Issue150 熊熊的同主题作文互拍！

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互拍！留链接回拍！
狠狠拍吧写的不好~~
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分1秒     564 words
从2005年7月9日16时7分到2005年7月9日16时45分
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Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.
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部分同意这个观点

1.应该承认，通过电视和网络~人们得到了很多的information.
1.1information增加旅游的兴趣
1.2人们在决定旅行前可以很好的了解到的信息。
2但是不能认为有了电视和网络~人们就不去旅游了tourism in decline
2.1人们旅游真正重视的一种亲身的经历，而不是仅仅的欣赏景色~一些参与性的活动：爬山攀岩漂流都是电视和网络无法带给人们的。Rock - climbing，driftin
2.2旅游中的一些当地美食文化品无法通过互联网和电视传播。
2.3同时电视和网络往往会帮助旅游景点做广告advertisement->attract more people
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Will the tourism soon become obsolete? The speaker claims so, because television and worldwide computer will provide more information to make people familiar with many great places. I partly agree with that the television and computer connection will benefit people in showing them places of interests. However, I do not think the tourism will be in decline, because this reason can only benefit the tourism rather than undermine it.

To begin with, I concede the significant benefit brought by television and worldwide computer communication on tourism. On the one hand, the television and internet can bring people vivid images and sounds of the real places, which is convenient for people who are too far away to access such places. With help of high-technology, the video and pictures can be substantially near to the true. Thus people will feel they are just on the boat of Rhine River or on the peek of Alps Mountain. On the other hand, compared with television and internet, the traditional travels have some disadvantages such like the high cost, the danger outside and so on, while under this circumstance, the travel on television or net have own advantages.

However, I think do not think this benefit will prevent people from outside tourism, which will make the tourism obsolete. There are two reasons to support my point of view as follows.

In the first place, television and internet could not create a totally true environment as in the place of interests, while only traveling itself will bring authentic feelings to the travelers. The aim to travel is not only to see the sceneries but also to enjoy the process of touring. Compared with watching beautiful sights comfortably at home, people would rather make a tough travel experience the emotions brought by travels. Further, there are some travel projects needing the body-experience, one of which is rock-climbing. Although it is a dangerous travel projects to some extent, rock-climbing still attracts a lot of people every year, as many people like challenging themselves. And the television and internet could not provide such kind of travel program for people, making traveling on their own necessary. What is more, tourism will also give people a chance to outside culture themselves. People can taste some delicious foods and celebrate the festivals with local people, to better recognize and understand the culture. All these will not be furnished by television and internet.

In the second place, the television and internet would furnish a space for tourism companies to advertise, which would probably increase the popularity of the places of interests. As we know, the television and internet are not just providing detail information about places of interest, but broadcasting many advertisements every day, many of which are for the tourism companies. Though showing about famous places, the advertisement on television and internet would probably inspire the people’s desire to make a travel. And then these places’ tourism will be more popular and more prosperity. Thus, we can see the influence of television and internet towards tourism is rather propelling and promoting it than undermining and replacing it.

In conclusion, it is true that television and internet will show us a whole view and rather real world. However, they could not replace the tourism at any rate. If there is only visual images without self-experience, the travel will lose its interesting aspects to some extent. In addition, in fact, the television and internet are good methods to popularize the tourism.

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1.应该承认，通过电视和网络~人们得到了很多的information.
1.1information增加旅游的兴趣
1.2人们在决定旅行前可以很好的了解到的信息。
2但是不能认为有了电视和网络~人们就不去旅游了tourism in decline
2.1人们旅游真正重视的一种亲身的经历，而不是仅仅的欣赏景色~一些参与性的活动：爬山攀岩漂流都是电视和网络无法带给人们的。Rock - climbing，driftin
2.2旅游中的一些当地美食文化品无法通过互联网和电视传播。
2.3同时电视和网络往往会帮助旅游景点做广告advertisement->attract more people
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Will the tourism soon become obsolete? The speaker claims so, because television and worldwide computer will provide more information to make people familiar with many great places. I partly agree with that the television and computer connection will benefit people in showing them places of interests. However, I do not think the tourism will be in decline, because this reason写的模糊了，价格定语，否则reason在第二行里的很远，会让人摸不到头脑是指的什么 can only benefit the tourism rather than undermine it.

To begin with, I concede the significant benefit brought by television and worldwide computer communication on tourism. On the one hand, the television and internet can bring people vivid images and sounds of the real places, which is convenient for people who are too far away to access such places. With help of high-technology, the video and pictures can be substantially nearclose to the true. Thus people will feel they are just on the boat of Rhine River or on the peek of Alps Mountain. On the other hand, compared with television and internet, the traditional travels have some disadvantages such like the high cost, the danger outside and so on,嗯！这一点我没想到 while under this circumstance, the travel on television or net have own advantages.

However, I think嗯哼！ do not think this benefit will prevent people from outside tourism, which will make the tourism obsolete. There are two reasons to support my point of view as follows.过渡段阿 不错

In the first place, television and internet could not create a totally true environment as in the place of interests, while 用了好多次while了换个词比如说otherwiseonly traveling itself will bring authentic好词！ feelings to the travelers. The aim to travel is not only to see the sceneries but also to enjoy the process of touring. Compared with watching beautiful sights comfortably at home, people would rather make a tough travel experience the emotions brought by travels.这句话什么意思the emotion做什么成分？ Further, there are some travel projectsitem更好一点？ needing the body-experience, one of which is rock-climbingsuch as 就行了吧？. Although it is a dangerous travel projects to some extent, rock-climbing still attracts a lot of people every year, as many people like challenging themselves. And the television and internet could not provide such kind of travel program for people, making traveling on their own necessary. 这句表达不好是想表示电视无法给人们登山的感觉吧？有点绕来绕去了What is more, tourism will also give people a chance to outside这是什么用法？ culture themselves. People can taste some delicious foods and celebrate the festivals with local people, to better recognize and understand the culture. All these will not be furnished 好词 收！by television and internet.

In the second place, the television and internet would furnish a space for tourism companies to advertise, which would怎么过去时了？ probably increase the popularity of the places of interests. As we know, the television and internet are not just providing detail information about places of interest, but broadcasting many advertisements every day, many of which are for the tourism companies. Though showing about famous places, the advertisement on television and internet would probably inspire the这个the多余了 people’s desire to make a travel. And then these places’ tourism will be more popular and more prosperity. Thus, we can see the influence of television and internet towards tourism is rather propelling and promoting it than undermining and replacing it.这一段的想法挺好

In conclusion, it is true that television and internet will show us a whole view and rather real world. However, they could 又用过去式？ 也不是虚拟语气阿？not replace the tourism at any rate. If there is only visual images without self-experience, the travel will lose its interesting aspects to some extent. In addition, in fact, the television and internet are good methods to popularize the tourism.是不是把however 那句话放到这里好一点呢？作为总结句放到最后

恩~总的逻辑没有什么可挑毛病的，因为我也是这么写的呵呵。但是还有细节没有注意。另外就是一些语句表达的有缺陷~