Issue185 寄托4人组 8.17作业

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Issue185 Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

立场：有保留的同意。
1。scandals的积极作用：引起社会的重视。
2。但是，丑闻本身并不能解决问题。关键是出了之后reformer的行动。
Issue185  第3篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托4人组     共用时间：45分2秒     573 words
从2005年7月17日15时47分到2005年7月17日16时45分
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Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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In such an era of fast-spreading information, scandals have become a focus that always strikes the headlines of mass media. But can they be useful, or even more significant than speakers or reformers' speeches, no matter in which area? The speaker claims so. I concede that scandals do play an incomparable role in attracting public attention, yet this role should not be exaggerated.

No doubt, scandals always have an exploding effect which merely arguing in ways as speakers or reformers do cannot achieve. Scandals present vivid examples showing where might be wrong in a social system; while to achieve the same goal public speakers often try to convince the audience by abstract reasoning, or vague examples which seem far from people’s life (I suppose when the title speaker does include scandals as what speakers and reformers might bring), and reformers dive into the sub-level of system and give concrete project to improve it. The latter ones usually have little audience since people tend to be more interested in concrete examples and dramatic stories, which can be easily satisfied by scandals. Many education reformers in China, for example, had long noticed the increasing plagiarism in Chinese academic communities. But whenever they uttered their worries, not so many people paid much attention to these problems, since those reformers did not give any specific evidence to support their argument and thus few believed it to be a serious issue. This ignorance lasted until a scandal shocking both the academic circle and the public: a famous biography professor of a leading university was reported plagiarism in one of his paper published many years ago. By deeper investigation and interviews of journalists, the significance of this event is developed and the attention of society is soon aroused. People begin to rethink why and how could such a respectful scientist commit such immoral deed. It is at this time, under the pressure of the public and media, many universities start to carry out the reformers’ project, making much stricter regulation of their faculties. This case illustrates that scandals, though they are bad in themselves, can be useful to the society since they can make people focus on the deeper social problems that they reveal.

However, the role of scandals should not be exaggerated either. From the example above the progress is made owing to three factors: first, the public attention is aroused; second, mass media play an appropriate role in this event; third, the further reformation is realized. Although almost every scandal succeeds in attracting eyes, not all of them satisfy the other two. On the one hand, not all the media is reliable and responsible to the general social interest. To attract more readers and earn more money, some media would exaggerate some detailed scenarios which is of no significance to the event; just as some newspaper did in Clinton and Lewinsky's scandal, which tons of news are focused on the sexual part, while the moral defect of the president and the flaw in the organizing system of White House were put aside. In such situations, one can hardly say that the function of scandals is always positive. On the other side, it is worth noticing that it is the reformation actually made after the scandal, whose purpose is to rectify the system and avoid the same misdeeds, that leads to the real progress. As the plagiarism case mentioned above, without the effort of reformer, without university authorities carrying out new regulation, the scandal of the famous professor would be nothing but an amusing story for people to talk about, and the same things might keep happening again and again in future. After all, scandals are bad per se; they themselves cannot forward the progress. The actual reformation should not be missed.

In the final analysis, although scandals can arouse public attention to a problem more effectively than speakers and reformers do, yet whether they can be truly useful depends on the real effort to root out the possibility of other same scandals. Besides, public attention should be more paid on the problems themselves, but not misled by irresponsible media. In a word, only the appropriate focus and real effort can make the real progress possible.  

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Issue185 Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

立场：有保留的同意。
1。scandals的积极作用：引起社会的重视。
2。但是，丑闻本身并不能解决问题。关键是出了之后reformer的行动。
Issue185  第3篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托4人组     共用时间：45分2秒     573 words
从2005年7月17日15时47分到2005年7月17日16时45分
------题目------
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
------正文------
In such an era of fast-spreading information, scandals have become a focus that always strikes the headlines of mass media. But can they be useful, or even more significant than speakers or reformers' speeches这里 为什么突然提到speaker 和speeches？感觉有点奇怪 no matter in which area? The speaker claims so. I concede that scandals do play an incomparable role in attracting public attention, yet this role should not be exaggerated.开头简洁，观点明确

No doubt, scandals always have an exploding effect which merely arguing in ways as speakers or reformers do cannot achieve后半句表意不够清楚. Scandals present vivid examples showing where/what按英语的习惯用后者似乎更地道些 might be wrong in a social system; while to achieve the same goal public speakers often try to convince the audience by abstract reasoning, or vague examples which seem far from people’s life (I suppose when/ in? the title speaker does include scandals as what speakers and reformers might bring), and reformers dive into the sub-level of system and give concrete project to improve it. The latter ones usually have little audience since people tend to be more interested in concrete examples and dramatic stories, which can be easily satisfied by/ best illustrated in具体的改法有待思考，但你的 说法似乎不妥 scandals. Many education reformers in China, for example, had long noticed the increasing plagiarism in Chinese academic communities. But whenever they uttered their worries, not so many people paid much attention to these problems, since those reformers did not give any过于绝对，反而容易消弱自己的 说服力 specific evidence to support their argument and thus few believed it to be a serious issue. This ignorance lasted until a scandal shocking both the academic circle and the public: a famous biography professor of a leading university was reported plagiarism in one of his paper published many years ago. By deeper investigation and interviews of journalists, the significance of this event is developed有chinglish之嫌 and the attention of society is soon aroused不如把后半句句改为：the whole society involve in the discussion and explore the deeper reasons underlying this scandal. People begin to rethink why and/ delete how could such a respectful scientist commit such immoral deed and why he has not been found out for such a long period of time . It is at / starting from that time, under the pressure of the public and media, many universities start to carry out the reformers’ / reform project , / and making much stricter regulation of their faculties. This case illustrates that scandals, though they are/去了更简洁 bad in themselves, can be useful to the society since they can make people focus on the deeper social problems that they reveal.

However, the role of scandals should not be exaggerated either. From the example above the progress is made owing to three factors: first, the public attention is aroused; second, mass media play an appropriate role in this event; third, the further reformation is realized. Although almost every scandal succeeds in attracting eyes, not all of them satisfy the other two.分析的 很棒！ On the one hand, not all the media is reliable and responsible to the general social interest/ reliable enough to tell the fact as it is. To attract more readers and earn more money, some media would exaggerate some detailed scenarios which is / are of no significance to the event; just as some newspapers did in Clinton and Lewinsky's scandal, which tons of news are/ is 短语的重心在news focused on the sexual part, while the moral defect of the president and the flaws in the organizing system of White House were put aside. In such situations, one can hardly say that the function of scandals is always positive. On the other side, it is worth noticing that it is the reformation actually made after the scandal, whose purpose is to rectify the system and avoid the same misdeeds, that leads to the real progress. As the plagiarism case mentioned above, without the effort of reformer, without university authorities carrying out new regulation, the scandal of the famous professor would be nothing but an amusing story for people to talk about, and the same things might keep happening again and again in future. After all, scandals are bad per se; they themselves cannot forward the progress. The actual reformation should not be missed/ underestimated.

In the final analysis, although scandals can arouse public attention to a problem more effectively than speakers and reformers do, yet whether they can be truly useful depends on the real effort to root out the possibility of other same scandals. Besides, public attention should be more paid on the problems themselves, but not misled by irresponsible media. In a word, only the appropriate focus and real effort can make the real progress possible.  
总体评论：这篇文章写的非常的好！越到后面越好。层次清晰，论证 也很充分，例子的分析透彻，非常有力的回应了主题

[ Last edited by 哥哥家有二师兄 on 2005-8-17 at 23:02 ]

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多谢了！果然是英专的mm：）