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fantasianosUID: 207837

As the wheels of technology and technique turning at their accelerating and eternal velocity into the 21st century, video camera has turned up to human eyes, contributing to recording. Together with the long-existing written records, video is now a building block of the approaches to remember what happens. Considering the video camera's accuracy and reliability, there are a portion of persons at present allege that the video camera has become more important in documentation that written records. Whether this declaration is reasonable still needs discussing.

It is truth that video camera does own a scale of advantages, which contribute to the warm welcome showed by people. For one thing, using a video camera is more expedient than writing by pens or pencils. For another thing, when exploring a film taken by a video camera, most individuals is likely to recognize something without notice at the time of photographing, which makes video camera a broadly used means to unravel the puzzles in a legal crime, while a possible point can be neglected by written records. For the third thing, to alter the content of video tapes is more difficult than to change a written record, so is to create a video tape opposite to the real facts.

With its more prolonged history, written records, in contrast, have some characters distinct from those of video camera. Firstly, what are needed for producing a written record is less complicated than those for a video record. More precisely, only a pen or a pencil and a piece of paper can be sufficient for the former approach, while machines including a camera and a cassette are indispensable for the latter one. This exact characteristic of writing shows recording by writing more convenience and more usable conditions. Generally speaking, there are a number of places, where cameras and videos are forbidden, such as some museums and some palaces. Facing this situation, the recorder is prone to, or even has to, turn to writing. Since computers are now widely used, more and more information are preserved in the hard disks or other portable apparatus, in which case comes the advantages of writing, for the average documents made up completely with words is much small than a picture or a film.

In practical utilization, which approach to choose, video camera or written records, depends on the needs, environment, affordability, necessity and certain other factors. For example, when a correspondent is visiting a celebrated scientist or an official of government, the correspondent is inclined to choose video camera, because it asks for less time in taking records. In a superficially similar case that a film star talks on internet, it is the video that is capable of showing every detail of the star's facial expression and tunes. Despite the holistically things recorded, written could not be neglected, as the net speed can be so slow that hardly can the audience recognize those pictures. Take diaries for another example. Why do persons stick to diaries? Partly because, in this way, a person is able to record her or his own thoughts, which might be unable to be expressed by videos or cameras.

In the course of highly developed science and greatly evolved technology, both video camera and written records are vital for human beings, with almost equal importance. Which one is more appropriate in a certain circumstance can hardly be formularized. Instead, this can be a backbreaking and heartbreaking stock for examination, leaving case-by-case study the unique sensible way to make the decision.

tuesday420UID: 202475

As the wheels of technology and technique turning at their accelerating and eternal velocity into the 21st century, video camera has turned up to human eyes, contributing to recording. Together with the long-existing written records, video is now a building block of the approaches to remember what happens. Considering the video camera's accuracy and reliability, there are a portion of persons at present allege that the video camera has become more important in documentation that(than) written records. Whether this declaration is reasonable still needs discussing(?discussion?).

It is truth that video camera does own a scale of advantages, which contribute to the warm welcome showed(可以删掉吧) by people. For one thing, using a video camera is more expedient than writing by pens or pencils. For another thing, when exploring a film taken by a video camera, most individuals is likely to recognize something without notice at the time of photographing, which makes video camera a broadly used means to unravel the puzzles in a legal crime, while a possible point can be neglected by written records. For the third thing, to alter the content of video tapes is more difficult than to change a written record, so is to create a video tape opposite to the real facts.

With its more prolonged history, written records, in contrast, have(possess) some characters distinct from those of video camera. Firstly, what are needed for producing a written record is less complicated than those for a video record. More precisely, only a pen or a pencil and a piece of paper can be sufficient for the former approach, while machines including a camera and a cassette are indispensable for the latter one. This exact characteristic of writing shows recording by writing more convenience(convenient) and more usable conditions. Generally speaking, there are a number of places,(不要逗号) where cameras and videos are forbidden, such as some museums and some palaces. Facing this situation, the recorder is prone to, or even has to, turn to writing. Since computers are now widely used, more and more information are preserved in the hard disks or other portable apparatus, in which case comes the advantages of writing,(不要逗号)for the average documents made up completely with(completely in) words is much small than a picture or a film. (这段最后二个理由感觉比较牵强，对于虽然说文字文件要小一些，但是现在的存储技术还是允许大量存储图片视频的)
In practical utilization, which approach to choose, video camera or written records, depends on the needs, environment, affordability, necessity and certain other factors. For example, when a correspondent is visiting a celebrated scientist or an official of government, the correspondent is inclined to choose video camera, because it asks for less time in taking records. In a superficially similar case that a film star talks on internet, it is the video that is capable of showing every detail of the star's facial expression and tunes. Despite the holistically things recorded, written could not be neglected, as the net speed can be so slow that hardly can the audience recognize those pictures. Take diaries for another example. Why do persons stick to diaries? Partly because, in this way, a person is able to record her or his own thoughts, which might be unable to be expressed by videos or cameras.

In the course of highly developed science and greatly evolved technology, both video camera and written records are vital for human beings, with almost equal importance. Which one is more appropriate in a certain circumstance can hardly be formularized. Instead, this can be a backbreaking and heartbreaking stock for examination, leaving case-by-case study the unique sensible way to make the decision. (结尾不错)
总的感觉作者语言还是挺好，但是断句太多，有的地方没有必要断成一小段一小段的。
结果也不错，但是感觉有的理由说的不是特别有说服力。
个人意见，继续加油！:victory:

fantasianosUID: 207837

谢谢，我先存下来再仔细看