issue43 G-89-互助社-06日同主题写作 领导者和道德

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四十五分钟写完之后，修改了很久，算是将来的定稿之作了。

issue 43

To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.


The speaker asserts that a successful public leader must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. I agree with this statement with my own reservation. A leader must always bear in mind a high moral and ethical standard, but not necessarily the highest.

On the one hand, there are at least two reasons for the leader wanting to perform effectively must maintain certain level of ethics and moral. First, a high ethical and moral standard wins the respect and trust of both his underlings and outsiders’. Such respect and trust is indispensable for even an average leader, let alone an effective leader. For example, the voters elect one as the leader because they trust him or her. Also, if the underlings trust the leader, they will carry out the leader’s instruction more ardently, thus prompting the efficiency of the organization, whether it is a government, a company or a school. Second, the leader hold supreme authority in his department and most of his/her behavior depend on his/her intentions.  A fundamental set of moral regulations prevents him/her from abusing power and dereliction of duty. Moreover, a higher level of moral beliefs propel him to perform better. For instance, in the government, one leader of average moral standard may boast that he himself never corrupts. And beside this, one leader of higher level moral will feel the moral duty to discovery and punish other’s illegal behaviors, which he can overlook. Obviously the latter leader can keep the government more open and more effective. In short,  

On the other hand, while we place sufficient emphasis on the importance of moral and ethic for a leader, we should not forget that 1) a public leader is not a moralist, and that 2) the highest moral and ethic standard alone cannot make a effective leader.
Since leaders are not moralist (with the exception of spiritual leader), their effectiveness should not be evaluated by their moral standard, but by how can they keep their organization function smoothly and advance in their performance. Except his/her special position, a leader is no more than commonplace person –person who may also commit moral flaws. Such slight moral flaw does not harm their achievements as a leader, on the contrary it draw them near to us. General Barton was criticized for his rudeness and proud, but it is General Barton who leaded the Allied Army to enter Nazis Germany in 1945. As fore the second statement mentioned above, the effectiveness of a leader depends on many aspects, such as special knowledge, management ability, moral standard and so on. Despite little moral drawbacks, a leader can make good use of other advantages, still being an effective leader. One example was about John Davison Rockefeller, the commercial genius in the American history. He created his petroleum empire in several decades, which proves his leading ability. However his success is not necessarily related to his moral standard but to his insight and shrewdness as a merchant. In fact, his commercial activities manifests shocking cruel and somewhat immoral behavior-such as collaborating with government officers. This illustrate that the highest moral stand is not indispensable for a effective leader.

To sum up, for a effective leader, a fundamental set of moral and ethic principles is necessaries while the highest moral and ethic standard is luxuries. After one gets necessaries, he can also pursue luxuries but it is not compulsory.

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The speaker asserts that a successful public leader must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. I agree with this statement with my own reservation. A leader must always bear in mind a high moral and ethical standard, but not necessarily the highest开头很简洁有力，直切主题，比我喜欢用的那种试图用一些长句子以情动人的方式要好，因为机考时不一定能临时想出那样的东西。学习！　.

On the one hand, there are at least two reasons for the leader wanting to perform effectively must maintain certain level of ethics and moral. First, a high ethical and moral standard wins the respect and trust of both his underlings and outsiders’outsiders. Such respect and trust is indispensable for even an average leader, let alone an effective leaderone. For example这里的for example是不是不太合适，因为后面紧接的一句并未提到十分具体的例子，只是一个通常的情况。虽然在中文或者口语中我们会说“比如说”，但这两者的语气不太一样我感觉。如果for example保留，我觉得这后半句要与下面衔得比较紧才能压得住。, the voters elect one as the leader because they trust him or her. Also, if the underlings trust the leader, they will carry out the leader’s instruction more ardently, thus prompting the efficiency of the organization, whether it is a government, a company or a school. Second, the leader hold supreme authority in his department and most of his/her behavior depend on his/her intentions.  A fundamental set of moral regulations prevents him/her from abusing power and dereliction of duty. Moreover, a higher level of moral beliefs propesl him to perform better. For instance, in the government, one leader of average moral standard may boast that he himself never corrupts. And这里是不是用一个转折词更好些？ beside this, one leader of higher level moral will feel the moral duty to discoverydiscover and punish other’s illegal behaviors, which he can overlook我觉得ignore更好些，因为这里是指领导故意视而不见，而overlook是没注意到的忽视。. Obviously the latter leader can keep the government more open and more effective. In short,  总结句没写吧：）In short, a leader should adhere to a high standard of moral and ethical for sake of both winning support from his underlings, and refraining from an inept reputation. 不知道是不是你的意思，权作抛砖之笔了。

On the other hand, while we place sufficient emphasis on the importance of moral and ethic for a leader, we should not forget that 1) a public leader is not a moralist, and that 2) the highest moral and ethic standard alone cannot make a effective leader.
Since leaders are not moralist (with the exception of spiritual leader), their effectiveness should not be evaluated by their moral standard, but by how can they they cankeep their organization function smoothly and advance in their performance. Except his/her special position, a leader is no more than commonplace person –person who may also commit moral flawsflaw在这里似乎不太恰当，我查Webster's，flaw的意思是 an imperfection or weakness and especially one that detracts from the whole or hinders effectiveness eg vanity was the flaw in his character,就是说它主要指缺陷，一般是内在固有的，可能不能与commit搭配吧.我想一个表示状态的动词更适合用在此处. Such slight moral flaw does not harm their achievements as a leader, on the contrary, it draws them near to us. General Barton was criticized for his rudeness and proud, but it iswas General Barton who leadedled the Allied Army 盟军好像就是Alliesto enter Nazis Germany in 1945. As forefor the second statement mentioned above, the effectiveness of a leader depends on many aspects, such as special knowledge, management ability, moral standard and so on. Despite little moral drawbacks, a leader can make good use of other advantages, still being an effective leader. One example was about John Davison Rockefeller, the commercial genius in the American history. He created his petroleum empire in several decades, which provesproved his leading ability. However, his success is not necessarily related to his moral standard but to his insight and shrewdness as a merchant. In fact, his commercial activities manifests shocking cruel and somewhat immoral behavior-such as collaborating with government officers. This illustrate that the highest moral standard is not indispensable for a effective leader.这段包含两个小论点，不妨分开写，即把你总述的一段，虽然比较短，独立作为一个承启段，下面作两个分论点，这样要清楚一些，你觉得呢？

To sum up, for a effective leader, a fundamental set of moral and ethic principles is necessariesnecessary是形容词，如果要与下面luxuries对映该用necessities while the highest moral and ethic standard is luxuries. After one gets necessaries, he can also pursue luxuries but it is not compulsory.

总体感觉:
你的文字很简洁，论证和所用例子都是紧扣着中心观点的，文章比较紧凑，思路也很清晰。不过像你驳论的一大段开头，提出两个方面论述时用了1,2列举的形式，个人觉得这个方法用在argu里逻辑分明，有它的好处，但在issue中略显生硬，削弱了文字的感染力。如果能以一些较圆滑的句子把它们串起来会更流畅一些。