Emulate作文小组 issue130

AK_小儿UID: 2784558

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
提纲：社会化定义：适应社会环境
论点：社会化纵然是一个孩子必须的素质，但是并不代表社会化决定社会命运。
        1正：承认一个孩子必须要学会适应环境而不是纯粹的提高别的能力。
        2反: (1) 艺术等领域社会化可能不那么重要，社会的全面发展才能算更好的社会。
               (2) 社会化导致人与人之间交流和合作频繁而紧密，导致部分人失去独立的能力。这样的社会不健康。
               (3) 如果社会本身就是畸形的不健康的，我们不该单纯地适应社会而是学会去改变社会的缺陷，这样才能让社会更好。
Socialization, broadly defined as fitting or training for a social environment, is an important factor of children to build a better society. But it would never be the determinative factor due to the fact that excessive socialization can lead a terrible consequence as well.

With the technology highly developed and the civilization greatly enriched, we tend to be more unclearly in educating the next generations than ever before. Nowadays, especially in China, such a numbers of parents emphasize the importance of personal abilities, included by the area of IQ, but ignoring the children’s ability to socialize. When being more and more ‘excellent’ as their parents expected, they become more aloof for they have been used to being accompanied with those so-called ability. They are encouraged to read books or learn in Internet instead of playing balls or having games outside with friend. What’s worse, playing with friends outside is more likely to be regarded as a represent of disliking study. It is a pity to see that a perfect student who gets an excellent mark in school but can’t work well in company because they don’t know how to communicate, cooperate and how to adapt to this society.

To some extent, we are successfully help to make them a perfect individual but not a component contributes to build a better society. So, I admit that we should make the children better socialized most cases. But I disagree with that it may determine the destiny of our society for the reason that egregious and blindly socialization causes bad effects below.

Firstly, the socialization fails to accelerate the development in some realm. Some area, art included, may need a condition of solitary or a unique experience. Vincent Van Gogh, a loser in adapting the society, who may be the most destitute artist in the most straitened circumstance, climbed to the peak of art. It is the experience of being solitude or even the straitened circumstance that endows the numerous emotions to his paintings, which, obviously, can’t be accomplished by socialization. Even though he didn’t get the right evaluation before he died. Because, art is prejudice. A better society doesn’t mean only some parts’ development but all aspects including area like art. Socialization is definitely not enough.

Moreover, the egregious socializing can lead to excess cooperation, which can cause one’s indolence. As a matter of fact, socialization makes people’s communication and cooperation frequently and tightly, when speeding the development of our society. However, this kind of cooperation makes people less independent, which lead their ability’s retrograding. Also, it is unfair to the persons who do the main works to build the society. Thus, the society won’t grow healthy.

And most importantly, as I mentioned before, socialization is defined as fitting the social environment. But, if the society we live is somehow lopsided, shall we change ourselves to adapt to that unhealthy society? Actually, there are kinds of potential rules in every realm, showing the darkness and unfairness. As an individual, we usually have little ability to change it so that most of us choose to be compromised. Does this very kind of adaptation to the society really get a better society? If so, Americans spend a century’s time in eliminating the racial discrimination but they still haven’t get the complete democracy, then shall we get the answer that adapting to the society filled with discrimination is a better choice to build a better society? Absolutely not! What we try hard to adapt to always must be right and just. A better society will be built by more than a blindly socialization and adaption of children but a change and a reconstruction of the unhealthy parts of our society.

All in all, how children are socialized does help to build a better society. But it may never be the determinative factor. And most cases when facing unjust and unhealthy social problem, we should change them instead of adapting to it.(word 656)

BlairZieUID: 2948805

Socialization, broadly defined as fitting or training for a social environment, is an important factor of children to build a better society. But it would never be the determinative factor due to the fact that excessive socialization can lead a terrible consequence as well.

With the technology highly developed and the civilization greatly enriched, we tend to be more unclearly in educating the next generations than ever before(这句没有明白，是说我们对下一代的教育趋向模糊吗？). Nowadays, especially in China, such a numbers of parents emphasize the importance of personal abilities, included by the area of IQ(用intelligence或者mentality会好一点), but ignoring the children’s ability to socialize(personal abilities也包括ablilty to socialize吧，不如直接写成emphasize the importance of intellectual ability, but...). When being more and more ‘excellent’ as their parents respected, they become more aloof for they have been used to being accompanied(这个不能用被动吧...) with those so-called abilities. They are encouraged to read books or learn in Internet instead of playing balls or having games outside with friend. What’s worse, playing with friends outside is more likely to be regarded as a represent(用behaviour好一点吧) of disliking study. It is a pity to see that a perfect student who gets an excellent mark(grade) in school but can’t work well in company because they don’t know how to communicate, cooperate and how to adapt to this society. (这部分的因果关系照你写的就好像是同学注重成绩不去和朋友玩所以他们不会交流与合作，所以他们不能在公司工作。这里的潜在因果关系是“playing with friends outside”=“know how to communicat, cooperate and how to adapt to the society”。中间没有说明playing with friends outside是如何达到培养小孩adapt to society的能力的过渡，而且这一点也很片面)

To some extent, we are successfully help to make them a perfect individual but not a component contributes to build a better society. So, I admit that we should make the children better socialized most cases. But I disagree with that it may determine the destiny of our society for the reason that egregious and blindly socialization causes bad effects below.

Firstly, the socialization fails to accelerate the development in some realm. Some area, art included, may need a condition of solitary or a unique experience. Vincent Van Gogh, a loser in adapting the society, who may be the most destitute artist in the most straitened circumstance, climbed to the peak of art. It is the experience of being solitude or even the straitened circumstance that endows the numerous emotions to his paintings, which, obviously, can’t be accomplished by socialization. Even though he didn’t get the right evaluation before he died. Because, art is prejudice. A better society doesn’t mean only some parts’ development but all aspects including area like art. Socialization is definitely not enough.

Moreover, the egregious socializing can lead to excess cooperation, which can cause one’s indolence. As a matter of fact, socialization makes people’s communication and cooperation frequently and tightly, when speeding the development of our society. However, this kind of cooperation makes people less independent, which lead their ability’s retrograding. Also, it is unfair to the persons who do the main works to build the society. Thus, the society won’t grow healthy.

And most importantly, as I mentioned before, socialization is defined as fitting the social environment. But, if the society we live is somehow lopsided, shall we change ourselves to adapt to that unhealthy society? Actually, there are kinds of potential rules in every realm, showing the darkness and unfairness. As an individual, we usually have little ability to change it so that most of us choose to be compromised. Does this very kind of adaptation to the society really get a better society? If so, Americans spend a century’s time in eliminating the racial discrimination but they still haven’t get the complete democracy, then shall we get the answer that adapting to the society filled with discrimination is a better choice to build a better society? Absolutely not! What we try hard to adapt to always must be right and just. A better society will be built by more than a blindly socialization and adaption of children but a change and a reconstruction of the unhealthy parts of our society.

All in all, how children are socialized does help to build a better society. But it may never be the determinative factor. And most cases when facing unjust and unhealthy social problem, we should change them instead of adapting to it.

AK_小儿UID: 2784558

恩 的确  我写的时候没有斟酌清楚
我改了一下这一段
With the technology highly developed and the civilization greatly enriched, we tend to be more unclearly in educating the next generations than ever before. Nowadays, especially in China, such a numbers of parents emphasize the importance of intellectual ability, but ignoring the children’s ability to socialize. When being more and more ‘excellent’ as their parents expected, they become more aloof for they have been used to being accompanied with those so-called abilities. They are encouraged to improve their intellectual ability by reading books or learn in Internet alone instead of taking part in other varies activities which help ones to communicate and cooperate better. What’s worse, taking part in other activity which is less related to knowledge is more likely to be regarded as a behavior of disliking study. It is a pity to see that a perfect student who gets an excellent grade in school but can’t work well in company because they don’t know how to communicate, cooperate and how to adapt to this society.

Andrew_zwiUID: 2670942

文笔方面，我觉得Blair 改的很好了，我就不赘述了。

看了LZ的文章，我觉得我和LZ关于socialized 的理解有不同，感觉LZ理解是不是有点片面。个人观点，欢迎讨论。。
LZ认为socialize是 适应社会 指交际能力。（我感觉LZ全文的socialize 其实就等同于交际（intercommunicate）），
但我认为socialize 用中文讲应该是如何做人，而适应社会，交际只是很小的一部分。做人除了交际，还有就是对自己所处核心文化的认同和学习，以及对自己社会角色的认定（即知道自己在什么角色里应该做什么事），这些也属于社会化，因为这样一个人才能适应社会。如果按照我的解释，socialize=如何做人，这个套在LZ的文章中逻辑很怪。如，我觉得不会有过分的社会化，社会化指一个人内化社会价值标准、学习角色技能、适应社会生活的过程。这个过程怎么会过分? LZ想表达应该是过度的交流，交际。

[有一附件是元老版主“鬼谷子”关于socialization资料的整理，很好，有空你看看]