Issue50 教育类 寄托4人组 8-10

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Issue50  第21篇 寄托4人组！
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作者：BridgeWalker     共用时间：60分     572 words (567 words before polish)
2005年8月10日
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In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
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Position: + - -
B1: Faculty到校外工作有好处。
B2: 但是不是所有的教员都有外出工作的机会。
B3: 而且校外工作也有弊端。

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Should college professors spend time taking jobs related to the courses they teach for the sake of improving the quality of instruction? The speaker believes so. As far as I am concerned, instruction quality might be enhanced by this way, however, not all faculty in universities have the same out-of-school working opportunity, and the counterproductive effect of this method should be taken into account.

To begin with, spending time working outside the academic world might benefit both professors and their students. Firstly, working experience relevant to what they teach can boost professors' credibility as experts in their fields. As a result, faculty may probably earn reputation among their students and research colleagues. This can rise both their job satisfaction and salary at the same time, and finally encourage them devote more time and energy in their teaching and researching tasks. Secondly, practical working experience can help professors enrich their teaching materials and make their courses more vivid. For example, professor at business school, taking a part time job as a consultant in a famous company, can offer their students concrete case analysis drawn from that company. Thus, the knowledge students received is not purely book-learned, but connected with the real world. And more importantly, this sense of practicality given by professor's courses can unnoticeably be helpful during their job hunting. In this sense, quality of instruction is truly improved by faculty's working experience outside the academic world.

However, although out-of-school experience might potentially advance professors' teaching quality, not all faculty on campus have equal opportunities to reach them. Natures of different disciplines actually impose limits on researchers' relationship with the world outside. For instance, since professors in the fields of history and classics spend most of their time dealing with the past, they are less likely to find a job out their academic world. According to the similar reason, it is hard for professors of philosophy getting working experience related to the field they study as well. Simply because, transcendental researches nearly have nothing to do with the real world at the pragmatic level. In a word, it is almost inapplicable to require all faculty to find out-of-school jobs. For some professors, there might be no job for them.

Moreover, even if some professors fortunately have plenty of opportunities to work outside, the result might turn out to be counterproductive. In the first place, after taking jobs, instructors have to allocate time and effort on them. If these jobs are time consuming and not easy, burden and stress would push these faculty into hot water. Consequently, their teaching and researching work at college would be interrupted, or even damaged. In the second place, working-out opportunities might finally let these prominent professors resign from their teaching positions, which is a big loss to the universities they taught at. For example, a famous professor on computer science in out university recently quitted his teaching job 4 months after working in a computer software designing company, for this company offers him twice as much salary as a professor. In short, if colleges require their faculties working outside, they must consider the risk of low quality of instruction caused the additional burden and even the loss of their faculty.

In sum, in a practical point of view, there is no equal opportunity for all faculty to work outside the academic world. Even if they get the chance, the improvement of their teaching quality is not guaranteed.

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Should college professors spend time taking jobs related to the courses they teach for the sake of improving the quality of instruction? The speaker believes so. As far as I am concerned, instruction quality might be enhanced by this way, howeverbut吧 not all faculty in universities have the same out-of-school working opportunity, and the counterproductive effect of this method 那里的method?should be taken into account.

To begin with, spending time working outside the academic world might benefit both professors and their students. Firstly, working experience relevant to what they指代不明 teach can boost professors' credibility as experts in their fields. 分析下哈，这里As a result, faculty may probably earn reputation among their students and research colleagues. This can rise both their job satisfaction and salary at the same time, and finally encourage them devote more time and energy in their teaching and researching tasks.这对instruction quality 有什么好处？交代下 Secondly, practical working experience can help professors enrich their teaching materials and make their courses more vivid. For example, professor at business school, taking a part time job as a consultant in a famous换个词 company, can offer their students concrete case analysis drawn from that company.学习得来，从媒介上看来的就不行吗？突出一下“更” Thus, the knowledge students received is not purely book-learned, but connected with the real world. And more importantly, this sense of practicality given by professor's courses can unnoticeably be helpful during their job hunting. In this sense, quality of instruction is truly improved by faculty's working experience outside the academic world.
理由一至少应该放在二的后面
感觉给了很多点理由，但是其中有写只是匆匆带过，还不如只写一点，写具体。
However, although out-of-school experience might potentially advance professors' teaching quality, not all faculty faculties on campus have equal opportunitiesto reach them不要 to reach them. Natures of different disciplines actually impose limits on researchers' relationship with the world outside. For instance, since professors in the fields of history and classics spend most of their time dealing with the past, they are less likely to find a job out their academic world. According to the similar reason, it is hard for professors of philosophy getting working experience related to the field they study as well. Simply because, transcendental researches nearly have nothing to do with the real world at the pragmatic level.这个句子只写了一半。。。 In a word, it is almost inapplicable to require all faculty to find out-of-school jobs. For some professors, there might be no job for them.

Moreover, even if some professors fortunately have plenty of opportunities to work outside, the result might turn out to be counterproductive. In the first place, after taking jobs, instructors have to allocate time and effort on them.我不知道ALLOCATE可不可以这样用，书看少了。 If these jobs are time consuming and not easy, burden and stress would push these faculty into hot water.这是你的假设，拿个例子支撑下 Consequently, their teaching and researching work at college would be interrupted, or even damaged. In the second place, working-out opportunities might finally let these prominent professors resign from their teaching positions, which is a big loss to the universities they taught at. For example, a famous professor on computer science in out university recently quitted his teaching不要 job 4 months after working in a computer software designing company, for this company offers him twice as much salary as a professor. In short, if colleges require their faculties working outside, they must consider the risk of low quality of instruction caused the additional burden and even the loss of their faculty.
TS就应该明确指出两层反面作用。对于教师流失的原因，最好进一步点明：薪水，工作环境。。等等，和大学的情况比较下
In sum, in a practical point of view,放的位置不好 there is no equal opportunity for all faculty to work outside the academic world. Even if they get the chance, the improvement of their teaching quality is not guaranteed结尾武断了

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如果有可能的话,还是不要来了TS就FOR ONE THING,ON THE OTHER HAND,你可以写的更流畅些.

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Issue50  第21篇 寄托4人组！
------摘要------
作者：BridgeWalker     共用时间：60分     572 words (567 words before polish)
2005年8月10日
------题目------
In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
------提纲------
Position: + - -
B1: Faculty到校外工作有好处。
B2: 但是不是所有的教员都有外出工作的机会。
B3: 而且校外工作也有弊端。

------正文------
Should college professors spend time taking jobs related to the courses they teach for the sake of improving the quality of instruction? The speaker believes so. As far as I am concerned, instruction quality might be enhanced by this way, however, not all faculty(faculties) in universities have the same out-of-school working opportunity, and the counterproductive effect of this method should be taken into account.

To begin with, spending time working outside the academic world might benefit both professors and their students. Firstly, working experience relevant to what they teach can boost professors' credibility as experts in their fields. As a result, faculty may probably earn reputation among their students and research colleagues. This can rise both their job satisfaction and salary at the same time, and finally encourage them devote more time and energy in their teaching and researching tasks.（这样的推理做论据，如果在argument 中就得一批再批了，自己感觉不是很好，太绝对了） Secondly, practical working experience can help professors enrich their teaching materials and make their courses more vivid. For example, professor at business school, taking a part time job as a consultant in a famous company, can offer their students concrete case analysis drawn from that company.（觉得有些问题，谈得太笼统了，什么叫famous什么叫concrete，是好的经验还是坏的） Thus, the knowledge students received is not purely book-learned, but connected with the real world. And more importantly, this sense of practicality given by professor's courses can unnoticeably be helpful during their job hunting. In this sense, quality of instruction is truly improved by faculty's working experience outside the academic world.

However, although out-of-school experience might potentially advance professors' teaching quality, not all faculty on campus have equal opportunities to reach them. Natures of different disciplines actually impose limits on researchers' relationship with the world outside. For instance, since professors in the fields of history and classics spend most of their time dealing with the past, they are less likely to find a job out their academic world. According to the similar reason, it is hard for professors of philosophy getting working experience related to the field they study as well. Simply because transcendental researches nearly have nothing to do with the real world at the pragmatic level.(because是个连词吧，不能那么写吧) In a word, it is almost inapplicable to require all faculty to find out-of-school jobs. For some professors, there might be no job for them.

Moreover, even if some professors fortunately have plenty of opportunities to work outside, the result might turn out to be counterproductive. In the first place, after taking jobs, instructors have to allocate time and effort on them. If these jobs are time consuming（time-consuming） and not easy, burden and stress would push these faculty into hot water. Consequently, their teaching and researching work at college would be interrupted, or even damaged. In the second place, working-out opportunities might finally let these prominent professors resign from their teaching positions, which is a big loss to the universities they taught at. For example, a famous professor on computer science in out university recently quitted his teaching job 4 months after working in a computer software designing company, for this company offers him twice as much salary as a professor.（这个例子换成数据会不会好些，说每年有多少教授因为这样的情况而转业） In short, if colleges require their faculties working outside, they must consider the risk of low quality of instruction caused the additional burden and even the loss of their faculty.

In sum, in a practical point of view, there is no equal opportunity for all faculty to work outside the academic world. Even if they get the chance, the improvement of their teaching quality is not guaranteed.(整体感觉结构很完整，每一段有衔接，有概括，前后呼应。问题是觉得论据不是很好，不能说服人)

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感谢 ardorous！