issue196 第一篇,诚望朋友指点,指出错误,帮我迈出第一步,谢谢

dinddind2003UID: 196353

Issue196  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户          453 words

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Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life.
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It is true that technology causes many problems that threaten our lives, but it also creats many miracle that largely improves our daly life.

Admittedly, when people use technology in a wrang way it does damage our lives. One example is traffic jam which we may meet everyday.Advanced techniques makes us have faster and faster cars,however when people produce more and more cars ,the speed of our cars are limited if these cars are in the same place at the same time.Another example is that mobilephones deprives our private time.Although mobilephones give us the posibilities to communicate whith each other at any time,yet assume that when a person is watching his(or her) favorate movie there comes a call that tells he (or she) that an important meeting is waiting for he(or she),so maybe the mobilephone inventers should make their inventions power off at a fixed time everyday. There are still some problems such as war and pollution which result from people using technology for their own interest.

However,technology makes many dreams belonged to our ancesters come into reality.Hundreds years ago scientists were controverting whether the sun goes around the earth or the earth goes around the sun,yet now people can run on the moon if they want;thounds years ago our ancesters long for rain when they met droughts  which   might desdroy their crops yet now people can creat a rain at proper time and at a proper place.Thus,technology gives people the power that takes many things which were seem as mysterious by our ancesters in control.

Furthermore,technology largely improves quantity of life.Hunders years ago it takes Marco Polo seventeen years to go from west to east through the Silk Road,yet now people can go round the earth in a few hours;hundreds years ago people used beacon to transform information yet now no matter how far between two persons,they can speak to each other the monment they pick up their telephone.Still,technology gives people coolness in hot summer;gives us summer fruits in cold winter;gives us machines which have tremendous power;gives us precise instruments which can plant into humanbodies.Hardly anyone would like to go back to the period even 50 years ago when technology was backward.Look around, hardly any thing which is helpful to our daly life today have no relevance whith technology.Thus,technology makes our lives more comfortable.

To sum up,technology does give people some problems because of people’s evil methods,but people gain much more benefites than harms through technology.If people cast technology away no one would know what a terrible world we might meet.

seabird_skyUID: 2101071

哈哈,真巧.竟然同题.
楼主也是用"倒计时作文练习v2"练的吧?!
把时间给剪了;P

seabird_skyUID: 2101071

哈哈,真巧.竟然同题.
楼主也是用"倒计时作文练习v2"练的吧?!
把时间给剪了;P

zehuaUID: 199246

看完题目，我的想法：
1。技术是引发了很多问题
2。但是技术也解决的很多问题。人的生活质量，寿命等有所提高。
3。产生的问题和解决的问题数量上没有可比性。科技不能解决人的所有问题。环境污染，核扩散、、这些还需要人的宽容，理解，自我反省才能解决。

看看你怎么搞：

It is true that technology causes many problems that threaten our lives, but it also creats many miracle（单复数问题！） that largely improves our daly life.

Admittedly, when people use technology in a wrang way it does damage our lives. One example is traffic jam which we may meet everyday.Advanced techniques makes us have faster and faster cars,however when people produce more and more cars ,the speed of our cars are limited if these cars are in the same place at the same time（这句话要大修。罗嗦！）.Another example is that mobilephones deprives our private time.Although mobilephones give us the posibilities to communicate whith each other at any time,yet assume that when a person is watching his(or her) favorate movie there comes a call that tells he (or she) that an important meeting is waiting for he(or she),so maybe the mobilephone inventers should make their inventions power off at a fixed time everyday. There are still some problems such as war and pollution which result from people using technology for their own interest.

However,technology makes many dreams belonged to our ancesters come into reality.Hundreds years ago scientists were controverting whether the sun goes around the earth or the earth goes around the sun,yet now people can run on the moon if they want;thounds years ago our ancesters long for rain when they met droughts  which   might desdroy their crops yet now people can creat a rain at proper time and at a proper place.Thus,technology gives people the power that takes many things which were seem as mysterious by our ancesters in control.（展开不够充分。科学带来的便利主要是这2个？？）

Furthermore,technology largely improves quantity of life.Hunders years ago it takes Marco Polo seventeen years to go from west to east through the Silk Road,yet now people can go round the earth in a few hours;hundreds years ago people used beacon to transform information yet now no matter how far between two persons,they can speak to each other the monment they pick up their telephone.Still,technology gives people coolness in hot summer;gives us summer fruits in cold winter;gives us machines which have tremendous power;gives us precise instruments which can plant into humanbodies.Hardly anyone would like to go back to the period even 50 years ago when technology was backward.Look around, hardly any thing which is helpful to our daly life today have no relevance whith technology.Thus,technology makes our lives more comfortable.（这2段完全是1个意思。看来B2可以删了。）

To sum up,technology does give people some problems because of people’s evil methods,but people gain much more benefites than harms through technology.If people cast technology away no one would know what a terrible world we might meet.

以后先在WORD里改完语法错误再贴上来！感觉没话可说，思路比较单薄。

dinddind2003UID: 196353

呵呵,是倒计时作文2,但是是分时间段写的,所以把时间剪了.zehua 批得很;严啊,我的信心都快被吓没了,写完感觉还挺好的,没想到问题这么严重,再研究研究........