in the following lines.

In the first place,the difference between the ideal results in the television shows or movies and unfair treatment in the real society is likely to make people have doubts and confusions about their lives, especially the young and children who are susceptible to the ideal illusion and have no good aware of the real world. For example, my nephew David, who is five years old and going to a kindergarten nearby his home. One day he saw some naughty boys made fun of another person, but got away from any punishment. He was totally confused since the real results were nothing like what would happen if it was in a cartoon movie. Therefore, too much shows with happy endings are detrimental to people, especially to the young, since the differences between the reality and the shows might leave them confusing about the world.

Yet the harmful effects of ideal results brought by those television shows might go further, it is probably that some people feel frustrated when they the same good things and efforts, but acquire nothing. Because it is always appearing on the screen that if someone tried really hard, sooner or later, he would be successful and live a perfect life for sure. However, in the real life, success comes not only from hard working, but the right time and the right place are necessary as well. People who lack some elements of these are unlikely to achieve their goals and make things happen just as in the movies, and thus they are likely to feel frustrated and think of themselves as a loser. Therefore, for most of the times, ideal results in the movies are not desirable, considering the influence it might have on people.

Admittedly, every coin has two sides. Watching television shows with good results that hardly happen in the real world is an incomparable way to escape from the stressful world since they can provide people a pleasant and desirable world. However, for most of the time, given the undesirable effects of the unrealistic , as I have discussed above, it is not advisable to watch those shows from televisions or movies.

To sum up, since watching televisions or movies with an ideal result is not always good and sometimes even detrimental to people's lives, it is not an optimal choice to watch too many this kind of movies or shows

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It is desiring that if we could live in a fairy tale where the good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished. However, in the reality, things might not turn out to be as equally and ideally as we have imagined（这句话中语法有问题）. Thus, for my part, movies and televisions should not show audience this kind of illusion either, since the unrealistic happy endings might bring doubts and frustrations to the audiences' lives. I would like to explain my position in the following lines.4 k8 l/ S  C4 H% |7 i8
In the first place, the difference between the ideal results in the television shows or movies and unfair treatment in the real society is likely to make people have doubts and confusions about their lives, especially the young and children who are susceptible to the ideal illusion and have no good aware of the real world. For example, my nephew David, who is five years old and going to a kindergarten nearby his home. One day he saw some naughty boys made fun of another person, but got away from any punishment. He was totally confused since the real results were nothing like what would happen if it was in a cartoon movie. Therefore, too much show with happy endings is detrimental to people, especially to the young, since the differences between the reality and the shows might leave them confusing about the world.
Yet the harmful effects of ideal results brought by those television shows might go further, it is probably that some people feel frustrated when they the same good things and efforts, but acquire nothing. Because it is always appearing on the screen that if someone tried really hard, sooner or later, he would be successful and live a perfect life for sure. However, in the real life, success comes not only from hard working, but the right time and the right place are necessary as well. People who lack some elements of these are unlikely to achieve their goals and make things happen just as in the movies, and thus they are likely to feel frustrated and think of themselves as a loser. Therefore, for most of the times, ideal results in the movies are not desirable, considering the influence it might have on people.
Admittedly, every coin has two sides.（这句话用烂了，考虑换一个） Watching television shows with good results that hardly happen in the real world is an incomparable way to escape from the stressful world since they can provide people a pleasant and desirable world. However, for most of the time, given the undesirable effects of the unrealistic, as I have discussed above, it is not advisable to watch those shows from televisions or movies.2 s& T4 ^' R# b, h. d1
To sum up, since watching televisions or movies with an ideal result is not always good and sometimes even detrimental to people's lives, it is not an optimal choice to watch too many this kind of movies or shows
1、        先膜拜一下；
2、        复杂句太多，简单句太少，最佳比例是2：1；
3、        小错误，特别是语法错误一定要避免，例如可数不可数名词；
4、        最后一段不推荐一句话总结，反而会扣分的；
5、        言语直接，希望对楼主有所帮助。

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

There has been a desiring tendency that an increasing number of students are required to study art and music courses in addition to math,science , history and language. However, some people hold a various opinion that they suppose these kinds of classes would distract students' attention from their major study, especially for those who age five to ten. For my part, I could hardly go with these people since the cultivation of art or music is long process and it is in need of the assistance of teachers in school, in addition to that all these art and music is an indispensable elements to make the students' lives more colourful.

To  begin with, it is apparent that the cultivation of art or music takes a lot of time and requires the effort of the students and sometimes even the teachers, so it would be convenient and suitable for school to open these courses. Hardly could a student master the technique of playing some kind of musical instrument without the coaching of a brilliant teacher and fair enough time to practice it, unless he is a rare genius. However, it is sad but true that most of us are not intelligent enough to be genius, therefore, schools should take the responsibility of providing students these course and accordingly gives the students the time and the help of a teacher. Hence, since the mastering of art or music takes one pretty much time and requires the favor of a teacher, it is advisable for schools to open these courses.

In addition, there is no denying and self-evident that only when there are course like art or music in addition to the courses such as math, science, history and language could the students' lives be more colourful and less stressful.If there are no art and music classes, then the students' attention would be focused on only one thing--their major study. This is could be very boring, dull and thus stressful for the children especially for those five to ten. According to an investigation by the journal Education, primary schools which do not provide the art or music courses have a 86.37 percent higher rate of drop-out than those do, and after a deeper research , the main reason turns out that studying just those major courses make the students find their school lives ridiculously boring.. Therefore, in order to make the students' lives more colourful and fascinating, schools should offer art and music courses, especially to those ages five to ten.

Admittedly, even though providing art and music courses is suitable, the significant role of students' major courses should never be ignored. For the reason that the main goal of going to school is to have a better command of the scientific courses.However, due to the reasons I discussed above, it is necessary for school to provide art and music courses as well.

To sum up, it is vital for school to provide art and music courses, since students could hardly master them all by themselves and these course could make students' lives more interesting and enjoyable.Therefore, offering both those scientific courses and art or music course would be optimal for students.

butterfly1987UID: 2721250

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Why does the pursuit of knowledge loom so large in today's society? Surely because knowledge is playing an increasingly significant role in our life, especially this time of information. Nearly everyone in this world are pining for a better education in order to be knowledgeable. Some people nowadays contend that the best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries. However, I ,at an individual level, can hardly go with this opinion.There are numerous reasons that could support my position, I would like to list couple of them in the lines below.

First and foremost, there is no denying that the quality of education does not depend on the salaries of teachers but rather the quality of the education system of the whole school. For example,if the the facilities of the labs in a university or school are poorly equipped, even when the teachers are versatile,brilliant and they can instill their theory into students approprately, yet the students have no where to put their knowledge into practice which is an essential and irreplaceable part in master the knowledge. Therefore, the well condition of facilities in university or school are vital in order to make sure the students are receiving a high quality of education.

In addition, apparent and self-evident as it is, the quality of the teachers should never be ignored to make sure the superior quality of education. For the reason that teachers are the most important media in transmitting knowledge and they are the ones who are suppose to make the students have a better understanding of the specific area and lead students to become interested in it.. According to an investigation by the journal Educational Digest, the higher degree and the more achievement the teacher have gained, the more likely their students would stand out and make a great contribution in the same area. Therefore, the quality of the teachers serves as an indispensable element to maintain the high quality of education.

Admittedly, raising the salaries of teachers can contribute to the good quality of education as well, for the reason that with the stimuli of the money, teachers might like to devote more of themselves into this area.Therefore, this beneficial effect should be considered,however, as I discussed above, this solution fails to be the best approach to a higher quality of education.

To sum up, considering the influence of the facilities in a school and the quality of their teachers, the increasing of teachers' salaries can scarcely be the best way to improve education.

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There has been a desiring tendency that an increasing number of students are required to study art and music courses in addition to math, science , history and language. However, some people hold a various opinion（最好改为various opinions） that they suppose these kinds of classes would distract students' attention from their major study, especially for those who age five to ten. For my part,(改为For my own part) I could hardly go with these people since the cultivation of art or music is long process and it is in need of the assistance of teachers in school, in addition to that all these art and music is an indispensable elements to make the students' lives more colourfu(改为colorful)l.: h# L/ }. n" Y- X9 @0 N. L

  To  begin with, it is apparent that the cultivation of art or music takes a lot of time and requires the effort of the students and sometimes even the teachers, so it would be convenient and suitable for school to open these courses. Hardly could a student master the technique of playing some kind of musical instrument without the coaching of a brilliant teacher and fair enough time to practice it, unless he is a rare genius. (这个倒装句用的…………）However, it is sad but true that most of us are not intelligent enough to be genius, therefore, schools should take the responsibility of providing students these course and accordingly gives the students the time and the help of a teacher. Hence, since the mastering of art or music takes one pretty much time and requires the favor of a teacher, it is advisable for schools to open these courses.


In addition, there is no denying and self-evident that only when there are course like art or music in addition to the courses such as math, science, history and language could the students' lives be more colourful and less stressful.If there are no art and music classes, then the students' attention would be focused on only one thing--their major study. This is could be very boring, dull and thus stressful for the children especially for those five to ten. According to an investigation by the journal Education, primary schools which do not provide the art or music courses have a 86.37 percent higher rate of drop-out than those do, （好吧，为啥不是85.37…………）and after a deeper research , the main reason turns out that studying just those major courses make the students find their school lives ridiculously boring.. Therefore, in order to make the students' lives more colourful and fascinating, schools should offer art and music courses, especially to those ages five to ten.

Admittedly, even though providing art and music courses is suitable, the significant role of students' major courses should never be ignored. For the reason that the main goal of going to school is to have a better command of the scientific courses.However, due to the reasons I discussed above, it is necessary for school to provide art and music courses as well.9 a. @/ K& X( U, H0 K) h5 d7 E
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To sum up, it is vital for school to provide art and music courses, since students could hardly master them all by themselves and these course could make students' lives more interesting and enjoyable.Therefore, offering both those scientific courses and art or music course would be optimal for students.

个人感觉：本来是说家长给安排额外的艺术和音乐课，怎么变成学校安排了？如果是作文的观点，不同意家长安排，前面还是明确的提出并说明理由的好，不然很容易被误会是跑题。


13# butterfly1987

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小猴子改好拉···