issue48 写了一个多小时,谢谢指点

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048. “The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possibly not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.”

Recently, an argument raises that whether the study of history has placed too much emphasis on individuals. To the speaker’s point of view, the direction of history studying indeed deviated because the most significant events and trends in history were made possibly not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. I cannot agree with this assertion. As far as I am concerned, the study of history should place emphasis on famous individuals as it does now.

For one thing, the most significant events and trends in history were propelled or lead by the famous few individuals, so via studying them we can get a desired knowledge of the events. For instance, if we want to know the progress of the Civil War, we can look into the biography of Abe Ham Lincoln for guidance. As the propeller and leader of the Civil War, the participator of the significant events of the war, Lincoln’s experiences can reflect the progress of what was happening during the war. His struggling for the rights of the black, his strategies for the battles, and even his being murdered can mark the important events of that piece of history. Thus, the famous individuals deserve to be emphasized on during the study of history for they can representative the significant events and trends in history.

For another thing, there are marvelous materials of famous individuals for historians to work on while the documentation of the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten is rare. One of my history professor once said: “Chasing for the famous people is the nature of human beings.” So does the historian. That is why there are motley assortments of records about famous individual for us to look into. If you need the information of a significant leader such as Washington, versatile means are available such as a click on the Internet, then thousands of searching results will appear on the screen and you can get whatever you need about Washington. But when you want to get the information of ordinary citizen dead in the World War Two whose identities has long been forgotten, there is tremendous hard work for you to accomplish. If you are lucky enough, the tomb of him may be found in North Korea after a whole year of hard searching. Possessing handful of easily got documentations, the study of famous individuals is more time saving and practical, thus the study of them should be the mainstream of the research on history.

Admittedly, the study of ordinary individuals who participate in the significant events should not be neglected. The impetus of the events is provides by the famous few while the proceeding forth of the events is made by the groups of ordinary people. Besides the studying of few famous people we should pay apposite attention to the groups of people whose identities has long been forgotten.

In conclusion, the emphasis of history studying should be put on the few famous individuals who are the representatives of the significant events and trends in history. The studying of ordinary participators should also been taken into consideration to give a more comprehensive perspective of the history.

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“The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possibly not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.”

Recently, an argument raises that whether the study of history has placed too much emphasis on individuals. To the speaker’s point of view, the direction of history studying indeed deviated because the most significant events and trends in history were made possibly not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. I cannot agree with this assertion. As far as I am concerned, the study of history should place emphasis on famous individuals as it does now. [开头提出观点还是很明确的。]

For one thing, the most significant events and trends in history were propelled or lead [led] by the famous few individuals, so via studying them we can get a desired knowledge of the events. For instance, if we want to know the progress of the Civil War, we can look into the biography of Abraham Lincoln for guidance. As the propeller and leader of the Civil War, the participator of the significant events of the war, Lincoln’s experiences can reflect the progress of what was happening during the war. His struggling for the rights of the black, his strategies for the battles, and even his being murdered can mark the important events of that piece of history. Thus, the famous individuals deserve to be emphasized on during the study of history for they can representative the significant events and trends in history.

For another thing, [觉得这里用表递进的衔接词更恰当一点。] there are marvelous materials of famous individuals for historians to work on while the documentation of the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten is rare. One of my history professor once said: “Chasing for the famous people is the nature of human beings.” So does the historian. That is why there are motley assortments of records about famous individual for us to look into. If you need the information of a significant leader such as Washington, versatile means are available such as a click on the Internet, then thousands of searching results will appear on the screen and you can get whatever you need about Washington. But when you want to get the information of ordinary citizen dead in the World War Two whose identities has long been forgotten, there is tremendous hard work for you to accomplish. If you are lucky enough, the tomb of him may be found in North Korea after a whole year of hard searching. [这句很精彩。] Possessing handful of easily got documentations, the study of famous individuals is more time saving and practical, thus the study of them should be the mainstream of the research on history.

Admittedly, the study of ordinary individuals who participate in the significant events should not be neglected. The impetus of the events is provides by the famous few while the proceeding forth of the events is made by the groups of ordinary people. Besides the studying of few famous people we should pay apposite attention to the groups of people whose identities has long been forgotten. [这段关于人民大众的作用可以稍微在详细点。]

In conclusion, the emphasis of history studying should be put on the few famous individuals who are the representatives of the significant events and trends in history. The studying of ordinary participators should also been taken into consideration to give a more comprehensive perspective of the history. [结尾略显简略了点。]

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thx again!
2号就要考了,真是没信心啊
谢谢斑竹的评价, 让我觉得还是有那么一点点希望的